wolftx
| | Joined: 5/29/2008
Msg: 26 | |
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MizQ
| | Joined: 6/26/2008
Msg: 27 | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/8/2008 5:52:48 AM | | Humor always works on me. I kept my profile short and to the point. Pictures are there so you can see who you are writing to. Mention something in the profile so they know you actually read it. Comment about the pictures. A little flattery is nice, but don't over do it! It will come across as BS. Comment on some of the small things in the photo, objects on the fireplace (not the boobs). Ask a question or make a joke about it. (again, not the boobs, not cool on the first e-mail). This lets her know that you actually looked beyond the face and you saw something else that peaked your interest. If she likes what she reads and sees, you will hear back from her. If you do not hear back, try one more time. No response, let it go, move on. Good Luck to you. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/8/2008 7:04:29 AM | Not to burst your bubble, Sloane, but I have received many e-mails like that one-almost to the word lol -and I am twice your age & size. And my profile has almost nothing intelligent in it.
Not saying, just saying.
Of course, then they end it with do I have any titty shots, but that really doesn't prove my point. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/8/2008 7:59:41 AM | So whats up Deep Space Gangster Kitten? I checked your pics out first and foremost, had to wipe the drool off. You know how it goes.
So anyway, After seeing how sexifully awesome you are physically, I had to make sure there was some substance. Judging books by their covers... If that worked I'd probably still be reading Clifford the Big Red Dog...
But you actually seem to have a brain. I don't think that's possible.... How can this be? You state that you love poetry, and go on about TS Eliot?
That is not what I meant to say
That is not what I meant at all.
So anyways, Gangster Kitten - Can I call you Gangster Kitten? You do have a pic of you wearing a beanie, holding your cat... so I think it fits, you know? I like cats too.
I have a cat too. She's a scruffy fuzzball that sleeps on my dirty laundry. I hope you like to do laundry, because to be honest, I'm only looking for someone that is willing to do my laundry, cook, clean, have sex, not speak during the football game, do my taxes, pay my rent, change my diapers, and make my bed for me.
- Totally not being a sarcastic sonuva****.
Sorry, Had to use the deep South Slang. This is South Carolina After all.
Anyways, if you're going to read/delete this, I laugh at you for taking this much time to read an e-mail message of this length, only to delete it. LOL I WIN! Peace
- Deep Space Gangster Kitten Commando King AKA John | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/8/2008 9:18:37 AM | OP, I received a wonderful email last night, I mean one of the best I have ever received. Although, I won't share the actual email with you, I will tell you it was charming, funny and humble. It also referenced something personal about himself and specifically referenced things in my profile. It was well written and did not include any slang (actually spelled out all the words).
I think if you keep an email genuine, honest and include a bit of humor, you will be well on your way. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 7:27:48 PM | OK GUYS! Sheesh!
It worked, didn't it?!
So I'm gullible. I still felt like the message applied to me and my profile, whereas if he had just mailed this to every girl in the book, i'm sure a few of them would have been like "he could have sent this to anyone".
The guy asked for a good intro email, and I gave him one.
It's responses like this that make people not want to share their stories at all. | |
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wolftx
| | Joined: 5/29/2008
Msg: 33 | |
| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 7:52:32 PM |
I still felt like the message applied to me and my profile
Sloane, you still answered what works best. If a woman feels that the message applies to her and is under the impression that it was uniquely tailored to her, it works. And who knows, the original mail may have been just for you. I admit that I made up getting the same message - my point was that it could have been sent to a male as well. Nobody said you were dumb or ugly, quite possibly on the contrary. We only pointed out (in my case without reading your whole profile) that it was lacking unique details. And we value your contribution, because we (men) can rarely compare notes of what others write and how women react. Likewise, you may value our feedback, if you ever get played and you learn what to look for. If it worked out between you two, our responses will not get in your way.
I have seen female profiles where towards the end in the middle of a paragraph she requests something unusual to be mentioned in the first e-mail, just to ensure the profile was read. For example, she may say "Ask me about purple strawberries when you first contact me". There's no way a generic message could cover that. Since I always read profiles whole before I e-mail a woman, it does not bother me and I will comply. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 8:43:05 PM | all of the ladies usually block me after my intro e-mail. maybe its because of I always bring up my "Glasgow smile." But hey, who doesn't like a guy with a constant smile?!  | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 9:47:58 PM |
So I'm gullible. I still felt like the message applied to me and my profile, whereas if he had just mailed this to every girl in the book, i'm sure a few of them would have been like "he could have sent this to anyone".
Hate to break it to you Sloane, but there's nothing specific in the letter you posted- it could have been a cut-and-paste job but I don't blame you for falling under the spell of a guy who looks like he's out of a Versace ad. By your screen name alone, I would think a cute Ferris Bueller reference would be the key to getting your attention.
The approach I've taken the few times I've initiated contact with guys has been to address something in their profile in a humorous way that practically begs a response. I realize that a response is almost completely contingent on whether or not they like my profile so my letter mostly serves as a conversation starter rather than a full-on introduction of myself. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 9:57:34 PM | It doesn't really matter what you say as long as you don't sound too arrogant or needy. Keep them short too.
Its all about visual chemistry. If a girl looks at your pic and can picture herself going out with you, she will message you back.
Work on your profile though, whats in your profile matters a lot more then what you say in your 1st message. | |
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MizQ
| | Joined: 6/26/2008
Msg: 37 | |
| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 10:05:52 PM | whats in your profile matters a lot more then what you say in your 1st message.
Really, who said? LOL
A girl in the ask a girl forum. :p
Edit-One girl does not speak for all us  | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 10:06:59 PM | Really, who said? LOL
A girl in the ask a girl forum. :p
Its pretty logical though when you think about it.
First message should say something like this:
Read your profile
Liked what I read
Think ur good looking
Want to get to know you better
Thats it. The first message just basically saying "i like what I see so far". The profile is more important because in your profile you're trying to tell people who you are.
Edit-One girl does not speak for all us
OK just because you dont care what a guy has written in his profile doesn't mean most girls don't. Just reading this forum it seems to be one of the biggest things. That's funny though that you don't care, why even write anything about yourself then. | |
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MizQ
| | Joined: 6/26/2008
Msg: 39 | |
| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 10:13:50 PM | OK just because you dont care what a guy has written in your profile doesn't mean most girls don't. That's funny though that you don't care, why even write anything about yourself then.
Darlin, you misunderstood. Both aspects are important. A well written message and a poor profile don't match. A well written profile and a poor message don't match.
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Posted: 8/10/2008 10:17:30 PM | Darlin, you misunderstood. Both aspects are important. A well written message and a poor profile don't match. A well written profile and a poor message don't match.
I dont even know what a poor message is, unless you're talking about spelling mistakes.
I get messages that really short like "whats up" or "what are you doing this weekend"
Even though they didn't take much effort, I don't consider them poor because that's something id probably ask in person. If her profile interests me ill answer. | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/10/2008 10:49:15 PM |
I dont even know what a poor message is, unless you're talking about spelling mistakes.
I get messages that really short like "whats up" or "what are you doing this weekend"
Even though they didn't take much effort, I don't consider them poor because that's something id probably ask in person. If her profile interests me ill answer.
I probably don't have to tell you that what works for men doesn't always work for women and vice versa. When a guy sends me a "what's up" type of email, I don't even bother to look at his profile. Well, maybe if he's particularly hot I'll take a glance but I won't write him back. On the flip side, if a guy who isn't necessarily gorgeous sends me a well-written, funny letter, I will check out his profile and there's a greater likelihood I'll write him back. I'm not saying I wouldn't respond to a one sentence email, but it would have to be a very clever sentence to get my attention. | |
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Posted: 8/11/2008 10:25:25 PM | Maybe the ladies here can correct me if I'm wrong but if a guy is truly interested
and voices such in an email and gets no response wouldn't it be better to try again.
Imean anything worth having usually doesn't come easily. The worse that could
happen is he gets blocked and I would think that would have less side effects than
pining over her.
Some guys take it personal when they get no response or get out right rejected. But
keep in mind that all a woman has to put in her profile is that she's female and has
a heart beat and she will still most likely get 100 times the emails of any guy.
Try harder. I'm fairly new here but I've give this a bit thought and the challenge is
quite a bit of fun. So have fun with it. Don't take it so serious.
Try this one as a follow up email.
Subjectline: Thanks for the great email... it was so sweet !!
In the body say this:
Hey
I understand that you are getting a lot of emails from other guys so I'm sure my
first email got lost amongst them. No worries. I'm not upset or anything and I
understand it's hard to keep up to them. So to save you some time I've created a
reply you can copy and paste back to me.
***Copy and Paste This Message Below***
Hey Baby
Sorry I didn't get back to you straight away. I've been very busy reading and
deleting all these other emails. I think you are "Super Hot" and everytime I look at
you great pictures I become... soooo excited. Pleasssseeee send me you number so
I can just hear your voice. ***Cut****
Everything works some of the time but nothing works all of the time.
Just my opinion!! | |
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| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/11/2008 10:33:21 PM | I hate when women have one line in their profile and still hope for a complicated response back but I certainly enjoy when women have a descriptive profile that gives you something to work with.
Hey someone has to give the male version of the experience. | |
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Posted: 8/11/2008 10:35:44 PM | Dear *insert her name here*,
I think you look like you need a new pair of shoes! Could I get you some Louboutins and a matching handbag of course? But before you wear them, I think you need a pedicure too. Let me get my foot bath.
Your willing slave,
*insert your name here*
Either that... or I would so date poster # 3o in a heartbeat... if only I did not have episiotomy scars older than he is. If someone quoted Eliot in an opening salvo to me, I would very likely rape him.
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Posted: 8/12/2008 9:11:55 PM | Dear LookingForMyLastFirstDate:
You are such an indescribably gorgeous creature. My name is Rod Riptabz. Let me tell you a little about me, then from here on in it will forever be all about you. As it should be, I might add.
I like sunsets, long walks on the beach, puppy dog noses, and sushi. I don’t live with my mom, I believe children are our future, I have a job with a pension, and I would love to take you out to a romantic candlelit lobster dinner and discuss our innermost feelings and dreams together. Someday, I would like to go over to your mother’s house so you and her can go shopping at the mall with my platinum card while I do fix-it chores around her house. Then we can come home and garden together, then cuddle in front of the fire and watch a Julia Roberts movie while I rub your feet and massage your scalp.
Did I mention that you are an incredibly gorgeous creature?
It would only be right if someday when we have many, many babies… I insist that you quit work forever so you can better supervise the nanny and housekeeper that I will provide.
Oh, and did I mention that I have tivo? And that you are an incredibly gorgeous creature? | |
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NY2Chi
| | Joined: 11/27/2007
Msg: 48 | |
| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/12/2008 10:25:50 PM | ****
Hey/Hi/Wassup,
I read/skimmed/pretended to skim your profile on POF/Craigslist/Hustler and really liked it. You have a beautiful smile/amazing eyes/a sweet rack. I hope this isn't too forward, but I would love to chat w. you/share a cup of coffee/fertilize your eggs. So if you're interested/available/as horny as me, my AIM screenname is niceguyjoe/urfave_ahole/recentlyparoled187. I'll see you/talk to you/be outside your window later.
*****
I think mixing & matching gets the best results. | |
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MikeAZ
| | Joined: 12/16/2007
Msg: 49 | |
| Do you have an example of a great intro email?
Posted: 8/12/2008 11:26:42 PM | | I usually keep the first emails short, since some go unread or read/deleted, there's really no point in writing your life story. One time I wrote to someone "Who do find more obnoxious, Jack Black or Dane Cook?". Another one was "If you're at a restaurant, and you order something without tomatoes, and your entree has tomatoes on it, would you pick them off and enjoy, or would you complain and send it back?". Sometimes random questions like that can show a little more about their personality, if they're laid back (picking it off), etc. Since one of my major passions is travel, I will also look at their pics or profile to see if they've been somewhere I haven't and maybe say something like "What was Scotland like?". | |
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Posted: 8/13/2008 3:58:48 PM | Ok I'm fired up about an ''intro'' email I just got. It was so so lame. He tried to make it personal by pointing out he was from raiderland.
Hi from Raiderland...
then he basically cut and pasted some from his profile and added to that. It went on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on about what a great catch he was...and how sad life can be when you don't have anyone to share it with....blah blah blah blah blah.
He never mentioned anything about me, or why he was writing to me specifically or what made him stop when he came across my profile...it was him him him him him. He didn't even mention why he thought we might be a good match.
and you know why. He didn't read my profile obviously. A ''cut and paste'' and a ''no read the profile".....so annoying and so obvious....PLEASE take this advice and don't write an intro email like this. Geez.
on a happier (NOT) note, I got an email from a guy I've already rejected twice before. He can't seem to take a hint. And this read like a cut and paste email as well. I think he forgot who he was writing to and that I've already seen him at the club I dance at and rejected him here as well.
more good advice. keep track of the women you've written. If you can't, you're writing too many. | |
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