| Review me Pandy
Posted: 10/24/2008 10:10:00 AM | | Could you review my profile Pandy? Thanks in advance. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 11:45:41 AM | Pandy,
I need some serious help here I have changed it 200 times and I still do not know what to put! Now Im down to nothing. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 2:40:46 PM | I read your profile and you are most certainly a woman of wit and charm! I should read more womens profiles to come up wth something for mine! I think yours though will far out weigh in personality any I may find! You are too Sassy! | |
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| IamMIMI
Posted: 10/24/2008 2:57:47 PM | I'll take a few of the ladie's for you, Sis.
Just the one's that I have a good read on.
First of all, darlin, your picture screams chaos.
Get a better picture without so much outside clutter.
That picture is not inviting in any manner. Get a new one.
First Date: I have taken out the things I like to do or would want to do on a date because I am not ready for what I seek which is a long term relationship at this moment in time.
So to not be portraying the illusion of conflicting wants and needs I will list none for the moment!
I am looking to go out have some fun,
meet new people and live a little.
That I can do right now.
Get rid of that. Your whole profile is a contradiction, You act like you want to go out and be a wild girl.. but, you're acting like a c0cktease. No guy is going to go that route. You need to redo your profile from top to bottom, darlin. And don't be so insecure. That never works in your favor. | |
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| frycolin
Posted: 10/24/2008 3:52:14 PM |
Oh my, if by conversation you mean email, maybe, but bringing those realities up on a first meeting could pretty much be thought of as misleading.
I meant email conversation... and you may assume that anytime I use the word "save it for conversation" in this context, that I am refering to email. | |
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| frycolin
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:00:59 PM | Hey Pandy,
If you don't mind can you check out my profile and provide me with feedback. Thank you | |
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| cpc614
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:07:26 PM | The first thing that struck me is that your main photo seems to be very much at odds with your others. It's like... you look relaxed and laid back in the other photos, then there's one of you that looks like David Cross playing a corporate suit. It's just my take, but I'd either remove that one , or at least make another your main photo.
Text?
Not bad. I wouldn't change it. | |
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| cpc614
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:11:45 PM | | I'm on the very bottom row in that pic that you said looks like david cross. Thats not me you are talking about. Ok thank you for the Info | |
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| carpediem81
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:16:49 PM | This is a tough one, carpediem.
It really depends on who you want to attract.
I think that the kind of woman who loves a good kegger and has her own parachute will read your pro and be delighted that she found you. Jill average will more than likely feel a little intimidated and wonder if she can keep up, or if you'll have time for her.
Do a quick grammar check , there are a few misusages (and this is, after all, a social resume of sorts). | |
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| frycolin
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:20:18 PM |
agreed waterview. Though not necessarily what I need to find in a girl. But I think its necessary to mention because it is a deal breaker for too many people. No point it stringing someone along if its not going to go anywhere anyways.
while I'm all for being aboveboard and honest, sometimes it's just TMI to put it all up there front and forward.
I always have a sluggish brain for the first couple of hours after I wake up (we're talking down by 50 IQ points) but I'm sure as hell not going to put that on a resume.
Represent the best authentic version of yourself that you can in your profile, then make sure that you are honest with everything that matters in the email exchange before you meet. There is always the chance that someone will find "flaws" more acceptable after they've gotten to know your strengths. | |
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| Toidie
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:31:38 PM | First of all, get new pictures. The ones you have up are NOT flattering.
I'm an artist, I can tell that you have very nice features and are probably a very attractive woman in person.... but your main photo? You look terrified and trying to hide it behind a big fake smile. Your second is overlit and makes you look washed out.
I have just started running again, so I do not have a runner’s body, yet. I enjoy my relaxation time, but I must have regular activities that physically challenge me.[/quotes]
I like that you've included this about starting to run, but it sounds as though you are apologizing in advance for the state of your body. This makes you sound less than confident.
I am looking for a man who is encouraging, because I sometimes need a nudge when my motivation lags. I am attracted to a man that is at ease talking about any topic.
I am turned on by a man who can laugh at himself. I have a great deal of material on myself which is always good for a giggle.
I am turned on by a man who enjoys quiet romantic evenings of wine, food, candles, music and long lingering "conversations." Someone who knows what he wants and will go after it. Someone who likes nice things, but lives simply.
I have no problem with a guy that is independent, and wants time for a guy's night out now and then: let's both give each other the same freedom to live a bit.
though the above has some good bits, the profile is about YOU and what YOU have to offer... you'll be able to filter people who email you at your discretion so a shopping list of characteristics isn't necessary.
Good communicators and good listeners will always have the edge with me.
This is better... indicates what attracts you in another person, but it's more a statement about you than any potential date
There is also an overall choppy feel to your text... a "see jane run" quality. Work on restructuring your profile into flowing paragraphs rather than isolated comments.
Oh, and I'd really consider changing the profile name.
When I first glanced at your profile, I thought I was reading "toadie".
Find something that is a bit more enticing. | |
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| poet092857
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:49:42 PM | please, please, please lose the hat. It has probably cost you more bypasses than any other element. I'm sorry to have to tell you that, since you've made it yourself... but it SCREAMS "geezer" at the top of it's lungs.
The one of you in the shop where you made it isn't so bad, but the others REALLY need to go.
<div class='quote'>I was told my previous writeup was a bit negative so here is a new and improved profile for your reading pleasure.
this does nothing positive for your profile, it should be deleted.
<div class='quote'>The kids in my pics are not my grandkids they are my kids.
you have already covered this with the caption in the picture, so this is not only rather apologetic of your age, but it's redundant.
<div class='quote'>I am the primary custodian and pretty much have them 24/7 except for most school breaks and several weeks during the summer when they go to visit their mom out of state. I am finding out that having kids as young as mine is a big turn off to many women my age, which is okay, they are entitled to their feelings. I just know that somewhere out there is a wonderful person who can accept me and my kids, I just seem to be having a bit of trouble finding her.
"I have young children who live with me" should suffice, here... Lose the rest in a big hurry. It sounds desperate and , again, apologetic. If you must mention your life with your children focus on the positives.
As far as likes and dislikes, activity wise I am pretty open. I enjoy outdoors stuff and indoors as well.
you might want to elaborate as to which outdoor and indoor stuff you like?
I have read many a womans profile that say admit it, it really does start with a physical attraction. I admit it, it does and I do start that way but it will eventually all boils down to (here's that word) CHEMISTRY or can we click as a couple. Now that I have said that, let me say that whoever I consider attractive, someone else may not. You know the old saying, "there's no accounting for taste". You may rest assured that if I take the time to sit down and draft up what I hope is a well written and maybe even interesting message, I consider you to be attractive, at least in your pics. After that the only question that remains is will you feel the same way about me and will I hear back from you.
This really does nothing to advertise you to potential dates, which is what your profile is about. Kill this and focus on giving women a good idea of what your personality is like.
Ladies I only ask one favor, It would be nice to get an answer back one way or another. I don't care if the answer is as simple as "sorry, not interested" at least that way I know.
This makes it sound as though you are constantly rejected and bitter about it. NOT a good thing to have on your profile. Lose the negativity.
Also?.... a "read/delete" lets you know as well whether or not a lady wants to converse with you, as well.
I guess that is all for now, I apologize if I upset anyone with my honesty. A lot of profiles I've read say they want honesty, I don't know how I can be any more honest.
People want the person they are interested in to be honest about themselves, that doesn't mean that they want someone to air his negativities on a dating profile. Major difference.
Almost forgot to mention the other issue one would need to know about. My work schedule is just plain lousy for any kind of social life. I work 3rd shift and my nights off are Tuesday and Wednesday night. I work hard to provide for my family and it is a well-paying job but it is union ruled and everything is seniority. I have been with this organization for 10 years and I have Tuesday and Wednesday night off, what does that tell you.
availability issues can and should be discussed in emails. | |
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| frycolin
Posted: 10/24/2008 4:55:31 PM |
Sorry to invade your profile review thread, Sis.. but, I'm just watching the series
and I thought that I'd field this one for you:
Meet my fill in profile reviewer  don't worry folks, his advice is free, too.
Welcome to the Dawg and Pandy show | |
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| frycolin
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:03:35 PM | Actually, I really like your profile.
You don't just say that you have a sense of humor, you demonstrate it.
Your text is three times as long as it should be, but I get the feeling that you're a verbiose kinda guy, so that's an indicator of your personality that you should leave.
Since you've already hooked up, it's apparently already gotten you the kind of woman that you were looking for  | |
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| zadaro
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:10:33 PM | If you dig an interesting read have fun.
well... er...it was better than the typical two sentence profile, but I wouldn't have used the words "interesting" or "detailed". You got across an outline of what you're like... but your profile (as with your post) kinda blurs the line between confident and****. I'd advise taking it down a notch.
And... please, please, please change "peak" to "pique". That's one of my big profile pet peeves. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:15:38 PM | I like the first, second and last paragraphs of your text... it's wordy, but I think the type of women who suits you will be attracted by that. The portion between those is choppy and badly needs structure. It comes off as choppy and disjointed.
The pictures and captions are good and really demonstrate a great sense of humor. | |
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| whatcouldpossiblygowrong
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:21:42 PM | fill up those picture slots and SMILE. Many women will view the close lipped smile in your photos and wonder if you are self concious about your teeth.
What to say...
I'm glad to know many of us have some trouble with this part.
Tis not just me!
sounds timid and hesitant, neither of which you want as a first impression.
Things that I value (in no particular order)
Honesty - “This above all, to thyself be true” - I like the sound of thaat quote.
Compassion - It's something we all need at times, and something we're all capable of giving.
Humor - Cause laughter is the second best treatment for a cold. You may not believe what the best treatment is. Ask me later!
Confidence - Know who you are, know what you want.
Family - Cause we'd all be lost without family!
nothing wrong with any of those as values, but it reads like a boy scout list.
Write in paragraphs and about your personality, not just what you value in others. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:25:34 PM | | Lay it down on me... this stuff makes for a refreshing read. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 5:27:19 PM | I could use your help, too... if you have the time. Thank you!!!  | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 8:28:04 PM | Pick me - pick me!
You look like a straight shooter - I know the pics are marginal, but I did buy a new camera tonight.
What about the content?
Thank you !
C | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 8:29:28 PM | I'll bite Pandy, Well, not literally... Oh, then again I might nibble a littel OH, I digress... Although we've talked a few times here and there, please feel free to give me your two cents. Remeber, Firm but gentle.  | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 10:40:44 PM | | Best reviews I've seen on here. So naturally I must ask. Help! | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/24/2008 11:39:17 PM | I just wanted to say I find it pretty amazing how you're not bored or exhausted with reviewing countless profiles. I suppose it's kind of good practice in a way. You're also actually helping people it seems, which is cool.
Anyways, I admire your patience.
By the way, I checked out your profile for the heck of it and it really is quite concise but not rigid. You get your points across well. I can never seem to write clear self-descriptions that I end up being happy with so I just end up writing vague, disjointed, and (seemingly) irrelevant things because I like the way they sound. At the moment it seems that you have a lot on your plate but if you feel like doing me I have some interest reserved for your opinion. | |
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CPC614
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Joined: 10/17/2008
Msg: 100 | |
| cpc614
Posted: 10/24/2008 11:59:52 PM | Well it is a cropped pic of me holding my goddaughter on her christening, so I guess it "is" a me tryin to look comfortable while holding a little bambino. Good call but David Cross come on Henry Rollins ive herd and accept but u def sent me googling. :)
Thanks for the ez pass on the profile and constructive crit on the photos . . .
anything else would be totally appreciated , ur much better at this than i
appreciatively
CpC | |
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