| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/25/2008 12:13:57 AM | That would be great if you have time!
-Stand in line- | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/25/2008 12:25:53 AM | | hit me,,,,, when you have time of course,,, i think i am interesting but don't we all! | |
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| cierakae
Posted: 10/25/2008 1:59:52 AM | Yeah, you need better face pics.
I think that you're pretty.. but, I can't tell for sure.
You've already stated that you are going to correct that.
Kudo's for the full body shot, though.. you're not a fat girl.
Keep in mind that only idiots compare folks our age to eighteen year olds.
I'd change the "widowed" to "single" or anything else.
That sends up an emotional red flag to me.
Too many feelings.
As for the content.. well, honestly, you come off as a tad bit arrogant.
My point? I AM all that my profile describes
Things like that need to go.
You need to describe yourself in a way that is not intimidating.
Or you'll wind up with Walter Mittie.
back off of the intensity
and the caffeine
this part is down-right anal
My main goals in life are to be the best d*mn mentor,
mother,friend to those around me.
To live authentically.
To maintain my financial independance
by working for myself,or for a non-profit.
To stay out of the corporate world.
and this is just ridiculous
I enjoy men as friends - which is to say that I value them and make a point to understand them. I may be one of the few women that doesn't have some male-generated baggage.(so please don't burst my bubble).
the only statement that is not vague in the next statement is "illegal"
I'll try anything that's not illegal, immoral,or too dangerous
you don't want profile help
you just like to make fun of people | |
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| cierakae
Posted: 10/25/2008 9:25:19 AM | hey brawny dog -
thank you, for both taking the time, and for the candid insight.
reading with your comments and pov i ceratinly see your point, however, i didn't get this part:
you don't want profile help
you just like to make fun of people
????????? help | |
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| cpc614
Posted: 10/25/2008 5:50:09 PM |
but David Cross come on
 only in the one picture, and then mostly because of the glasses and the angle.
Vanity restored?  | |
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| BogJuan
Posted: 10/25/2008 5:55:31 PM | Your worst issue is your photo (or lack of) ... the one you have up distorts perspective and makes you look as though you have a tiny little apple head... It just really doesn't show me what you look like at all. That's never a good thing.
Your text? Not bad... you include a list of interests, a lot of detail about your jobs and aspirations and that's all good... but you're really not telling me about you and your personality. What sets you apart? | |
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| liveandlife
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:06:08 PM | you know the drill by now if you've been reading... more pictures... get all 8 filled up.
Text?
<div class="quote">
I am looking for long term. that should already be in your profile dropdowns, having it here is redundant.
<div class="quote"> But i do have to say that i won't date anybody that i am not friends with first.
a girl could validly thing "I have no idea who this guy is and already he's setting down stringent limits?"
<div class="quote">I believe it is a way for me to get to know you. makes zero sense in this context... WHAT is a way for you to get to know her?
<div class="quote">I really enjoy watching movies, reading, playing pool, and bowling. I am up for anything new. this is as exciting as cold oatmeal. Throw in something interesting or weird about yourself... don't be afraid to show off your quirks.
<div class="quote">What i am looking for is anybody who is willing to wait till marriage
you'll take ANYBODY who is willing to wait? sounds desperate. That you want to hold off on sex is going to be perceived as weird. I have respect for the beliefs of others, but you are going to have a hard time convincing normal women that you have a normal view on sexuality if you really mean this.
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<div class="quote">I am also wanting someone who is smart and funny.
<div class="quote"> what if she's dumb with no sense of humor but willing to wait on sex?
<div class="quote">Someone who can take a joke.
this will read as "I'm going to mock you... can you take it?"
<div class="quote">If there is anything you want to know about me just ask. Don't be afraid to message me.
nope, not gonna work. With dozens of other guys in her inbox who have their profiles all fleshed out , why would she take the time to go rabbit hunting for info on guy no 43?
Put it out there... she's not going to ask for it.
<div class="quote">yahoo willmceachern
get this off your profile before you get deleted... it violates POF terms of service. | |
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| asingleguy103
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:14:28 PM | asingleguy103
more pictures, more keywords
I consider myself a honest and loyal person. I am for only one women and would expect the same in return, not into cheaters or liars. I enjoy time with my family. Would like to meet someone that is independent and likes to keep things positive and have a great sense of humor. I have a great job. I love to laugh and have a quirky sense of humor.
Your profile is about you ... your chance to merchandise yourself to potential dates. Don't waste that space on who you're looking for.
Not into cheaters or liars? That phrase is trite and cheesey, does NOTHING to deter cheaters and liars from emailing you and just makes you sound bitter and previously used. Keep it postive.
It's cool that you are looking for a serious long term relationship, and you'll find that women respond to that... but mention it once and move on... it seems to be the pervasive theme of your pro.
You? who are you? what is your personality like? what makes you smile? ... these are things that women will want to know. | |
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| korinniimura
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:24:10 PM | korinniimura
At the risk of sounding mean... femininity was alive and kicking before you found the Alice in Wonderland get up.
Having a unique sense of style is good, but dressing in costume is
going to get you ostracised.
Try more normal clothes with just a twist of Different to keep it edgy.
I sometimes come off as bossy, but I really don't mean to
negative and apologetic, lose it.
I am overweight, but trying to fix that. I don't want to lose weight to fit into society's view of beauty; I want to be healhier. My target weight and body type is not the twig-esque look of the popular American beauty.
It's great that you're getting fit, but reword to make this part about yourpositive lifestyle changes... this isn't the place to complain about the ills of society...so lose some of the defensiveness.
I'd be really careful about the overall tone you're taking here.
You are right on the edge of "militant lesbian type who won't shave her armpits". This is not exactly guy bait.
Tone it down some. You can reveal both your activist and feminine sides without sounding quite so weird or without reveling in being so weird.
Good luck :) | |
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| KatNtheHat
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:26:04 PM | Thanks Pandy. I really appreciate your time and effort. It looks like I have a lot of work to do.
my pleasure...hope it helps 
Oh, and I like the new screen name :) | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:30:18 PM | puzzle1884
your text gives a good impression of your personality, so that's OK as is...but I'd add a few keywords and extra pictures.
One bit of advice that you can take with as many salt grains as you choose?
Either lose the beard or neaten it up. Most ladies don't care for heavy facial hair... but even less care for unkempt looking facial hair.
Good luck | |
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| Holister12
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:36:39 PM | Holister12
First change? Your screenname.
I don't know what it signifies for you, but it makes me think of Hollisters of mall fame. That whole shallow frat boy image is not one that you want to foster if you want to be taken seriously.
Pictures? UGH! The worst POF pictures are the "posing in sunglasses" shot, the "bare chested" shot, and the "camera in the bathroom mirror" shot. You've somehow managed to combine all three.
Women aren't as visual as men. Put your shirt back on and keep it on till the situation warrants it's coming off.
27? You look very frat boy here.
if you're looking to pick up co-eds, I guess that'll work for you ... but otherwise, think about a look that corresponds with your maturity level.
Text? Who are you? What are you about? What kind of personality do you have? Market yourself to potential dates, that's what your profile is for. | |
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| tangy99
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:43:37 PM | Tangy99
pictures? number two says "serial killer" number three says "lounge lizard"... you'd do well to remove them both and replace them. Make sure that your profile includes a full body shot. None of your pictures is very clear or well lit. Try to get a friend with a digital camera to change that.
Add keywords to your interests section... make them interests/activities that a girl could envision herself doing with you.
This is a cool song. Generally I'm not one whos always adding music to profiles.. but hey, why not! :)
And on that note, I do love music! I listen to pretty much anything if I like it. Generally that tends to be slightly older music, 60s, 70s, 80s and 90s. But don't let that think I'm clueless with current music! :P I'd put this in keywords and leave it off your profile.... it sounds chattery and pointless.
So anyway, greetings to all. If you're reading this you're either bored, desperate, extremely lonely or someone I know in real life being curious. To be honest, I'm pretty much interested only in the bored ones. And the latter ones can definitely go away!
self deprecation may have it's place... but this is not it. Kill this, and keep it upbeat.
I'm gonna end this now because I shall very soon start babbling if I haven't done so already.
I used Chattery (love making up words) but babbling is accurate.
You said a lot , but very little of it had anything to do with what you're like and what you have to offer to a potential girlfriend. | |
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| Rusty McB
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:48:11 PM | Rusty McB
I like it, Rusty... you've done a good job with the text, and your pictures are representational of you.
My best suggestion for an increased reply rate? Shave.
Unless you have the ugliest bare chin known to mankind, I'd get rid of it. I looked at your age expecting to see that you were 7 or 8 years older than you actually are. | |
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| IamMimi
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:52:17 PM | IamMimi
I don't know if it's actually your name, but MiMi makes me think of the character from Drew Carey. Not a good parallel , especially for a BBW.
Since you don't have an about me section to critique, I'd just advise you to analyse who you are , what makes you happy and write it down. Get a friend to help if you need to.
Ask several friends to contribute a few phrases that describe you as they see you ... and of course... PHOTOS! | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:54:08 PM |
I read your profile and you are most certainly a woman of wit and charm! I should read more womens profiles to come up wth something for mine! I think yours though will far out weigh in personality any I may find! You are too Sassy!
that's kind of you to say.
I'm one of those Love her or hate her kind of people.... but it's at least authentically me, that's all I can hope to be  | |
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| takeaway619
Posted: 10/25/2008 6:59:12 PM | takeaway619
Hi. My name is Sergio. I am very romantic and a very nice guy. I want a girly girl who loves to get flowers and dress up from time to time. I love attention and affection from my partner. I am very honest and love staying in and watching a movie or going out and having a good time. I'm shy at first but warm up quickly. I am looking for new friends to meet and have fun with. My overall goal is not to find someone perfect but perfect for me. I'm open to dating and then maybe if everything falls into place it will be long-term.
while there's nothing wrong with your prorfile text... it's really bland and lacklustre. It sounds like the profile of every other nice guy on here.
Include something odd about yourself, something fun, ANYTHING that sets you apart.
Can't function in the morning without fruitloops? Have a favorite poet or constellation?
Something original and interesting would be helpful :) | |
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| Eric_2010
Posted: 10/25/2008 7:15:57 PM | Eric_2010
Try to think of a new screen name. This one looks a little unimaginative.
pictures are good... I usually hate sunglasses shots, but yours is of particularly good quality.
The top part of your text is Good...shows that you're positive about yourself and you seem to know where you're going. I would like to see more about what your personality is like , and less about who you'd like to meet.
You'll be able to filter who is wrong or right for you through email and user profiles. Don't waste space on it here.
Your text is also rather clumped up with no structure. Seperate ideas and rework into a couple of mid sized paragraphs that flow well.
The "my dream" portion?
This be very appealing to some women, but they will more than likely be the clingy types who will think they are in love by date three.
I like the sentiment, it's just that the format is so overly sentimental.
Stating that you know how to stop and appreciate the person you are with throughout the routine of a busy day should suffice to get the idea accross.
PLease add more about your personality and what you are like to spend time with. :) | |
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| guitarjam6
Posted: 10/25/2008 7:23:05 PM | guitarjam6
overall, it's a good profile.
You do need more pictures, though.. make one a full body shot.
The things I'd advise changing?
Kill a few of the references to music... it's a turn off when a guy is too into his hobby.
Also, lose the references to great hands... your profile should have NO sexual references at all, no matter how subtle. It's an immediate turnoff to the majority of the women here. | |
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| Thaiguy84
Posted: 10/25/2008 7:28:10 PM | You don't need any help... yours stands out as is.
guys... read this one and emulate.
His pictures show him in different activities, he has varied interests and is upbeat about his life... he gives a great idea of what he's like as a person, and what a woman could expect
if she dated him | |
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| cierakae
Posted: 10/25/2008 7:44:12 PM | Pictures?
they are fuzzy, stiffly posed and do not let potentials know what your face looks like... glad you're working on that
UPDATE: It was brought to my attention, that a critical aspect of my personality has not been mentioned in my profile, and that is the fact that I have a wicked sense of humor, and a wit to match.
it always falls a little flat when you talk about your sense of humor without demonstrating it in your profile. Don't tell people you're funny, BE funny. :)
Most recent movies seen were - Sex in the City, Hancock, and Step-Brothers, enjoyed them all, but saw Step-Brothers twice, yep, I lmao at mindless, juvenille, locker-room humor. move movie preferences to keywords, maybe? Your profile is too long, and this isn't effective enough to warrant the profile real estate.
My point? I AM all that my profile describes, but I don't take myself too seriouslY.
uhm... that's all well and good, but you haven't described yourself yet, unless you count taste in movies.
My closest friends describe me as open,
non-judgemental,dynamic, loyal, genuine,
funny, " a little left of center."
personally, I never like the "my friends say" bit... it implies to me that the author is too timid to say those things about his or her self.
I'm a Christian -- what does that mean?
I pray daily and really believe there is that God that answers...
and I try to listen.
I go to church and mean it.
I don't apoloize for my faith, but I'm not abrasive or try to make you uncomfortable.
If God makes you nervous I'm not the girl for you.
If Jesus Christ is a phrase to you and not a person...we probably won't click.
If sharing your faith is mandatory, mention that your match needs to be a Christian, but what you've listed about will say to many that your Christianity is all there is to you.
You can make note of the fact that your match needs to be a Christian, that you are very active in your faith, etc.... WITHOUT sounding churchy.
For many guys "Christian" is synonomous with "frigid". Just sayin'.
I'll try anything that's not illegal, immoral,or too dangerous.
Constantly looking for something new and different.
that pretty much leaves out everything but the worship services :(
I enjoy men as friends - which is to say that I value them and make a point to understand them. I may be one of the few women that doesn't have some male-generated baggage.(so please don't burst my bubble).
I find the differences between the sexes more amusing than aggravating.
This seems a little akward, I'd consider losing it since your profile is overlong.
My main goals in life are to be the best d*mn mentor,
mother,friend to those around me.
To live authentically.
To maintain my financial independance
by working for myself,or for a non-profit.
To stay out of the corporate world.
To travel as much as possible.
To have a healthy genuine relationship with one man.
I really like this part :) | |
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| cierakae
Posted: 10/25/2008 7:59:14 PM | | Even though I do not have pics right now, will you do me? | |
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| Thaiguy84
Posted: 10/25/2008 8:19:02 PM | Lol, hey thanks!!!
Actually, I recently changed it yesterday because I had a separate "review my profile" post before I saw your thread, and they told me to get rid of my sunglass pics, shirtless ones, and removed all my negative comments! So I heeded all the advice. I am glad you think mine is now an example!
I just hope to see some messages or responses to mine very soon!  | |
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| Eric_2010
Posted: 10/25/2008 9:29:54 PM | Thanks honey for the help. Please go back and look at my changes and see if you think it is in better taste.
Eric | |
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| cierakae
Posted: 10/25/2008 9:32:47 PM | Pandy,
Thank you bunches.
I did a major over-haul, and may need to go back and edit some more .
I really appreciate your candor as it relates to my presentation of my faith. The very picture of a pious, frigid, judgemental, stale old b*tch is what kept me out of church for a long time. I shudder to think I may come accross as such .
Thanks again for your time and insight. | |
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