| Andrea.89
Posted: 11/1/2008 3:54:06 PM | first off, more pictures are essential.... and you're going to need a full body shot, or men will assume that you have a hippo ass.
I am a very easy-going happy person and I love being surrounded by positive people that make your day wonderful because the negative ones aren't worth your time.
I like the idea, but you've worded it in a less than polished way.
Again, It's very "see Jane run"... Your profile represents you. If it seems rigid and stiff, YOU will seem rigid and stiff. That's not usually accurate, but it IS how people's perceptions run.
I come across as a bit guarded when you meet me but a guy who takes some time to charm me and make me feel comfortable is on his way to winning my heart
Im currently doing my second year of university at the U of C and will get my bachelors of commerce degree in the near future.
These sentences are short, choppy, and disjointed. I'd like to see you add a bit more about yourself and present that in a more conversational way. Two to three mid size paragraphs. More is more than most guys will be bothered to read, less looks like you don't take it seriously.
It would be ideal to find someone who is actually stronger than myself personality wise because I am a bit competitive and I think it keeps things from getting dull. I prefer men who are emotionally well-balanced and comfortably masculine as I need a guy who can make me feel feminine. I have an independent nature and would like to meet someone who understands my need for space. I think in general I am looking for someone with a positive outlook on life and enjoys similar interests. Hope to hear from you!
never a good idea to put a laundry list of what you're looking for on your profile.
Your profile is your social resume, not your wish list.
Use your space letting guys know who and what you are , then you can use email to filter who you think is and is not appropriate for you. | |
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| akwatercraft
Posted: 11/1/2008 4:02:08 PM | I have to be mean again in the interests of honesty.
and no, I don't enjoy it unless the victim is an ass... and you don't seem to be, AK.
The facial hair is just gross. Men seem to love it, women tolerate it at best. There will be the occasional woman who has a thing for it, but they are not the norm.
Grossness is exemplified when the moustache covers your lips (there is NO way to eat without food getting into it, and that is revolting) ... and when nose hairs become indistinguishable from beard. I know you think it's cool, but it's doing nothing but hurting you. I advise that you go to a great salon and beg for help. It will also probably take ten years off your age. You are too young to look like an aspiring Santa Claus.
the rest of your profile????
JEEBUS, I feel like I've been hit in the face with testosterone.
Do you WANT a woman who is a female Paul Bunyan??? She'd have to be to fit in with the lifestyle you describe. This kind of woman will probably have a moustache , hairy legs, and will be able to bench press you without breaking sweat.
Think about any activities you enjoy that you could share with the typical woman. Is there room for preferences and activities besides yours? If so, demonstrate that. | |
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| spinnakerset
Posted: 11/1/2008 4:03:53 PM | Don't even bother if you can't post pictures.
With "seperated" as your marital status, your profile SCREAMS "cheater on the prowl". | |
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| Unzipped
Posted: 11/1/2008 4:07:10 PM | If you were someone I didn't know, I'd suggest that you make your photos a little more conservative, so that you'll be taken more seriously.... but I DO know you... and your photos are purely and unapologetically you, and I love that about you.
Your profile expresses you to a "T" and I adore that you own who you are and revel in being you.
What man could fail to love that?
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| flawed to perfection
Posted: 11/1/2008 4:56:19 PM | I really love the new screen name.
Your text is way to long, but oddly... I think the woman you are looking for will appreciate the extra effort that you put in... and it seems to represent you well.
What I'd change? ... get the shirtless picture replaced. Women aren't nearly as fond of them as men think they are. .. they usually make us roll our eyes.
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| Irish rose
Posted: 11/1/2008 4:59:14 PM | I like your profile. I get a sense of what kind of woman you are in reading it.
Get more pictures and more interests for keywords, and you're good to go, IMO.
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| wyzeman
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:07:03 PM |
I'd be most appreciative if you'd sneak a peek at my profile and tell me what's wrong with, besides the fact it describes a maladjusted personality. yeah, I chose a dancing banana, I'm demented
The glaring "wrong" with your profile is your pictures. `1) you look like a serial killer
2)you look like a serial killer stalker 3) you look like a serial killer at a rock concert.
Get some pictures that show you relaxed and, for the love of all that's holy, SMILING!
it describes a maladjusted personality
that would actually be more interesting than what you have.
What I know about you from this profile?
1) you're a dad
2)you're lonely
3)you look like a serial killer
4)you're pissy about certain types of women.
these are not favorable first impressions.
Lose the negativity. If one of these women shows up in your email, ignore her. Don't post "I don't want " lists in your profile.
Write about yourself and what you have to offer a woman.
I actually have no idea what to do on a first date.
This needs to go, it sounds insecure and wishy washy, not what women are usually drawn to.
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| wesdog77
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:08:11 PM | you are married looking to cheat and the bit about friendships does nothing to disguise that.
you won't get mail from women here, and they probably won't answer your emails, either. | |
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| bookbelle
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:11:07 PM | I like your text and what you have to say about yourself, but it's too long to hold the average guy's attention.
You can trim some of the fat by moving some likes up to the interests key words.
Pictures? In both, your smile is a little like you've been caught in mid speech, tongue out and all that. Get some good pics up with a great smile, and I'm sure you'll get some attention.
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| xsfx5
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:14:19 PM | it is way , way , way too long.
Kill both columns in which you list what you are and are not looking for. They are pointless as they do not reach their intended audience, and you should be filtering with your email NOT your profile. | |
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| joulesaffection
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:19:01 PM | get rid of the mirror picture with all the purses... it doesn't do you any justice. Get a nice, clear full body shot without all the extra gear.
For some reason, as I read your profile, I get the feeling that you want to dissapear into the wall. You're somehow defiant and apologetic all at the same time. | |
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| trirunner
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:20:23 PM | | nothing I can help you with... you aren't going to get much of a response here until you can list "divorced" on your profile. | |
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| James 7657
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:24:26 PM | first of all, you never know who you'll offend with pet names like "baby" or "honey" so don't do that in email.
Text?
You really need to work on sentence structure and paragraphs, your profile is almost one big run on sentence that is painful to read.
Content?
Tone it down, romance is all well and good, but you sound like one of those "proposing on the third date" kinda guys. Keep the sentiment, lose some of the intensity. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 5:27:58 PM | It looks pretty good, with some positive changes made...
I'm still concerned about the following:
For my dislikes, I should mention I'm not a sports fan at all. If I can avoid them I will. Playing or watching. It just bores me to tears.
I don't like people who talk to me online and then balk when they find out I'm a large woman. This is a part of who I am, and if you don't care for BBW, then you should be looking elsewhere. Also, never thought I'd need to address this, but if you're looking for a one-night stand, I'm not your gal!
Let users know in your profile that you are a BBW if you wish, I understand that some guys don't note that from the drop down... but the rest is rather negative and should go. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 7:00:38 PM | The sports thing, oddly enough, a lot of guys that view and msg me are very interested in sports, so I wanted that up there so they'll know we wouldn't click.
I didn't mean for the part of being a BBW to sound negative, but I've also noticed you tell people not to sound apologetic about themselves. Which I am not. Thanks for the rating, pandy, I'll see if I can tweak that last bit some more! | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 7:28:41 PM | Help! Not sure what I've done but maybe be too honest about who I am and what I want? Comments have ranged from 'you are too much for me' to 'are you a man-hating lesbian' (which is ignorant to even suggest that lesbians hate men...I digress).
Any help or suggestions would be really appreciated to get the messages coming in from the decent kind of men!  Lia | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 7:53:15 PM | '
<div class="quote">The sports thing, oddly enough, a lot of guys that view and msg me are very interested in sports, so I wanted that up there so they'll know we wouldn't click.
I didn't mean for the part of being a BBW to sound negative, but I've also noticed you tell people not to sound apologetic about themselves. Which I am not. Thanks for the rating, pandy, I'll see if I can tweak that last bit some more!
I miscommunicated,
I didn't mean to include the BBW part in that message... it was kinda centered between the bit about the sports fan and the bit about the one night stand.... and why I excluded it with an "except for..." | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 8:23:41 PM | | I would love some constructive criticism on my profile and pictures if you have time. | |
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 8:39:14 PM | I'm always for some negative reinforcement of how much of a loser I am! Please be brutal, I like it better that way!
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/1/2008 8:41:45 PM | No seriously...... Help ! Aside from not being drop dead gorgeous, I would think that I'm a pretty good catch. But according to the ladies on this site....... I've got a lot to learn!
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/2/2008 8:46:25 AM | Hi,
If you have time, could you take a look at my profile?
Thanks for your time!
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| C'Mere, I'll do ya'.
Posted: 11/2/2008 11:21:52 AM | Hi Pandy... seems you already have your hands full but if you do get the time, could you review my profile as well? It would be much appreciated....
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