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Posted: 10/10/2009 11:58:02 PM | Must Not Smoke
that alone turns me off. I don't get it.
I smoke, but I never smoked with my dates, and I would always shower, brush my teeth and everything.
So, uhm, take that off, people who smoke are people too | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 9:19:21 AM | | Great profile but in your interest section instead of saying Amuesment Park say Amuesment Parks with an s and the end of park that way it will be highlighted. And reads better | |
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Posted: 10/12/2009 1:46:10 AM | You mentioned the words I, or I'm 25 times. I think that a lot of people will find that 25 times is excessive.
If you mention more of the things that you want to share with someone, and talk about them from a potential couple's perspective, it might appear that your profile is a little more about them, and less about you.
Show your warm side... read other women's profiles.. some give that warm feeling
that you might want your profile to show about you, if that's one side of you that you want to appeal to men. Otherwise, with the tattoos, it may be that you appear too tough. I don't know you, but that's just my guess. | |
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Posted: 10/12/2009 2:03:00 AM | I like your picture that was taken in August; in it, you look a little bit like Jessica Alba, and it appears to me that it's the most attractive pic that you have posted.
Your last paragraph is well written, and it doesn't have too many I statements. You might consider revising the last paragraph, something to the effect of.....I prefer men...but I'm willing to think outside the box... so surprise me in a nice way! | |
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Posted: 10/12/2009 11:28:24 PM | | Ok, Gone To The Beach 09 currently limited my I's and I'ms as much as I could. As for reading other women profile, honestly, it didn't help. If it did I wouldnt be here asking for help. thank you though. | |
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Posted: 10/13/2009 11:26:10 AM | | Why? That is my full body picture and it how I look like. Its accurately represent my body. LIke I mention before, I am a fat chick, can't hide nor do I care to. Not interested in a man who doesn't like fat chick, waste of freaking time. | |
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Posted: 10/13/2009 12:00:31 PM | Although I prefer men around my own age and race, I am willing to expand my horizans.
If you are interested in dating outside of your race then remove the statement. If you are merely willing, why would be you willing unless you're merely desperate? It makes no sense.
Think about it from a non-Hispanic man's POV: "Hmm, I'm not Hispanic, and she's 'willing' to date a non-hispanic, but she prefers Hispanics. Ho hum, that doesn't sound very inviting to me, I'll just pass on that." If you are really interested in dating outside your face why put up a negative roadblock? The statement has no purpose except for a negative blocker. The "willingness" doesn't overcome the "prefer" from the view over here.
Now, if what you really mean to say is, "I generally prefer Hispanics, but if you are a very special non-Hispanic I may be interested anyway", then that makes sense. But, you see, it's still a completely unnecessary and off-putting statement. I suggest filtering your choices along these lines with the good old delete button on individual messages.
Also, horizon is spelled with an o not an a. But I think you should remove the entire statement.
The tatoo:
Are you specifically targeting your profile to men who are just wild over large tatoos of Elvis? If so, then you go girl, keep that pic. Otherwise, the Elvis in Your Face is a bit over the top. But I suspect nobody but a ga ga tatoo lover is going to be interested anyway since that's One Large Tatoo you've got there. I like modest tatoos, but I wouldn't date a women with a giant tat of Elvis on her arm. (That's not a judgment whatsoever, just a personal preference.)
dads roots.
Put an apostrophe in "dads" to become "dad's".
Otherwise nice profile.
Best of luck. | |
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Posted: 10/13/2009 11:47:19 PM | I am becoming completely fed up with this whole tattoo topic. Obviously if you don't like it, then I am not the women for you. It just that simple. I am not going to waste my time on you nor are you going to waste your time on me. You are not my target just like I am not your target market.
PLEASE stop dragging this topic anymore, I am not asking your opinion of them or I should even consider getting one. JUST MOVE ON!!! This is not why I am here. I am here to get a review of my profile. What I should change to show my self off wonderfully.
If your whole critique is slamming on my body art, then you aren't here to help me, just bring me down and I am sick of it. | |
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Posted: 10/14/2009 7:11:36 AM | Two observations:
You claim to be witty and then fail to illustrate that. Give another go at describing some of your interests via a humorous anecdote?
Although I've usually dated men around my own age and race, the older I become I see that I am missing out on some great men. So, now willing to expand my horizon.
Almost reads like you're throwing a bone to the reader with this one. Either leave it as an open-ended sentence or remove the comment all together? If you don't mention anything then it's taken as read that you're open.
The most common comments regarding a wall of restrictions (you're better than most) is that the absolute deal-breakers are where you should focus and let the rest fall where they may. What if the man of your dreams was 76 miles away? or 2 months away from turning 27?
Additionally, I've met several very beautiful women on this site who had no picture available until I'd asked for it. I understand that most men show themselves, and if they don't they're a "married" risk, so I wouldn't ask you to change that.
Restrictions:
Male
older than 27
Live in United States
Live within 75 miles.
Must not have messaged users looking for intimate encounters or sex.
You must have a picture to contact this user.
Must not do drugs
Must not be married
Must not smoke
Could be pared down to this:
Male
Live in United States
Must not have messaged users looking for intimate encounters or sex.
You must have a picture to contact this user.
Must not do drugs
Must not be married
Must not smoke
In short, If they're 26 and act like they're an idiot, you can very easily tell them "no thank you". There's no harm in telling folks you aren't interested, and reducing the number of restrictions opens up the potential number of contacting parties.
Within 75 miles and live in US are always redundant (unless you live on the border), and somewhat restrictive. Yes, you're here to date and not get pen pals, but there are valid instances of the restrictions being overly-limiting.
Hope it helps! | |
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Posted: 10/14/2009 7:27:47 AM | This profile has improved. Take from these suggestions what you will--
1 Unclear- user name. Perhaps one more obvious, upbeat.
2 Title--nix. I don't understand-- trash, UR, etc, and repeating a user name in the title is redundant. Its an ADD world--make it simple and clear vs having the viewer trip frustratingly.
3 The SF parking pic adds nothing-use only pics serving a purpose. 'Candid by friend' is better than your other caption to main.
4 Text is improved but there are sentence fragments,pluralize 'horizon', tighten up text more. The point is to be orderly, keep them reading, have little to criticize or wonder about. | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 1:32:14 PM | | Ok DichoTommy and starrynu, I read what you said and it did took me to realize what you said is true. So, I took out that sentence and reconfigure my restrictions. change my name and title that I am much happier with. regarding my profile, I personally not completely happy with. I feel something is missing and just cant figure it out as to what!! Its soo frustrating!! If anyone else can help it would be appreciated as long its is NOT ABOUT MY TATTOO'S!!! Honestly, thank you for your time and consideration. | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 1:42:18 PM | So, about those tattoos... ;) :D
headline
Good Woman looking for a Good Man (pretty sure you're just the one woman) ;)
About you
You have several grammatical/spelling errors present. Could you copy and paste it into MS Word? | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 1:48:44 PM | Wow! I can't believe no one has mentioned this, but your fifth photo with
the smile and yes, a tat showing below your short sleeve should be your main profile pic ASAP!
YOU are freaking gorgeous, imo. What a movie star smile!
As you say you want guys who really dig a woman with tats because yours are large
and it's ridiculous to hide them. But, hide that 1000 watt smile? Never!
Besides you are way too far away in your main pic for anyone to have any clue
what you look like in a thumbnail search. Do keep it for your body shot, it's fine. | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 1:55:47 PM | The most detailed part of anybody's body is the face. You have some excellent shots of yours - set one of them as your primary to show off how pretty you are.
I love your profile----- except the first, and most important paragraph. Your first paragraph strikes me as demeaning yourself. Aside from spelling ballooning wrong(easy to fix), you imply that you are ignorant about "America's Sport" and go on to mention being tone deaf.
Change "Went to a Dodger game, and enjoyed it even though I had no idea what is going on!! " to "Went to my first ball game ever at Dodger Stadium and had a blast learning about baseball!"
"Then did some karaoke [being tone deaf], it was an experience let me tell you!! Not just for me but to the audience as well!" Everybody's a tone deaf rockstar when stepping onto the karaoke stage - no need to glorify that. I'd get rid of "being tone deaf" from that line - you can make fun of the experience, but don't make fun of yourself!
Aside from that first paragraph, I like all the enthusiam you put into your profile - you sound very fun! As for the ostrich burger...it's made with bits of real ostrich; it's illegal in 19 countries; they say 40% of the time it tastes great, every time. | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 4:24:21 PM | Say you are looking for Seth Rogen in your profile, and change the main profile picture to the one of you smiling with your hair down and red lipstick - you look great in that one and it's a more typical main photo. Hell change the first line to looking for Seth Rogen and I'll bet you get more emails. There are more Seths than Brads on here, for sure!
Good luck! | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 5:31:40 PM | | go w the 2nd pic... the 1st pic you can't really see yr face at all and makes you seem distant (both physically and figuratively?) 1st impressions are important! | |
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Posted: 10/27/2009 5:33:52 PM | MUCH improved. Run it thru a spell check program to catch the typos.
As to your comment that something is missing…it isn’t enthusiasm. You’ve got that in spades, and it’s very attractive! I like picture 2 or 5 as primary.
Remember…Profiles (and photos) are works in progress, not carved in stone. As you see what works and what doesn’t, adapt accordingly. Best of luck! DenverSky5280  | |
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