| what beauty?
Posted: 11/22/2005 2:34:33 AM | what beauty do i have to give
short,fat woman,
who wears specs
to look at me
you'd say not a lot
even pass me by
you wouldnt bother to
to give your time
and i would cry inside
it happens all the time
as if being me is a crime
it was'nt always so
when i was young
slim and bold
so many friends
had to let some down
now there are none to be found
so carry on
i will survive
for im strong inside
my family love me | |
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| what beauty?
Posted: 11/22/2005 9:04:21 AM | ^^Superdiva:)I think your inner and outer beauty bring light to the poetry forums..great write:) Hope to see ya again soon...Have a wonderful day kids,Kat | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/22/2005 9:26:20 AM | Okay, so I'll take the plunge.......I wrote this last year after the death of a good friend of mine to cancer. I have written others, but this one has special meaning as the anniversary just passed a few weeks ago. I would love some constructive crit.
Gone
Her beauty pure
White and silver
Splashes of pink
Her friendship true
Soft word and laughter
Abundance of heart
Her shoulder soft
Strength and experience
Unjust tribulation
Her words wise
Heartfelt and sincere
High cognizance
Her life gone
Sadness and frustration
Intense grieving | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/22/2005 9:31:54 AM | | ^^I have no criticism to give in relation to your poem.Its absolutely beautiful and made my eyes well up with tears.Im sorry for the loss of your friend to cancer.I lost my mom to cancer 5 years ago as well.My heart goes out to you,and your poem is a lovely tribute to your friend.if you have any more work you would enjoy sharing Id love to see it.Feel free to post it here or in my "Everyone else is doin it..."fellfromheaven(aka me)thread.Great to see you here,Kat | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/22/2005 9:43:17 AM | Its ok to say you have a "stash" as long as you plan to share it with the rest of us  Im looking forward to it:) | |
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| what beauty?
Posted: 11/22/2005 12:07:53 PM | kat thanks once again for your confidence in me .... i am stronger than i put out in the poem..
lol and have a great sense of humour..though i have had more than my share of heart ache .lost a little boy in a road accident,a week before his fifth birthday, and my second late husband to a sudden heart attack,, also my youngest children both have heart problems .my daughter is fifteen and my son who is 19... but i think its made me stronger .but there is always an under lying sadness... please i hope this doesnt upset you..because my family and i are so close and loving.. :  | |
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| what beauty?
Posted: 11/22/2005 9:05:52 PM | Youre so welcome:)A great sense of humour is such a gift when we go through the difficult things in life.Underlying sadness is more than understandable given your current situation..if anything,I just want to say feel free to email me anytime:)if you need to talk.Im so happy you share your poems here.Come back anytime I cant imagine the pain you feel over losing a child and your husband..May God bless you and your family and keep you strong.Youll be in my prayers...and please dont hesitate to email me.I dont bring this up very often but I lost a great love in my life in an accident and my mom to cancer all within the last few years...so maybe I can help since I can empathize with your situation.if theres anything I can do..Im here ... | |
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| Fleeting Anger
Posted: 11/22/2005 10:33:32 PM | Ok...I've been writing poetry for a while ... Poetry is an outlet for my anger/frustration so most poems I will post are dark lol
Rage burning,
Hatred churning.
Love fleeting,
Forever beating, a heart that will not heal.
Sadness growing,
Overthrowing, any thread of decency.
Take my life, for tonight,
I plan to make my last.
Each breathe I take, my heart does ache.
Sweet death, I welcome you
ok...critique...but be gentle! | |
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| Fleeting Anger
Posted: 11/23/2005 5:33:28 AM | | Ack! Kat, I can't find them!!!!!!! I looked and looked. :( There was some good ones too - guess I'll have to write some more. I'll be back - seems to only take me a few minutes to write as long as I'm the right state of mind. :) | |
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| Fleeting Anger
Posted: 11/23/2005 4:16:57 PM | | Sweettreat...I really enjoyed reading your write.Youre very expressive in your writing..Thanks bunches for sharing it here hey Divisionbell...Ill be looking forward to reading your poems when ya find them.Its a gift to be able to turn out poems that fast..Thats awesome girlfriend. I really hope you find your stash though....My poem are so important to me,Id be heartbroken if I lost them.I hope to see you ladies back here soon.Have an awesome night,Kat | |
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| Fleeting Anger
Posted: 11/23/2005 5:21:52 PM | SweetTreat
I really liked that one. I tend to write darker stuff as well, but hey someone's gotta do it. Life isnt all about love and flowery things....or there wouldnt be so many single ppl on this site lol. Keep up the good work.
The following is one of my 'darker' ones...
You Cannot Hurt Me
For I'm already dead
Faith and hope have faltered
Leaving behind despair.
Darkness reaches
grasping
Calling my name
Pulling me into its embrace
Where pain and sorrow
No longer exist but make way
for comfort and peace
Distance shelters the pain
never shown in true light.
You can no longer hurt me
But I know you still try. | |
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| A Most Appreciated Past-time
Posted: 11/23/2005 5:30:56 PM | What can I say
its something to enjoy
with the headphones on
listening to the beauty of a song.
Easing the pain
of another lonely night,
it takes the tension
from a day full of might.
The sound of the voices
the beat of the drum
it eases the choices
of being happy or glum.
Guitar and bass
and the keyboards play
the look on my face
I want your memory to stay.
Imagination takes hold
I think of you still
relaxing in a thick... quilts fold
sleep shall come, it will.
©1990 -DASH | |
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| Fleeting Anger
Posted: 11/23/2005 7:24:45 PM | Thanks alis and Evil. Evil I liked that poem... very expressive. 95% of my poetry is dark..lol When Im upset, depressed, confused I write poetry, when I'm happy and upbeat I paint. So most of my paintings are very vibrant in color. I just use each outlet differently is all. Looking forward to reading some more poetry...here's another...
Life Fight
Demons chase me in the night,
Haunting my dreams, I try to fight.
They grab me and start to drag me in,
Pulling me deeper into their grasps.
Blood gushing, cartlidge ripping,
Pain soars as they tear me limb from limb.
I scream and plead for my life,
As my soul slowly slips away.
Such pain I feel, life has revealed,
There is peace in death. | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/23/2005 8:43:14 PM | I tried to be so careful
when I first met you
I thought I read you like a book
I read you through and through.
Somehow I missed the fine print
the most important part,
I didn't see the caution
"This man may cause a broken heart".
It started out so innocent
but soon my heart was bound
like all deadly addictions
the highs come crashing down.
I was looking for a fix I guess,
you were my drug of choice.
Desire burned a little deeper
each time I heard your voice.
I told myself I could stop
I played the denying fool,
impulsivly I love you
like some unspoken rule.
I wish I could turn back the time
and stop this from the start
If only I had seen the Caution...
"this man may cause a broken heart!" | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/23/2005 10:50:52 PM | Beautiful dreamer...welcome to my thread:)I could really feel your write.Ive thought on occasion some people should definately come with warning labels LOL ..love is about taking chances though and thats what makes it so sweet when it worksSweet treat you sure managed to paint some extrordinarily vivid word pics there girl!very expressive Dashance...welcome:)I totally can relate to your poem.Music is such an integral part of my life..I seek solace in it often.Im actually posting a bunch of songs that hold special meaning and one I just happen to love in my other thread tonight Evilenchantress..I really like your style of writing...excellent imagery Its great to see all the traffic in this thread..Thanks for droppin in yall..I hope youll all come back and post again soon.if youre celebrating it Happy Thanksgiving! Have a great holiday,Kat | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 1:36:55 AM | I posted this in another thread like this one... but the thread went dormant & I didn't get any feedback. So, I hope it gets seen here.  Happy Turkey Day!
"Reflections"
Life ... is a mirror
its reflections often cruel
even a diamond's majesty
becomes a mere glass jewel
Its smoky essence pervades all
a cloudy ambience envelops 'round
warped, twisted contours ensure
into every aspect are they wound
Reflections distorted in the wake
Some beauty still shines through
So long the beauty has the depth
that only puddle waters do
Cosmetic enhancement reflects images
too pretty to be real
hollow cores lie underneath
where life's mirror can't reveal
True radiance emanates from the soul
a realm that's far below
any point the mirror's gaze
has the ability to show
Images the mirror casts
reflects society's part
to provide candy for the eyes
and not fulfill the heart
For those who choose the heart instead
seeking to embark on a higher path
prepare thyself and expect to incur
the brunt of the mirror's wrath
The journey will be long and hard
though the reward shall be high
the growth of heart and of mind
things that money cannot buy
God speed you on the path you choose
I pray you take the high road through
and may life's mirror never be
a reflection upon you | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 3:08:50 AM | Vocaleze - we all perhaps want feedback to know or discover if what we have put our hearts into has a further value - in particular to share - or be brave to share with others. Nevertheless at times it is up to those who read our works - to decide for us its eventual fate - for how do we judge - what criteria is put in place - because at the end of the day - it is the reflection of what is presented - that on its own merits must bounce back to the heart of those who read or listen to the words transcribed - thus if I see confusion - I see that within me - if I see warmth - I need to ponder if warmth was the intent - and so it goes - then at times trying too hard can be too hard to try
divisionbell - I liked your poem - but for totally different reasons and some more rather personal than any others - but part of that comes from your reasons told after in writing your poem - more so in relation to events of my own life
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Looking Through the Glass
26 June 2005
Looking through the glass
but of water not to drink
A mirror of reflection
In pain of love lost away
drained of hope in heartbreak sink
Lost in soul
broken within mind
What comes next
Was her name
really in the index
A man alone
a woman of scorn
Tears in the eyes lost
To wonder why in this
the time had arrived to borne
Monday - Sunday
and tomorrow in sum
Sure upon reflection
There would be
more fish to come
“But be ye doers of the word, and not hearers only, deceiving your
own selves. For if any be a hearer of the word, and not a doer, he is
like unto a man beholding his natural face in a glass [mirror]: For he
beholdeth himself, and goeth his way, and straightway forgetteth
what manner of man he was. But whoso looketh into the perfect
law of liberty, and continueth therein, he being not a forgetful
hearer, but a doer of the work, this man shall be blessed in his deed.
If any man among you seem to be religious, and bridleth not his
tongue, but deceiveth his own heart, this man’s religion is vain.”
James 1: 22-26 KJV [word in brackets added]
© 2005 Christopher W Herbert (a New Zealand Poet)
a poet who cares | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?Good plan! hehe
Posted: 11/24/2005 10:24:14 AM | Vocaleze....You must have such a warm and beautiful soul to compose something like that.Your words have such power and wisdom ...Im really pretty blown away by your write at the moment.Its a shame your poem didnt get acknowledged the last place you posted it,but then maybe I wouldve never seen it...so in a selfish way,Im kinda glad it didnt..LOL Happy turkey day back,and please feel free to post here or my fellfromheaven poetry thread anytime..Poet...thanks for your comments and your write.Im sure weve all experienced that feeling at one time or another.I hope your day is going well.Since you have quite a few threads in the forums already,and are an established poet,I feel sort of funny saying too much about your work except that,darn that was good hehe...happy turkey day kids,Kat  | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 11:55:34 AM | | Hey, thank you. Sometimes when I write it seems so simplistic, I hardly ever finish what I start, I guess cause I always know it could be better, so eventually I give up. This poem was one I just didn't care if it could be better or not. It was one of those "venting" poems, I wrote it exactly as it came out of my thoughts with no revision, and just let it be. I really like this thread. I like having a place where I can display my amature poetry and I don't have to feel selfconcious about it. Maybe though reading others, getting feed back, and sharing more I will develop more confidence in my writing. Writing is so personal, if someone doesn't like it I feel like a part of me is being rejected, ya know? How can I improve if I"m to scared to even write? So thank you for this thread, I look forward to reading everyone's poetry and responses, and i look forward to reaching outside my comfort zone and sharing more of my own. Thanks for the safe environment to do this . :) | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 11:59:19 AM | | I love your poetry, and thanks for the KJV verse. I agree with the feedback comment, | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 12:03:15 PM | | Wow Vocaleze! One day I'll learn to write like that. I loved how I felt I knew what you were talking about, yet it wasn't blatently obvious to the naked eye. As I read I was able to put my own life story and experience into your words. It was deep,simple,and thought provoking all at the same time. You're writing inspires me. | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 12:04:24 PM | beautiful_dreamer - I am not very good at commenting on other peoples poetry - although there are those that come to me for and ask me what I do think of what they have written - maybe I am selfish as the words of my psalms truly are - I do not write poems - I write from my heart - your words too have beauty and are to be respected - as for my KJV quotes - not all in these forums think the same way of what has been an addition to my works now for several years
This below I wrote earlier in a message to a wonderful friend of mine - only in my way of thinking I feel my words are just as worthy of being shared upon this page
Maybe I put my life and soul into my poems - so they become my life and take my soul with them in time - While given a stage - I would stand and deliver - given a forum I have an outlet - a socket to plug into society - then it becomes my life - consumed - chewed up and spat upon - yet befriended as dusted off in the process - for who am I - when I do not know and reality has a way of avoiding me - now that is the kind of stuff poems (good poems) are written about - but a collection of fancy words does not make a poem - the reader does -
Still there are those of fame - than never got to understand this in their own life time - that is why poetry like painting a masterpiece is a dead man's (person's) art - and political correctness was but a barrier over a boarded up window
This one may need footnotes as I have known to add - but many will know the story
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No Place Like Home
24 November 2005
No one wanted to embarrass you
in front of the crowd
No body wanted to steal
from others in giving to you
So things being more personal to share
while beyond the shadow of faded curtains
There was a window of bewilderment
a place that a crack has been engraved upon glass
Not so easy to see
even in order to remove
Yet still close up all too real
His heart - her heart - of a tin-man
to a scarecrow of straw
The lion of courage
and a frightened yet brave girl
Dorothy - Dorothy
there was no place like home
© 2005 Christopher W Herbert (a New Zealand Poet)
a poet who cares | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 4:59:45 PM | The Final Farewell
Death take me in a warn embrace.
Your dark shroud of hate to hold me tight.
Tears are running down my face.
Theres only darkness there is no light.
I don't want to wake from this awful night.
My heart beats with fear and I am lost.
Take from this world at all costs.
I have no will to breath of fight.
I want my heart to bleed.
No more can I wait.
Take me now just do the deed.
I know now my love and my fate.
My life to be no more.
My life's blood will stop tears no more to fall.
I know It will tear them to the core.
I hear it all, the voice the call.
So farewell my friends.
Take care all will be well.
No more will I try to rhyme.
But all will be fine.
Good by Farewell.
By K.W.
I hope you all enjoy this poem! | |
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| So ya wanna be a poet?
Posted: 11/24/2005 6:28:53 PM | That was neat Dewkiss!! B.dreamer &Vocalese luv'd those too! This is a great thread! Here's one I did a while back again! lol I seem to only write when I'm feeling really "down" in some way or another,.... about due really,... anyways here goes!
Why does it feel so good to cry?
Even though it's been so many years
since I really ever let it out'
every time I try it won't.
I want to cry
I want to feel the release
of all my pent-up frustrations
even though I know
nothing will have changed
when I wake up the next day.
How long will it be,
before I go insane?
How ever long could it last
will I always feel this pain?
-DASH ©1993
I just have a tendancy to remind myself when I wrote and mailed it to myself, thats all
later folks! | |
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