cyeg
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Joined: 1/29/2005
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cyeg
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Joined: 1/29/2005
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rjr57
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Joined: 10/2/2005
Msg: 204 | |
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Posted: 10/30/2005 5:23:03 PM | | Take a look and give it to me, thks | |
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Posted: 10/31/2005 12:20:21 AM | | This looks like a good place to get a review on my profile, lets hear it amberlyn! | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 10:44:28 PM | | You're kidding, right? That profile reads like a memo you stuck up on the bulletin board in the student union looking for a pickup hockey game, not an ad to "pick up" a woman. On the photos, your primary shot is dead-on adorable (though you look a little tipsy or stoned) but you could lose the police mug shot, the gory tattoo and the car, none of which is likely to appeal to many women. Overall, the whole thing is just too "la-di-da" and vague. You list a whole lot of interests: why not elaborate on some of them (besides hockey -- or are you really looking for a girl to play hockey with, because that's how it reads?) | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:01:36 PM | TheNakedPhotographer
If all you're looking for is a fantasy one-night stand, it's a better crafted shtick than most (though I assume you're "dining" in the restaurant, not "dinning.")
photos: B- (trying too hard to look mysterious)
prose: B+ ( a little on the breathless side, but praiseworthy for the effort and sensuality)
clarity of purpose: D+ (who is this woman of your dreams and why would she want to be kissing you in that doorway?) | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:19:43 PM | rjr57...
Maybe explain what your like, what the woman your looking for is like.. that kinda thing...
And chk your grammer... | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:28:44 PM | TheNakedPhotographer ...
Take out pics 3, 7, 8...
Great story.. however its a personals ad, it told me some about you, but basically your a romantic, and your not very specific on what kiind of woman you want. Your lonely and just want someone, anyone to have dinner with.
You should change your occupation to descriptive writer... | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:32:07 PM | wheelzup...
I think your main picture should be the one of you leaning back in your chair... Take out the last one, and the ones of you when your young... lol
Otherwise looks great.. and let me commend you on admitting your in a chair, I've had countless men hide it... Not that its an issue.. you get my drift... | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:34:21 PM | jonathan_8024...
Take out the 2nd pic..
Your looking for long-term.. I wouldn't msg you for long term with that profile.. Add some of what your looking for.. and maybe be a little more emotional? | |
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Posted: 11/1/2005 11:37:06 PM | pygalgia...
I'm assuming since you posted here, you'd like a review.. since this isn't your review thread...
I would take out your main photo, that colour does nothing for you... I would use the red one, or the last one as your main.. Brings out your eyes more..
Otherwise, sounds good | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 12:18:00 AM | Thanks .. I made few changes .. I'm sure more come, but writing is definately not my strong point.
As for the whole hockey thing .. what can I say, I'm canadian you know, and yes I dig women that play hockey!
So the ideal woman for me, would be one that both plays ... if not at least watches the sport. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 12:39:44 AM | | If you have the time, please take a look at my profile and tell me what you think, thank you | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 1:00:20 AM | | Hey,, do me a fav and review my profile,, cause i dont get why i dont get more reply messages,, something wrong with my profile? | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 5:43:03 AM | ok, if you are bored enough.
Relatively new to this site and I guess constructive critisim would be appreciated. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 9:50:21 AM | Thanks Pun-kin I was taught by my parents at a very young age to be honest and since the disability and chair are a big part of who I am they can't be ignored. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 10:18:33 AM | RedRodNaSoaK:
Even a god finds it hard to love and be wise at the same time
What do I win? Bonus points? Free mushroom spores? | |
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Posted: 11/2/2005 10:27:39 AM | | Now see this is what I am talking about two people come in here and review all the profiles befor and after mine, but just skip over me are you all just at a loss for words it cant be that bad. | |
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