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| Cute Chica's Dos and Don'ts
Posted: 11/28/2005 6:39:04 AM | For some reason, the last two profile reviews I've done have not been able to be published to my thread. Is there a limit on how long a post can be???
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Posted: 11/28/2005 6:42:31 AM | Kay...don't know what is going on but I cannot post in my own thread. And I have a line of customers waiting! argh. Sorry guys...I don't know why I can't post to this thread. Does anyone know if there is a cap on the length of posts or how many posts allowed per day? It was my first post today...and these little ones are getting through but not the profile review ones...
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Posted: 11/28/2005 6:58:21 AM | bookemss
Dan- you don't have a profile. So why do you need a review?
You're metrosexual. You mt. bike and snowboard cause that is what hetero white 27 year olds do. You're a sheep. Not a shepard. Baaaaa...
You want sex. With anyone. You are trying to impress your way into any lady's pants with pics of you and a Beamer you don't own.
Get some depth. Learn to type a profile. Revisit me when you've finished sowing your wild oats and have gotten cream for whatever STD(s) you'll be catching.
Your title says it all..."I don't like you either".
Heck, why do you need to find others who don't like you? You don't like yourself!
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Posted: 11/28/2005 7:06:52 AM | square peg
Okay, you softened me up with some compliments. What gal doesn't like sincere compliments. Thank you!
Now onto your profile:
I get a sense of your personality and the vibe I pick up on in general is that you're REAL. You don't pull any punches and you like to show an honest picture of you. The down side is that you phrase it in such a way that you make yourself look like a pity date instead of a great date!
Title: mispelling though should be thought. And what does " I thought I was on Ebay" have to do with you searching for friends or love? Get rid of it. It's cute...but inappropriate.
Pics:
Get rid of the pictures of you (at work?) that show you in a sloppy apron in a sloppy environment. Or is that your work? Anyways...it says sloppy sloppy sloppy. I don't want to hang with Mr. Hobo. Get yourself outside, at a nice restaurant...any nice atmosphere, dress up, take off the apron and SMILE. Also, there are such things as professional photographers. They can take some nice head and full body shots. They won't make you look like Brad Pitt but will make you look like YOU. Also I like the pic of you as scout master? Shows that your are civically involved. Thank you for having only the backs of the kids' heads. Otherwise if you have pics of kids faces, they should not be on this site. Wierd thing is you work with kids but you state you don't want any. Does this mean that you wouldn't date a gal with kids? I don't know...seems contradictory. Check into that. But I would like more pics of you camping, biking. DO SOMETHING! Right now you're just a lump in a big apron in a sloppy setting.
Profession: being lite? do you mean being late? KILL! Get a real occupation in there. Don't have an occupation? Get one!
Profile:
Hi, Let me tell you alittle about me.
Kill this line. Also kill anything in your profile that smacks of Thanks for reading my profile. Or I don't know what to say. KILLLLLLLLL! I'm already here, I want to know about you. Why state the obvious. It's trite.
I have posted a picture but I just DO NOT take good pictures. Remember, it's not about whats outside, it's whats inside that counts!!!
Don't lie to my face. Of course looks matter. And if you don't have the best looks, then you need to sell me on what makes you stand out! Don't tell me not to check out your looks. Cause everyone does. It's patronizing. I wouldn't even include that here. It sets a tone that "HI, I know I'm a frog. but I'm a prince inside." Get real. Some gals don't care what you look like. But you seem obsessed with it. Never NEVER put yourself in the one-down position...like pity me! date me! NEVER! Get some self-confidence. You're a beautiful human being. You have pros and cons just like everyone else.
I'll admit to not being tall, dark and handsome....... Yeah, I really got nothing after that statement!!
Another one down statement. You've already turned off about 75% of the females who made it this far. They're thinking...he's decent...and has no self esteem. I'm going to have to be his emotional crutch. Bad enough when the guy is hot and you have to be his crutch. You just delivered yourself the one-two TKO. Kill this line.
I work hard at being a better person. I would never say I am something that I am not. OK there was that one time that I said I was 5'5".
You just proved that you lie. And refuted sentence #2. You may think this is funny. Others will just think you're a liar. Get rid of sentence #3. It's not funny...it makes me think you're an oppurtunistic liar. I like the first sentence. Elaborate. What have you done and what are you doing to make yourself a better person? That is what I'd be interested in.
I'm looking for a best friend , someone that I can totally give myself to. I would like to share my passions and in turn let my partner share hers with me.
And the birds are singing, bunny rabbits hopping around, Bambi and his mom walk out of the forest......
Stop trying to trip-hop through la-la land. This is reality. We are all in it. Give me some hard and solid facts. I want to hear that you will hold my hand, that you have time and energy to be romantic and creative. That you will massage my feet after a long day at work. Sentence #1 starts nice...looking for best friend...hmmm. Good. Someone you can totally give myself too...what are you? A submissive little man? Kill the second part. Try ...I'm looking for my best friend, a special lady I can share my life with. Second sentence has undertones that you're a freak. As in sexual freak. Nothing bad there...but good freaks use discretion. Bad Freaks are sloppy and advertise it for the world to see. If you mean you have passions like for art, music, classic cars...state that. Just saying passion brings up sex innuendos. And you will stand apart from all other men if you don't include them in your profile.
I enjoy travling to new places, seeing new sites. Some of my interest include bicycling and camping and I like to put those together.
Where have you been? Where would you like to go. SHOW ME. Don't tell me. What type of bike do you have? Some bikers love to talk about brands. What was your favorite trip? Planning any new ones. What if I like to bike and camp? Make me want to email you! Make me imagine the fun I would have with you!
I am a tent camper but do like a good inflatable mattrest now, it just kills my back! I like to cook but am much better at being ordered about in the kitchen or maybe OUT of the kitchen.
YUCK YUCK YUCK YUCK YUCK. Kill line #1. Makes you sound like a crotchety old man. Don't worry, if you get a lady to go camping with you, she won't say no to an inflatable mattress vs. the hard ground.
Sentence #2 is again putting you in a one-down position. You like to cook. Period!!!!!!!
Kill...i'm much better being ordered about or out of the kitchen. You're humor is very self-depracating. Which is usually very attractive. But when it's paired with what seems a lack of self-esteem, it's VERY unattractive.
***PAUSE FOR CUTE CHICA STORY TIME***
In college, I once dated this guy. I worked with him. He always had a smile on his face. He always was laughing and telling jokes. He had a lot of friends. He played in a band, was tall, nice eyes, hair and dimples. He also was a bit on the chubby side but not so much so that it bothered me. I like teddy bears!
We went out on a total of 3 dates. I really enjoyed my time with him but soon grew tired of his comments...continual self depracating comments about his weight. It seems like his band mates kept teasing him about his weight. So he started believing them and thus infusing all his interactions with this theory. I wouldn't even have noticed his weight if he didn't keep putting a huge flashing verbal arrow to it every 15 minutes. He was such a nice, respectful and cool guy. I had to drop him because his negativity was getting to affect me. I didn't like being around someone who didn't like themselves. I thought he was hot. He didn't think he was hot. And so I began to believe him...that he wasn't hot.
Morale of the story: If you don't think you're worthy of a date, no one else will, either.
I am a spiritual, positive person and live my life with tolerance. I'm not a church goer but pray on a daily basis. I'm a believer in karma and love the TV show "My name is Earl"
What the heck does the TV show Earl have to do with this? Kill that part. Not all of us know or watch that show. The other sentences are fine!
I promise to be: honest, faithful, passionate and have a gentle touch. I am artistic and creative and will love to hear you giggle.
Don't make promises. SHOW me how you have been honest, faithful, etc. in the past. Gentle touch? KILL. Too sexual. You're trying to make me imagine our first date, not getting naked with you. SLOW DOWN! How are you artistic and creative. Some people think jigsaw puzzles are artistic and creative. I went to art school. My definition of artistic and creative is a print-maker, painter, sculptor, etc. Give me more meat and details.
First Date
First meeting: Give yourselfs an out, schedule a meeting for an hour of conversation and coffee.
First date: Something both will enjoy with some romance thrown in.
Kill the first line: Give yourself an out? You're already telling me that you are so used to women needing an escape hatch when they first meet you that you have one pre-built in for them?
**CUTE CHICA's Dating Beliefs***
In this day and age of fast food, fast internet connections, and fast everything, we hear again and again from our contemporaries that we want what our grandparents and parents had: 35 or 45 years of wedded bliss. Well guess what? Back then, times were slower. So what do you have to do?
SLOW DOWN!
Take a few weeks to get to know someone on email and phone. Screen them out. The time to screen people out is not over a cup of joe. Caffeine is a romance killer. And makes you out as cheap. Cheap with your time, cheap with your resources. Cheap. My grandmother always said:
STINGY WITH MONEY, STINGY WITH EMOTIONS.
Guess what? It's true. If you jump from two emails and a phone call to a face to face meeting...you know what you will get? An akward meeting between two strangers in daylight over caffeine. And guess what, about 99.9% of the time, it will GO NO FURTHER.
Doesn't this sound better:
You talk via email for a week. You talk on the phone for another week or two. You laugh, you share stories and jokes. All of a sudden, you have a NEW FRIEND. Then, you invite your new friend out for dinner. You meet, you already know each other on a friendly basis so even if there is no connection physically, you still have an evening out of the house to look forward to, plus a nice meal and more laughs. THAT IS WAY BETTER! | |
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Posted: 11/28/2005 7:22:36 AM | | you offer to reveiw profiles, tell me what needs improvement | |
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Posted: 11/28/2005 8:18:50 AM | jennofur
If you lived in CT, you and I would be friends. You put out a very cool vibe.
Your title is fine but a bit bland. Needs a bit more punch.
Pics are okay. I don't like the pic of your face from straight on. You pose better from a side angle. And I don't know if it's the hair color or the makeup color but whichever, it doesn't go with your skin tone. You've got some kind of cool purple eyeshadow and cool pink lipstick. You need to go for warm tones...peaches, golds and browns.
Profile:
The first thing you need to know is that if you do not have a picture, I won't respond.
Kill this line. You start off negative. If you keep getting creeps emailing you with no pics, and we're talking dozens or more, then put something at the very end of your profile...quick and to the point. No pic, no response. But I would caution against doing this at all if possible. KILL any and all negativity in a profile.
The second thing you need to know is that I love bad jokes and a great sense of humor.
I don't need to know. But I would LIKE to know. So maybe just state...I love bad jokes and a great sense of humor. Why don't you start your profile with a corny joke and they segue in this line?
If you want to talk, you must be able to laugh at yourself and you must appreciate witty sarcasm!
My, aren't we a demanding little shrew? (that's okay, I have my shrewish moments, too) But they do not belong in your profile. Ever heard of attracting more bees with honey instead of vinegar? Well, you're honey, but your profile is vinegar. The two contradict and don't jibe. It's like fingernails on a chalkboard. Fix it. Suggestion: I am capable of poking fun at myself and find a man who uses witty sarcasm tres sexy.
I am an intelligent, independent girl so I am not looking for some white knight to save me; I just want someone to appreciate all that I have to offer.
Hmmm...I think this is worth keeping, but needs to be rewritten. I see what you're trying to do...trying to say you aren't a gold digger. But you need to do it in a more positive spin...suggestion: I have a great job and am constantly devouring new books and taking new classes. I have a thirst for knowledge. I gave up fairy tales when I was a young child so I'm not looking for a mythical prince, but a blood-and-bone man who will appreciate me and wants to be appreciated right back!
Oh, and if you are an Eagles and a Flyers fan..that's a definite plus!
Make this it's own section. Refer to a specific game suggestion: Did you catch the Eagles game when #29 got that touch down? Wow! If you're a die-hard Eagles fan...I'm your lady!
The guy I am looking for has to appreciate and value loyalty, intelligence, honesty and humor. He has to be attractive to me but that's not to say that he has to look like Brad Pitt or anything. My idea of attractive is not necessarily "traditional." I don't think it's too shallow to say that looks do matter...you have to be attracted to the one you are with.
Again, a bit akward in wording. Suggestion: My match would be a guy who wants and appreciates loyalty and honesty (you already covered humor and intelligence above so if he's still reading, he wants those qualities.) I think they are the rockbed of every healthy relationship. I believe that chemistry is important. I don't really have a "type", I find a wide range of men attractive. (how's that for casting out a wide net. you can cull out those you don't want when they email you)
First Date
On first dates I like things to be casual....jeans, sweatshirt, a rented movie, a six pack and a pizza. Nothing serious, nothing too uptight...relaxing and casual.
This maybe what you like...but this is what people who have been dating for a year or two do together. The start of the relationship should be a bit more than that. You can relax and be casual out in public somewhere. Every guy decodes "coming over to watch a DVD" as nookie or at least some heavy make out session. If that is what you want, fine, but if it's not...change this. What was the best date you've ever been on? Write this up. Set the bar high...that way a guy will know that you value yourself highly and he will have to do the same to catch your interest and keep you.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 8:47:45 AM | mrbongo
You come across as a total redneck but then I see you're from wisconson so it's just your environment? Nothing wrong with being a redneck...I have quite a few in my own family. You seem like a particularly likable one.
Title: Fun loving Aquarius...Are we back in the 1960's? Horoscopes are fun but corny. If you do believe in them, don't advertise it in your profile. You'll come across too flaky. (I read mine every day btw) Get rid of all the !!!!
Photos: You are smiling in all of them! YAY! And what a nice smile. But I bet you already know this and been told a gazillion times. So much smiling puts out that you are one happy individual..aka the likable redneck. Kill the black and white pic of you in a white wife beater in front of Walgreens. It is totally unbecoming. You look like you go around all day in a tank top. EWWW. And you have the beginnings of man breasts in this pic...double EWWWW. All your other pics you look very virile and in good shape. I even like the one of you in the tank top flexing with that devilish smile. I'd keep those. What's up with the 2 pics of the tree house? Is this where you live? Kill them. Get some activity pictures. Do not include pics with dead animals or guns if you're a hunter. This would freak me out. If you hunt, fine. But don't need to put it out there. Think the movie Deliverance.
Profession: I work to hard. It's Too not to. And for the love of pete, put up a real profession I work too hard makes me think you're a workaholic and don't have time for a special lady.
Get rid of Pabst in your favorites list. Eww...
About Me
You lack capitalization, proper punctuation and love a run-on sentence. You exude the literacy of a third grader.
I am a 38 yr. single guy without kids,
We know this from reading your stats above. Don't need to repeat yourself.
I love to spend as much time as I can up north ,my family has 120 acres of wooded land and a cabin there.
Suggestion: I love spending time out in the Great Outdoors. I especially like going up north to my family's cabin. What do you do when you're up there?
Im looking for casual relationship
uh huh...you're looking for sex and it's I'm with apostrophe
with someone to spend the weekend with relaxing in or out of town,Im not much for going to bars any more,I often find myself spending quite nights at home tuned into public raido.
Should be: with someone to spend the weekend with relaxing in or out of town. I'm not much for going to bars anymore, so I often find myself spending quiet nights at home tuned into public radio.
I am the quintessenceal Aquarion (see aquarius to learn more about me )
Ugh. This again? Kill it. And why do I need to go search out an astrological profile to find out more about you. Why don't you do some legwork and fill me in already?
Im well dressed,have a good steady job,intellectual,eccentric,and love to laugh and have fun! their wont be enough room for me to finish, so like minded individuals should respond
Should be:
I'm well-dressed (but obviously not well-educated in English grammar), have a good steady job, intellectual (so blatant with your lack of spelling, grammar and puctuation skills), eccentric, and love to laugh and have fun! There won't be enough room for me to finish, so like-minded individuals please respond.
Kill the eccentric. Eccentric plus your love of being out in the woods for long stretches of time make me think you'd jump all over the first female you saw.
First Date
I WOULD HAVE HAPPY HR. FROM 5PM TILL 8 THEN GRILL UP SOME RIBEYES AND BAKED POTATOS THEN WE COULD LISTEN TO MUSIC AND TALK OR PUT IN A CLASSIC MOVIE . WE COULD GO OUT FOR DRINKS AND THEN HOME FOR AN AFTER HRS. SWIM IN MY POOL. I COULD ALSO BE OPENMINDED ABOUT WHAT YOU WANT TO DO , WHY DONT YOU STOP RIGHT NOW AND LET ME KNOW , I CANT WAIT TO HEAR FROM YOU !!!!
WHY ARE YOU SHOUTING?! Don't you know that all caps online means you're shouting? You basically need to work on the basics...like grammar, spelling, punctuation and online etiquette. Can't dress up the pig in silk until it's had a bath type of situation here.
First date sounds like all you want is nookie. Swim in my pool. How original.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 8:56:50 AM | bandito
I'm going to have to be true to my ethics here, but I will not review a profile for someone separated.
In my book, separated = married. You should be focusing on either getting your marraige patched up and being a daddy to your three gorgeous kids or waiting until you are truly legally single before looking to hook up.
This is purely my opinion and not a judgement. You do what you want, you're an adult. But I will not aid in someone who is still married legally.
Good luck. Contact me when the divorce is final and I will gladly help. | |
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Posted: 11/28/2005 9:12:36 AM | Cloudhi-
What a beautiful beautiful soul you are. It seems a bit warped that it comes through something as soulless as a computer, but hey, they are the times we are in.
You are a cool hippee. You love mother nature and see that everything from a tree, rock, flower or animal has a soul. I feel a bit of the native american vibe from you. Are you part native american? Perhaps in a past life?
If you didn't live on the other side of the world, I have a coworker who would be such a good match for you. She's a beautiful hippee lady..and I love her to bits. Hmmmm....
Anyways:
Title: Tree standing in rain. It's corny but it works. I'd leave it. You have maturity to back up the solidity in your choices so the rest of your profile I don't have much to say other than it ROCKS! But being me, I will mention a few things:
Photos
Simply...you're a cutie. I have a tender-spot for earthy crunchy people and redheads. But other than that, you have a dalai-lama-esque type of smile. Great pics.
About Me
A pair o ducks. -don't get this but it must refer to a story. Want to elaborate?
World traveller, found roots. -very nice.
I'm an old dog who likes to learn a new trick, and I know what works for me. Grounded, with a great imagination. - okay, now I know why they say older men are attractive. I think I may be a bit smitten!
At times very serious, at times stricken with paryoxisms of mirth. I live in an island forest and look into infinity. Was once a solider, am commited to peace. Love stillness and silence and loud rock&roll (TURN IT UP!!)
A poet! You're a poet! Rock & Roll. Need spaces
Prefer independant women, but you must let me open a door for you (my mom and dad taught me to say please and thank you). Suggestion: I love being around a strong and independant woman who still likes having the door held open for her out of respect.
Love kids, but have never been a dad. Got all my own teeth, long red hair, and a short greying beard. Housebroken. Don't look, feel, or act my age...(act my age!!! what the hell dzat mean??) Hopeless romantic.
Your sense of humor is showing. How very refreshing.
Got clumsy feet and magic hands.
Ooooh....
Building my own house, skylights over the bed. Under the blankets and under the stars.
How very nice. I like this. I am going to add this to the plans of my dream house.
I love to touch and be touched, from the surface to the deepest depths.
A bit too sexual?
The Four Agreements are my goal. How 'bout you? Don't know what that is...but I'll have to check it out.
And yes, I do love mangoes.
Me too!
I have only been here on POF for a week, and have already found a beautiful soul, one whom i would like to devote my energies to. Thank you all. and Thank YOU R...You are truly a beautiful gift!
CC: Lucky Lucky lady!!!
First Date
First meeting.......doesn't matter where. Make it COMFORTABLE, make it REAL, make it EASY. With the Gods smiling down, make it DEEP and SPARKY too! In fact, that's the kind of relationship I want to be in.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 9:16:48 AM | cute_chica I think your critiques of the profiles are good and constructive.
I guess I am not looking to get hooked up, just to meet some nice friends here, and I have done that. The process of divorce is slow for many reasons, some which are in my control, some which are not. What qualifies a person to look for new friends or even new relationships isn't necessarly governed by a contractual state. In my case I am legally seperated living apart from soon to be ex-wife without any promise of reconcilliation as she is already shacked up with another man.
If I were stating my intent to look for a long term relationship in my profile, I could see your point as being valid. In my case, you are providing a rationale for exclusion that I find to be judgemental and unwarrented.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 9:30:41 AM | starryeyedinid
I feel that I will probably be wasting my time here because you 1. Don't want to hear the truth or 2. It will go in one ear and out the other or 3. You'll screech at me that I don't know you and how dare I judge.
I gave your profile a quick once over because your post on my thread gave me the impression that you have baggage.
I read your profile quickly with the problems you mentioned in mind and you know what: It's all YOUR fault for attracting these losers.
WATER SEEKS ITS OWN LEVEL.
What does that mean? The men you attract are only attracted because you are putting out vibes that you're a loser and have no standards. I think you need to take a break, pick up the book Ten Mistakes women make to mess up their lives, and evolve a bit.
First off, you state that you are looking for a true connection with a guy, but then you hint in several places, okay like every third sentence, that you're all about the sex.
Is there anything wrong with letting the sex take care of itself? What you need to focus on is getting a date!
Your photos are of a lady who is does not love her luscious curves. You hide in these prim and proper outfits. You scream...spinster...take advantage of me! Get rid of the 70's feathered hair. You date yourself. Make an appointment with a GOOD hairdresser and consult with him/her to get your look into the 21st century. If you have a good job and own your own home, you have the $$ to do this!
Favorites:
Limit yourself to your top six. And don't keep repeating sex. You sound like a slut.
Loser men want you to be their sugar mama? It's your own fault for putting in how hard you work and that you own your own home. I know I'm coming across harsh, but dang...get a clue! Kill all mentions of sex, job or house-ownership.
You're advertising that you have (some) money and you want sex. And you're attracting poor schlubs with no class or taste? WOW!
 Girl clean yourself up. Get the book I mentioned. Read it. Adopt it! Get your haircut. Get a life and then get a man. Your problem is that you think you can only live or have an identiy through a man. Get happy with yourself and then get a man. And you may want to look into therapy because your problems go way beyond what some stranger online (me) or a book can help.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 9:38:21 AM | easygoinggeo
Surprise, a divorced dad "Looking for a snuggle partner" Kill the title.
In other words, you want sex.
You don't have much of a profile for me to comment on. Kind of like trying to grow a garden in a desert. And that is how most women will feel clicking away from your profile. Cause that is what they will do...click away if they even click towards it. Or they'll fall asleep reading it
You need to beef it up. Don't use lists. Show me don't Tell me.
Give me three examples of your favorite things. Use at least three to five sentences each. Use action words.
You need action shots to beef up your pictures. And a nice head shot of you smiling.
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Posted: 11/28/2005 9:39:01 AM | Best title I have come across on a guy's profile:
Always puts down the seat
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Posted: 11/28/2005 10:00:48 AM | sticksgood
I would not reply to your profile, either. You know why? Because you sound like every other white hetero 23 yo boy out there.
I would get rid of your name...sticks good. Is that a sexual reference? Even if you didn't mean for it to have one, it does. Kill it. Get a new one.
Pics: Cute. You're cute. But only one? Give me more pics. Especially activity pics because:
You're interests are:
Sports Drinking Video Games
Oooooh. I want to date a guy who spends his time getting smashed and playing video games. Do you live in mom and dad's basement? Do you hang out with other losers? Can I come over and watch you play 20 hours straight of Mortal combat? Ditch the video games. Or at least any mention of them. Video games are for 10 year olds. Kill the drinking. If you're an alcoholic, don't advertise. If you just drink like all other 23 year olds out there, then you're normal. Don't ever EVER put drinking as in interest. You lush.
About Me
I'm a 23 year old male who lives in Columbia, South Carolina (originally from Augusta, Maine). I'm 6 ft. tall, 150 lbs with brown hair and brown eyes. I love sports (basketball, football, baseball, soccer, tennis, golf, it doesn't matter), but I also like movies (at home or the theater), music (mainly rap), going out to eat, drinking and probably everything else that a person my age likes. I'm kind of quiet but I can be outgoing with people I'm comfortable with. I just moved here to Columbia and I don't know a whole lot of people so I'm looking for a nice Southern girl (or a Yankee like me, ha ha) to have some fun times. Hit me up if you're interested.
YAWN! A list. Show me, don't tell me. Give me an example...action verbs and words. Why did you move to SC?
Profession: Stock person? Another reason why you aren't getting dates. Get yourself into community college. Then you can put college student in profession. Means you're thinking further into the future than getting ripped this weekend or the new video game you're going to rent at blockbuster tonight.
First Date
I would have a great time if the girl I was with was having a great time as well. I enjoy many different activities and I'm a firm believer in the fact that it's not what you're doin, it's who you're doing it with.
Ummm...this is where you're supposed to show your creativity. You need the girl to fill in all the blanks in your profile and on what type of first date you'd take her on? You're already making her do all the footwork in you non-existent relationship? NO wonder women aren't contacting you. You're f-ing lazy. Why don't you step up to the plate. You're playing it to safe. AND THAT IS VANILLA. Vanilla=dead.
So my final impression: A 23 year old lazy sloppy drunk with no future ambitions other than get wasted, play video games and be boring boring boring. Why aren't girls breaking down your door?
You don't come across as more than two dimensional. You don't even seem like a real person.
BTW, you moved to a new area. It is always hard to break into a new area. Don't mention you just moved. See if that helps. Or maybe use it as an angle...you're a transplant. Why don't you just check the arts and entertainment section of the paper or the alternative magazines out there and see what catches your interest...mention that you would like a date for a specific event...concert, play, movie. That gives girls a solid idea that you are ready to go out there and have fun NOW! | |
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| Oh boy...
Posted: 11/28/2005 10:41:26 AM | Ok one more try to post a request.
Yippee it worked!!!!
ps I'm working on better pictures. | |
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| Cute Chica's Dos and Don'ts
Posted: 11/28/2005 10:53:10 AM | higlighter
You're a stand up comedian. I got a good laugh out of your profile. I hope for the sake of decent womenfolk everywhere that it's fictional. If it's not, well good luck. | |
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| HONEST Review of your profile here...
Posted: 11/28/2005 10:55:27 AM | Bandito
Judgemental and unwarranted? Let me remind you that this is my thread and I can do whatever I want or say whatever I want. My first post reads:
If you can't stand the heat, get out of my kitchen.
I stand by my original post. I do not review profiles for separated people.
You're entitled to your opinion and I'm entitled to mine. You just got your eyebrows singed off. Run before you get more burns. I don't provide first aid.
You entered my thread at your own risk, posted and now are crying like a big ole baby that I was judgemental. Guess what...you were warned. So take it on the chin. I don't kiss anyone's @ss. Don't make me use by pithy wit on you...it won't be pretty. | |
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| HONEST Review of your profile here...
Posted: 11/28/2005 11:16:48 AM | kblueeyes-
My, but you are a cutie!
Photos:
Your first pic is great...you are definately a cutie. I don't like the second one where you're trying really hard to put up a homeboy persona. Kill the homeboy/baseball cap picture. Unless you want to attract some ghetto trash.
You have a gorgeous face. Show it off. Give me some pics with some big smiles. And do it outdoors in natural light. That flourescent light is killing you in the pics. And I'd like to see a full body shot so I could admire the rest of you.
There's not much else to comment on because the rest of your profile is non existant. And I know that there must be a big old teddy bear behind those beautiful eyes of yours. Why are you being so shy? Step up to the plate.
Pay attention to capitalization, punctuation and run on sentences (using commas too much). It draws the line between lazy sloppy little boys and grown men who pay attention to detail. Guess which one I'd want to date?
About Me
im new to omaha i just moved from kc to manage a transmission shop.
Should be: I'm new to omaha. i just moved from kc (where is this?) to manage a transmission shop.
I love what i do and someday would like to open my own repair and perfomance shop.
Use a period at the end of this sentence. This is a nice sentence...shows you have ambition. Very attractive.
i like cars sports movies going out to eat dance party on occasion. I have a vareity of interset and hobbies just dont think of them all at once but they all come out in time.
I not i. You forgot commas between cars, sports, movies, going out to eat, dance, party....run on list LISTS are the KOD (kiss of death) to profiles and are VANILLA. Want to flesh out your profile and snag my attention...what is your favorite car and sport. Your all time fave movie and food. Then tell me why it's your favorite. Don't tell me... show me! For example...My favorite car is a silver Volvo C-70. I love slipping into the fine leather interior of an import and how it corners those turns on the highway. etc.
First Date
First date is all about being social and having a good time and seeing where it goes. so where ever that might be dinner movies sporting event etc....
YAWN...of course you want a first date to be social (interaction between 2 human beings is social) and of course you want to have a good time. But if I was your date and I told you I wanted you to plan it for us...what would you do. Why don't you write about this? And it also gives a woman a peak into what you think is fun on a date.
Good luck! | |
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