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Posted: 11/30/2005 8:32:58 AM | diablo_yvr
If you check the thread earlier on, I state I don't review profiles for separated people. There are others on here that will. *This is not a statement that you should not be on POF. This is purely me exercising the choice not to review your profile in my thread.*
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Posted: 11/30/2005 3:44:05 PM | Your comments have been very on target for most profiles, cute_chica..even when you didn't like them.  :) I've edited my profile quite a bit this week, and would love to see what you make of it.
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Zeeb
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Joined: 11/15/2005
Msg: 105 | |
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Posted: 11/30/2005 4:43:01 PM | Zeeb
I liked your title but it went all downhill from there.
Your main picture is of you bored. Hmm. Guess what I would be on a date with you? Bored. Guess what I am when I read your profile. Bored.
Photos:
Bored expression. Wife Beater. Mac Daddy Pimp outfit. You will beat me when I tell you I don't have dinner on the table when you come home. Get rid of all pics. You look atroscious.
About me
I am sensitive, smart, kind hearted, loving, careing, deep, an Aries & a published poet. I spend a lot of time writing, driving, & listning to music. I study martial arts, and soon I will go to school to learn sound gear better.
A list. I hate lists. You sound like every other uninspired 25 yo white guy. *SNORE* I think it's called cataloguing in poetry-speak. Don't do it. Give me examples of your sensitivity and kind heartedness. Just cause you say you are definately is not proof that you are. PROVE IT!
I am also the VP of marketing for my family's recod label. Bored as hell!
UH-HUH. I'm bored, too. See a trend yet?
Penutbutter, Jelly...... PeanutbutterJelly With A BaseballBat!
Did you write this drunk and stoned? *
Learn to spell. Get a life. A girlfriend is not meant to provide entertainment for a 25 year old who cannot entertain himself. You have social ADD.
First Date:
A song?
*SNORE* I almost feel sad for you. You definately are not getting any dates. And I'm glad. | |
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Posted: 11/30/2005 4:47:57 PM | be real
You're profile is not meant to be a blog.
Employ paragraphs. Do not go beyond four (five sentences each) paragraphs. You like to hear yourself talk.
Get a blog. Rewrite your profile. | |
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Posted: 12/1/2005 11:46:16 AM | Hi POFers-
I'll be away this weekend - snowboarding! And yes, the house has a hot tub and a kegorator! Did you think that me and my girlies party down any other way? After hours are, of course, at my place.  
So I may be on for a bit tonight, but chances are I will be packing so I will get back to you on Monday.
And if you happen to be at a mountain in southern VT this coming weekend and you're a hot guy with hot pals...I'll be seeing you at the bars for some apres-ski cervecas!  | |
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Joined: 11/15/2005
Msg: 112 | |
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Posted: 12/1/2005 6:41:32 PM | Damn, I should have read you’re profile first. I would have realized that I was talking to a dried up old closed minded****  | |
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Posted: 12/1/2005 6:53:01 PM | Hmmm....wasn't there something on this thread about get out of the kitchen if you can't take the heat? And then I get bashed cause I'm doing exactly what I said I was going to do?
And we all wonder why Zeeb gets no action? *smells a mysogynist*
I'll be in Mt Snow this weekend rocking out with the hottie snowboarders. And yes, I do love men! xoxoxo
So have a great weekend, everyone. I will be back to look over your profiles on Monday! | |
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Posted: 12/1/2005 8:04:07 PM | | Hey Chica, I am ready, I have changed my profile since I first started POF but I still have to make the first contact most of the time. I have met some cool people but damn, I would like to be hit on from time to time. help.... | |
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Posted: 12/2/2005 12:27:39 PM | Cute Chica's List - How to Stay Dateless Forever!
1. I am laid back.
Uh-huh. Sure. And so are all the other 25, 35, 45, 55 and 65 year-old men on here. Are you seeing a trend here? DO NOT USE this cliche. I will also add TIRED OF MIND/PLAYING GAMES and TIRED OF BARS. Like we don't know this already. Like we don't already agree with you. Do you need to state the obvious? Cause if you do, you're a dork.
2. I'm honest, kind, funny, athletic, hung like a horse, romantic, read Shakespeare...
If you have a LIST of adjectives, you have no brain cells. SHOW, do not TELL. Use an example of your kindness or humor. Don't just claim you are. I don't believe you unless you can PROVE IT. And neither do all the other lovely ladies on POF. Don't think that we'll be giving you a chance to prove yourself on the first date. The ladies are already clicking on the next guy's profile who tells us HOW he is funny or romantic or what type of great date we'll have if we take him up on his offer. And he will be the one we will be dating while your sorry butt is at home. Alone. Again.
3. Wife-beater Photos
#1 offender: guys in wife beaters. Kill any and all pictures that you have of yourself in a wife-beater on your profile. Actually, do us all a favor, burn the original photos and all you wife-beaters. It screams white or ghetto trash. It screams domestic violence. And it just ain't sexy. Oh yeah, you don't look as in shape as you think you are so please save us from being scared witless.
4. Do not put LOL or LMAO or any other acronyms used in IM in your profile.
Your profile is a warm and intimate note to your hopefully future significant other. Guess how you're going to be dealing with this new love of your life? In person. Not on IM. So please, do away with the LOL...I hate them. They are stupid. And if you use them, it makes you look stupid and like you spend too much time on the computer instead of face-to-face on dates. But I guess it just proves that you are home. Alone. Again.
5. Do not use those annoying animated emoticons in your profile.
I know. they're cute. And addictive. But DO NOT USE THEM! They are cute in the forums. But they are immature and annoying in a profile. If you have dozens in a row you make yourself look very amateurish. You look like a dork. A stupid dorky amateur. If you use them, you will get emailed by all the 50-year-olds who still sleeps in fleece Disney pajamas with feet. Don't get me started with people over the age of 12 who wear Disney clothing. Your profile is not a video arcade. Why make it look like one?!
6. Do not use Poetry, sonnets, definitions, Songs.
Unless you have a very short line or two, DO NOT TORTURE US with your pathetic attempt of looking erudite, literary or intellectual. It DOES NOT WORK. What it does is make you look like your are full of yourself. You like the sound of your own voice and have no friends. Like you're trying too hard. And that's Pathetic with a capital P. If you were an English major in college, or have a Ph.D. in philosophy or literature, or are an award-winning poet and this line or two encapsulates the marrow or your soul, I want to see it. But 99.7% it just shows you are a pretentious prick of a loser. And no, you are not part of the .3% who need to give us an English lesson. | |
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Posted: 12/2/2005 2:44:54 PM | | Ola Chica, I've been out of the dating scene for quite some time, need more help than anyone could provide, but would appreciate any input. Thank you. | |
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Pat82
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Joined: 11/25/2005
Msg: 119 | |
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Posted: 12/4/2005 8:11:48 PM | Hi POFers-
I'm back. A little bit sore. The mountain was a bit unforgiving to this newbie snowboarder. If there is anyone in the CT/MA/VT area who wants to go out and teach me their def snow-riding moves, email me! | |
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Posted: 12/4/2005 8:34:38 PM | Pat82-
You're title totally turns me off: Looking for big-chested female
What self-respecting female wouldn't want to whop you up side the head for that bit of stupidity? I was told this weekend by a male ski-buddy that all men are pigs. Well, women know this. We just want you to join us in our denial of this fact. You can be a pig. Just keep it to yourself. Don't broadcast it for the masses.
I liked the rest of your profile except for some spots:
PHOTOS
From what I saw, you MIGHT be a cutie. Why do I use MIGHT? Cause all your pics are from far away where you are just a small little blob. And they're all BLURRY. Get one super clear pic of your head and shoulders, dressed decently and with a great big smile. You look like you have a really active lifestyle so that's good. I see that you're a flight instructor so that explains all the pics of the planes. And get rid of the picture of you and your motorcycle. It's cliche. Like look at the big extension of my penis. It's immature. Same goes for you guys out there who put 1 picture of themselves and 5 pictures of their BMW or whatever hot wheels they play with. Girls dig nice cars. But they care more for the nice guys behind them. Broadcasting your big boy toys annoys me. I think I may speak for a good portion of the female population, too.
Your profile is written in full sentences employing capitalization and punctuation. You write in a friendly and conversational tone and for that I am going to give you a gold star for accomplishing what most men on POF can't seem to grasp: presentation of yourself should be well put together and it all starts with your profile. There are a few holes that I'd like to see you fix:
About me
I am a fun, outgoing person who enjoys the single life but is looking for the right girl to settle down with.
Huh? I'm confused. This sounds contradictory. Do you enjoy being single? Or do you want to settle down with the right girl? Clarify this sentence.
Suggestion: I am an outgoing extrovert looking for the right girl who wants to settle down. We already know you are single in the stats above your profile. Why be redundant? The focus is now on the girl and not all about you. Enticing to the female species. Remember who this profile is intended for: single gals. They are your target audience. To many I's aren't good cause you sound full of yourself.
I am a very goal orientated person and would like to meet someone that is also. I love my job and take my career very serious.
These two sentences can be combined. They kind of mean the same thing, right? And I find the second sentence a bit off-putting. Like you're a stick in the mud.
Suggestion: I love my job. I have good short and long-term goals career-wise and would like to meet a lady who enjoys the same mentality.
I enjoy doing spontaneous and adventurous things (always up for a good time).
Huh? Another contradiction. The sentence proceding it is that you're "very serious" but here you are spontaneous/adventurous.
Suggestion: I enjoy my free time and seek out spontaneous and adventurous activities. This would see that you like to balance your career with personal free time. No future girlfriend will stick around long while you are all caught up in the rat race at work. At least, the smart ones won't.
I am very laid back and easy to get along with.
You have broken rule #1. Do not say you are laid back. You now sound like every other 23 yo white dude on here. Aren't you trying to set yourself apart and snag all the lovely ladies? Oh yeah, it's not up to you to decide if you are easy to get along with. Leave that your date to decide. Please allow her to have an opinion. I don't like being told how I should percieve you and neither will your date.
Suggestion: I like relaxing with.....doing....Give us examples of your laid back lifestyle and examples of situations that showcase how you are easy to get along with. If you cannot back up claims with Proof, kill these sentences. I want you to PROVE you are these things. SHOW me, don't TELL me. If you can't give me examples, you're wasting my time.
The only type of person I dislike is someone who is snobby or hypocritical.
OOOOOOH. Negativity. Kiss of death. Nix this line. The profile is not a place to try and screen out applicants for your attention. You can do that in email, phone or on a date. This sentence smacks of BAGGAGE and that is as unattractive as unibrow. Kill this line. You sound insecure. Also, I am sure you have been snobby and hypocritical at some point in your life. Your holier-than-thou, butter-doesn't-melt in my mouth attitude will turn off a lot of people, maybe your dream girl.
I am hoping to meet a girl who has a great sence of humor and is sociable.
sence should be sense. And what is your definition of sociable? She watches you play 20 hours straight of video games? She parties like a hooker? A bit more clarification, please. It's too ambiguous.
First Date
On a fist date we could go on a flight to see the downtown Fort Worth area lights at night. Then we could go to dinner and get to know one another. If you have something better to do. I am game!
Now that's creative! I don't like the "If you have something better to do", sounds like you're not sure your suggestion doesn't already rocks.
Suggestion: ...get to know one another. If she wanted to do something different, I'm game!
Overall, a good profile. Kill the friggin' title. I hate it. Get some pics of your face! Good luck! | |
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Posted: 12/5/2005 6:22:58 AM | | Ok Cute Chica, you really ARE a catch, Man, but I am sure I am not the type of Man to have the privledge of being on your stringer...heh heh. (OK, have I kissed up enough?) Now for da reason I am bustin into your realm. Take a look at my profile and let me know, Please! First time doin the profile thingy, not getting much action. However, the one response I did get is the only one I want if she goes for my stringer!!!!!!!!!!!!!..............ty | |
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Posted: 12/5/2005 9:14:27 AM | Alright...make me cry. It's always good to have a second...well er third opinion.
I'm always up for getting my teeth kicked in. | |
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