| O-T-B
Posted: 12/18/2005 4:44:31 AM | | I'll regret this! | |
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| squarepeg
Posted: 12/18/2005 5:00:51 AM | Kikilynn'
Thanks for your review. I'll use your advice when I get to the point that I want to start dating again. I just don't feel like it right now. Here's a personal insight: Don't do reveiws when you're drunk or hung over, you just sound mean! You're much more helpful when all your senses are intact.
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| Curious about my profile
Posted: 12/18/2005 8:19:26 AM | take a look and let me know about the wording. The reason for no picture is included in the profile.
thanks and be as brutally honest as you want. | |
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| MMMBaby!
Posted: 12/18/2005 6:36:21 PM | "SHADDUP 'n' play yer guitar!"
Okay, you know that this is fundamentally poor English, right? And you're trying to sound like a twit? Whatever, you're the one trying to get a date, not me.
Picture: Deer cought in the headlights. That's what you look like.
Interests: I really don't think this is an area to discuss your regrets. Get rid of "would like to try archery" and go freckin try archery. Don't sit around b*tching about it!
So, you're 48 and still smokin' weed, eh? Good luck with that.
First grammar lesson of grade 1:
The following types of punctuation are used at the end of a sentence: period, exclamation mark and question mark. After these types of puntuation, the following word begins with a capital letter because it is the start of a new sentence.
For example: Kikilynn likes to learn. She is in university. Isn't that great? She doesn't do drugs, because smart kids don't do drugs! (Not even if her peers call it "herb".)
Your profile is too chatty. Try just writing, "I enjoy playing guitar, cooking, spicey foods, going for walks on the beach... I love chili, and someday I'd love to organize a chili cook off in Vancouver."
"I LOVE blackforest cake" does not belong in your First date section.
Let me also mention that you sound like a depressed alcoholic.
I have been at the beach at 3:30 am in the winter playing my electric guitar to work off some serious blues more than once. I have played at the incoming thunderstorm with all that I was worth. + Do you drink?Often (>3 times/week)
What you need to do, is reduce the amount of baggage that you portray in your profile. Read some of my other reviews. No more than a thin breifcase! Got it?
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| Re: squarepeg
Posted: 12/18/2005 6:40:23 PM |
Here's a personal insight: Don't do reveiws when you're drunk or hung over, you just sound mean!
If I don't do reviews when I'm drunk or hungover, they won't get done. I'm finished exams, and I'm on Christmas holidays.
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| MMMBaby!
Posted: 12/18/2005 6:50:27 PM | | Thanks anyways. Perspective is everything, but your input is appreciated! | |
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| 100percentgeek
Posted: 12/18/2005 6:58:09 PM | Welcome to the fugly list!
(I don't care why there's no picture on your profile... if there's no picture, you automatically get defaulted to the fugly list.)
Oh my..this is so hard. I won't say I'm a nice guy because I'm sure Charles Manson would put the same thing. So...I'm a dad of 3 boys - all pretty much grown. I am in the process of working through the divorce and all of the associated legal stuff. The relationship is OVER, DONE, GONE and now I am stuck working through the mess. Life goes on.
#1 Do not complain about how hard it is.
#2 Do not, under any circumstance, compare yourself to a serial killer.
#3 Do not demonstrate baggage. No more than a thin breif case. We already know you have baggage, you told us that you're separated in your general info. No explanation required.
Delete that entire paragraph, NOW!
As we talk, I will gladly send a picture at first contact. I have not posted one out of respect for the STBX. I do not love nor hate her, but as we were married a very long time, she deserves the respect that that relationship affords her. She is the mother of my children and I will never speak badly of her. She raised three boys under unbelievable circumstances and she did an excellant job. We did not work out and that is tragic but life goes on. I will explain that situation if you are interested.
Post a picture, and delete this paragraph. Again, it demonstrates baggage. And no, I don't want you to explain the situation.
(P.S. Posting a picture is not disrespectful to your ex. Its called moving on. Its more disrespectful to not move on and to lie over her as a dark cloud for the rest of her life. And trust me, if you don't move on, that's what you are doing!)
General stuff:
I have lost 25 lbs in the last 6 mos and am still working on losing more. I'm not slender but I'm far from fat!
OK. That kind of lays it out I guess. If anything here stikes your fancy, click the message button. If you don't have a picture posted, please be prepared to provide one relativly quickly.
Hope I don't sound boring or dull - I just thought I should get my cards on the table.!
Good luck fishing. I expect my bait to rot before I succeed at this!!!
I'm proud of you for losing the weight, but I wouldn't put this here. Save it as something to whew the lady when you get the date. I know that I can click the bottom of the page to e-mail you if I want to. I'm not an idiot. Unless you want to date idiots who need directions to e-mail you, this is not necessary. How can you even comment about not having a picture??? Remove the negative statements as well... ie. sounding dull and rotting bait.
Or don't, and don't get a date anytime this millenium. | |
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| At_Fates_Gate
Posted: 12/18/2005 7:05:17 PM | See what you think of mine  | |
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| lococoyote
Posted: 12/18/2005 7:27:15 PM | Hi Brian. Welcome to POF. Sorry if this isn't going to be the welcome letter you were hoping for.
"lightbulb looking for a socket" = Looking to put my lightbulb in your socket = I'm only here to get laid. (Which sharpely contrasts the looking for Long-term which comes a bit later.)
Pictures: They are okay. And that's being nice. You need a clear headshot as your first picture, not a picture of your neck. Remember, this is what everyone will see first.
Interests: Go through this list with a fine tooth comb and reduce it to no more than 12 items. For each one ask yourself, "is this an interest that a chick would want me to be interested in?" If the answer is no, eliminate it.
*Remove all LOL's.
*Always capitalize the personal pronoun, I.
*Try not to sound "chatty" in your profile. It makes you sound like a girl.
But don't count on hearing all about that from me in person. I'll probably be too busy getting rowdy, acting like a dumbass, and cracking jokes on you like you're my little sister.
I need my space in a relationship, and I don't like nagging. I might appear distant; maybe not seem so thrilled to hear from you. I'm not a very emotional person, and I won't come home to you whining or ****ing about a bad day. Maybe I won't seem very enthusiastic about hearing from you, but somewhere down there I really do appreciate getting an occasional call from you or letting me know you care.
I'm looking for a woman who I can see a few times a week; a girl without a passive personality. I need a girl with a spark, with a fire inside her. She needs to have goals, passion, and an intense motivation in her life. I love a brunette, and piercings or tattoos can be attractive. But really the outside is only what first draws me to a woman; its that inner drive she's got thats going to get me coming back for more.
Basically all of this makes you sound fairly immature... but you are 18!
You will learn (someday) that girls are needy in a relationship. We don't want a guy for long term who acts like a heartless, emotionless, absentee being. We crave emotion, enthusiasm, acceptance and unconditional love from our guy. You've just come right out and said that you're not willing to provide any of these things. So good luck finding a girl with a spunky, non-passive personality who doesn't want to feel loved by you. | |
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| Kev2005a
Posted: 12/18/2005 7:38:31 PM | Headline: Very cliche. Try to come up with something that's catchy which captures part of you or your personality.
Profession: Excellent move writting out IT. Honestly, it makes you sound a million times more important. That was extremely smart! 
Otherwise, your profile sounds really sweet and very sincere.
I like it. You should be able to catch a really nice girl (if that kind of girl uses internet dating....)
Anyway, if I were ready to settle down, and be a nice girl, that's exactly the profile I'd respond to.
In the meantime, while you're still single, I'd recommend drinking protein shakes and pumping iron. Girls like a guy with muscle, who looks like he could protect them.
Great work, Kev! | |
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| Kev2005a
Posted: 12/18/2005 7:48:09 PM | | Thanks for the comments kiki, it's helpful to know I'm not doing anything majorly wrong... I was expecting something much more brutal. | |
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| blueeyesshinydragon
Posted: 12/18/2005 7:49:51 PM | Punishment you want, punishment you shall get.
Blueeyesshinydragon: Blue Eyes Shiny Dragon
Are you calling me an idiot??? You think I can't read?? Don't repeat your name as your headline. Totally LAME-O!
Pictures: At least have the picture of you in the black tank as your main photo. You look like a f*ckin goon with your tongue hanging out. And the other picture is too blurry.
Are you seriously hoping to pick up when you're looking for an "Other relationship"?? Good luck with that. At least lie and say you want long-term or something. Chicks dig that.
Profession: If you're going to capitalize the word Technology, you should capitalize the word Information.
First grammar lesson of grade 1:
The following types of punctuation are used at the end of a sentence: period, exclamation mark and question mark. After these types of puntuation, the following word begins with a capital letter because it is the start of a new sentence.
Otherwise, your profile is okay. Consider writing what you're looking for. | |
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| I got off EASY!!
Posted: 12/18/2005 8:04:00 PM | After reading my profile review I was p*ssed for a second, but that's how one feels when they read another's perspective on something that is personal. I actually think I got off easy compared to some reviews I have read here! Thanks, kikilynn.
ps- I'm a DEAR in YOUR headlights! Hehe! | |
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| redrodnasoak
Posted: 12/18/2005 8:07:25 PM | There really isn't much here for me to review...
Pictures: Your first picture needs to be a nice clear headshot.
*Don't restate info in your about me section which is in the general info.
You sound like you don't have time for dating.
Consider having a decent paragraph describing yourself, and a paragraph about what you're looking for.
P.S If you can figure out what my headline means you get bonus points
Trust me, I'm not the one who needs bonus points here! | |
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| redrodnasoak
Posted: 12/18/2005 9:51:14 PM | Im pretty new at dating in general. I was thinking of switching up my profile.
There's always room for improvement, so lets have it. | |
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Joined: 12/16/2005
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| I got off EASY!!
Posted: 12/19/2005 5:46:04 AM |
ps- I'm a DEAR in YOUR headlights! Hehe!
Not quite! | |
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| At_Fates_Gate
Posted: 12/19/2005 6:29:27 AM | Listen, thanks for filing in the subject line for me.
Now, about your pictures. Three of these pictures don't belong here... meaning all of the non-human pictures! And the picture in the black suit should be your main picture.
Another thing I'd like to discuss with you is blonde tips. Blonde tips have been out for a good 5 years or so. Grow your hair out, and get yourself a nice ceasar cut, then gel your hair and take 8 new pictures, um kay?
Profession: Student & Part-Time Terrorist (hobby really)
Okay, listen, if you're here to get a date, then you don't list your profession as a terrorist. If you're not here to get a date, then why the f*ck are you pestering me to review your profile??
Your interests are borderline too many.
Your about me section is very choppy with all of those semi-colons... consider learning to write complete sentences. I know, I know, proper use of semi-colons isn't learned until like grade 11 or something, but if you can't use em, don't bother.
One last thing....
Why, why, why all of the emoticon thingys at the bottom of your profile??? Are you 5? | |
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| At_Fates_Gate
Posted: 12/19/2005 6:40:33 AM | | This sounds like fun. I wonder how bad I'll turn out??? But I am honest. Just like so many of the girls say they are looking for. | |
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