| | mysterious_pink_angelPage 14 of 15 (1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15) | Ok thanks for the review. I think it is the JPEG compression on the pictures. I will change it to PNG if it lets me upload PNG files. Or even GIF.
Yeah I will clear that up. I am Bi , searching for man or woman for friends or dating. Simple as that :p
But thanks :) | |
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| lldivall
Posted: 10/8/2006 7:58:05 AM | | Cheers griffintown..Will take on board whay you have said. | |
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| lldivall
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:19:02 AM | | ok give it up! lmao. slaughter me if you will, but kiss me when you're done! lol | |
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| robinkynd
Posted: 10/8/2006 3:27:50 PM | Do not write 'Not pursuing anything right now' and then go on to say 'Oh, but do contact me cause I am looking for mister right.
Be honest.
PARAGRAPHS.... use them, create them. They make reading less boring.
I am a liberal, caring, open-hearted, creative, educated, and passionate woman. I love nature, culture, and human kind. I am a kind person and especially loving, loyal, and attentive.
This may all be true... but kinda seems like you're spreading it a little thick.
Liberal
caring
open hearted
creative
educated
passionate
Kind
loving
loyal
attentive
Way too many positive adjectives describing you in three short sentences.
The picts are good except for fifth one, the perspective isn't helping.
Have fun! | |
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| robinkynd
Posted: 10/8/2006 4:07:20 PM | thanks! i made some adjustments. we'll see what happens.
all of those things are true....it's hard to write all the things you are and not seem like you're trying too hard. | |
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| horseluver504
Posted: 10/8/2006 5:48:13 PM | Maybe, just maybe, everything is a bit too straight forward.
The butterfly thing seems a little girlish, too much like you're waiting for prince charming....
This puts alot of pressure on men who may not want deal with your high expectations.
Down to earth is fine....but waiting for mister perfect doesn't seem totally down to earth.
The rest is fine although, I would drop the last pict.
Enjoy! | |
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| horseluver504
Posted: 10/8/2006 6:04:09 PM | | Thank you....I made the changes you suggested! | |
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| bumblebree
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:02:45 PM | Nice tongue!
The picts are fine, although the false frame thing is iffy.
The thing that bothered me the most about your profile was the lack of ponctuation. It just makes it hard to appreciate the profile. When reading, I had to stop and try to make sense of sentence. Sometimes all that was missing was a comma. When starting a sentence use capitals. Just run things through a spelling program.
The content is nice and honest, just correct the form.
Salut ma belle! | |
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| mel_519
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:19:32 PM | Seems like everything is going well for you. Congrats!
The picts are good. The only thing that kinda got on my nerves was the accumulation of really short sentences at the end of the first paragraph... It's like the Niagra falls of words.
Try to hold back the outpouring of words. A little over enthusiastic.
Fluent in French, magnifique!
Your profile is fun and dynamic, I'm sure you'll find what you're looking for.
Bonne chance et à bientôt. | |
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| mel_519
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:39:56 PM | lol niagra falls of words? ok ok ok. I fixed it, do u think it's better
put together? Reste moi le savoir, je pense que ces't un peu mieux.
Merci pour tes suggestions! | |
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| mel_519
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:45:02 PM | Salut Mélanie,
Oui, c'est mieux. Essaye peut-être de faire des paragraphes, ça serait encore mieux.
Bonne chance avec tes études et tes projets. | |
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| mel_519
Posted: 10/8/2006 8:53:38 PM | Ah oui ok bonne idee! C'est bien mieux, c'est plus facile a lire.
Merci encore pour ton aide! A prochaine  | |
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lauire
| | Joined: 8/22/2006
Msg: 341 | |
| mel_519
Posted: 10/9/2006 5:32:06 AM | | now mine?--woke up this morning with my head out--thanks | |
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| lauire
Posted: 10/9/2006 1:59:59 PM | Hi lauire,
First off, you need a better headshot. The one you have is really overexposed.
You seem a little addicted to the upper case, cut down on the caps. They're loud and somewhat irritating.
Way too much of this .......... and this -----. Punctuation isn't meant to be a decorative ornament.
Just clean up the about me section. The content is fine, it's just how you're trying to communicate the message that's overdone to the point of distraction.
Have fun! | |
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| sweetmischief
Posted: 10/9/2006 4:00:50 PM | The pict you have up is amusing (nice gams, by the way), you should get some more up.
In the about me section... consider using sentences when writing, makes the reading a little more interesting. Also try going beyond afew likes and dislikes. Take some time, and put some thought and effort into completing your profile. There's really not much to work with.
Good luck! | |
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| bluebutterflyprincess
Posted: 10/9/2006 4:10:15 PM | The picts are great and so is the about me section.
The first date though, Ughh...
Kinda of scary for a guy.
For first dates, there's a vast space of possibilites.
The song just doesn't hit the spot of male sensibilities.
Even if it's a U2 song.
Just suggest something a wee bit more down to earth
I'm sure you're be succesful in finding what you like... | |
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| You gals need a profile review?... Post it in this thread
Posted: 8/5/2007 4:46:04 PM | OK.. I love the advice you've given so far so....here's mine.
Is mine too lengthy or a boring read? I do want to shorten it some, but still expose some of my personality. How can I shorten it when the elements I've put in there are important to me?
By the way, I HATE those one or two liners for profiles that don't give you any indication that they would be interesting to get to know.
HELP! | |
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| You gals need a profile review?... Post it in this thread
Posted: 8/5/2007 4:55:21 PM | I'd like a review of my profile, please. I do know that I need more pics... it's just that I haven't had any taken other than the one I have up now (at least, not recently). I really dislike cameras, for some reason. 
The pic I have up -is- fairly recent, though. Like in the past year. | |
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