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Posted: 2/23/2006 8:00:23 AM | Goode -
Ok - A few things here:
First of all, typing in all CAPS is a big no-no. It's hard on the eyes and it's considered to be "shouting". Please re-type in lowercase and capitalize where necessary.
Next, please cut and paste your profile into Word or some other program with a spell-checker and correct all your spelling errors.. there are a lot of them. For example "freind" should be "friend", "deminish" should be "diminish". Spelling COUNTS! Your grammar needs a little work too.
Your pics are not great. Try having a friend take a couple of good clear shots of you SMILING and perhaps taking part in an activity that you enjoy... DJ'ing perhaps??
Just a little work and you should be all set to go!
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Posted: 2/23/2006 8:09:11 AM | Crimson -
Pretty good profile.. just a couple of small things:
I would take out this line:
Hows it going everyone? I'm doing just fine. So... You want to know a little bit about me eh? Where to start... well,
It's an unnecessary sentence.
You mention your sense of humour.. it's always nice to read a little example of that to demonstrate your funny side. Anecdotal, funny or interesting tidbits will make your profile stand out from the rest and show your unique personality.
Your pics are not the best. Pics are usually the first thing people look at before deciding whether to read or not. I would switch your main pic for the one showing your smiling face and perhaps add a couple more of you.
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:04:45 AM | JP -
Ouch!! That must have hurt!! LOL, is that the reason she is now an EXgf??
Much better and nice pic!! | |
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Posted: 2/23/2006 8:36:08 PM | | Oh please oh please! Help me fine tune mine! For some reason I'm not getting many replies! | |
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:19:03 PM | Avinash-
Wow.. you are very brave, venturing out into the online dating world so far from home! But I think you could add a bit more SPICE to your profile. It's pretty bland... Tell us why you came all the way from India to study at Princeton! What are you studying? You havent said much about the type of woman you are looking for.. what could she expect on a date with you? Be creative, let your personality shine through... be unique and make yourself stand out from the millions here!
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:27:21 PM | Well.. CandyAss, I'm stumped on this one! You are cute, young, single, well-spoken, funny and seem genuine! I don't know why they wouldn't be knocking down your door unless it's just a small market in Brantford! The only thing I can see that's missing is what you are looking for in a potential date.. what are some things you find attractive/appealing in a woman.
Other than that, all I can say is keep trying, be patient and I'm sure the right one will come along! | |
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:38:39 PM | Witty -
I'm an easy going, funny, nice guy. Maybe thats why I can't seem to meet my speacial someone. lol.
Please take that line out.. it's sounds sad and negative. That's NOT how you want to start out! The "poor me, I'm a nice guy but no-one wants me" lament is not what women want to hear. They would much rather you tell what makes you a funny, "witty" or nice guy. Give us some examples that demonstrate who you are.
I appreciate that you are a quiet, reserved person but you really need to rev this up a bit because there's not much there right now that's exciting or intriguing.
Give it another try and I'm sure you will be more successful.
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:46:09 PM | OK Foo-
Your profile is pretty good. But personally.. I never read poems or songs lyrics that people put in their profiles.. I think it's just a waste of space and when it takes up SO much space it tends to make me think that the person just couldn't be bothered to write more about themselves. Soo.. I would take that out.
Also, that pic of you having beer poured down your throat is NOT attractive or appealing at ALL. In fact I think that it may scare some women away. I would get rid of that too.
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Posted: 2/23/2006 9:53:50 PM | Pinko -
You are looking for someone with a "light-hearted sense of humour" but your description of yourself makes you sound very intense, serious and like someone who doesn't know how to relax, and laugh and enjoy yourself!
It's WAAAY too heavy on the politicizin' and not enough on the socializin'! How's THAT for a rhyme for ya! LOL
Lighten up a bit and tell us why you're fun to hang out with .. you ARE fun to hang out with..right??
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Posted: 2/24/2006 2:10:45 AM | Hi Lizbets,
I would love review of my profile. Any brutually honest comments would be awesome and most appreciated.
And by the way -- thanks for taking the time. Having someone who is good looking and articulate providing honest feedback is always extremely valuable.
--- brad | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 5:46:19 AM | Okay, as per your advice, I have made some slight adjustments to my profile... Let me know if this is better and if you would hang out with me  haha.. because you seem like good measuring stick for a potentially good catch!
PS. The rhyme was hot...lol | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:04:48 AM | Pinko - much better and more fun to read.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:54:21 AM | TodayIsTheBeginning -
Couple of "negative" things I think you should take out.
- I hate this part....
Yes, OK.. lots of people don't enjoy writing about themselves, but no need to say it.
- I do not tolerate abuse...
Change it something sounding a bit more positive as in "I believe in treating others with compassion and respect"
- If you're looking for headgames or money bye-bye....
Just delete this entire sentence... too many people say this in their profiles and it's really just a given.. NO-ONE wants someone like that! It just sounds bitter and negative.
Other than those points... do a spell check, you have a few spelling errors.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 10:00:28 AM | 16Hours -
Wow - GREAT profile! A nice read, funny, intelligent and unique. I like it!! I really can't see anything wrong with it. If I had to be picky, I would say again, as I have said to others, take out the reference to anything negative.. like "whirlwind burnouts, games" etc. I really dont think its necessary to state that.
All in all.. you could be the Poster Boy for how to write a great profiles!! | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 10:05:52 AM | Brad -
It's WAAAAAY too long! You have written some good stuff here, but there is a LOT of detail that you don't need to share right away. Save something to talk about on your first date!
For example.. all the detail about your kids, your music prefernces, your travel, etc. What you have written is all interesting and tells a lot about you. But I don't think many people are going to sit and read the WHOLE thing.... leave her wanting to know more, instead of telling your whole life story here!!
Also change your main pic to the one with you alone. The one you have now with your buddy is okay, but I don't think anyone should use a group shot as their main pic.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 10:13:07 AM | Rare Breed-
First of all.. get a pic of YOU alone. A lot of people look at the pic first and if it's not clear right away WHO you are in the pic, they just move right on. Your other pics make NO sense at all, what is with the pic of a warehouse or something? Get some more pics of YOU and take out the junk.
Second, your heading "nothing but trouble"... change that.. it's not exactly a good selling point is it??
Third, take out the reference to you being 25 but acting like a 12 year old. No woman wants a grown man who acts like a little boy.
Finally, saying you are stubborn, have a temper and an "I don't care attitude" isn't going to win you any fans either. You need to change THAT right away.
Say more about what you enjoy doing and your interests and what you are looking for in a woman.
Your profile needs some work if you want to be successful here!
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