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Posted: 2/24/2006 11:05:09 AM | | Hello and thank you for your tips.Two things i wont delete 1)i do not tolerate abuse and im letting the world know.2) Shallow women i dont care they are out there as much as men and i know it . im not here to impress all the women just her the one and when she reads my profile she will know.Thank you again and you can look at the changes again if you wish and have time. | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 11:09:15 AM | OK well.. you asked for input.
Yes, there are shallow people everywhere.. we all KNOW that.
One review... thats it.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 3:56:16 PM | Could you please take a look at mine also?
I would really appreciate you input
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Posted: 2/24/2006 4:21:24 PM | | I changed my profile some what. Couldn't think of anything witty to include though, thats more of spur of the moment part of my personality. | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:13:07 PM | Amy-
You're a cute Yorkshire lass with a cute profile. I dont see anything problem with what you have presented here. You're 20 yrs old, get out there girl and meet some people and have fun! | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:24:59 PM | Welcome To My World -
ummmm... What "world" is that anyway?? Some far off planet you are from?? That has to be the MOST bizarre profile I have read in a long time. WTF is all that about your Grandmother and your cousin Ray (whom you seem to have some strange obsession with) and the cottage and fishing and peasants???? And WHAT is an "MLT/Doffer"????
No pics and a bizarre, rambling story that really has no point. I don't even know where to start.. all I can say is sorry, you are beyond my help.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:30:17 PM | Ex Vike -
Pretty good but it's a little choppy and hard to read. I would try making full sentences, starting with capitals and ending with periods instead of all these............... in between every statement. Break it up into a couple of paragraphs with proper punctuation and lose the reference to "doesn't play games" It's an over-used and meaningless statement, who DOES want that??? (God I get tired of repeating this!)
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:37:10 PM | Bzyby27-
Wow! Finally! Someone who GETS it! If I had to post an example of a well-written, intelligent, snappy, interesting and GREAT profile.. I would pick yours! You convey your personality really well. You are concise, straight-forward and paint a clear picture of yourself and what you are looking for! Only thing I would say could be better would be to add a couple more pics of yourself to go along with that great image you have presented with your words.... Great job! | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:42:41 PM | 
I came in to this topic to ask for my profile and pictures to be rated, critiqued, and advised upon. I would like to take this space to submit my own profile and pictures to you, and request any ratings, advice, criticisms, or suggestions that you might have. Thanks in advance. Hope you like it.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:48:57 PM | Last Romeo -
It's not bad it's just TOOOOO long! Shorten it a LOT. Take out the lists of love, hate, goals, admire, etc. You can condense all these into general statements and save the detail for the first date! You want to have something to talk about when you meet right? So don't give it all away here... just write enough that makes her want to MEET you to learn more.
Personally I dont care for profiles with all the silly emoticons, they are distracting and unnecessary. I would delete those.
Your third pic should be your main pic as it's brighter and much better than the others. Also, I think it's against the rules to post your email address, so you might want to take that out.
Hope that helps!
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Posted: 2/24/2006 8:58:43 PM | LeoWyatt-
Hmmmm, well I see problems here for sure.
1) You are unemployed (but at least you are honest about it so thats a plus I suppose)
2) You are looking for an Intimate Encounter but you talk about holding hands and kissing in public and you want children.. which I don't think exactly matches with what you are looking for.
3) You want someone who shares your interests which are listed as fishing and reading and listening to the rain... not exactly a big range there huh?
4) Are you planning to have this Intimate Encounter while on a fishing trip but with a few books to keep you occupied if the fish aren't biting and it's raining???
5) You can't spell.
I can't help you... it's just too much work, and it's not my job.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:10:13 PM | 
lol! Liz, your review of Leo's profile had me in stiches. lol!
I just have to add.... with all due respect to Leo...
Leo, "have a Pepsi or whatever" is not a great thing to do on a first date, man. I'm sorry, dude, but you should really take some time to put some more work into your profile. "Have a Pepsi, and let the sparks fly"... That had me laughing harder than Liz's post!
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:15:42 PM | FilmScorpio -
Wow- for someone who says he's an editor.. I would have thought you would have done some SERIOUS editing here! I hate to break it to you, but NO-ONE is going to sit and read through these lists, and lists and yet MORE endless lists!! Who cares???? Why all the detail about your heritage going back generations?? Again.... who cares??
It's ALL just LISTS!!! And it's BORING!! This, for example:
The greatest films are from the silent age, 30's, 40's, and 50's. The 60's had many good films, the 70's had a few less, and the 80's even less. The number of quality films made in each decade has been in steep decline since the 60's, and current movies these days are mostly all trash and crap.  
Come on guy!! You wrote ONE measly sentence about who you want to meet and the rest is just boring, mundane blathering about YOU and YOUR lists!!!
Please... for an supposed English Major and playwright/screenwriter SURELY you could do better than this YAWNFEST??
I give up.
P.S. I hope you find my review of your profile as amusing as you did my review of Leo's. Somehow I doubt it. | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:21:41 PM | LOL!
OK, OK, I get the point. How could I not? lol. And I can certainly take criticism. I will start editing it down, and taking out some things. The lists, though... in my defense, people like to see what your favorite films, shows, music, etc, are. That says a lot about a person. And I DID put the lists at the bottom, AFTER my description of myself. So after a gal reads my description, if she doesn't want to continue reading through the lists, she can stop reading. lol. I am going to edit my description now, but I really don't think the lists hurt any. As long as my self-description is good, and comes first on the top of the page, who cares if I put lists after it? | |
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:29:44 PM | Holy mother of god... IF she gets through your excruciatingly LOOOONG "LIST-LIKE" description of yourself, she won't be able to TAKE anymore! She'll be ASLEEP!
Having a list of 2 or 3 favourite movies or books is ok and gives enough of an idea of your tastes.. but YOU??? You list the entire library!! I'm telling you NO-ONE is going to read ALL THAT.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:37:46 PM | OK, Liz, I edited out some of the extraneous information from my description. Including my geneology, and my thoughts on the current state of cinema. lol. And yes, I did find your advice amusing. And helpful. I'm not the kind of person who can have their feelings hurt by words on a computer screen. lol. And I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review my profile. See what you think of it now, the edited version, and please give me any more pointers you may have, of material that could (or should) be removed or changed. Thanks again.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:40:33 PM | I did not list my entire library. lol. I have hundreds of books, and my DVD collection collection is currently at around 500 titles. So you see, I really did pick out just my few favorites.
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Posted: 2/24/2006 9:51:14 PM | oooh boy... LOL
Is this just perhaps your writing style?? Is that it?? You only write in LISTS?? Because EVERY freakin' sentence is a LIST! Favourite colours, favourite animals, favourite paranormal things, favourite foods, favourite drinks, favourite places to go, college literature topics, english tutoring functions, blah blah blah... do you see what I'm getting at here??? Is this what brilliant high IQ (and BTW who CARES what your IQ is??) college-educated English majors ALL sound like in America??? Maybe I'm just a clueless Canadian chick... but man, you are BORING!! Put a REAL sentence together fer gawd's sake!!
-now collapsing from sheer mental exhaustion-
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Posted: 2/24/2006 10:00:39 PM | JasmineKai-
You are very pretty, intelligent, obviously talented and seem to know exactly who you are. It would be nice to hear a bit about what you are looking for in a guy and what a first date with you might be like. What kinds of activities would you like to share with someone?
Your pics are great... although that one of you with the big sword might scare a few guys away!!
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