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Posted: 3/22/2006 10:36:50 AM | Brittany -
Your pics are great, you are a gorgeous woman! I don't think you will have any trouble getting attention just based on your pics alone.
However, your profile is a little thin. I'm not a guy so I could be way off base here, but if I WAS, I would read your "love to be pampered" as a bit of neediness, which could be a bit of a turnoff. Also the emphasis on "real intimacy, sensual man" may be read the wrong way as in .. this woman is just looking for sex. If that's what you ARE looking for then hey.. carry on, otherwise I would think about revising that. If not, then you need to flesh out the rest to put some emphasis on what it IS that you like to have fun doing? Where would you like to travel? Where have you travelled? What other activities keep you busy? What makes you laugh? What kind of man are you looking for (other than sensual)??
Your first (dream) date is a bit over the top with the romance thing and may scare a guy off or put too much pressure on him to be sweeping you off your feet from the time you open the door! Tone it down a bit and come up with an idea for an activity that will generate conversation and fun. Show your creativity here.
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Posted: 3/22/2006 10:45:12 AM | Matt-e
Ok - now to you. Your profile is actually not bad. It reflects your interests and age without you sounding like a total doofus! I think you might want to delete that line about you sometimes being a total nutcase.. that might scare some away.. unless you can perhaps tell what you mean by that? Are you a scary nutcase or just a goofy practical joker??
I really like that you do volunteer work with kids.. THAT is a big  in my book, and a lot of other women's books I'm sure. It says a lot about the type of person you are.
Perhaps expand a bit on what you are looking for and maybe add one or two more good pics.
You're a tall, good looking kid and it sounds like you've pretty much got your act together... you don't need a lot of help!
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Posted: 3/22/2006 10:48:11 AM | Hey there,
Been on the site for a little while now and think that I have hit a wall in terms of my profile. I amnot getting responses to my ad and I have a few ideas on why this is but thought I would seek out a second opinion. I will freely admit that when you read my profile you will see that there is a lot there, maybe too much to absorb at one time. I won't write too much here, but will let you tell me what you think I should add/change regarding my profile.
Thanks
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Posted: 3/22/2006 11:06:06 AM | Yeah, I had said something else, and just deleted it. I couldn't leave it blank. *shrugs* whatever.
And thanks for the advice! | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 11:17:57 AM | MesaShyGuy -
You are making some common mistakes here.
First, you don't need to tell us your age, height, hair colour in your profile... it's already there in the top part of your description. It's not necessary to repeat it! Also... take this OUT:
I hate writing these things because if you write too much people won't read it all and if you write to little there is no basis by which to get to know someone so in the hopes of actually meeting someone I shall just be open and honest. It's a waste of space, pointless and it is NEGATIVE.
Which brings me to the OVERALL TONE of your profile.... a BIG DOWNER!!!
- you talk about failures and make your whole life sound like one!
- you talk about bad times
- you talk about the past and your failures AGAIN
- you talk about not smoking or drinking (which AGAIN.. you have told us already in the upper part of your profile, so why repeat it here?). And there is no need to mention your father's DEATH!
- you talk about your divorce, more failure, the meaningless things in life, blah blah blah...
It's SAD!! And your pic makes you LOOK sad!! Can't you tell us about some happy things? what do you like to do for FUN.. ya know... F-U-N?? What makes you laugh? What activities bring you happiness and what would you like to share with someone? What kind of woman are you looking for? You mention you won't give up on your "aspirations".. well, what ARE they??
Sheesh!!! Guy!!!... I think you've got WAY too much baggage (a steamer trunk actually) and personally I would not even think about contacting you. I think you might want to take some time out from dating until you've got yourself out from under this big black cloud!
This is just how your profile comes across to ME. If I've got you all wrong, then I apologize, but I think you need to seriously start over... from a "happy place"!
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Posted: 3/22/2006 11:45:21 AM | Hey lizbets
ok I am new here could use some input about my profile
ty for checking it out  | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 12:56:19 PM | Marggorel -
Ummmm, what am I supposed to review? There is NOTHING here! Your "about me" is ONE SENTENCE! You indicate that you smoke and drink OFTEN... not exactly a great selling point!
You want me to make an effort reviewing a profile YOU have made absolutely NO effort in creating??? Ummmmm... NO!!! 
NEXT!!!!! | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 1:02:32 PM | | woohooo do me next do me next... umm, wait a sec.. thats not sounding the way its supposed to.. LOL | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 2:02:36 PM | Riff-Raff -
You are a party guy.. that's what I get from your profile. That and you like the platypus for some strange reason.
You have spelling and grammar errors and it's hard to read because it just rambles on with no sort of logical flow. It jumps all over the place. Try putting your thoughts into logical order and creating paragraphs. Separate the paragraphs with spaces so it's easier to read.
There's also a bit too much silliness and meaningless blathering like:
unless however, you're a lunatic stalker type that wants to chop me up into pieces in order to fertilize the garden, then i'm sorry, we can't date, nor can we be friends... ok, maybe i am shallow.. dammit! I never thought that I would be prejudice against anyone.. I'm sorry to all those psycho stalker types that I just offended. It's not funny.. it's just plain annoying and makes me want to slap you!
Your pics are good, but too many hats!
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Posted: 3/22/2006 2:21:36 PM | lizbets,
Could you take a look at mine. I ran the gauntlet a few days ago, made some changes, but could probably use another opinion.
Thanks in advance,
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Posted: 3/22/2006 5:01:12 PM | Martin -
Overall a good profile although I think it could be shortened up a bit - it reads like an autobiography! Your second long paragraph comes across as a wee bit negative. But other than that it's well-written and interesting. You are clear about who you are and what you want. Good luck! | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 5:23:05 PM | lizbets,
Thanks for the input. I'll certainly look at that second paragraph with a critical eye. I 'fleshed out' the about me section because I thought it originally was too short. I'll definately look to trim excess verbage.
Thanks you again for your help,
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Posted: 3/22/2006 7:05:04 PM | Hi lizbets,
Thanks for getting on my case, I needed that!!
Please review me again and see if I passed the test,
Thanks, Steve | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 8:26:35 PM | BrzDragon -
First things first... do a spell and grammar check.. you have mistakes there.
"I think dating is the start to a long term relationSHIP". Maybe it is - maybe it isn't, but I dont think you want to be pushing that too hard on all your dates! calm down and go with the flow... no pressure on a date!
Remove the lame old reference to mind games... 
Talk a bit about the kind of woman you are interested in meeting.
It could be better with a little more effort... good luck. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 8:30:55 PM | | Wow, I never had my profiled reviewed by a woman.. Sweet... Please when u find the time, please review mine? | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 8:39:07 PM | Angelmt -
OK then hmmmmm.... here's what I see:
- You are unemployed
- You drink and smoke a lot
- You are going through a divorce but have already jumped into a relationship which "means a lot to you but you are slowing down a bit"
- You are not sure "where you are headed with this new relationship" so you are now out here looking for yet ANOTHER relationship because to quote you... you are "keeping your options open".
You are one of those women who cant handle being alone. You have ISSUES and you need to get them straightened out before you have a STRING of broken relationships and you are wondering why you can't find a good man!! Look at yourself, and get yourself figured out BEFORE you go out looking for yet another man.
How about putting all the dating aside for a while while you just work on getting your career going and taking care of YOU??
Anyway, all of that is not a profile review.. if thats what you MUST have then.. your profile sucks.. and any guy who comes across it and contacts you will most likely have just a quick one-nighter in mind and then he's movin' on. I mean PLEASE.. you are unemployed, still technically married, AND you already HAVE a guy! What more would he expect?
You've stuff to deal with... a profile on a dating site is the least of your worries. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 8:47:00 PM | Skahasurfer -
OK - your pics are BAD... and your descriptions of your pics is worse. Get some BETTER pics that don't require a detailed description of each!
Remove ALL of the following:
I don't think anyone reads these,
So I,m just gonna change this part about every week.
I can't wait to go camping, Still to cold for this guy right now.
Update:I stand corrected ladies you definitely read these.
Heard about this site decided to check it out.
It,s been.... interesting.
Picture 1 : That's myself in the front of the boat, behind me is the top of my nieces head,behind her my brother in law.This was my favorite day.
Picture 2 : Is me
Picture 3 : That's my grumpy face
Picture 4 : picture of my camera through a waterfall
Picture 5 : That's me, bad picture but I liked the colors .
I'll add more each week all summer.
I don't know much else to put right now .I was thinking about an honest section here, Something like:
Honestly.....
On second thought..
Nah probably not a good idea,......
I'm perfect.. ..
honest.
Go with what's left, spell check and tidy it up and it's much better. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 8:53:51 PM | Atoneman-
Very nice... very very GOOD profile.. a couple of little spelling errors, but in general GREAT JOB!
Guys could take pointers from you... you describe yourself, what you're about, what you like and what's important to you. You also are very clear on the type of woman you are looking for.
The only little change I would make ... I think I would use your 4th pic as your main one.. a smiling face always looks more approachable!
Like I said.. good job! | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 9:00:42 PM | | Hey Liz you got time for another review??? I know I need pics, it'll be a couple of days. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 9:16:20 PM | Dolomite -
Nice profile, good job. But please delete the reference to it not being important that you DON'T have a pic here. Ummm.. YES actually, if you want success here, you NEED pics..of YOU, NOT your dogs, your cars, your bikes, your favourite cartoon character or anything else.
The sooner you get pics up of yourself, the sooner you will be getting some bites!
Post those pics!
Good luck. | |
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