Matt-e
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Joined: 3/5/2006
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Posted: 3/22/2006 9:39:19 PM | | That reference about the picture was originally after the line: "I like to spend most of my life Joking around" . I rewrote it a couple of times and put that line in the wrong place. I'ts gone now and thankyou for the advice. Pics should be coming soon | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 9:48:22 PM | | Liz, thanks for the review. Took your advice and changed my pic. Looking for the grammer mistake, hmmm can you help? I don't see it, or I'm over reading it... | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 9:54:28 PM | Atoneman - nothing major...
Billiards (with an "i")
outgoing (one word)
a little (two words)
wants (no apostrophe)
Hey.. I'm just a real stickler for spelling and grammar, I'm sure there are people who really don't care.
Your profile is very good. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 10:09:32 PM | Lineguy -
Hmmm, let's see here....
- no pic
- you do drugs
- Marital Status "prefer not to say"
- looking for "other Relationship"
- looking for fun times with good/bad "people"
- mail settings - "must not be looking for dating"
Sorry - I dont give cheaters TIPS on how to cheat better.
Go home to your wife and don't bother me again. | |
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Posted: 3/22/2006 10:41:57 PM | Canadian Boy -
Please cut and paste your profile into Word or another program that will do a SPELL CHECK! Then use CAPITAL letters to begin your sentences and periods to end them! Put a space BETWEEN sentences otherwise they all just run together and are really hard to read. Capitalize the personal pronoun "I" NOT "i".
Your first date idea is too much... first its TOO MANY CAPITAL LETTERS WHICH INDICATES YOU ARE YELLING!!! TURN CAPS OFF!! Next, it's TOO MANY people along on your date! This is supposed to be where you get to know the woman, not the time to introduce her to all of your friends and neighbours! A first date is just the two of you... you will likely scare her away with all these other people checking her out on your first date! Change that idea right away!!
Also, you need more pics. with all these activities you are into surely you have one or two showing you out there having fun!
Your profile is messy and not very well thought out, but with a little work you should have better luck. | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 9:10:21 AM | Man of Integrity -
Ok, normally I only do ONE review per customer, there are LOTS of other good people here who will give you a review if you must have more. However, since you asked so nicely...
Your profile is much improved.. however you still have a few minor spelling/grammar errors:
valve = value
guitar lesson’s = guitar lessons
allot = a lot
mountain’s = mountains
level’s = levels
Hay! = Hey! (unless you are referring to what horses eat)
Fix those up and you're good to go.
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Posted: 3/23/2006 10:07:00 AM | GoofBall -
Do I think anyone would reply to your profile???? You want the short answer to your question? NO!! Unless they are actually looking to adopt a 7 year old boy in a 30 year-old man's body!!
If you are looking to stay single for the rest of your life, just leave your profile exactly as it is. There is just so much WRONG here I don't know where to start.
Are you still reading this? If so I’m wondering why… This is the ONLY intelligent thing in your profile and I'm asking myself the same question actually.
You think it's funny??? well, ok then... as long as you are getting a chuckle out of it. I didn't. It's dumb, boring, childish and sad.
Actually I think you are EXACTLY like a bratty little 7 year old child looking for attention and no matter what I might tell you here in the way of improvements (which would basically be a COMPLETE RE-WRITE).. you have NO intention of changing anything.
Now go cry to your mommy....
NEXT!!!! | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 10:17:36 AM | ..................... *SIGH* This is getting tiresome now..............
Darvik... once again, a "nothing" profile. What am I to review exactly?? THREE sentences?
What do you want me to do??? Write the whole DAMN thing for you because you are too lazy to do it yourself???
You are living in Taiwan, learning a new language, travelling... and THREE sentences is all you can come up with??
I am going to bail on you here with the excuse that getting lazy-a$$ guys dates in Taiwan is beyond my limited expertise.
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Posted: 3/23/2006 11:10:33 AM | | Wow... you could of just said that I missed the mark... but that's ok. Wanna take another look? Please? I basically changed it because of you. It would be apreciated. | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 11:57:17 AM | Jaymthesexy -
oh boy... it's bad.. it's really bad.
You are "exiting"??? HUH?? Exiting what?? This world? This website?? What??? Do you mean EXCITING?? Because that would make more sense. The spelling and grammar abominations in your profile ARE somewhat EXCITING and unpredictable (ok - so I don't get out much).
You think social norms don't matter??? Like what?? You mean like BATHING?? Or eating with utensils??? HUH???
Your "about Me" section ENDS with the word "and".... WTF?? and??? and WHAT???
Oh my, I just can't do this.. my head hurts... it's too much work, and the pay is lousy. | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 11:57:19 AM | Hi Lizbets
You sure are a busy woman with this generous task you have undertaken. If you have some time I would love to hear your opinion on my profile.
Thanks in advance.
zig. | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 12:01:54 PM | Galaxieguy -
Your profile must be hidden.. because I can't open it.
I am about ready to close shop here, so if you want a review.. times a 'wastin... | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 12:12:05 PM | Nicks24-
Stiff and wooden? hmmmmm... ok, *ahem* .... on to the review..
It is BORING Nick. Definitely needs some SPICE!! Come on.. you are a young good-looking guy. And there are LOTS of young good-looking guys out there so the competition is fierce. You have to do a way better job of selling yourself! You dont need to tell us your age, height, build.. it's already THERE in the upper part of your description!!
Yes.. you need better pics... and you need to tell us more about what you like to do.. offer some little anecdotes about your life... give us a bit of your personality here because it's definitely NOT coming through at all, unless you just don't have one??
Check out the threads on "Writing a Good Profile" at the top of this forum.
I'm sure you can do better...
Good luck. | |
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Posted: 3/23/2006 12:21:20 PM | Ziggy -
It's pretty good. But a bit too many of (these). Try just re-working your sentences so you don't have to (add extra info) do that so much! Get it??
Also remove this sentence :
This is where I am supposed to tell the world about myself.... Ok, to start off Yes, we all KNOW.. this is why you are here! It's just unnecessary.
And remove this:
I can list more of what/who I aspire my perfect match to be but I bet I am soon to run out of room in this section. More unnecessary ramblings.
I personally don't like the reference to "dead cod lips".. I think that's a bit gross and a turn-off. Yuck.
Just a few little changes should help.
Good luck. | |
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