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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 102 | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 5:31:15 PM | Lohki, thanks for emasculating me, lol...Canuck...yuk.
Nerevar;
That was pretty much all you had to do to make it better, good stuff.
Russ:
You got mail. | |
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lohki
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Joined: 7/22/2005
Msg: 103 | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 5:59:28 PM | lol... WELL..
didn't mean to "read".. I was just mindin my own business..
*well, everyone else is doin it! | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 104 | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 8:10:23 PM | | garf, you sounded disappointed earlier that the review requests had quieted--comment on my edits if you have time. I rather dug your previous review. | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 106 | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 9:31:49 PM | hey garf im back....i changed what im looking for since my status changed.... EX"S lol gotta love em.....anyways i am looking forward to your constructive critisim.......review me plz...and hit me up for a chat! | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 108 | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 9:39:00 PM | SexyCrazyCool:
You've got great writing style, if you could harness it properly. Read my original post in this thread.
Lying in the arms of your beloved is still in your interests though...might want to change that, I dunno.
I love that pic! 
Good stuff, just refine it without changing the content, and you're set to go. (once again, read the OP)
Feel free to email for chat anytime, btw. | |
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Posted: 4/1/2006 10:04:49 PM | Hi Garf!
I have been reading your profile reviews with great interest and occasionally, great amusement! So would you be so kind as to look mine over? This is a new experience for me and I'm trying to learn from the profiles I've read so far, but it is hard to be completely objective about things you have written! Looking forward to any constructive suggestions you may have. :)
Thanks so much!
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 113 | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 11:13:54 AM | SexyCrazyCool...it's great now. You still have a list, whic I'm not big on...since girls writing lists tend to be catregorized with girls writing diaries with her future married name practiced all over the place and in the margins...kinda.
But good. 
greaywolf:
Your profile is a little long, and very dry. I know I sound contradictory of my OP...but there's a certain length that becomes too much. Read it over...streamline it a bit. Talk about the woman you're looking for as much as you talk about yourself, and leave out the mono...you can talk about that when you start conversing back and forth.
Your first date sends red flags all over the place.
No first date should be dinner and a movie...dinner is expensive, and there's no way to run if the date goes sour, without either looking like a fool, or spending money for something you thought was a waste of time. It'll just put you in a bad mood for days if the date turns out bad, that's all.
Movies...how are you going to get to know someone at a movie?
Or you could go back to your place and snuggle on the couch watching a movie together while she has her thumb on her cellphone that she preset earlier to 911 and a previously recording of herself screaming "My god he's touching me and won't stop! We're at 555 1st St West, his name is Paul, and he's Jewish!"...ok, that's never gonna happen, but you get the idea...bad choice, lol. She won't be comfortable.
First dates should include an activity that you both agree on, where some of these things exist:
* A lot of downtime, so you can chat.
* An atmosphere that has some music so you both have something to comment on, during uncomfortable moments.
* Public.
* Well lit.
* No sweat is involved.
* Physical energy is actually being used...motion creates emotion.
* Drinks or food available within a five minute walk.
* Easily accessible by both people.
* Agreed upon.
* No nudity.
* No dead animals.
* Other people doing similar activities.
Not all of these things, of course...but at least some of them.
One more thing...the pic with the funny face... Not a good pic for so many reasons, lol.
Here's a challenge for you:
1) Say the exact same message in your "About Me" section...using 20% less words.
2) Describe a first date that you would feel comfortable with; if it was a guy your sister was meeting for the first time, and you had to pick the venue without a chaperone or firearms being involved.
Do this; and I'll email you the award winning answer to your actual question. I've only had two emails unread/deleted since I joined here a year ago...hey waitasec...today's my PoF birthday! Holy crap! | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 114 | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 11:24:43 AM | Classy:
You should be helping people do this...not me, lol.
Other than possibly elaborating on your separation, which is uneccessary, since you're here for friends, and not dating...you have the most wonderfully organized profile on PoF.
It's short, honest and sincere. Easy to read, and tells a lot with only a few words.
Your pictures are easily understood by the decription you show in your profile, which fits into a very simple theme, that you have used to envelope your entire profile....including the first date.
The first date is something that can easily be seen as a date, or just two friends enjoying a memorable day together by doing some leisurely activities that are simple, yet fun...with all of the elements that I described in my last post, actually. (Pay attention Paul, lol)
The only thing that doesn't fit into your profile is the " " ...which can be misleading...(or is it?)
Regardless...any guy who meets you is gooing to walk away happy at the end of the day, whether a second date is planned or not.  | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 11:43:28 AM | Hmmmm.........I wouldn't mind being reviewed by a handsome gentleman like you!
But seriously......sure why not......constructive criticism is always needed. Thank you! | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 116 | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 11:52:25 AM | traditional woman:
Thanks, lol...here goes;
First off, I'd switch your main pic with the one that's leaning forward...and delete the Chippendale's. (I'd never email a woman with those guys in her pic, lol)
Prefer to say what your marital status is...you're blocking people from seeing your profile by using PNTS. If you're only here for email and chat, then it shouldn't matter who you're married to, or divorced from...right?
For someone looking fort "talk and email" it's pretty good. Even with the excerpt from the Women's International League for Peace and Freedom, as the "About Me"...you shouldn't get too many "Intimate" offers with that in place, lol.
Not bad...I wouldn't mess with it too much, aside from mayble elaborating on some subjects that you'd like to chat about, in your interests. (Use one-word interests, and you'll get more matches)
Good luck with finding lots of chatty people! | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 11:56:55 AM | Garf,
Thanks for the wonderful review. I asked for a mans opinion because I was getting a lot of email asking me if I do sex on the first date. I thank you very much and knew you would be honest and sincere. I am glad that I am not giving any mixed messages.
As for the it was more for humour.
Thanks again
Classy | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 12:06:45 PM | Whoa Ho! That was quick! I was intending to remove the boys soon anyway........thank you for the review and I really appreciated it......now I can go back and look into my net and see what I caught ......
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 119 | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 12:06:49 PM | Classy:
I think the in the first date might have been a contributing factor for those emails, lol...
You're welcome.
T-Woman, you're also welcome, lol. | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 6:03:32 PM | GARF dont review my profile, i already know it is amazing, but just wanted to tell you, you rock!!!!!!!!! | |
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Posted: 4/4/2006 7:53:18 PM | Dear Garf --- Please advise me. Okay, so I already have a boyfriend and loads of people online that I like, but my email volume is dwindling and I crave that sweet rush that only popularity (or the illusion of it) brings to me.
Should I just copy your profile? | |
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Ciana5
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Joined: 5/20/2005
Msg: 124 | |
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Posted: 4/5/2006 2:50:09 PM | Garf YOU ROCK!!! I'm sure everyone here will agree with me that being helpful and funny at the same time is a rare gift! It has convinced me to go and tweak that profile of mine a little... I might ask for your advice once it's done! Ever thought about offering reviews in person???
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 125 | |
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Posted: 4/5/2006 4:07:38 PM | tabbella: Thanks a lot...keep posting in the forums!
mthr2kds: Good stuff, just double check some of the grammar and syntax, and it'll be good as gold!
msannthrope: You lost your pic posting privvies? *tsk*tsk* you should have listened to me before...lol.
I would elaborate on the Amoeba concept a bit.
Describe the mating ritual or something strange...and how you're really looking for someone to help you bear your next 12 million children...or whatever parameciums have.
Get nuts...go silly. Plagerises an encyclopedia or something...but spin it to a first person view.
Have fun with it.
Your interests could be bigger, to catch the attention of spammers and email addicts everywhere.
You'll have mail when I'm done here... | |
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