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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
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Posted: 4/5/2006 4:30:04 PM | prettyinpinkut:
I love your headline...DON'T EVER CHANGE IT!! 
If you're looking for a guy who isn't into games, then don't put it in your profile. Writing "...not into headgames..." is like shining a beacon to the players, that says, "I got played, and can be played again"...I'm not saying you can be played easy at all...but it will attract the vermin.
The pics...party chick looking for serious relationship...hmm. You may want to tone it down a bit, unless you want a guy who's looking for a summertime trophy. (I couldn't think of a way to make that not sound rude, I am so sorry.)
What are the rest of your interests?
And get Shopping out of there! A lot of guys look at that, and think Gold digger immediately...even though you obviously have a career of your own; you're dealing with men...we jump to conclusions. It's what we do.
Can you get a pic of yourself getting stupid on the guitar? That would turn some heads, in a way you may not be used to.
Your first date suggests to me that you kiss on the first date, and will probably go further...my man-brain says it's so. 
But it is really nice, and hopefully the right guy will think of it as romantic...which is what it's meant to be.
All in all, it's a good profile for someone looking to "Hang Out"...but for someone looking for serious dating, it's a little wild. I hate to say it, but you're going to attract a lot of twads.
Such is life for a slim blonde on PoF.
Read my OP for more hints, and take what you want from this post as well.
Good luck finding a nice guy who suits you, and what you're looking for. 
Ciana5: Hmmm.....you're marital status needs a fixin', and some new pics are in order, that involve a guy who doesn't look so...not like that guy who should be in the pics.
Karaoke needs to go in your interests.
Keep the first date blank! 
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 128 | |
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Posted: 4/5/2006 4:48:09 PM | homelessbum:
So you're the other guy with Breathing as an interest...aha!
PS...goes at the end of the "About Me" section. (Jokes have to make sense)
Only one space between segments. It makes it easier to read, and less scrolling.
The first sentence in your "About Me" should be moved to the top of "First Date", and then a space before your rant...which should be broken up a little, for easier reading.
Organize you list of rules according to length...that way it will give a more appealling flow, and also look pretty. You like looking pretty, don't you? 
Can you get a pic of yourself guarding the toilet paper? Maybe with a shotgun, with the toilet paper chained around your neck, while you're sitting on the crapper, wearing a wife-beater and dirty overalls...get the neighbourhood stray dog to lay down next to the toilet as well...the image is making me piss myself laughing already...
Hot Piece of Meat Looking For Lottery Winner! is also a good twist on your headline...
I can't wait to see what you can come up with, lol. | |
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Posted: 4/5/2006 5:01:59 PM | I am not just pretty, I am really hot too! You have some good points about reordering the first sentence and spacing. The list was intended to be in chronological order. I hadn’t considered the rhythm of reading it.
Your picture idea is brilliant! The only problem is that after last year’s Christmas bell ringing incident at the mall, I am no longer allowed the privilege of firearms.
Thanks so much for your review. I will be busy making some changes. | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 130 | |
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Posted: 4/6/2006 6:17:13 AM | Hi Garf..thank you for the review I understand what you are saying and I will reconsider some of those pics! thanks for the advice!
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 134 | |
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Posted: 4/6/2006 2:37:34 PM | Shadowall; Good stuff...love the pic, lol.
Homelessbum; You're f*cked up....good on you.
prettyinpinkut; The new pics are great! Playful and candid, I think the skateboard one is top-notch!
EDIT* Shadowall, it's good...but the pics are obviously something you should try to get improved. Other than that, nothing I can see that isn't ok...it's short and easy to read, which is good. | |
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Posted: 4/6/2006 9:11:56 PM | Dear Garf -- you are brilliant. I changed my profile entirely because of your suggestions. Please allow me to send you some sort of reward. My manatee is pregnant, so if you'd like a pup, you can have the pick of the litter.
My undying gratitude is yours,
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 139 | |
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Posted: 4/7/2006 3:10:49 PM | warmnfunny:
You've been here long enough to see a million profiles, so you already know the difference between good and bad ones....that being said:
Great pics, first off. Good quality, active and outdoors...shows you are really enjoying life. Women should flock to you based on your pics alone, for good reasons.
Elaborate on your choice of religion a bit. If for no other reason than it makes for good conversation.
Interests...elaborate. When you list interests that other people share; it higlights them in blue, and they become links. When you click on the links; they show all the people in your area that share those similar interests. This works for women in your area that are looking for something to do on a Saturday night...and they see your face in their list of people who share these interests.
Basically...it leads to easy dating possibilities.
Fix your bold print. It's dark and hard to read.
Your "about me", and "first date" sections are definitely classy bits of material. I wouldn't change a thing. Especially the best wishes remark at the end of the first part.
Basically, you already wrote a good profile. Just a little sparkle to make it shine, and you'll be posting in Testimonials by mid-summer.  | |
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 140 | |
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Ciana5
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Joined: 5/20/2005
Msg: 142 | |
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Posted: 4/7/2006 7:26:33 PM | | Garf can review mine if he wants. I am working on getting better pics since I'm not totally happy with all of them. | |
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Posted: 4/7/2006 7:35:59 PM | | Well,I guess I could use some advice, I cant post a picture because of the work I do and dont want my clients to see me if some of them happen to be browsing this site.it just would'nt be beneficial to my job(if I still had one)but by the same token I think this is a perfict way to meet people in the busy world in which we live today,Thanks | |
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bzyb27
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Joined: 12/21/2005
Msg: 145 | |
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Posted: 4/8/2006 4:59:37 PM | Ok.... Would like my turn.. I have had a couple of reviews.. and changed my profile.. some... So may I ask your opinion of my profile?
But I must add, cause I know you will probably comment on it.. My pictures.. I know they are not the best, they are current, (except for the glamor shot, which is two years old).... but best I could do for now, but working on getting better ones.. ok.. Thanks a bunch
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Garf
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Joined: 4/4/2005
Msg: 149 | |
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Posted: 4/8/2006 5:01:08 PM | Cusinalg:
Your grammar and punctuation are the first think I'd fix. In my OP, I mention that I wouldn't tell people to check these things, since I assume they would do this once they read the OP, before posting...but yours is in need of a lot of work, lol. Some of the sentences are very easy to take out of context, because of the grammar, and I had to do a double-take a few times because of it.
Those things you mention in your "AboutMe" section, as things you'd like to do; Put them in your "Interests" section.
You do focus too much on the fact that you're very tenative about dating, and somewhat inexperienced. This is a no-no for two reasons.
1. It spells baggage. (That's two profiles in a row today...lol)
2. It's a big red target for users and jerks.
Your first date isn't a first date, lmao...fix that!!
I know this sounds like a negative review, but it's not. You have a very easy profile to fix up if you take a few minutes to change a few simple things.
I'll review it after you revise it, as always is my method. | |
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bzyb27
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Joined: 12/21/2005
Msg: 150 | |
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