| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/28/2006 11:33:52 PM | Hey Spiral,
I would suggest cutting the zinging one-liners by at least half and omit the remarks about "dark skinned must be mexican" and "if you want to make fun of me." Kinda makes me wince.
Give a gal an idea of what you'd like to do - don't just be negative by detailing what you consider lame. If not on a first date, then what are the things you'd like to do for a fun time that are couple-appropriate? (Skydiving is not a couple thing, at least early on and I'm not sure what's going on in the photo in the dark!)
I'd also put up another face pic - Sure, you were having a good time with the tequila and the straw hat, but that should be a bonus pic, not the only one where a gal could see your features!
Good luck!
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 12:23:57 AM | Scarlet switches from using initially a third person's perspecitive, unto the first person in a matter of a few sentences. The grammar and punctuation is at best a C, and the spelling is absolutely atrocious. Also, a couple of the photographs suggest otherwise about her seemingly "non-existent" battle with narcotics. Perhaps you should just come on out with it and admit it. We all have our problems, Scarlet.
Just kidding. Um, your profile was quite nice, actually. Very nicely written. I couldn't find much wrong actually. You are obviously very well tailored in the written word. Good luck with the search for that Tropical Rainbow Fishie of all of our Dreams, Scarlet! It was a pleasure learning all about you. :)
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 7:51:02 AM | Seems like a neat thread, and a good way to get a "critique" on one's own profile, so I'll bite......
Chica's Profile is straight-ahead and in your face.
I like the mix of pics, from "cute" to "playful" to "bed-head". A good cross-section.
The vast array of interests gives fairly good insight into what she enjoys.
The self description, however, could have concentrated a bit more on it's purported intent, ie; description of self rather than detailing how longer descriptions often go unread.
A description can, after all, be fairly short and concise, but still give a fair amount of accurate information.
That's about the only thing I can criticize. Otherwise, Great job, Chica. | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 9:34:47 AM | HeavyThumb's profile has nothing "wrong" in it. Of course, "wrong" is very subjective. Whatever does not suit one's fancy becomes "wrong" for them.
HT comes across as a straight-shooter, matter-of-fact kind of man, which may lead some people to miscontrue as him being judgemental. Being judgemental, in my book, is a good thing. I think people ought to know where one stands and not be perceived as a willy-nilly, fiddle-in-the-middle kind of a person.
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 2:20:28 PM | i read her profile and first of all, there is not picture up front.
yeah you want to be judge by who you are and not by what you look like right?.............well if there is no picture, then guys (because we are visual) won't go for you as much.
and if you want your profile to be attractive, you have to make it more unique,.............more you.
so far i read a lot of generic, "my life is good, i don't need a guy, but i want it to compliment my great life" profile.
you might want to make it a little more interesting. | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 3:09:50 PM | I think I was just labeled as cheap. Is it that obvious?
joseluis - nice profile. I can see you are a good guy. Wish I could speak that many languages. Good job on breaking up your description into segments. Too many people just have one giant paragraph which makes it difficult to read. Only thing I see that I don't like is the pic with you holding your nose i think....are you about to sneeze or something?
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 3:48:28 PM | I am all those things. The funny is just the bonus.
Now your turn. "What I want is a nice looking woman." Change that to.... "What I want is a nice woman whom I'm attracted to." The rest of it is pretty basic but doesn't stand out from the rest of the crowd. What makes you unique? How will you be remembered?
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 8:33:26 PM | | Well, she is not available. If I were a guy, I would find that a deal-breaker. As a woman, I do not appreciate seeing another woman hanging onto a man that I find attractive, and who is marketing himself as looking for someone. | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 9:38:11 PM | "She" is a he, unless you meant 'me', and if that's the case, yes I AM available!
And thats my baby I am hanging onto!
Edit: John, thanks for the comments. I did find one thing wrong with your profile, but I can't email you and tell you what it is. | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 9:53:31 PM | you sound like a great lady, very sincere, you give out up-front deal braker information...............but the way you write it, it doesnt sound so deal breaker.
great profile, straight to the point,
looks like "here i am this is me, you get what you see"
i will rate you as a quality girl........hmhm, i mean woman | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 10:12:41 PM | | joseluis85, I found your profile very interesting and did not see anything that I found wrong with it. You seem to be very honest in your statements and are confident enough to state what you want when seeking a mate. I think it is awesome that you are multi-linguistic, a trait that not many have. | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 10:14:16 PM | you can't see my pics?
alright i will try to get some lighter ones.
and about the too young comment....................
you SAY you are 25, let me go back to first grade, mmmm 25-21 = 4 years
see i get a star now.
not too much difference.
anyway on to your profile, sounds like you are a ............too buisy law student from San Diego party school university, who needs to laugh.
anyway, how was Europe?
did you got to Russia?
what places did you visit?
did you learn any new languages? | |
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| What is wrong with the persons profile above you in this thread?
Posted: 9/29/2006 10:21:15 PM | to lovegodess,
i read your profile, and you have a great goal, teaching elementary kids is a career that needs patients, loving, understanding and a lot psychology.
you will have a great impact on the lives of many individuals, you WILL make a difference , and play a role on many peoples futures. big hug from me to you. ;)
anyway, on to critize your profile.
you need to be more clear on what you want, and you need to get rid of some of the the answers that sound like answers but are not really answers that people want to answer to.
other than those sort of sentences, your profile is fun, normal, and down to earth. | |
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