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| Let ME analyze your profile for you
Posted: 3/19/2005 3:50:49 PM | Ok I updated my profile but I think I am way off again, I think im profile chalenged lol.
If you have the time to have another look I would be so greatfull.
Thanks for your opinion hun.
Oh by the way I left one quote at the bottom cause I feal that It is somthing that I realy relate to, I am hopeing it will atract people who relate to it as well. | |
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| Let ME analyze your profile for you
Posted: 3/20/2005 4:43:04 PM | | I think Dancinpants took a leave of absence. I'm sure she wouldn't mind Miss Music filling her shoes, until the back log of requests is abated. I chose you cuz your profile is almost perfect in my opinion, (and you've got a history of intelligent posts). Are you up to the challenge? | |
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| Let ME analyze your profile for you
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:05:45 PM | Well, I definitely think we have to give Dancinpants a HUGE STANDING OVATION for the work she did.  I don't know how she did it. She must type 100 words a minute or something. And her advice was spot-on fantastic. I certainly thought her suggestion about photos improved my profile!
Anyhow, if you don't mind a substitute analyst, here goes.
"Due to higher than expected call volumes, we are experiencing longer than normal wait times. Please remain on the line. Your call will be answered in the order it was received. Your call is important to us."
[cue Muzak]
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| Goatsmell
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:18:20 PM | OK. I think the last analyzed profile was for Paradox as per her request in post #434 on page 18 of this thread. I am moving on to the next one after that and it is...
[drum roll please!]
“Goatsmell”
Oh dear.
[Envision me shaking my head and dropping it into my hands]
GOATSMELL???
Alright. He’s from Saskatoon, Saskatchewan. Thank goodness he didn’t decide to use “cow pattie”
Well, it’s clear you have a sense of humour! Thank you for DEMONSTRATING it instead of just telling us that you are a funny guy. Your Update #2 in the First Date section had me in stitches. While I think your pic of the goat is totally appropriate given your user name, I’d certainly add a mug shot.
Since I’m not on here looking for talk/e-mail, I have no idea how to evaluate your post on that basis. Based on what you’ve got, I suppose you’d get responses from people who want to kid around...which would be a good match for a goat! (oh dear. You’ve got me going here!)
Seriously though, is that what you’re looking for? If you have particular topics you like to talk about, be sure to give us a little teaser.
(Oh lordy! Why did THAT one have to be my first???!?) | |
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| Music-is-life
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:25:20 PM | Hello Music-is-life. This is Miss Music! Dancinpants took a much deserved holiday so I’m going to take a second peek at your profile. I’m not sure what she said in the first place because I’m not going to wade through over 400 posts to find it. So, this will be a totally fresh perspective.
I actually like your second and third pics better than the one you chose as your main pic. In fact, if you were smiling gently in your second pic, I think it would be practically perfect.
In general, great profile. You gave some information about yourself, described what you’re looking for, even spoke about some of your quirks. My only “complaint” is the phrase “People say that I am...” Personally, I’ve never liked that phrase. It doesn’t matter what other people think. What matters is what you truly are.
Minor point though. I liked it. Now get out there and start contacting more people!
Good luck! | |
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| Music-is-life
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:30:41 PM | | ***Gives Miss Music a standing ovation*** | |
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| Ashley57
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:35:00 PM | Hello Ashley57. Here's your analysis from the substitute analyst.
In general, you've got a lot of ideas...and it just needs some organization and tidy-up.
Your pics seem to be out of focus. Perhaps it’s time to get a semi-decent camera or to get your friends to take your pic. (If you've got a bunch of single friends, this can be quite a hillarious activity.)
Your profile seems a little disorganized. We don’t hear until the end that you’ve found someone interesting and are just looking for friendship now. I believe updates like that should be at the very beginning. Don’t make us invest so much time only to find out that you’re not really interested! That’s not considerate.
I think you should finish talking about yourself before telling us what kind of girl you’re looking for. Organize your thoughts a little instead of bouncing all over the place.
You start your profile saying that you’re in a weird spot in your life but not explaining further. That raises a LOT of questions. What kind of weird spot? How will that affect me? You’ve got to say something to address these questions.
You’ve got some typos – “wanna meet someone between 2o and 30”. And it’s spelt “A while”, not “aweile” As well, please capitalize your “I”. Copy-paste everything into a word processing program and do a spell-check please.
I’d also use the word “hate” very cautiously. It’s not a concept you want to remind us of, especially now!
I hope that helps.
Angela. | |
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| Ashley57
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:36:27 PM | | care to do mine next? | |
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| Let ME analyze your profile for you
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:45:31 PM | I have checked my profile a couple times and I am new to this. I only have one picture for now, but I am still working on it. If you have a monment check it out and let me know.
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| CBSB
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:52:00 PM | Hello CBSB. Here’s your analysis from the substitute analyst.
First, ask yourself if the kind of girl you want is the one who would be most attracted to your main pic. I realize you’re athletic and want to show that off...but it would be much more effective if:
1) we could see your face
2) you had cool athletic wear to finish off the sporty look
3) your pic was SQUARE so that the mini-version doesn’t make you look overweight.
Personally, I much prefer the picture of you with the baby. You look tidy, happy, and quite handsome. Oh wait, I was looking at the baby.
I really liked the three pics of you making that dive. It certainly gives us a glimpse into your personality.
The next thing that caught my attention is your opening line. You're missing punctuation. It should be "Whatever's clever" OR "Whatever is clever". And I'm not sure what you mean by that. Perhaps you can find another way to say what you want to say?
Why have you left “profession” blank? This raises some questions. Although, since you’re just looking for “hanging out”, I suppose that isn’t as important.
Looking at your profile, your inconsistent use of capitals was confusing. Either choose to capitalize all the character traits you mention or not. Don’t do this half-and-half business.
These sentences struck me the wrong way:
“Although I don't like to lose I'm not a sore loser. Physically gifted I usually win anyway.”
Me thinks he doth protest too much. The way it’s worded, you actually come out sounding like a sore loser who has a rather inflated opinion of his physical prowess. I think you are intending to reassure people that even though you pride yourself in being athletic and in doing well, you know that friendships are more important than winning. Think about what you really mean and try re-wording it. Focus on the positive.
Instead of saying “There is someone always worse off than you are” I think you mean “Things could always be worse”
Instead of “but I like people to learn my likes and dislikes as well”, maybe something more along the lines of “AND I find that the best conversations/relationships are when this is a two-way street” Something like that.
The whole section about the kind of women you are looking for was not written in English. Complete sentences please! (And do as I say, not as I do! ) Please give that section the same care and attention as you gave the sections about yourself. And I believe you would be better off focusing on what you WANT instead of what you wish to AVOID. One is positive. The other is negative and puts down women.
Finally, profiles are much more readable when you have a blank line in between paragraphs. It’s a simple change that encourages people to read on.
Anyhow, the pics are very good. It's the words that need a little work to meet the same standard.
Angela. | |
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| Logan 69
Posted: 3/20/2005 6:59:51 PM | Hello Logan 69.
The first thing that caught my attention were your pictures. I think you are doing yourself a grave disservice. First off, be aware of how light reflects off your glasses. We want to see your eyes, not a white glare! So, either take pics in the daytime where there is plenty of ambient light, or do not face the camera for those night shots. Second, I’d suggest experimenting with pictures taken at different angles. I’m sure you’ll find something that really shows off who you are. Finally, what’s with the flaming cigarette? At least that’s what I think it is. Maybe you should explain that in your profile.
Speaking of your profile, that’s got to be one of the briefest profiles in the world. We learn almost nothing about you. Ask yourself if this is enough to really peak someone’s interest. Personally, I think there is a LOT you could add to it. Just think of what you chat about with your friends on a daily basis. What movies do you like? What activities do you do with your friends? You want someone who will like you for who you are. Please tell us who you are!
Fill it out and then ask for another analysis.
Angela. | |
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| Yet another one...
Posted: 3/20/2005 7:09:39 PM | Hello Kingstwah.
Surely you can come up with a more creative tag-line than “How’s things”!!! Come on! Let loose and show your personality from the very start!
I definitely think you could use some more photos. And while I appreciate the “drama” of the one you have shown, how about a happier one? A smile goes a long way.
About “don't be put off by the more than three times a week drink thing, i rarely get smashed but i enjoy to watch a film with a can or two”
It starts off very negatively. How about just explaining what you mean by the drinking frequency without the commentary on whether or not this is acceptable. It’s up to the girl to decide whether or not a can or two with a film is ok.
However, do you mean to say that you watch more than three films a week? I think you’ll need to explain that one!
Watch your grammar. “There is many places“ is not correct. It should be “there ARE”
Instead of starting off negatively saying “I’m not a well traveled person” how about you just mention that you haven’t yet traveled to many places. Then segue smoothly into all the places you’d like to visit.
Finally, don’t tell us you’re not sure what you’re looking for in a woman. Either eliminate that completely or (better yet) FIGURE IT OUT! You have a much better chance of finding what you’re looking for if you know what you’re looking for!!!
Essentially, watch spelling, grammar, and framing things negatively. Just state facts and let the ladies decide if they like that or not.
Good luck.
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| Moon-rise
Posted: 3/20/2005 7:15:48 PM | Hello Hefty Moon.
OK. You definitely have a sense of humour and aren’t afraid to show it! Now how about using that sense of humour to describe the other aspects of your personality and your dreams and your expectations?
Now why would a guy who looks as good as you choose “prefer not to say” as your body type? That one definitely needs explanations. Or is this more of your humour? Please be aware that humour doesn’t always come across on the internet so be careful about accidentally misrepresenting yourself.
(I love the pic of the cat with it’s paws in the air, facing a gun!)
NOTE: You do not have a pic that shows up in the Forums. Have you neglected to select one of your pictures? Or is it a glitch in the system? Check it out. Would love to see your pic here.
In general, I wouldn’t recommend a pic of anyone with a person of the opposite sex...but since you’re just looking for friends, I suppose that’s ok. Still, consider explaining who she is in your profile.
Until you choose to reveal more than your wacky sense of humour, there’s really nothing more to say about your profile. If you are at a loss as to what to add, one starting place would be to expand on your dating interests.
Angela. | |
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| Surrender...sweetly. :)
Posted: 3/20/2005 7:28:21 PM | Hello Sweet Surrender.
Well, your picture is definitely sweet. How about adding a few more?
In your profile, you don’t want people assuming you’re a hippy. The easiest way to do this is to NOT use the word “hippy” and choose a word that DOES describe you.
As far as not getting disturbing messages, I’m afraid asking people to refrain isn’t all that effective. I’d suggest you describe the kind of person you’d like to hang-out with and what kinds of “hanging out activities” you’d like to do. This will winnow them out much faster. (I wonder if it's your User Name that is attracting the disturbing ones. "Surrender" isn't the most assertive word in the dictionary.)
I also think you could do more than list a bunch of qualities about yourself. Tell us about something you love. Tell us about something you’ve done. Give us a glimpse into your full personality instead of limiting contact to a bunch of adjectives.
Finally, pay a little attention to how you choose to start and finish your profile. You want an introduction that grabs our attention, intrigues us, makes us want to read further. You want a closing line that wraps everything up and hopefully encourages the kind of person YOU are interested in to contact you. Yes, it’s a tall order. And as Gershwin said “Nice work if you can get it. And if you get it, won’t you tell me how!”
The latter-half of your “First Date” section didn’t strike me all that well. It sounds a little condescending. I know you’re trying to be a little humourous but I think the electronic medium is undermining that. Try re-wording that.
Good luck! And I hope you don’t get any more weird messages!
Angela. | |
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| Pooped for tonight
Posted: 3/20/2005 7:29:41 PM | Well, I don't have nearly the stamina as Dancinpants. That's it for tonight.
Yibbidi-Yibbidi-Ttttttthats all folks.
(Will return tomorrow, starting with "Spoolin")
Oh, and Steve93437, thanks for the standing ovation and the comments on my postings! You sweetie!) | |
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| Pooped for tonight
Posted: 3/20/2005 8:19:05 PM | awwww... she called me sweetie 
P.S. I knew you were the right choice to sub for Dancinpants, and you proved yourself to be quite capable. Who would have thought her thread would be so popular... :-) | |
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| Let ME analyze your profile for you
Posted: 3/20/2005 10:43:57 PM | ashley57
good selection of pics
more interests
typos
right now im in a weird spot in my life
-- when you say weird spot, people assume the worst
-- you can say what type of relationship you're looking for without saying your life is weird at the moment
hit enter to separate the different topics a bit better
my worst flaws in a relationship are im needy of affection and i take aweile to warm up cause i am shy at first.
-- ACK this is no good
-- people aren't too interested in someone they know is going to be clingy off the bat
-- nothing wrong with saying you're a bit shy but the other info is too much
i am single i am not one of those **stards that go online to cheat, i hate cheaters.
-- kind of heavy and should go without saying
i have met somebody i am interested in so if someone wants to message me thats cool but i think just for friendship or for someone to chat with at least until i see where this goes.
-- no one wants to be the back up plan
-- maybe change your profile to say that you're looking for friends and activity partners.
i hate dating
-- negative | |
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