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Joined: 8/18/2006
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/29/2006 5:47:13 PM |
About four pages of profile reviews in, and I STILL don't know why people put down "Prefer Not To Say" under "Do you want children". Either you do, you don't, or you don't know.
Thank you for taking the time to review my profile. You know I didn't even realize I didn't answer that question. | |
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Posted: 8/29/2006 5:54:33 PM | I read a few pages of your reviews and I am impressed with your ability to "see" the other side of a persons makeup ... that is an Art unto itself .. Keep it up!
I just finished revamping my profile .. if you would take the time to review it .. I would be most appreciative ..
Thanks!
Curt | |
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Posted: 8/30/2006 5:57:37 AM |
About four pages of profile reviews in, and I STILL don't know why people put down "Prefer Not To Say" under "Do you want children". Either you do, you don't, or you don't know.
I obviously can't answer for everyone, but I'll tell you why I used that answer:
Saying yes implied that I was looking to have more children somewhere down the line (I'm not).
But saying no implied that I might not be willing to become a "step mom" or accept a man with kids (not true, I have kids, why would I exclude a dad?).
So I took the vague answer of "prefer not to say" and left it at that. | |
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| Things that make you uummm.
Posted: 8/30/2006 10:31:47 AM | Thank you for helping us all,
I take my place in line here for review.
I'm REALLY new | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/30/2006 10:44:46 PM | janomikiee7875,
Take a break for half a day and see what happens...sheesh!
The profile is fairly straightforward and tells us what we need to know, although it gets a little scattershot at times. There isn't a lot of flow and transition between sentences, such as when you arbitrarily dump "I'm 27 years old. I have three beautiful children" immediately after your reasons for getting back into the game. Transition and flow are something that makes for an easier reading experience. Each paragraph should be unified in theme somehow.
As well, the spelling, grammar, punctuation, and formatting needs a bit of work. "Senses" is mispelt, plus you have words capitalized in a very random manner, plus your paragraphs are a bit messy. Spaces are very inconsistent, etc.
-NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/30/2006 11:01:17 PM | free4now2,
Trust me -- I do not consider this a long profile. Actually, it's about the right length and it tells us just about everything we need to know. You have some level of photo variety although the monster truck, even though it's related to one of your interests, doesn't really add much to the profile.
It's got a bit of stream-of-consciousness feel, which would normally be a headache to read, but it sorta works for you, especially in the first paragraph.
If there's anything you can improve, it's the formatting. Consistent spacing and capitalizations would make this easier to read.
-NoMoreRegrets | |
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| Things that make you uummm.
Posted: 8/30/2006 11:16:00 PM | slamfm,
Well, I am a writer by trade (check out the latest issue of Fangoria, with the coverage of the horror film "Live Feed"...I wrote that), so I know how to convey things by showing rather than telling, I'm a stickler for grammar and spelling, and I understand the importance of flow. As to whether I "enjoy" doing profile reviews...well, we'll see after about the 8th page of reviews. :)
As to your profile...
It's not bad by any means. You have an interesting variety of photographs (although I thought you were naked while reading the newspaper at first), and you come across as someone who's educated, successful, and down to earth.
However, I prefer the whole show-don't-tell thing myself. You incorporate a lot of subjective buzzwords ("open-minded", "easy going"), which mean nothing if they aren't backed up.
A couple things about non-disclosure got me interested...the fact that you don't say what you do for a living could be useful for filtering out the gold-diggers, but it also raises a few questions at the same time. Even if you simply and vaguely indicate the field or industry, you would probably aleviate a lot of those questions. And while I realize that there may be reasons for "prefer not to say" under the "do you want children", you might be better off with a solid answer (yes/no/undecided).
Peace,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| Things that make you uummm.
Posted: 8/30/2006 11:22:59 PM | cozyflannelgirl,
A true Canadian girl who references Tim Horton's in her profile? Sounds like a winner to me!
I do acknowledge what you were saying before about not wanting any more of your own children, but would be open to meeting a single father. In that case, "Open/undecided" might be a better answer for you, or, at least qualify that within the text of your profile.
Otherwise, this profile is very sparse and doesn't give us a good clear picture of you, and I'm not just talking about the fact that you only have one photo. Just saying that you're "low-maintenance" doesn't really say much unless you back it up. Just for example, something to the effect of, "While I do appreciate the finer things in life, I'm just as happy with eating at home as opposed to going out at a fancy-shmancy restaurant." Something like that *shows* you're low-maintenance as opposed to *telling* us.
It needs more of that, which could go a long way to improving your profile.
Peace,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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Posted: 8/30/2006 11:38:43 PM | mustbeup2nogood,
First of all, lemme just say congratulations for following your dreams. Considering that most of us get bogged down and burnt out in our dayjobs and usually just stagnate, it's always nice to hear about someone who's actually going for it.
In regards to your profile, you got a lot going for it, mostly with your opening story. It paints you as independent, idealistic (in this case, it's a good thing), and fun to be around.
A few things that should be addressed, though...
-No photos of you playing golf! Considering that you're using two of the pictures to show scenery (with no people in them), it probably wouldn't hurt, with you being a golfer and all.
-Formatting should be cleaned up a bit to make it a bit more formal looking. You're an adult, so it's sort of expected.
-While you say that you're looking for "slim and athletic" and then go onto make an off-hand comment about women setting off car-alarms, when I first read it, I thought it meant an exceptionally attractive woman who causes electronics to go haywire, and then I reread it and I realized that you might be saying that you wouldn't mind being with someone who's a little on the heavy side (ie: they shake the ground when they walk, setting off car alarms). If you are, then this is a really, really mean way of saying it, which could alienate a few people from contacting you, or if you a prospective POFer who is now "slim and athletic," but used to be really overweight, then you'll be passed over.
Otherwise, good work,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 12:00:34 AM | Alanfc66,
Just so you know, if you ever say "prefer not to say" under smoking, drinking, or drugs, then that immediately means that you do and you're ashamed to admit it. If you're trying to quit, make a note of it, but don't dwell on it, then move on.
Otherwise, the profile portrays you as someone who's responsible, has a sense of humour, and may have made some mistakes in the past, but is trying to improve his life.
In terrms of what you can improve, I say that more interests would make you a lot more searchable. Have at least 6. Also, try to use a little more show than tell...you use a lot of subjective buzzwords. "Laid back, honest, affectionate..."
-NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 12:14:15 AM | Kyle28,
(clears throat loudly)
"A LOT" IS TWO WORDS! "A LOT" IS TWO WORDS, DAMMIT! There is no such word as "alot"!!! There is "allot", which means distribute or divide, but that is not the same and it's spelled with two "L's." The next person who spells "a lot" as one word will just get the letter-code review, swear to God. I mean seriously, people! They teach you this in third grade!
(rant off)
A huge chunk of your profile is dedicated to rehashing stuff that's already in your forms (your height, where you're from, etc.), although you're at least elaborating on it. Personality-wise, I don't get a good feel for it.
I'm sure you're aware of the photo issue, but for future reference, make sure that you're smiling in your photos and they depict you with your shirt ON. Apart from that, the picture of you peering out the window is probably the best.
So, apart from the spelling mistakes I've already pointed out, you miss a lot of apostrophes, and I think you meant to say "piqued your curiosity."
Peace,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 1:00:47 AM | Hey There! I have been on this site for almost a month now and not alot of responses AT ALL.
- I am a sweet, honest and outgoing individual and from my POF friends on here they say that I am very cute and kind as well.
- I take the time ALOT of time to go through many male profiles whether through searching or even on the forums. Then I send them e-mails and get no responses...
I am NOT on here to whine I UNDERSTAND that they can choose NOT TO respond...
HOWEVER, I need your male perspective.
Thank you :) | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 6:49:53 AM | Hi NoMoreRegrets,
I haven't had a lot of luck with the whole online dating thing. I think I must have rewritten my profile about a hundred times now. My friends all say it's great but I think I need an objective opinion now :) Any thoughts or advice would be greatly appreciated!
Thanks,
Newfie.Grrl | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 7:52:36 AM | Miss80s,
I'm sure you're aware of the uphill climb you have due to your body type, and I'm not here to judge on that. But (and this is where I run the risk of putting my foot in my mouth, and if it upsets you, I apologize in advance, but it's still a valid point), from my personal perspective, body-type isn't as important as a person who actually takes care of herself, because I'm not shallow enough to dismiss the "fitness at any size" maxim. Personally, I find someone who may have a few extra pounds but regularly exercises and eats properly a lot more attractive than say, a bony young woman who weighs herself three times a day but still really looks like she could use a sandwich. I mean, are you interested in sports or anything a little more active and competitive? If you are, put it down under your interests. But, your mileage may vary.
Certainly, you do pack a fair amount of detail in your text, but a lot of it is purely subjective. Like I've said a zillion times in a zillion profile reviews, show, don't tell. Your entire "who am I" section is entirely made up of buzzwords that "tell" us a lot, but "show" us absolutely nothing. If you have a buzzword such as "humourous", the text must reflect that (ie: tell us a joke). You certainly back up "generous" with your love of children and animals, but the rest of them are a little bit more difficult, I'll admit. But, if you are as intelligent as you say, this shouldn't be a problem.
Good luck,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 7:57:47 AM | newfie.grrl,
Even without looking at your profile, I can tell you that the lack of photo is really holding you back. This doesn't have to, necessarily...I came across one profile that made me laugh hard and it didn't have a photo of the POFer, but I added to my fave list because I laughed while reading it.
I don't get a lot of hints about your personality just from what's written, although it does suggest being young at heart (minigolf would do that), although you should NEVER apologize for being a geek. Being a girl geek can score a lot of points, but I can see how that might be problematic later.
And you mispelled "Pleasant."
Good luck,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 11:14:17 AM | Kris1985,
"Mate"? You're definitely British, then. :)
The woman's diary/men's diary was really funny and it made me laugh, but it doesn't say that much about you, unfortunately, and it does seem vaguely similar to one of the many jokes that we find in our inbox on a regular basis. If you did write it, then that's cool. If you didn't write it, toss it and replace it with a little more about you. Show don't tell, show don't tell.
You will likely get more hits if you increase your number of interests (a lot more than just two!), which would make your profile a lot more searchable, especially if you have similar interests to someone else. Martial arts? Sports? At least something with a little more depth than just going out and drinking.
You should also avoid phonetic "cool" spelling, like saying "gud" instead of "good." This is a turnoff for a lot of people.
-NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 11:20:57 AM | Robbie1977,
Certainly not a bad profile, and you have a lot of good variety in photos. As people are generally more comfortable in their own element, they tend to look more relaxed in those types of photos, which is why I would strongly suggest a photo of you at the turntables, especially with funky nightclub lighting.
The photo of you with your baby cousin is really cute, which would definitely score points (although you probably already knew that). I would suggest losing the "Oui, Oui" photo...it's funny, but probably only funny to guys.
If you really are an advice giver, perhaps a little anecdote to that effect might give us a little more to work with. Preferably one that's funny, if you got one.
I feel the need to comment about a woman that can talk. Anyone can talk. But can anyone talk intelligently and back up what they say?
The text needs to be cleaned up a bit, though (it's missing at least one closing bracket, you mispelled "tattoo" and "creative").
Good work,
NoMoreRegrets | |
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| I'll review your profile...you won't regret it, part 2
Posted: 8/31/2006 11:37:27 AM | TexanAZ,
Knowing better than to mess with Texas, I'll do what I can to make sure no one else does. Doesn't mean that I won't, however. 
That being said, it's fairly solid, although some people might not necessarily go for someone who watches more than six hours of television per week (although that may be a matter of personal preference). Considering your wide range of interests, you may wish to downplay it a bit, or at least not go into so much detail, although you can get away with saying that you watch the Discovery Channel.
Spelling and grammar could benefit from a touch-up. "Lookalike" is one word (or hyphenated, take your pick) and "sitcom" is mispelled. Copy and paste this into Word and let the spellchecker take care of it (it'll also automatically add the accent above the "e" in "cliche").
Otherwise, solid profile.
-NoMoreRegrets | |
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