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Posted: 11/29/2007 7:23:26 AM | For italy0219:
Title: "TLC Needed..........." I wouldn't use this if I was you. Just make it a simple statement about yourself.
Pictures: Decent amount of variety, no complaints here.
Occupation: "secretary/hair stylist" - This is confusing. If your job requires that you do both, I would just stick to hair stylist as I imagine being a "secretary" is a secondary function. If you actually have 2 separate jobs, then just list whichever one you like doing the most.
Interests: Some of these are pretty weird. Like "watching my children succeed they are grown" = ?? How is that an "Interest"? You also misspelled "restaurants" and "endeavors" one of the times you used it.
About Me: This looks too short at first glance, just one paragraph. You need at least 2 paragraphs.
"Well I really do not know what I want and I am a terrible writer but a great communicator." - Terrible writer indeed. This makes absolutely no sense.
"But I will try to put into words and clarify a little more." - Unnecessary
"No Smokers need contact me." - The 'S' doesn't need to be capitalized
"I would like a male companion to go to the movies, dining, dancing, parties, etc. with." - Contradiction - Your looking for category says 'Talk/E-Mail'. This constitutes meeting. I would change this category to "Dating".
"Someone who I can count on." - Sentence fragment.
"However I would like to be the only one in that person's life after we make that commitment. I am a one man woman." - Hold the phone here... You say you are *not* looking for love, just a "male companion" but now say it needs to be exclusive? You are sending way too many mixed signals here. Choose one goal and stick to that. Do you want a "companion", someone to date, a lover, or a friend?
"I love my single life, and don't plan on changing." - Thank you for furthur confusing your readers. Honestly, pick one message and stick to it. Sending five mutually exclusive self-contradictory statements at once is not a good strategy. | |
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Posted: 11/29/2007 7:30:25 AM | I had posted this several pages back and since I am still seeing the same problems again and again and again, I'd like to take a moment to repost and update my most common issues list. Please look over this before you do a hit and run review request.
1. Titles
- No bragging, whining, or empty/obvious generalities such as "Just fishing" "Looking or a date" "Looking for a good man/woman", "Anybody out there?", etc
-No Cliches
-No smilies or 'LOL', etc
-No ALL CAPS
2. Pictures
- Must have at least one face picture, and one full body picture.
- For women, no cleavage/down the shirt shots
- For men no shirtless pictures or chest only pictures
- No pictures of your car or your dog
- No pictures of other people, or you with other people
3. Interests
- Must have a minimum of 10 interests, no "Hanging out" "Having fun" "Friends" "Family" "Anything" "Walks on the beach" "Music" "Stuff", etc
-All interests should be 3 words or less, and ideally they should become hyper-links (turn blue and become underlined when you view your own profile) unless the interest you are listing is particularly obscure.
4. About me
-Must be 2 paragraphs or less, no 'lol' and not more than one '...', However, it must not be just one paragraph.
-Single sentences should not be isolated as separate paragraphs, and especially every sentence should not be it's own paragraph.
- Don't start any sentence with either "I'm told that I am..." or "My friends say that I..."
Lastly, if I see that you have already posted review requests elsewhere, I might skip you if I am busy with a lot of other people. And also, don't email me review requests, I only do them publicly in hopes that others may learn. | |
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Posted: 12/3/2007 1:47:39 PM | I would love a "brutally honest" profile review...so, give it to me!
Thanks,
Sue | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:18:10 AM | Ok my breaks over - lets get back to it.
This is for bluejay47:
Title: "Nothing happens by accident" - no major complaints, but not particularly interesting.
Pictures: Decent enough variety to show what you look like, but I'm not a big fan of myspace-esque photoshop jobs.
Interests: Add at least 6 more.
About me: This is gimmicky and way too long. Look at my other reviews to get a better idea of what should be here. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:20:17 AM | For frengie1:
Titles: "looking for a gentlemen" - See my above post about titles.
Pictures: Not enough. We need some full body pictures, total picture minimum is 3.
Interests: You did this completely wrong. Again see my above post regarding interests.
About me: Too short, no information, no capitals or proper punctuation, looks like it was written by a 13 year old. Try again. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:27:52 AM | For mboylevt:
Title: "Batteries not included" - no major complaints but kind of meaningless.
Pictures: #2 and 3 contain other people, delete them, then add a single person full body picture.
Interests: Remove "having a blast"
Remove "going to the gym"
Then add 5 more
About me: "Well, figured I'd post up about myself here, who knows what good might come of it?" - Delete this, and the extra spacing below it.
"A little bit about me:" - Redundant
"I'd describe myself as being a rather unique individual." - Give me a break, please. Delete this.
"To start with, " - Delete
"I can be either completely serious, or a total goofball. My secret is knowing which is appropriate at a particular time." - Cliche
"My interests cover a broad range, from sports and the outdoors, to reading and computers." - Redundant
"I am a computer engineer by trade, a rugby player by choice, and a gearhead by birth." - Redundant
"I have been known to be both serious when need be, and completely ridiculous at all other times." - Didn't you just say this 4 lines ago? Delete it.
"I consider myself to be fairly intelligent, successful, and independent. I'm outgoing, funny, and even somewhat romantic." - Brag brag brag
"Attraction is a must, but don't feel that you have to be a supermodel...I would rather date someone real." - Wipe out this whole thing, please
"If you think that we might be a good match, shoot me an email! I'd love to hear from you" - email "shooting" stopped happening in 2002. Delete this and don't replace it with anything similar, totally not necessary
You basically need a total rewrite, this is really boring, redundant (basically a copy of your interest section in sentence format) and full of cliches and nonsense. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:31:36 AM | For "faeryangel"
Title: "Hard working woman" - this makes you seem like you have no free time.
Pictures: You need at least 1 good face close up picture.
Interests: No complaints
About me: "I don't want to go to bars to meet people, I don't attend church, or a gym, I work alone, so I am on here to try to meet people. I'm nervous about it though...." - Delete this
"I don't have a lot of free time, hope to meet a man who does not need us to be together every minute, but who can make the best of the chances we have to hang out." - Translates into manspeak as "Maybe I'll see you once a month for 2 hours, max."
"Well, this'll be interesting, I bet. Good luck to us all." - Delete this
Your profile contains no real usable information about you, just about how busy you are and that you have weird interests. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:35:15 AM | for alwayslaughing92705 :
Title: "A hidden gem" - Pretty plain... not interesting
Pictures: Delete #2 and #3 - No other people in your pictures!!
Interests: Need at least 4 more
About me: "I'm looking for someone who is professional" - Clarify this
Otherwise ok, but not much really functional information about you. | |
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Posted: 12/7/2007 5:31:55 PM | Just a quick note to thank you.I did what you said,just gotta get someone to take some pictures of me.Your advice made sense.
thanks again; Michael | |
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Posted: 1/2/2008 9:42:49 PM | Hi,
Sir, I would like to request a review. I do appreciate your sense of humour, and I don't mind being put on the spot for the laughs. And heck, maybe I'll learn a thing or two along the way.
Thank you.
A. | |
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Joined: 10/26/2007
Msg: 393 | |
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Posted: 1/5/2008 3:05:25 AM | This is for allez cuisine:
This is not a good profile, it's actually makes a lot of really common mistakes.
Title: I think this is the only part I have no complaint about
Pictures: Bad. The first picture makes you look like some kind of villain, and you also put in a baby picture. Bad, bad, bad, bad, bad. Why aren't there any normal pictures of you that don't contain a wine glass or that weren't taken by a webcam/cellphone?
student / gainfully employed - Please list your actual profession
Interests:
Remove - "the lulz"
Remove - "silliness"
Remove - "women"
Remove - "intelligent conversation"
About me:
"First things first:
1)I dislike pretentious, arrogant people and I can spot a fake a mile away. People who feel entitled to anything, please, move on.
2)Conversation about actresses, movie stars, soap operas, etc. bores me to tears. I will mock them.
3)Women are the light of my day, and I enjoy their ways immensely. They are my favourite music."
This is just awful. Delete this entire thing.
The rest of this section is an overdrawn out collection of ego-boosting, cliche-laden, babbling nonsense.
You actually have the nerve to write 'partner in crime'? What is wrong with you? | |
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Posted: 1/5/2008 3:11:16 AM | This for hav0c:
Title: "looking 4 someone fun in a sea of boring" - This isn't text message time, this is serious time. Write properly, and change this to be a statement about you, not what you want.
Pictures: All self-taken face only cell phone pictures. This is not good enough. And please delete number 2, it looks like you took it while sitting on the toilet.
Interests:
Remove - "living life to its fullest"
Then add at least 6 more
About me:
Why is every sentence it's own paragraph? Lose the extra spacing.
"I'm 19" - redundant
"I'm mellow, laid-back, classy, honest because I don't care enough to lie. Smarter than your average bear," - ego boosting self bragging, delete it.
This profile is just really boring and juvenile. | |
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Posted: 1/5/2008 3:13:52 AM | kitten23xox:
Lets do some math, shall we?
Nasty bikini/look at my ass pictures +
"If you are looking for a one night hookup or a casual fling please don't message me."
= I'm not going to waste my time on you | |
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Joined: 11/9/2007
Msg: 398 | |
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Posted: 1/5/2008 3:44:34 AM | I DO!!
Hey there!!
I'm just going to get on the band-wagon and ask you for any help you can throw my way...
Please please please???
Elle | |
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