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Posted: 3/19/2007 2:21:27 PM | LICK U ALL OVA* Here is your review.
All right, since you're only looking for talk/e-mail I suppose it's all right for you not to have a picture showing your face. Though it's still preferable. A lot of people don't consider a picture of your abs to be a picture of YOU. It could be of anyone's abs. It's up to you whether you add any more pictures, but ideally you should have a clear close up shot of your face, one clearly showing you head to knee/toe and a few action shots.
Tagline: Avoid words like "looking/searching/want/need", if you can't think of anything eyecatching/original then turn to your fav song/movie/book/poem whatever. Taglines are great conversation starters. I'd give yours a little more work.
Your interests don't really mesh with what you say you're looking for. If you're only looking for talk/e-mail then we don't need to know what you like "giving head an being fuked hard". People should aim to have 10 interests listed. Remember to separate them with a comma. The more of your interests that you have listed, the more hits your profile will get when someone does a search.
Main Body of Profile: All right, the first thing I'm going to say about your profile is. CHECK YOUR SPELLING AND GRAMMER. Especially you, the talk/e-mail guy. If you're looking for someone to turn you on with their words, then make sure yours are arousal inducing.
The nex thing I'm going to mention is paragraphs. They are a wonderful thing. They separate ideas and make profiles easier to read. I'd suggest putting a few into practise.
hey lads or big boys!well 1st off my last account gt deleted by me sum how! so bak on here!
im looking for fun online sum1 who will turn me on with tere words! im 18 years old dark hair tanned dark eyes and good looking lol jst being honest! hah um i love goin out 2 nyt clubs an mettin up wid guys bt fav fing is being fuked rly hard up my bum an also sucking****an drinking cum! i prefer olda guys as they simply know what they are doing and i loe them 2 take control in the bed!
Ok well, here goes.
We don't need to know that your first account got deleted. It's unimportant unless you're going to tell us what your old username was. That way we know if we've talked to you before.
Again, if you're looking for someone to turn you on with their words you might want to make sure that yours are cleaned up. All I's are capitols, use full forms of words, make sure your spelling/grammer is wonderful. That kind of thing.
Since it says that you're looking for talk/e-mail, you should gear your profile towards that. Maybe have a clip from your favourite erotica story. Stop telling us in your profile that you like it up the bum and other stuff. That's really personal for a profile and should be saved for messaging.
That all being said, I am going to say one more thing. I do not think I am the right person to be reviewing your profile. I will however continue but I would suggest taking it to the profile review board and ask for a specialized review.
i once was in a porn film so hey i spose i cud say i have experience even tho im yung! black guys or foreign guys turn me on alot bt im nt rly fussy jst looking 4 fun so dnt b shy! i am willing 2 hook up bt must cum 2 me, ps i have a webcam! basically me i am dirty! turn offs inc being sucked off! talk 2 me dnt b shy! ps please rate my pic thank youxxx
I don't even know how to comment on this. I'm so not the person you're looking for, so it makes it hard for me to look at this objectively.
You don't have to share that you were in a porn film, at least not in your profile.
Well what I'm going to do is give you the formula for a great profile. .. I suggest a complete re-write.
Use this handy structure so you don't leave anything out.
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a man want to talk to you and meet you over any other guy on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of man you're looking for. This is really handy when we are browsing through profiles. We don't like contacting men when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty///etc kind of guy. Use it to your advantage.
I wish you luck.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 2:37:59 PM | SPINDLER A review for you.
Tagline:Very good, I laughed outloud at my computer. You can imagine how crazy that made me seem. Thank goodness I'm alone.
Pictures: Good pictures so far. I'd work on getting a few more. Ideally you want a clear close up head shot, a body shot showing off your body type and a few action shots.
Interests: You've got a good set of interests. I wouldn't add or take away.
MAIN PROFILE BODY
Hello and welcome to my profile
I am one of the most daring Karaoke singers around. I have been told I have voice of an angel. Which is a good thing because then it matches my personality. I like to lay back at the local pub while laughing with my date, friends or both. I enjoy good food and prefer not to cook it so I'm a restaurants person.
I'm not a fan of the profile welcome. I think it's just filler and isn't needed.
Good opening paragraph.
What I want out of life is a car(when I finish my theory and driving test), my own place and my dream job as an actor. I can see myself working on Coronation Street. I would like to a work on all types of movies.
What kind of car? Why Coronation Street? What kinds of movies in particular?
I'm looking for a girl who is kind, caring and sweet. Somebody who will care for my feelings as I will with hers.
It's good that you mention what you're looking for. Most people leave this section out.
If you fancy a chat, don't be afraid to leave a message because I'm a gentle soul inside and out.
I like that you say you're a gentle soul both in and out, but I don't think that you need to mention to someone to leave a message. We will if we are interested. I'd take it out.
PS. I have Aspergers Syndrome, which basically means that I have trouble giving people space when I'm talking to them. It also means that when I'm angry or stressed, I cause self harm to myself. I am as normal as most men in all other aspects of my life. If you have some kind of disorder or disability, its okay if you want to talk to me about it, I won't run away. If knowing I have this problem is a turn off to you, please don't waste my time or yours. I only want to hear from ladies who don't care that I have this problem.
Good that you tell us ahead of time, and good on you for leaving yourself open to talk about talking about other disabilities with women. Shows your caring.
I'd take out the whole "If knowing I have this problem is a turn off to you, please don't waste my time or yours. I only want to hear from ladies who don't care that I have this problem."... In Profiles you want to focus on the positive and stay away from the negative.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 2:54:40 PM | VADIM G - Your review. However it's only for your PRIMARY profile.
Tagline: Most people don’t put much thought into their tagline and put the first thing that pops into their head. A tagline is the first thing read, much like a headline to an article. If it’s boring or confusing, chances are you won't read it. Avoid using words like looking, searching, wanting, needing, those are all redundant. Also things like Are you the one? "Looking for my last true love", "Will you be mine?" or "Tired of playing games". If you can't think of anything catchy turn to your favourite song/movie/book for inspiration.
While you stayed clear of those words, your tagline is one words and it gives the impression that you are only about your work. I'd change it.
Picture: You've got a good range of pictures, but I'd take out the one of your cat. I don't like when people place pictures of their pets on here. We are not here to date your pet, if we were then we would be at the site called date my pet. Since we are here, stick with pictures that have you in them.
Interests: You've got a good range of interests. I wouldn't add to them or take anything away.
MAIN PROFILE BODY
I'm an easy going guy who likes adventures. Travelling, camping, driving, seeing new places, snowboarding, bodybuilding, fishing is what I like to do. I hang out mith my friends, enjoy house parties. I like any interesting activities that involve exploration and sport.
Sport and other physical activities in fact is what moves me. Without doing activities like that life stands still.
Ok. Good.
I like cooking and try new things so everybody can enjoy. I'm a little cautious with new people but if I know you well I will make you a good company. I also like to hang out with people I don't know in the bar (if I'm in condition after having a beer or two of course). I can be very cheerful and happy, but sometimes I can be on a downside. I used to going to parties a lot and I rarely go out now because of work and such.
All right. It would seem like a good thing that so far I haven't commented either way on your profile. But that's not a good thing. Your profile bores me. It's neutral and I feel nothing towards it.
My hobby is graphic designs, web designs (which is my favourite). I'm bedroom DJ as well since 2000. I spin Drum'n'bass, trance, breaks and I do a little turntablism. I spin for my friends only now, that's why they call us "bedroom" djays. I rarely go to the clubs to hang out due to various reasons, because my friends don't go there often, the crowd there make me a bit nervous (crowd claustrophobia), and drinks and everything else is too expensive. But I don't mind to go if I really want to.
Again, it's just boring.
Recent update: I joined taekwondo classes and I enjoy it very much.
I don't smoke, drink, or do drugs and... I feel great!
Ladies!!! I'm here!!! Single guy is lonely and single!!!
Well, enough said... The rest I'll save for anyone wants to talk to me.
Take care.
I've got nothing to say on your profile one way or the other.
The only thing I think you should add is what you're looking for in a partner. The qaulites and so forth.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 3:04:21 PM | FRIENDLYJO - A review.
Tagline: Good tagline.
Pictures: Great pictures (Yum!)
Interests: Good list of interests.
MAIN PROFILE
Hiya.
I’m a kind, considerate, loving guy looking for a like minded gal with similar interests, whose not a carbon copy, but jells with my personality.
Ok this is a good sentance, but it shouldn't be your opener. This kind of thing goes after you've told us about you. I'd lose the Hiya. It's a pointless.
I'm more of a country boy than a city man and like being outdoors and near the coast. I love to visit new and old cities in all parts of the world and think it's important to see and understand different cultures...it helps you grow ! But, fresh air and blue skys are a must...it helps you breath !
good, this is what you should be opening your profile with. It's BREATHE not BREATH... Just so you know.
I believe in live and let live, try not to judge a book by it's cover and I'm genuine about that.I like to know where I stand with people, treat them with respect as I expect to be treated. I have a dry sense of humour, can be quite witty once you know me and I like a girl who can laugh with me as well as hold an intellectual conversation... You know there's a time and place for everything !
Good. I like it.
Nightclubs are not a priority now and I want a more fulfilling life, sharing new experiences with an attractive, honest and positive partner. Caring, sincere, intelligent people only.
Ok good to know.
Thanks for reading,
don’t be shy...
and all the best, in ya quest !
I'd take this last part out. It doesn't leave the right aftertaste.
Ok, so here is the formula for a great profile.
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a woman want to talk to you and meet you over any other guy on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of woman you're looking for. This is really handy when we are browsing through profiles. We don't like contacting men when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of guy. Use it to your advantage.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 3:24:50 PM | Jo003ra - A Review.
Tagline: Good tagline.
Pictures: I'd get a few more. Ideally you want one clear head shot, one showing off your body type and a few action shots.
Interests: Good set of interests.
Main Profile: This is the hard part. I hate talking about myself. My friends would describe me as, kind, gentle, polite, funny, always up for a good time, supportive, empathetic and honest. I believe that my word is my bond , I try to do the right thing and treat others as well as I possibly can.
I don't care that you hate talking about yourself. Internet dating is based around you talking about yourself. Profiles are a way to sell yourself. You either should sell yourself to the best of your ability, or get out of the races.
I don't care how your friends would describe you. You've been on this green earth for 40 years and you can't describe yourself how YOU see yourself?
I am very shy at first but warm up quickly. I believe it is better to listen than talk. I love to laugh. A good comedy will make me happy every time. I'm a big kid at heart and love amusement parks, horror flicks and video game. I also understand that adults have responsibilities and need to take thing seriously. Having said that you always need to keep a sense of humor even through the darkest parts of life.
This is good.
I'd add a section telling us what you are looking for in a woman. The more we know the better your chances of actually finding it.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 3:43:53 PM | SWEETPAULI - A review.
Tagline: Good.
Pictures: Good, you could have one showing off your body. And a few action shots.
Interests: Good list of interests.
Main Profile: Am ready to kick back, get into my fuzzy robe and fur throw, guzzle down a brew, munch on tortilla chips, and watch a movie!
I laughed. Good going.
Here is where I am at: I am college educated. Am not perfect--my mouth has a tendancy to run away at times, but I try not to let it write checks that my body can't cash. I can bait hooks, help a cow birth a calf, drive almost any tractor running (had 2 Farmalls-a H and a M) , bale hay, run a fence line, and I can shoot a .308. I may have been born and raised in the city, but did live on a working farm for 14 years; I know which end to milk from--those dangly things, right? Oh--to add to the list--mixing and pouring concrete, remodeling a house too. Ain't I the handy girl?? I know the difference between a Allen wrench and a socket wrench. (Thanks, Dad!) I do have my own tools and know how to use them. Wanna borrow some?
Don't get me wrong; I can be as feminine as the next woman.
Am not perfect--my mouth has a tendancy to run away at times, but I try not to let it write checks that my body can't cash.
Oh goodness, don't I know that feeling!
This is a great paragraph.
Yes, I smoke!
About my weight--I am comfortable in my own skin after many years of battling the bulge; deciding to quit putting myself through the torture of dieting.
Of course I like a beer now and then--or maybe a drink with (insert favorite hard stuff here) in it. But I don't get stupid.
I'd take this section out. People already know if you smoke from the start of your profile. And Mentioning that you're comfortable in your own skin makes it seem like you're not. I'd just take it out.
I work hard--about 50-70 hours a week, and am usually on the go on my days off, too--what can I say, I love to travel so much it's not enough to do it for a living! I'm NOT laid back, I charge at full speed--why waste time? There's too many things to see and do before I start pushing up daisies. "Laid back" to me is forever sprawled on a sofa, and "glass half-full" means never finishing a drink. Ugh. How boring. I do have my "down time" though, and spend it wisely.
I loved it.
I'm not looking to drain your bank account, I have my own to do it with, and I don't give a rip on how much or how little you make.
Not needed. Focus on the positive.
I have one daughter who is grown and on her own--thank the gods above us! We have a love/hate relationship that's been ongoing for years; but she is understanding now of what it takes to be an adult, and as a result of this we are s-l-o-w-l-y getting closer.
Ok, I'd save the conversation about the "kids" for messages. It's not part of dating you, since she no longer lives at home, and it seems like such a personal thing to put in a profile.
"eat right, live healthy, die anyway"
Hmm.. Ok?
I'm really enjoying my life right now. Be there to complement it, and take a fun ride!
It's compliment. Just so you know.
If this intrigues you, RUN, don't walk, to your computer!
I'm not generally a fan of the afterthough message me addition. I think it's just filler and tends to ruin a profile.
The only thing I'd suggest to add, besides what I've already mentioned. Is that you give us a little more on what you're looking for in a partner.
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Posted: 3/19/2007 4:16:43 PM | So are you interested? lol
I've been out of the race for a long time. Like a lot of people I reluctantly have to start over.
I truely thank you for your help.
Tell me something, how did you get so smart?
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Posted: 3/19/2007 6:15:59 PM |
I'm really enjoying my life right now. Be there to complement it, and take a fun ride!
It's compliment. Just so you know.
It's complement, just so you know ;-)
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Posted: 3/19/2007 7:40:11 PM | Pink--
[Yes I smoke!] I put that in there due to the fact a lot of men do not read that in the flow chart part of the profile. A man contacts me--he doesn't smoke--doesn't realize I do even though it's there , and gets offended when I tell him I do smoke. He has no idea till I mention it! Which tells me he doesn't read. This happens all the time to me. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 9:18:46 AM | HERSELFTHEELF - A review.
Tagline: Good tagline.
Pictures: Great range of p ictures, we know what you look like. Thank you!
Interests: You've got a good set of interests.
Main Profile: Ok, I've read your profile and normally I don't like those questionaires on profiles, but in your case, you made me laugh too many times to discredit it. So good on you!
I: play field hockey, ice hockey, run half marathons, am the president of a Society at the U of A, am thinking of grad school, am spending some of the summer in Turkey on a scholarship I won (wahoo) at the Middle East Technical University, do yoga, and ski. I'm probably over ambitious and adventurous.
You: must be educated in something, not be socially retarded, have some vision re: your future, be OUTDOORSY and for the love of god- please, please, PLEASE be funny. I simply cannot be the only funny person in this relationship.
And yes. That picture is with me- and a giant jar of dead rats. Hot eh?
All right. I really liked your profile. The stucture isn't the normal structure, but it works. Looks like I'm not the sadist to fullfill your masochist tendancies. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 9:32:17 AM | G3TB3NT4Me - A review for you.
Tagline: Good tagline, you avoided those horrible words that seem to make up taglines today. Well you didn't avoid "Looking" but it doesn't have the same meaning. So good for you.
Pictures: Your pictures are interesting. It's good that you have the clear head shot, the action shots and the one showing off your body type.
Interests: You've got a good range of interests. And most of them are blue. Whoo hoo.
Main Profile: When doing reviews, it always bothers me a little bit when someone who has a great profile asks for a review. They are just looking for a thumbs up. I have a feeling that's what your goal was, but I'm not going to hold it against you. Simply because your profile made me WANT to contact you. And I would, if I lived closer. Your profile is one of the best I've read and for that you should get some kind of reward.
I wish you luck here on POF, though I doubt you'll need it.
Alright, let's get this party started! Welcome to all that is (B)!!!
About Me
I have 10 piercings and a kick-ass trihawk! I may look intimidating, but I don't bite ;b I like to try new things, as life stays more exciting that way! I am confident in who I am, but can be rather quiet; I am outgoing when comfortable. I am an upbeat guy who is laid back and easy going. I love to laugh and I speak my mind. I like to flirt, but I have a twisted/sarcastic sense of humour; hehehe... What can I say? I have no tact. As for music, I prefer the sweet, sweet sounds of METAL, (can you tell?) but Classic Rock, Hard Rock and Blues still kick ass! Some of my favourite bands are, Disturbed, Tool, Death, Led Zeppelin and Pink Floyd.
As for my social life, I enjoy staying @ home and watching a good movie as much as partying with my friends. I tolerate the bar scene because I enjoy dancing with a beautiful woman and a good game of pool. I don't really drink, so I'm usually the DD. Just never really acquired a taste for it; and someone has to regulate the crazy b@stards I call my friends!
I fill my spare moments with hackisac, (actually quite the workout if you can keep it in the air!) riding my BMX, playing pool and swimming in the summer. I am currently learning to play the drums; and of my 5 roommates, 2 play guitar, and 1 plays bass/drums. I started spinning POI last year @ Komasket and I now own a practice pair, a LED pair, and a FIRE SPINNING pair! The whoosh of hot fire flying by my head is quite the exhilarating experience. I still play video games, but they are a fading passion. Maybe the PS3 can change that, but we'll see!
What I'm Looking For
I am looking for some like-minded people to hang out with, kick around the hack, maybe even jam; plus, I am always on the lookout for her. HER being an easy going, open minded woman. Someone who can dish out a killer burn and laugh off my twisted sense of humour. Someone I can laze about the house with, but is always up for something fun like camping, biking, pool or just going for a relaxing walk in the woods or along the beach. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 9:39:18 AM | 00Sarge - A review. (Silly boy, I don't make promises I can't keep!)
Tagline: Good eye catching tagline.
Pictures: All right, ideally you want ONE clear head shot, ONE clear body shot, and a few action shots. I'd get one that shows off your face a little more. And I'd take out the pictures of your dogs. I'm not here to date them. I'm here to date you.
Interests: Good list of interests.
Main Profile: Your profile covered the basics. Who you are, what you do, and what you're looking for. I don't have much to add to your profile, so if you're looking to be made fun of, you'll have to go elsewhere.
If a man is standing in the middle of the forest speaking and there is no woman around to hear him - Is he still wrong?
Hey, thanks for stopping in!!!
I love pretty much all sports, and I am a bit of a movie buff.
I have been accused of being a jock, nerd, brain, bonehead.. but mostly goofball...
I've been called smart ass, wise ass, dumb ass, and just plain old ass.
In my previous life I was stepfather to 3 wonderful little girls and found out just how much children can add to a person's life. Only a parent can understand how a cheesy, crappy painting when given to you by a 5 year old can be more beautiful than a Rembrandt! Now, I am not looking for a replacement, or to become an instant dad overnight, but I do love kids. I guess what I'm saying that if you are a single mom I am not scared!
Hey, guess what?? I actually DO like to cook! Nothing fancy mind you, but I can put a kick ass roast in front of you! As for food... To me a vegetarian is a 4 legged animal to be cooked and served on the table. Also, I do NOT eat bait, so don't ask me out to a sushi bar. My alternate brain is above my belt!!!
In about 50% of the profiles I've viewed, I see the word honesty. I'll take mine brutal and blunt thank you.
What do I look for????
Well, in general... You know how a lot of girls go for the scruffy look in guys, but also like it when we clean ourselves up too... Well, I guess I'm the same way when it comes to women. I really do go for the girls that will throw a can of beer at the TV during a game and then toss on the heels for a night out.. Or just as comfortably don the jeans for wings and such.
I adore crazy, sarcastic women who love to 'battle' and tease their man, because they know what a bonehead he is!!!
Soooo....
Are you open, honest, direct, kooky, smart, sexy, witty, sarcastic, confident, and crazy enough for me????
Am I, honest, direct, kooky, smart, sexy, witty, sarcastic, confident, and crazy enough for you????
I hope so.
Good luck gals.
PS - The pic with me and the pups is 4 years old now..... Fair warning. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 9:46:53 AM | | Hello Pink.................I'd love for you to check out my profile.............a woman's insight on this.............thanks a million. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 9:53:42 AM | CASSw/SASS - A review.
First of all, I'd like to say that it takes longer than 4 days for you to get your feelers out on POF. Post in the forums, respectfully, state your opinion on things. Forums are a great way to meet new people, simply because when someone likes your post, they will check out your profile. That can lead to new messages and possbily more.
Here it's all about patience.
Tagline: Most people don’t put much thought into their tagline and put the first thing that pops into their head. A tagline is the first thing read, much like a headline to an article. If it’s boring or confusing, chances are you won't read it. Avoid using words like looking, searching, wanting, needing, those are all redundant. If you can't think of anything catchy turn to your favourite song/movie/book for inspiration.
Your tagline "START AS FRIENDS & THEN PROGRESS" is common, it's not eyecatching nor is it going to get you remembered.
Pictures: You do have a good range of pictures. Which is helpful on this kind of site. So good for you!
Interests: You also have a good listing of interests. Nice and broad. The more interests you have listed, the more hits your profile will get when someone does a specific search.
Main Profile: Your profile does give us the information needed to know if we'd like to contact you (and you're right, your grammer is just peachy). Though I think you could use a little structure and less of those "~" symbols dividing your thoughts.
Here is a good structure for profiles.
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of date. Use it to your advantage. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 10:08:04 AM | LYNN1960 - A review.
Tagline: Boring. A tagling is the first thing read, it should be eyecatching. If you can't think of something on your own, then turn to your favourite song/book/movie/poem, and get inspiration from that.
Pictures: You've got a good clean head shot. So that's working for you. Ideally you should have one head shot, one showing off your body type, and a few action shots.
Interests: It's best to have at least 10 interests listed. Remember to separate them with a comma. The more of your interests you have listed, the more hits your profile will get when someone does a search.
You should avoid "PREFER NOT TO SAY" 's anywhere on your profile. When someone reads that it's an automatic "yes" that's registered. I'd suggest just answering the question.
Main Profile: I'd stay away from emoticons. They are childish ( in my opinion) and tend to take away from a profile, not add to it.
just me ..say hi if you like >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> just me...say hi if you like,i will tell you all about me........... i like alternative music ..like cold play ..snow patrol ..and songs with meanifull lyrics ( not slush stuff ) ..i like to chill out .. and love escaping reality at times ..as you don;t know me please don;t judge me from a few words on here ..talk to me and find out more
First of all, men are not as stupid as we like to make them out to be. They know to send you a message if they are interested. Telling them to "say hi if you like" is like adding another nail to your coffin. It comes across as needy.
Men shouldn't have to message you to find out the basics about you. That's the wonders of a profile. In profiles you are supposed to give enough information about you so that when someone reads your profile they will have things in common, to talk about. Profiles are a way of selling yourself. You should sell yourself to the best of your ability, or get out of the races.
as you don;t know me please don;t judge me from a few words on here ..talk to me and find out more
You're right we don't know you. And we've spend the time going through your profile to know nothing else. That's the thing with online dating. People ARE going to judge you by your profile.
I suggest a re-write. I'm going to give you the structure and break down so that you can re-write (should you chose to) properly.
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of date. Use it to your advantage.
Good luck. When/If you do a profile re-write feel free to bring it back to the review thread, and someone will review it for you. | |
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Posted: 3/20/2007 10:23:51 AM | PUTERJOSH- A review.
Tagline: You avoided those nasty words, so good for you, but I'm not a fan of your tagline. In profiles you want to focus on the positive.
Pictures: Your pictures are all right, We know what you look like.
Interests: Your interest list is padded out with mostly kinds of music you listen to. Do you not have any activites that you emjoy doing?
Main Profile : Im Josh Im 21 im sitting thinking about what should i write in my profile on here if anyone hopfuly takes the time to read it. and i don't know were to start really, i relized no matter what i put on on here someone somewhere won't like me based on what iv put here. And I realized that I don't care if people don't like me. All Im asking is of you is if you don't know me don't judge me and ill do the same for you.
Oh goodness. First of all we know how old you are. It says it above your picture.
If you write a profile people will read it. Not everyone, but some will. If you don't care that people like you, why are you so desperately stating that they don't judge you? Welcome to the world of dating, where people judge you just based on what you look like, nevermind what you say about yourself. Online dating is no different. You will be judged, you are going to judge, and that's just the way it is.
So about me well my favourite hockey team is the Toronto Maple Leafs, I listen to all types of music everthing from Kiss to the Spice Girls (yes i listen to the Spice Girls occansionaly) I love cruising around tunes cranked smoking a joint just hanging out with my friends, drinking with my friends. I love partying but my bills are paid so please don't confuse partying with being irresponsible.
You say in your profile that you like smoking pot, but you put "Prefer not to say" when they ask you if you do drugs? JUST BE HONEST. Some people care if you do drugs, others dont, and others will even join in. Prefer not to say is death on a profile. STAY AWAY FROM THEM.
my freinds and family are everything to me. Ill talk about anything with anyone im very easy going easy to get along with and its conceited yes but im the best person iv ever met im not perfect by any means but i accept who i am and i accept others for who they are well thats all i have to put really so msg me if u want to hang out chat whatever
Well you're the best person you've ever met? Wow, turned me right off.
Please take out the whole "msg me if u want to hang out chat whatever" it's not needed. We know what to do.
I suggest a re-write. Here is a great structure for a profile.
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of date. Use it to your advantage.
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Posted: 3/20/2007 10:47:09 AM | LAURAKAY0507 - A review for you.
Tagline: "where are the nice guys..." is cliche... If you can't think of something eyecatching on your own, turn to your fav movie/book/song whatever, and get inspiration from that.
Pictures: Your picture is a nice one. But it's best to have one body shot, showing off your body type, a few action shots and the head shot (that you already have)
Interests: All right, you could list some more, but you've got a fair amount.
Main Profile:It's hard to meet people at bars because I'm kind of shy, that's why I'm here. However, once someone gets to know me they find that shy thing hard to believe. I have a very quick sense of humor and I love using it. I'm common sense smart and I have book smarts, I think it's the best of both worlds.
You just justified being on POF becuase you are too shy to meet people in bars? There is nothing shameful of being a part of a dating site.
I'm definitely not the type of girl that tries to be someone she's not. I have my own friends and life and I respect that someone I meet has the same. I won't try to mold myself to all of your likes and dislikes, that's not real. I'm honest with everyone I know and expect the same in return. I try to have fun wherever I go and my friends help a lot in that area. We can pretty much make anything into a good time.
Good paragraph
Hm, what else... I'm a Cubs fan, deal with it! I love to go out but sometimes nothing beats renting movies and wearing my pajamas. I lovelovelove concerts and music. I love to travel but don't get to all that often... There's lots more info and pics here, http://www . my space . com/__lo__
Ok, first of all it's against the rules to post a web address on POF. If admin found out, you could have your profile deleted and be banned from POF. SO please take it down.
Overall it's a pretty ok profile. I'd separate ideas into paragraphs and whatnot, a good structure for a profile is...
FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.
SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.
THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.
And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of date. Use it to your advantage.
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Posted: 3/20/2007 2:06:49 PM | Thanks for the review! And yea... I know I Rock! But it's always good to have others say so too! That way I know its not all in my head! LoL!
Thanks again!
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