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| Re: jheldatksuedu
Posted: 5/8/2005 9:20:14 AM | I'm not saying use the word danc in the profile, it's not a word and it would be mispelled, that's just the letter combination that I search for and it finds dancing and like to dance.
They should have camping and backpacking in the same profile if they backpack. | |
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| pouyqwert_nd REVIEW
Posted: 5/8/2005 9:20:18 AM | pouyqwert_nd
Well now, interesting little (AS IN SMALL AND BRIEF) profile ya got there!
About your headline, "Can someone help me Explore Valley City? "
uummmm, no. How about "Let's explore.... together" or something? Get more creative and original than what you have,
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
Your picture is pretty decent. Got more to share in the profile? Just a thought.
"Dating Interests"
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you should really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general i sopen to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
Nope, not very specific and doesn't say much about you and what you're about.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the ex & and please do not go on about what you DON'T want or what you are NOT looking for in a person. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail. Negativity, Its a big 'ol waste of time that can be better served talking more of yourself.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
"First Date"
Keep it simple.
"A drink, dinner and dancing".
And if thats as original as you can come up with, well then go with it. | |
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| Re: jheldatksuedu
Posted: 5/8/2005 9:26:01 AM | | If they like to dance one dance they will probably like to dance another. I dance CW swing, I end up teaching it to near everybody I dance with, The chance of me finding someone that has CW swing in their profile is as close to zero as numbers can get, so even though dance is very general it needs to be there, then you can also add other words to be specific, I search for dance, would love to find CW swing, but it's not going to happen. The point is think about somebody trying to find you, what words will they use, those words are important. | |
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| Hit me!
Posted: 5/8/2005 10:57:16 AM | Hi I just joined and am new to online dating, your comments would be well appreciated. Also, when contacting someone who's profile I find interesting, what's the etiquette?
Thanks in advance | |
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| Last-Chance review
Posted: 5/8/2005 11:49:59 AM | Hey Jack Mack, thanks for the critique... I took some of your suggestions and made some changes, but I am going to leave the photo's of my "dead animals". It totally shows who I am, and what I have in my house. Pretty tough to explain 16 stuffed African animals, 12 birds, 10 fish, 2 stuffed animals from Alaska, a Montana mule deer, a Colorado pronghorn hanging on my walls... Could you imagine the look on someones face, if they don't know this about me before entering my ark of dead animals? PETA really loves me!!! NOT. | |
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| Surfs up for Surfer chick (Review time)
Posted: 5/8/2005 1:10:08 PM | you are the man, thanks for pointing out how I may look towards other, that are not a true part of me. I've made changes. Please take another look.
Your the man,, love the surf lingo you threw in there too.
cheers | |
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| Surfs up for Surfer chick (Review time)
Posted: 5/8/2005 1:20:29 PM | aaahhhhh, oooohhh sssoooo much better there Surferchick! Great job!
Might I make a suggestion or two on a headline? I don't normally do this, but I had a little fun with the whole surfer thing, so thought I'd chime in.
How 'bout something like
"Moondoggie come to me!"
"La Dolce Vida lite"
"Gidget wants a Punk!" (as in punk rock)
"Come on a surfin safari with me"
ha ha, just a few thoughts for ya. | |
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| DJ Lover review
Posted: 5/8/2005 4:35:00 PM | Oh Thanks JAck for taking the time to look at my profile. Yep, I wrote that stuff a yr. ago, just havn't updated til now. So I changed a few things around like you said. Dating interests, I think I listed more, I just don't know if it enough? Oh, guys like it when a girl write 1st? Really?? Guess I'll have to try that.
Thanks for the compliment on the smile. 
I hope everything is looking good now.  | |
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| DJ Lover review
Posted: 5/8/2005 4:47:06 PM | Jack, thank you for your help. I took at looked at my profile as if I was someone else, and it did really sucked.
Anyway, I did a major overhual added horse power and looks. Anyway, I was never good in such things especially when it comes down to talk about myself.
Jack, I hate to do this to you, cause I know you are a busy man, but if you can just check my profile just one more time and give me your opinion. Please.
Thanks a million again | |
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| Surfs up for Surfer chick (Review time)
Posted: 5/9/2005 4:31:38 AM | Hey Jack;
Now i got a benifit from your advice ( alittle ) just remember that i'm belonging to other culture and what not working in USA , might be the best for here lol | |
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| Added notations
Posted: 5/9/2005 4:36:33 AM | @ usanzac, No, this review is not strictly for 'da ladies. Dude, hang out a bit and I'll get to ya. Promise! That goes for the other 9 folk awaiting the good doctors reviews!
@ Xainos, Good improvement. Still needs tweaking and watch for spelling errors!
Good that you approached it with a more objective eye.
BTW, about your pics, use the last three you have. They are THE best of the bunch! Good job!
@ iamthewalrus, funny SN! Your question, "when contacting someone who's profile I find interesting, what's the etiquette?"
The answer: sssoooo many possibilities!
But simply cookdown down to the basics, in your "first contact" e-mail, just tell 'em a little about you and what it was about their profile, interests and or pic that interested you so much as to write them an e-mail. Keep it conservative, short (maybe two paragraphs) and ask lots of open ended questions of her (open ended being questions that require more of an answer than just "yes" or "no").
Here is a little tip. Get the other person talking about themselves first (especially the ladies) and before you know it, you are in a full fledged conversation via e-mail and perhaps soon enough, work to the telephone or IM's! It works, tttrrruuussstttt me!
@ jheldatksuedu
Thanks for expressing your opinions once again. Perhaps you have taught some folks a little more about the value of specificity as opposed to general statements like "music" or "movies". Thanks | |
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| Added notations
Posted: 5/9/2005 4:40:32 AM | Hey Jack ;
Thank you for your time and notes, i make some changes now , so let me know if you like it ?
please take care that i'm from other culture, so somethings worked here lol, i'm not now at USA for making my profile american kind , ok !!
Thank you , and keep moving, you are doing great , | |
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| Added notations for Valentinoagain
Posted: 5/9/2005 5:55:44 AM | @ Valentino,
Saw your revised profile. Now THAT is some pictures ya got there! Pretty darn cool there bud!
Yes, I am aware that you are in another country and such, but come on now. Aren't most women usually the same with regards to thoughts and feelings? lol
Granted, I am unsure how the cultures and expectations are there in Egypt, but some of the suggestions I shared can still be applicable there, wouldn't ya say?
Again, great pics! Much improvement!! Great job! | |
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| Domeroth's turn
Posted: 5/9/2005 7:20:06 AM | Domeroth
The reviews are in and all we can say is "dayum"!
Ok ok, your headline, Knight of modern nights", pretty good. I'm 55% liking it, so keep it unless you come up with something else.
About your pics. Buddy, pal, friend. What were ya thinking?
Come on now, these pictures of you are friggin scarey and remind me of Jack Nicholson in The Shining! Whats the deal with the pics with red lighting? MAkes ya look a tad evil and brought to the dark side just for the hell of it.
Lose these pictures, post haste!
Come on guy, lighten up here! Getcha some better pictures or just dont bother at all.
Your "Dating Interests" are original enough, although I'd leave off the "explosives" & "guns" part. That, along with your pictures, does not a good picture paint!
Whats the deal with "Movies", "Music" and "Books"?
What about 'em? Too vague, be more specific!!
"About me":
Now why did you decide to write this "I'm into a lot of things that aren't illegal or immoral"??
What was on your mind here? Whatever it was, well... lose this part eh? It doesn't bode well.
This section is kinda short and a bit negative. Spice it up some. I have a few tips for ya if you are interested.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the ex g/f or please do not go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, well after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
And finally, the :First Date"
ok, so Here's the deal. Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative. And don't write "whatever the lady would like". No no. Oh sure, sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guy, let's have a contingency plan at the very least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here buddy! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know? | |
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| dey3502, your turn!
Posted: 5/9/2005 7:31:24 AM | To Organs (again)
Ok, still liking somewhat your headline.
Your interests are better and without a doubt mostly original (great job!)
And your "About me" section, funny and original too. Definitely uniquely you! Good job all around!
Ok, so on with a new review. Now we turn our attention to dey3502!
Your headline, "Looking for friendly FUN" is a bit bland.
Ever come across "unfriendly fun"?? lol
Think of something more original, you can do it. Just use the 'ol noggin!
Your picture, great! Good smile, nice outfit and outdoors. Good job! Keep it as is. Whose the kid in the lower right hand corner though? ha ha. Can you ohtoshop him/her out??
"Dating Interests"
hhhmmmmm, I see probs here. You have generalizations all over the place. Come on now, dont be shy. Be specific!
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general i sopen to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
In your "About me" section, well, needs work. First, I gotta say please shy away from the negatives of what you do not want or what you dont seek. A complete waste of time and energy that coul dbe better focused on you!
you see, this section This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the ex or please do not go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
You definitely have some good things within, do not misunderstand me. Good stuff like expanding more of your likes and interests.But am a little confused. What you seek is "friends" yet the second half of this section would suggest you seek more than just friends. So whats the deal there?
Your "First date" is way too talkative yet contains nothing. Lemme let ya in on a secret, k?
We (us guys) usually appreciate you writing in the "first date" section how you'd leave it up to us guys or maybe even put "whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe some dancing, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was "whatever he wants".
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date. We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that point!
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on, for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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| dey3502, your turn!
Posted: 5/9/2005 8:01:53 AM | | can I get one? :-P lol I know my prof. sucks but not a lot of guys actually read it so always debate whether to be serious or not. | |
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