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| bean01 review
Posted: 5/9/2005 9:01:48 AM | Ok lips, I mean bean01, your turn.
Nice pic, definitely original I'll give ya that! ha ha, but more on that in a sec.
Your headline, "FLIRT w/ME"
Eh, it can be original (and honest) enough. I'd say keep it.
ok, 'bout them pictures of ya! Well, the lips as your primary is definitely unique and original! Good job there!
I like your third pic too, such a nice big smile! Not sure which I'd suggest you to use as your primary though. Lips or smiles. hhmmm
About your "Marital Status", you do realize thats ome guys will shy away from your profile for this sole reason, right? Perhaps in your "about me" section somewhere you can explain how long ya been separated and when the dovirce kicks in. This might help some.
As for your "interests", well, ya need some tweakin.
Be more specific. As you may see in many many many previous posts of profiles I reviewed, specifics is everything. Never make a general statement, like "movies" and leave it open for interpretation. You know how many movies have been made since the invention of movies? And the wide genre? You like ALL of 'em? nnnaaahhh, I would not think so.
In your "About me", well now, pretty dayum good if I do say so! Definitely upbeat and positive. Gives a little more spin on what you're about and your attitude. Good job here. Impressive.
Ok, so comes the "first date", not bad either. Very good actually. I would not change it. Definitely uniquely you and original. This is definitely one of the better profiles I have seen lately. You and Surfergirl, ya'll should talk! ha ha, the start of a good friendship I bet! lol
Well there ya have it. Take from it what you may, the doctor is out.
'Til next time ya'll! | |
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| Bettyb66 review
Posted: 5/9/2005 9:12:51 AM | Betty Betty Betty
About your profile, checked 'er out and found a few thangs you may want to address.
First, yoru headline. "Would love some romance"
Not very original. Try thinking of something that you believe will catch someones eye. Something that'll stand out from all the rest!
About your pictures. I gotta be honest here, I do not like your primary and your second picture.
Don't get me wrong, looks very nice and pretty.
But posed. Too "professional". Stick with the other great pics of yours, your everyday pics!! More realistic!!
Off to your "Interests".
Vague, general, broad, you getting the point here?
Lemme give ya a tip or two:
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or drop the ball and lose the game!
What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya. For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Lose this "Well.....I've tried to think how to make my profile more interesting.......so here goes...." 'cuz it's Pointless.
Lose lose lose:
"Not into head games" (those who are would never admit it, right? So why ya bother with this??)
"After 2 disasters, obviously I'm not good at it" Oh please please please drop this and quickly! You wanna address this? Fine, do it in the second or third e-mail to someone who is interested. NOT in your profile, the first impression of yourself.
Watch for spelling too. Don't stress too much though, we all have the same prob.
Otherwise it is rather good. Stay away from negatives though. Does no good. Keep away, k?
"First Date".
Keep it simple.
"Dinner and Drinks".
"Or maybe an afternoon date to the zoo, or the park with a picnic lunch. The night would end with a very sweet kiss, or 2 or 3..... And a definate (DEFINITE) future date very soon"
Lose "Maybe you could surprise me, or we could make it up as we went along?!"
Why?
We appreciate you writing in the "first date" section how you'd leave it up to us guys or ask us to "surprise" ya or maybe even put "whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe some dancing, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was "whatever he wants" or to "surprise" you.
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date. We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that point!
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on, for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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| usanzac, Your turn you tarheel you!!
Posted: 5/9/2005 9:28:16 AM | usanzac,
"Big Guy with Heart of Gold"
Hey Big guy, your headline is nice and all, and should blend nicely into the field of the many other guys profiles. But if you want to stand out, come up with something better. Unique, creative! I bet you have a fairly good sense of humor too. Why not use that too?
Hey, you are in my neck of the woods! I see by one of your pics you are a tarheels fan. Well, despite that..... lol.... I'll still try to give ya a fair shake!
About your pictures, good set of pics there buddy.Personally, I think your 5th or 6th pic (despite the hat) would serve you better than the one you use currently as your primary.
And good that most of your pics you are smiling. Women like stuff like that! lol
Ok, about your "interests", well dude. They suck! Sorry, but they do because they are so flippin general and unoriginal.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or drop the ball and lose the game!
What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Example:
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every single time.
Another example:
let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Ok, so in your "about me" section, well jeez. A little self analyzing and catharsis eh? A lot of this, I mean ALOT of this stuff here can be saved for the second through fifth e-mails or even first phone conversation. Dude, whats up with the first paragraph. Kind of a downer and I am not sure how you wanted to come across but it ain't happening. LOSE IT.
Same goes for the second paragraph. WTF? Come on guy, get jiggy wit it!! Loosen up and have fun. Dont write an essay as to why this or that happened and such. Sure, it is a commendable story, I'll definitely grant ya that. But one best saved for later. This "About me" section is for first impressions. And currently, you don't give the brightest most positive one.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to your past life, the struggles and so forth. Nor refer to an ex g/f(s) or please do not go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
Your next to last paragraph? Definitely the one that should have started this whole section. Definitely and without a doubt!!!!!!
And finally, "First Date".
Well I gotta say, you really hit the nail on the head for being vague here.
Look, Here's the deal. Whether we guys like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date (specifics sound familiar?). We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative OR vague. And don't write "whatever the lady would like". No no. Oh sure, sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guys, let's have a contingency plan at the very least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here brothers! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know?
Ok, thats it for now. Just trying to help ya out here! | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/9/2005 9:36:16 AM | My man KerryCorley
Where to start, where to start?
Guess "Headline", which yours says "Looking for THE woman of my life!"
Boring and along with lots of other guys headlines which say similar things. COme on, be original. Plus it sounds like what a nice guy would write.
Please consider this: Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this "Nice guy/gal seeks..." stuff. Boring!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to go reading further of someones profile.
About your pictures. You have 6 posted. 3 need to be lost because they are of you way younger or otherwise aschool pics (or so they look like). In my opinion, I like the one of you in the multi-colored shirt the best. Use this as your primary pic.
Dude, watch your spelling.
"Reserarcher"? What is that? Is that anything close to a "researcher"??
About your "Dating Interests". Too borad and general for the most part.
"Dating Interests"
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Example:
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general i sopen to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
Example #2:
let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Another example:
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship. Got it?
"About me", this section looks ok, but add another paragraph to it. Explain a little more about yourself. Just a little more to add to this section, no biggie.
"Frst Date"
Keep "Dinner, & then a nice walk along the beach. No movie on the first date, because you can't get to know one another sitting in a movie! Maybe a little dancing"
Lose the rest. Too tentative or just doesn't fit. Keep this part simple.
Now this is about your profile. I am unsure what it is you do as far as first contact e-mails or if you just wait for someone to e-mail you. Perhaps you also should focus on that as well.
Ok, thats it for now. | |
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| Tia's turn
Posted: 5/9/2005 9:49:28 AM | Tiababy
Ok, great headline. Not too terribly original, but maybe just under the wire. Keep it for now.
You have no pics. What gives? With such a great headline, I figured a pic of you would be a given. Might lose ya some points there minus a pic. Try to get one up soon.
Your dating interests are ok, could be better. Maybe list a few more and be more specific with "nights in" and "nights out". Seriously, us guys have great imaginations and if you dare keep something so general like this, we will always go to the naughty places! HA HA HA HA
Lose the following:
"However if your not a big bad boy thats cool, just dont reply to me if your a pushover b/c I cant stand guys who show me they are weak. lol."
This is a waste of your time that can be better spent telling more about yourself, or more of your interests.
Lose lose lose:
"Please no men with baggage, I drop my worries at the door and dont want to spend the night talking about what your ex did to you or how she went psycho on your car. Hope that is not asking for much, and if I offended anyone in this I apologize that you take things too seriously, relax."
Do you really, seriously believe people who are like this will avoid you because you said so? lol, nnnoooo, not gonna happen. Again a waste of your time.
Lose, times three:
"Oh and BTW if you have read this far.... dont send me a msg if all your going to say is "hi there" " wanna chat" All you going to get from me is "hi" and "No" !!! lol Hopefully we have finished grade 8 and are able to think up something more interesting say."
I applaud your attempt here but perhaps you can make your point more quickly?
Lose, the final frontier:
"Oh and please dont msg me if you are still dependent on your mom... I love my mom dearly but she doesnt cook or clean for me anymore, and I expect the same."
Please, lose this. The last three items all negatives. You can easily incorporate these into your first contact e-mail or perhaps first though third. Stay away from what you DONT want in this section, as it is just a waste of time. It is in no way a guarantee those type of people wont e-mail you.
Your first date,
If i may take a second here. Us guys appreciate you writing in the "first date" section how you'd leave it up to us guys or maybe even put "whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe some drinks, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was "whatever he wants".
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date. We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that point!
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on, for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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| fierylisa, 'der fiery one!
Posted: 5/9/2005 10:50:10 AM | fierylisa
Your headline, "Do You Really Want to Know?"
Well yeah, I wanna know what you were thinkin when ya came up with this headline.
Headlines, they are meant to be used to grab someones attention. To catch an eye and pique interest enough for someone to stop and read further on your profile, not go to the next one.
Seriously though, would "Do You Really Want to Know?" catch your attention if it were on someone elses profile? Betcha not.
Get some creativity in there!
As for your pictures, I like your first two the best. Lose the rest as they are miscolored, or are poorly lit. And good smile!!!
About your "Marital Status", you do realize thats ome guys will shy away from your profile for this sole reason, right? Perhaps in your "about me" section somewhere you can explain how long ya been separated and when the divorce kicks in. This might help some.
"Dating Interests"
bor-iiinnnnggggggg
Too vague and broad. This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
For example,
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Remember, specifics!
In your "about me" section, it was actually quite good. You kept positive and focused on yourself and as you should, kept it about you! Great job!
"First Date"
KEEP IT SIMPLE!!
"In the words of my friend Jeff (a.k.a. SemiSuper)..."Can't we go to the museum or something?"
Us guys do appreciate you writing in the "first date" section how you'd leave it up to us guys or maybe even put "whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe some dancing, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was "whatever he wants".
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date. We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that point! Just an further explanation.
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on, for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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| bean01 review
Posted: 5/9/2005 11:04:44 AM | | I appreciate your opinion there Mack and will take it to heart. And can you get me an intro to surfergirl? LOL just kidding! A little humor goes a long way I say, thanks for your time there big guy! Enjoy | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/9/2005 11:51:41 AM | Hello Jack,
I haven't had much luck with my profile and I have been here awhile. I think one reason is that my profile might be to cranky...lol
Second reason I know its my weight but maybe we can fix the first reason...lol
Could you take a look and see what you think? Please? | |
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| Iamthewalrus review
Posted: 5/9/2005 12:14:56 PM | iamthewalrus
Time to review your profile.
Turn up the gas, breathe deep and count backwards from 10. We're goin' in!!!
Your headline, "Looking for stimulation"
You can do better than that. As it is now, the question begs, "What kind of stimulation".
I'd have to presume not the kind for just "hanging out", thats for sure. YOu gotta change this if you do not want people to get the wrong idea!! And believe me, it's not that big of a leap!
About your pictures, looks good. Great smile going too! Women totally dig that man, ya did good in your picture selection!
Ok, so let's talk "Interests"
You have a pretty good selection of things, most quite original and unique. So good work there!! The only thing I'd change is "cinema" (too vague) and throw in a few more of your interests. You can never have too many! lol
Otherwise, good job!!!
"About me" section, Lose the first paragraph. Sounds too much like a marketing ploy or a bad used car saleman pitch. Y-U-C-K! ha ha
Actually, yoru second paragraph looked best and I would suggest you start off with that one instead!!
Just a quick note, LOSE "...and as a result people tend to either like me or not, which is fine by me since I'd much rather be myself thank you very much." KInda rubs one the wrong way.
You have a sense of humor but it only showed briefly at the end "pretending to be good at the acoustic guitar" ha ha, use more of your sense of humor!! And loosen up just abit more.
Definitely continue to focus on the "about you"'s and less of who you seek. And without a doubt (and as you have) stay away from the negative stuff like what you do not want and such.
Your first date, good and original enough to spark a ladies interest I bet. So it's a keeper too, good work!
Now all you have to work on is your first contact e-mail to 'da ladies. Then you'll be in like Flynn!! | |
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| Texasbee (Review time)
Posted: 5/9/2005 12:23:45 PM | texasbee,
"Drinking Buddies"? Really? Seriously?
This is what you wanna use to attract someones attention? To catch their eye?
AND you are 18?? ha ha, you gotta be sh*ttin me!!
Your headline sucks, lose it, find another. Its not as much a reality as you may think to attract someone to be your drinking buddy especially if you are only 18 (which is illegal). Unless of course you are ferring to Kool-Aid as your drink of choice!!
Whether you are seeking the love of your life or your next best buddy, lose the headline. Get creative, and be original.
About your pics, I really really really like your primary picture. Looks great!
Your fourth one is a close second (nice smile, way to go!). Lose the rest. They are either miscolored, or has someone else in the pic, a definite Dr. Jack no-no! lol
"Dating Interests"
WTF are you thinking here? How is anyone suppose to know what you like and thusly believe you and he/she/it has something in common to talk about??
But thats ok, thats why you asked for my help. And so I shall offer you my suggestions here. ok?
"Dating Interests"
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.!
What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
For example, Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything so general and broad is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Ok, on to the "about me" section.
It is fair, if I were a teacher, I'd give you a D+.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too. The first sentence is the most important. Start it negative in any way, and it's a turn off for those you seek.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the exes or go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. This will give people an idea of what you are like and whether or not they have anything in common with you.
End this section with who you seek. What kind of person or people. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
Your first date is alright enough to keep it just as it is. Uniquely you! Good job | |
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| txredneckgal (Review time)
Posted: 5/9/2005 12:30:52 PM | txredneckgal
"WHISKEY GIRL SEARCHIN FOR WHISKEY GUY"
ha ha, well now. Up front about it ain't ya? ha ha, well, it's original enough, so it's a keeper I suppose. Hope you can back it up though.
Your pics:
1st, 5th and 7th pictures are keepers. Dump the rest. Those can be best served later, when you are actually in communication with someone.
"Dating Interests"
Not that great or original. "Offroading", "Nudding" and "cowboys" are. The rest, nope!
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
For example, Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything so general and broad is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Question, would it kill ya to use your spell checker? In your "About me" section, "i" should be "I". Ya know?
But hey, we all have something about our spelling I suppose.
Its obvious you like to drink and I suspect ALOT. So good you conveyed that adequately in this section.
I think this profile will serve you well as you intended. You are just looking for "friends" anyway, drinking buddies. So go with it. Just clean up the spelling some.
Your "First date" seems good enough. Definitely original. Its a keeper!!! | |
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| get2thechopper, the concummate profile? Pretty dang close!
Posted: 5/9/2005 12:41:39 PM | get2thechopper
ha ha, great primary pic!! ha ha
As for your profile, WTF?????????????????
"whats got Billy so spooked?"
Oh come on now, it is obvious you can do MUCH better than that for a headline.
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this "Nice guy/gal seeks..." stuff. Boring!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
About your pics, 1st, 3rd and 8th are definite keepers! (Great job!)
Lose the rest. Makes no sense, boring or confusing. Maybe save for a later date.
Uh oh, we may be hitting a bump in the road here.... "Marital StatusSeparated"
be truthful. What is the deal currently as you fill out your profile. If you are dating somebody, well? If you have been divorced for years and years... well? And if "separated", state such and then in your "about me" section, just briefly address how long ya been separated and when the divorce should be final.
"Dating Interests"
GREAT selection! How dayum, somebody actually did a great selection of original stuff (well except for the "movies", "reading" and "Music", dude!)
Real quick, This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
For example, Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything so general and broad is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed.
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
You did a great job, just go into specifics with your movies, music and reading! Super man!!!
You have an insane sense of humor, a definite original and unique profile. I gotta say that I, Dr. Jack himself, am damn impressed with most of it! Especially the "About me" section.
You even countered my previous assertions about your "interests" and went into detail about movies & music. Sunnuvagun! Almost, so very close to THE profile of the friggin week here!!!
Near the end of the "about me" however, it kinda nosedived.
Lose "however if u are one of those ones who sits in the food court for 3 hours w/ your bored kids, devouring 4 packs of smokes please move on. I really appreciate someone who puts forth the effort onto their kids & doesn't discard them.
Please no cheaters, control freaks, mindgames, drug users, heavy drinkers/smokers etc. Condescension is a big turnoff too"
Shy away from negative stuff. Its just a big ol waste of your time that could be better spent about you!
Also lose "I'm not really into barbie dolls either; if breaking a nail ruins your day, then I'm not your guy, and good luck to you"
Your "First Date", clean it up just a wee bit.
Keep it simpler, although I do appreciate your humor and the veriations you feature there too!
Good job overall, just a few tweaks here and there! | |
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| Isachicky (Review time)
Posted: 5/9/2005 4:47:38 PM | @ dj_lover01
Caught your profile again.
Not entirely enthused about your headlines.
Your dating Interests are still sorely lacking.
"About me" improved somewhat. Good job.
Good first date!
@ Xainos
Caught ya profile again too.
Slightly better "interests", but still have "music and movies"
"shoping" is spelled "shopping"
"virity of music", I think you meant "variety...."
Definitely improved "about me", great job there buddy! And some humor in there too as well as more laid back! Way to go!
"First Date", still needs work (specificity)
@ Lips, er um I mean bean01,
You are welcome for the review. Hope you get thangs worked out nicely and get ya a few bites.
And to Cndn swty,
aww thanks for the sticking up for the 'ol doc. your review is coming up, stay tuned!!
But first, Isachicky
Your headline, "Looking for someone to enjoy time with!"
This is what you hope to catch someones attention?
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
About your pictures, I like the second pic of you better, nice smile. I'd use it as your primary if I were you.
"Interests", you have three bague and generally broad things listed.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you should really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general i sopen to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
Ya done good for the most part, just a few tweaks necessary really.
Cut the following:
"I don't have time to play games"
"I'm not looking for someone to cling to"
These two things are a waste of your time and space. Its not like people will listen anyway. It's like asking a dishonest person to be honest only because you asked em to. Think it would work? nope, it will not.
"First Date"
Your is too vague. Come on, give us guys a clue as to what you might like.
Us guys appreciate you writing in the "first date" section how you'd basically leave it up to us guys or maybe even put "whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe some dancing, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was "whatever he wants".
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date. We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that point! | |
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| cndn_swty, your turn!
Posted: 5/9/2005 5:07:37 PM | cndn_swty
You are next.
Well now, your headline for starters. Good! Unique and creative! Good job!
You look reeeaalllyy good for 69 years old. Why ya put 69?? Change it. There are always time to make such jokes later. Besides, what if some old fart send you an e-mail and finds out you are really like 21 or something. You'll be responsible for shorting out ol boys pace maker! HA HA HA
Your pics, I like the first four. Ditch the rest as they are too distant, lit funny or have someone (ok ok, doggie) else in the pic too. lol
"Dating Interests"
Good selection. Can ya maybe add just a few more things?
"About me"
Really cool and original start!
The first part os ok, until you get into what friends say about you. Do you believe 'em? Do you have any thoughts of how you really are? So spill it! Go ahead, talk about yourself, how you see yourself. Its ok to talk about yourself some here. People wont think of you as vain. Just dont go crazy with it! ha ha
Lose "So what's wrong with me?: Well, I procrastinate, can be stubborn, and have an incredible weakness when it comes to animals and children. I guess that's not a bad thing though. LOL"
Good attempt, but perhaps best saved for the first or second e-mail, ya know?
Otherwise, looks pretty good.
As for your first date. pretty good. Unique and original. I like it. Great job!
Overall, just a few tweaks on your profile is needed. Thats it. See, that wasn't too painful, now was it? lol | |
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| Iamthewalrus review
Posted: 5/9/2005 5:38:03 PM | | Thanks for the comments. I've since rewritten my profile... any more tidbits of wisdom to share in order to improve it? | |
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| Another once-over?
Posted: 5/9/2005 8:16:09 PM | Could you check out my revised profile and help me hone it?
Honestly, I have no idea how you find time to do all this, but I appreciate it very much!
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| The QUEEN herselfs review.
Posted: 5/10/2005 4:45:24 AM | Your majest.... I mean Danceinpants,
With all due respect, are you serious? You want ME to review YOUR profile?!
And as payment for such a review, will I be led to the gallows in chains? Or perhaps the 'ol "little off the top..... from the neck up!" type service?
Dare I meet the Queens challenge?
Oh Hell yeah, and I'll do it right now. Queen Danceinpants, to the front of the line!!
Here goes, better brace yourself.
We'll start off with your headline, "good girl with a wild side"
Its almost original amd nearly creative. But I suspect you were holding back a little when putting together a headline to catch an eye or two. Care to add a little more juice to it? I am betting, deep in the recesses of my warped mind, that you will come up with a killer headline.
About your pictures, keep em. To be honest, your primary one is the one I have come to know and like a whole bunch! Well lit, have that blue glow aboutcha, and a strategic tattoo! What more could a guy ask for?! ha ha, TRES HOT!
Seriously though, Your pictures are fine, however. Would it kill ya to find one with a nice smile. Your second picture comes close.... but no cigar. Just a thought.
"Dating Interests"
wwweeelllllll.......... you have a few original and uniquely you things, such as "people watching", "Drama", & "burlesque". But the rest, Ms Queen Bee, is a bit on the vague and broad side.
"Art"? What kind of art? Modern? European 15th century? Oil or water color? Fingerpaints perhaps? lol
"Music", ah yes, one of the industry standards. What about it? You like to listen or play more? And what kind of music? Electronica? alternative? Rap? Specifics is the key.
"Movies"? Really now.
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with. You have about 17 things listed, but of those 17, about half are broad and generally vague.
You may think, "Why is a variety and specificity so darn important?"
Glad ya asked.
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Just a few thoughts for her Majesty!
"About me":
Nice start to this section, but perhaps you could share a little more about yourself, and convey to folks your general attitude. Do you really have a good sense of "humour"? (That is usually spelled "Humor" here in the states, not sure how it goes north of the border. But hey, if the Queen wants to spell it differently, then have at it! lol)
Watch the spelling, but don't be worried. We all have our spelling issues.
"travelled" should it not be spelled "traveled"?
Well, here in the states it is anyway ;o)
Question that may best be served answering in your "about me" section. Why do you get along well with artistic people and people from small towns?
So about your "First Date"
I like your thoughts and probably would change nothing. I would suggest keeping it simply (usually) but in your case, you worked it out well and explained nicely.
Your Majesty, your review is complete. I am ready for my knighthood now, it is pleases the Queen!
Now that I have done a royal service, perhaps, if the queen has time, review mine. It would only be fair. And please, feel free to post it here on my thread and/or yours. I'd be so honored m'Queen.
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