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| torturedgardener, your turn!
Posted: 5/13/2005 3:44:37 AM | | @ sopay, gotcha. I'll get your profile reviewed then.Thanks for breakin' it down for me! | |
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| Danien review
Posted: 5/13/2005 4:52:56 AM | Danien
"Whatever, Wherever, However"? THIS is your headline?
Well gee, very straightforward and decisive aren't ya? lol
Dude, Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this boring or bland stuff you have demonstrated here!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
Pictures:
Lose the dragon artwork. Can be best served later via e-mail. The rest of the pics are ok, although the lighting can be a little better. Dare I ask if you have any pics with you actually smiling somewhat?
"Dating Interests"
Most are vague and broad, like "music", "Computer", and "clubs".
What about 'em? Give more specifics. Wouldn't hurt ya any if you put about 5 more interests either. The more you put, the better your chances of someone taking a looksie and finding something in common with ya!
"About me", give us some more about yourself, who you are and your general outlook on life. Are you a bar hopper? You get a certain sense of that with your profile. Just wondering.
"First Date"
hheeeyyy, you got a sense of humor!! Why haven't you used it in your profile before this section? Jeez, go ahead, give it a go!! Loosen up and have fun! Be crazy, be fun and be original. | |
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| Danien review
Posted: 5/13/2005 4:59:41 AM | @ Valentino, or rather Valentino #2
Dude, did you know that there is another Valentino in POF and coincidentally enough, he too asked for his profile to be reviewed.
You want pointers? Drop me an e-mail, we'll see what we can do.
@ glennr52, you too dude. Tell me whats the prob.
@ vahn7ca, Yo dude, you are definitely on the right track now. Lookin good bud!
Still got "movies & TV" in there (remember, specifics!)
And "Rock"? ha ha, the wrassler, the music genre or the things found on the ground? I am just razzin ya! Seriously, looks better! Good job!
@ 100%me, thanks for clearing that all up.
@ torturedgardener, you're welcome! :o)
For the rest of ya who wants reviews, hang tight, help is on the way! | |
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| abby963 Review
Posted: 5/13/2005 5:30:00 AM | I cannot believe that I let a patient slip through the cracks! Damn HMO!! ha ha
abby963
Thanks for the reminder. I hope anyone else I may have forgotten in recent weeks reminds me as nicely as you did. Thanks.
Ok, so on with 'da review....
Your headline, "I just dont get it!"
And ya wont with that. Come on now, think. This is supposed to grab some folks attention. To catch their eye and entice 'em to read further into your profile, not read on to the next profile.
Your pics. GREAT primary pic. Good job. Nice smile, great color and lightning and just a really nice pic!
2nd pic, eehhh, its just ok. Third, much better. Lose the birds.
"Dating Interests"
My only beefs are "Movies and camping". Go read up a few pages in this thread. Get a better idea of what I have been saying over and over and over and over again. Specifics is the key!
What exactly about movies do you like? Making them? Burning 'em? Be more specific.
"About me"
"Well, I guess..." well I'd lose this. Just keep it natural.
Which really sounds better?:
"Well, I guess I would describe myself ..."
"I would describe myself..."
Kinda brief section, thats not a bad thing necessarily. Just maybe share a little more about yourself, your attitude and your outlook on things. If you have a sense of humor, well, it wouldn't hurt!!
"First Date"
Actually, though this is "typical", I think it fits just right for you if this is what you'd really like to do. Keep it as is. Good job.
So there ya go. Sorry for the delay. Maybe there was such a delay 'cuz your profile was just ssoooo darn good and I was afraid to mess with.... ok ok, so I dropped the ball :o) | |
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| electriclettuce77 review
Posted: 5/13/2005 5:42:55 AM | electriclettuce77
Ha ha, what a SN!!!!!
About your headline however, "LOCKSMITH, has key 2 your heart"
The sentiment is nice and all but really. How about this:
"Locksmith seeks lock to pick"
ha ha, KIDDING!
"Locksmith to make a key to your heart..."
or
"If you have the right lock, I got the key"
eh, I was never "perfect" at headlines myself. So have fun with it, be unique and stand out. It'll catch those eyes you seek!
Your pictures, good first and second picture. Change nothing here!
As for the rest, lose them! Why?
My rule for pics, numero uno "Never ever feature a pic with anyone other than you. It can cause distractions and hell, it may even get your posing buddy a date over you!" lol
Number 2: It is frowned upon to post a pic of any kind featuring kids. And on a dating website too? Tres BAD!
Thanks for answering the "drugs" question honestly. It may earn ya some points despite.
As for your interests, "cars movies music beaches friends family"
ok, boring and vague, see previous, ok, ok, & ok for generalities anyway.
a) Use a comma after each interest listed. This will create a nice neat list for people to read.
b) Lose vague and broad things like movies and music.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.! What are you interested in? Its that simple really. Example: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies", as you did.
A general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone! Crazy, I know.
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
I am sure you can guess what my opinion here is.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too. The first sentence is the most important. Start it negative in any way, and it's a turn off for those you seek.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to any of the exes or go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
"First Date"
Hhmmm, watch your spelling.
Keep it simple.
Might I suggest:
"Drinks on a patio followed by a leisurely stroll through the park. Just take it slow at first
And there ya go! | |
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| Mynipplering review
Posted: 5/13/2005 5:51:20 AM | Mynipplering
Ha ha, shoot, just use your SN as your headline, you'll be set! ha ha, it's original enough, I'll give ya that!
Your headline, it comes awfully close to being a winner. So I have to say it's a keeper!! lol
Ok, so about your pics. I really really like your primary pic. GREAT SMILE!
good job.
Your other pictures however.... nope.
Keep the 5th, 6th & 8th, lose the rest as they are either too dark, or have more than one person (you) in it.
"Dating Interests"
You actually only wrote "Humorous people".
Thats it? That is all that interests you in the entire known universe? Funny people?
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.And you have fumbled here.
So what are you really interested in? Its that simple really. How many different things (helps to also be specific).
How ya gonna make friends if you don't put stuff here. People wont know whether or not you and they have anything of similar interests and thusly, they'll just go to the next profile.
"About me"
The first half, good. The second half.... suckaroo!
Stay away from the negative stuff as to what you find unattrative or turn offs. Do you really think those types of losers will not contact you just 'cuz you said so? Nope, not gonna happen.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too. The first sentence is the most important. Start it negative in any way, and it's a turn off for those you seek.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the exes or go on and on about what you do not want from a person or what you do not like. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
"First Date"
You kept it simple. Good job!!!
Alrighty then, I am punching outta here for a spell. | |
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| Mynipplering review
Posted: 5/13/2005 6:12:13 AM | mynipplering, meet electriclettuce77, electriclettuce77 meet mynipplering
Nipplering is in Winterpeg Manitoba
Electric is in Guelph Ontario
Ok, so there is a bit of distance between ya two, but ya strike me as definitely two people who should be talking to each other!!
Go ahead you two crazy kids. Get 'ta talking already!
eh, thats my two cents anyway. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 7:54:01 AM | | man if people are goin round sayin u shud do this, have this, show this on your profile an gettin them to change it how on earth r people meant to be themselves, are they actually showin wat they want an who they are or wat the ladies.men think or is this jus based on your opinion jack mack, wat u think is gud wat u like | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 8:06:32 AM | Not really sure what you are saying here bud but let me clue you in one a very important aspect of this whole thread.
Its an OPINION based on OBSERVATIONS. Thats all.
No college bound stuff, no degrees and diplomas and such to profess. Just common sense, mixed with some humor, straight talk and opinions.
Now some could say "do this exactly as I say" type stuff, but thats ridiculous. Everyone is different and responds differently.
All I do is have 'em clean up their profile some. To be more honest with themselves as well as with those who dare read their profile. I may offer a suggestion from time to time too, but they can either take everything, half the things or nadda thing that I suggest. Thats it, in a nutshell.
That still a prob for ya? And yeah I know, you want me to check out your profile and give ya my spin. Thats cool, but it's gonna be a day or so. I gots plenty ahead of ya! lol
Later
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 8:26:32 AM | lol nah its ok JM no need to check mine, i see where your comin from an i do respect wat u r doin, as i say i mean no dis respect, i jus dont see how u can help them without knowing anythin of them an doin things to other peoples liking isnt really them being themselves
that's all, an now you've explained it more to me i understand an respect what your doin alot more tho still stick to my opinion, if i come across as a bit of a t,w,a,t then well, i come across as that i really dont mean no harm, an some of ya stuff is funny so credit due there | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 10:22:28 AM | Ah thanks CS, I appreciate it and understand what you are saying too. But do not be confused, my review is not about them per sey, only of what the wrote within the confines of their profile. Ya know? Thats all I was sayin'.
Thanks for 'spressin your opinion though. Its not right or wrong, just as is. I can dig that!
And yeah, I got some good zingers in some of my reviews. Sometimes, they just be asking for it! lol | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:02:53 PM | | Kim it's perfect it's you, do you really care what others think, do you care that I think your hot and wonderful and thanks for the advice. In exchange for your advice when you know what is over I'll buy ya dinner anywhere you want. K? | |
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| terryf2005 review
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:03:56 PM | terryf2005
Time for the your review. Are you seated? Need some straps to hold ya down? ha ha
Your headline "looking to settle down"
Well now, there is a scary type headline. I'd lose it faster than a New York Minute. Yah yah!
Come on now, think think think! Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this Boring stuff ya got here!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
About your pic, it's alright.The lighting sucks though, has a greenish hue to it. Please find another and maybe one with you actually looking into the camera. And a smile. You have the traces of one in the pic, but come on now, give us more!
"Dating Interests"
BORING! Lose em.
Why?
"traveling movies museums
and dininng "
So whats so original about these? They are vague, general and broad. Be more specific. And add lots more interests too. Never can hurt. I'd suggest you reading a few of the reviews I've given in recent days and it may help paint a better picture for you not to mention give you more ideas. And watch the spelling. "dininng"? What is that? Anything similar to "dining"? lol
"About me"
To be honest, I feel it is more of a checklist or perhaps that you are ordering from a menu board than free flowing thought.
Come on lady, loosen up! Get crazy, fun and original. Be you!
You focused within the one paragraph 90% about who you seek and 10% of things about you. Try 90% about you, what you're about, your general attitude and maybe a few more interests. Then 10% of who you seek.
"First date" it is ok enough to keep. Good job. | |
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| lucky_4_ever review
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:22:53 PM | lucky_4_ever
your headline, "Hoping to meet someone interesting!!"
Nnnnaaahhh, you can do WAY better tan this desparate sounding stuff. Com eon guy, loosen up and use that ol gray matter! Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this Boring stuff you got going currently!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
You live in India? Whew, thats quite a stretch away from North America. I think I reviewed another guys profile and he was from India too.
So I gotta remember that the thinking processes over there are a wwweeee bit different than over here.
Noticed ya didn't have any pics. Pictures: A definite must have. I hate it, I really really do, but it is a must. Most (a generalization) people will not even bother with a profile unless there is a pic. Rude and Crude, I know. But it is as it is.
So getcha a picture or two and put it up in your profile. Be sure:
a) it is nothing with bad lighting,
b) a group picture or it is not a picture with more than one (YOU) in it,
c) Dont feature your kid, cars or pets.
d) Wouldn't kill ya to smile!
"Do you drink?Prefer Not To Say"
The answer is always assumed "yes" when "prefer not to say". So whats the prob here? You forget to answer? Or ashamed for whatever reason? Just fess up, answer the question and move on. Do ya or dont ya?
"Dating Interests"
dating hang out fun
Suck suck suck
Be more specific.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you really show your stuff or really fumble and make the person lose interest.! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
For example, Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything so general and broad is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Heck, if ya listed enough interests, I'd be rather interested in having a new friend, especially all the way over there in India. But of course you have little details about yourself, so how do I know we have anything in common to talk about?
"About me"
Eh, needs some work there Manav. State more about yourself in the first person and drop kick this "have been told that I am ....." to the curb.
WTF is an "Ambivert"????? You sure you wanna use words that no one else will know what they mean?
ambivert. n. someone who is both extroverted and introverted. You think most people know this? They may think instead you are an ambitious pervert. lol
Lose it, doesn't make sense. Sounds like you wont be able to make up your mind, or be a fence sitter.
You have a nice positive attitude that comes across, so that is great. Just tweak things a little here, ok?
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| No-Nonsense, review time
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:32:58 PM | Alrighty, No-Nonsense is in my line of sight!
Pat my man, whats up?!!
Your profile, "Think how much we stand to gain" is not up to snuff. Come on, you can come up with a little more creativity than that, can't ya?
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this quasi-boring stuff ya got here!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
About your pics,
ya know, I like your primary pic the best! Good job there. Good smile and all that. Bravo.
The other pics however, lose the 2nd and 4th, as they are not lit well or you are at a distance. The rest are alright.
"Do you drink?Prefer Not To Say"
"Prefer Not To Say" always always always equals in peoples mind YES. Unanswered questions also indicate something to hide. Not a good first impression my friend. Answer the question and move on.
"Dating Interests"
Great variety, good job!!
BUT...... (doncha hate when someone sticks a big ol stinky butt in after a compliment? lol)
"movies..... reading..... camping". Arg Charlie Brown, these suck. Why? Because they are quite broad and vague. Get specific.
Otherwise, you have a great variety of things, great job!!
"About me"
You know, your profile was keeping a pretty good pace.... until your first sentence in this section.
(Hey, atleast it wasn't a big stinky but!)
LOSE "If your looking to find a man that..."
Take ownership!
"I am a man who is responsible, independent, honest, smart, serious about life, and all that goes with it."
Yeah, thats the ticket!!
I think the rest is pretty ok, although I'd hold back on some of the stuff you shared. Best saved for the first or second e-mail.
Hold back perhaps on what you do for a living, not ashamed of making mistakes and such.
"First Date"
Ok ok, guys listen up.
Here's the deal. Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative. And don't write "whatever the lady would like". No no. Oh sure, sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guys, let's have a contingency plan at the vert least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here brothers! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dudes! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know?
Alright, thats it. nnneeexxxtttt??!!!! | |
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| TheMayor review
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:39:04 PM | TheMayor
Your headline, "WANTED: Heroine"
You trying to get drugs here on POF? Shame on you dude. You know you can't.... oh wait, you mean a lady hero. ha ha, funny. LOSE IT.
Come up with someone more creative and less likely to be confused with something illegal! lol
Your pics, lose the primary one. Looks like a blurry mug shot.
Use your third one as your primary, until you get better shots of you.
"Do you have children?Prefer Not To Say"
What, you don't know if you have kids? Well thats not good to admit. Maybe make a change to your answer here.
In your "About me" section, the reader learnes zilch about you and even lower the motivation to respond to you. Oh sure, you have a cutsie "wanted" type set up, but why would someone wanna respond to ya when you shared absolutely nothing about yourself here?
Where are your dating interests? Nothing is listed. Again, hows somebody suppose to know if they have any reason whatsoever to e-mail you? There i s no way to tell if they have anything in common with you. And it is much easier to ignore you than e-mail and ask what you like to do and possibly find out you have something in common or not.
My ultimate suggestion" REVAMP completely". | |
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| TheMayor review
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:46:08 PM | | Doesn't creativity count for anything? | |
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| Sopay turns
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:52:55 PM | Yo Sopay
You're up next in the bull pen
So about your headline, "who you lookin at? i'll kick ur a$$..."
I'll give ya props that it catches the eye alright. lol
But maybe the wrong kinda eye, know whut I mean?
Maybe go at it in a different direction. 'Course it's totally up to you.
So about your pics, dude, you have one pic that looks just all black. Lose it. Nobody can see nothing. Is it the pic of the stars or something?
ha ha, and there is one of a kid, that you? ha ha, pretty slick!
"Dating Interests"
Great variety you got listed, great work! And a lot of it is uniquely you. Original, good work!
Just a quickie, "movies, music & reading"? Too general. Get a little more specific. What about 'em? What do you like to listen to, read and watch?
"About me"
Watch your spelling first. Oh sure, we all have our little spelling errors, so no worries really. Just clean it up a bit, ya know?
You really seem to keep it all mostly positive and give a good bead about yourself.
Well, except a few parts where I'd suggest losing, like "i don't give a rats a$$ about what other people think of me. " & ""all the gossipers and liars can burn in the fires"
You get the idea.
Alright then, thats the lowdown on all that. Take from it whatcha may. I am out! | |
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| TheMayor review
Posted: 5/13/2005 12:54:01 PM | | Creativity? Sure. But about you, not what you seek? It would have been interesting to see you do the same format.... but about yourself instead. Now THAT would have been interesting to say the least! Give it a go! | |
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| TheMayor review
Posted: 5/13/2005 1:36:45 PM | Okay...I srrender...Do me please and thank you and be kind....I`m a nice girl...redneckgirl133 | |
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