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| TheMayor review
Posted: 5/13/2005 1:37:11 PM | | That would be `surrender`...LOL | |
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| Isachicky review
Posted: 5/13/2005 3:23:10 PM | | LOL...I thought i had changed the headline...OOOPS...it went through this time...thanks for the advice | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/13/2005 3:33:27 PM | Hey jack mack,
Wondering if you could take a look at my profile. I know I hardly have anything written there...but I was wondering if you could gimme a few pointers as what else to write (and what NOT to write). If you could, that'd be real great. thanks! | |
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| Mynipplering review
Posted: 5/13/2005 4:01:45 PM | Thnx Jack. Much appreciated. I will get on to fixing my profile right away...
And you're right, eletriclettice looks pretty kewl! | |
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| Sopay turns
Posted: 5/13/2005 4:39:26 PM | | thankx fer tha constructive criticism. i made those spelling errrrrs on purpose. it shows i'm not picky about details. imma reformed perfectionist. why strive to be something that you'll never be? i understand what you ment by the two quotes. but imma leave them in. just because i'm a positive person with a smig of harshness. if it doesn't present hardness then it's probably not the word i mean. my title might bring on the wrong ppl but whatever. i'll weed them out on my own. once again, much appreciated | |
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| sean's turn....
Posted: 5/13/2005 4:50:52 PM | any chance of looking at my profile and ripping it to pieces please... sorry i meant constructive criticism?? 
thank you.....
sean (the ever hopeful!!) | |
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| No-Nonsense, review time
Posted: 5/13/2005 10:03:44 PM | thanks alot man!!!! it's nice to get such detailed feedback. Way to go and keep it up.. Neat service your providing here!
Patrick, | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/14/2005 2:41:27 PM | Hi Jack,
I'm a newbie here and not quite sure what to put in my profile. Don't want to say too much, but don't want to say too little either. Would appreciate any advice you could offer.
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| ONT75 review
Posted: 5/15/2005 5:36:19 AM | ONT75
About your headline, "Looking for perfection"...
Not setting your expectations too high now are ya? Tone it doen a notch dude! "Perfection" can be overratted as well as never achived.
Please consider this: Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination. "Looking for perfection", well, that just ain't gonna catch it!
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
Your pictures, I like your primary and the 3rd one you have in your profile. Good smile and close up enough to attract, far enough away for folks to not think you're a stalker! ha ha
The other picstures however, lose em. I am no fan of people featuring pictures with kids in 'em. Definite no-no. The other two, well, too distant and your doggie is in one. Best saved for later!
"Dating Interests"
tsk tsk tsk here dude!
"children"??? THIS is your interests? GROSS! ha ha ha. Ok Mr. Jackson, lose this or further explain yourself in the "about me" section. Know whut? Don't even. Just lose this entirely. Your first contact e-mail or possibly your second can cover whatever you meant here.
"Reading, writing"??
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you should really show your stuff or go down in flames! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING!
Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya everytime.
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping/outdoors
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
Otherwise you have a good variety of things.
In your "About me" section, just a little tweaking here, ok?
(Rewrite) "I’m also enjoy spending time at home..."
"sitting out back with a glass of wine or 3"
equals LUSH. I applaud your attempt at humor, but you can do better than this.
LOSE "I have grown tired and annoyed with the bar/club scene, too many agendas"
too negative. From this point, this section starts on a decline in interests as well as shifts focus away from you.
"Anyone I date must be intelligent, have a good sense of humour, open minded and witty"
Ok seriously, you are "looking for perfection", PLUS a woman who has all these qualities. I have yet met a woman anywhere at any time who is that self confident of herself to meet all these criteria 100%.
"First Date"
Keep it simple.
"a cafe to begin, and depending on the comfort level go from there"
Perfection there bud. Now if you could only tweak the rest of it all and you'll be good to go and ready for your first contact e-mail. | |
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| Lonelyguy review
Posted: 5/15/2005 5:49:04 AM | lonley_guy
Change this SN and immediately. Sounds dreadful. Come on dude, come up with something original, not borderline pathetic. ok?
Your headline, "how about a romantic date ladies"
Think this is what will catch a ladies eye? To capture ones attention and incite them to read further on your profile and not just read further on to the next profile?
Let us not forget Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
None of this "Nice guy/gal seeks..." stuff and sure as heck not whatcha got for a HL. Boring!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. And remember, Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to go reading further of someones profile.
Your picture, it's alright. YOu have the smile going, so what can one say? Its a keeper.
"Profession don't worrie about it"
Two things wrong with this.
1) ATTITUDE UP THE WAZOO
2) Mispelling does not look kindly upon you/ "worrie" is "worry".
There is something called Word, and within MS Word there is this cool feature called "spell check". My advice, put together your profile on word, then use spell check, then copy and paste the bad boy onto POF. Simple, right?!
Dont stress out over the mispellings though, we all have the same prob!
"Dating Interests"
you have "fun and romantic minture golf bowling movies"
This are just plain wrong and I'll tell ya why.
1) "minture golf"?? Is that anything like "miniature golf"??
2) after each item of interest, hit your comma (,) button. This will arrange a nice listing for you and easier for folks to read.
3) You have nothing specific other than golf and bowling. You need a wider variety of things listed.be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I
would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has
many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired,
these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target,
ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance of hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list
(and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something
in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail
is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
Too general and vague and doesn't really tell much about you, what you're about and your general attitude towards things. YOu did expand slightly on some of your interests however, so that was good.
In the about me section, well This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to
express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like.
Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to an ex or go on about what you DON'T want or what you are NOT
looking for in a person. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for
later, after the first contact e-mail. Negativity, Its a big 'ol waste of time that
can be better served talking more of yourself.
Just Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
"First Date"
Is that really what you'd want to do on a first date or are you just going with the industry response of dinner and a walk?
If you really think that'll do it, then go with it. Otherwise, I'd suggest try something a little more original, more you and what you'll really like to do. To be honest, I suspected a game of miniature golf somewhere in that first date. lol, seriously! | |
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| Kimber03 review
Posted: 5/15/2005 6:10:28 AM | Kimber03,
Being that you seem to be just looking for friends, this review should be quick and so very easy.
Your pictures are nice, Your "Dating Interests" are good, some very good specifics there although "reading" & "surfing the 'net" could possibly be expanded some.
Expnad also the "about me" section to tell more about yourself. One definitely gets a sense from you that you are generally a happy person ("90% of the time" lol) and I bet you have an insane sense of humor too. Use it here, really show off! lol
Question: Whats the deal with the last sentence, "Don't bother if you are living together, dating, married. Yes, it says hang out...but I just don't go there. "??
Do ya really think thouse folks who are married or in a relationship will be honest enough to admit it as they puruse looking for a li'l somethin somethin on the side, or are you talking you just don't wanna put up with the possibility of a jealous significant other getting all up in your face and such despite nothing going on?
"First Date"
Almost perfect. I would change nothing! Great job there!
And I too am a fan of Gordon's. Just an FYI side note ya'll! :o)
So there ya go! | |
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| Redneckgirl review
Posted: 5/15/2005 6:18:51 AM | Yo 'Red, Is that really you or your evil twin?
I am honored! Wow, cool!
"A few good men..."
Eh, it's catchy enough for a headline. I'd probably keep it.
About your pictures, lose the 2nd and 4th. Too dark and you are at a distance. AND there are other folks mucking up the purty pics! lol
"Dating Interests"
You have "movies dinners in & out friends and family "
Yuck! Not very original nor specific.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where
you could really show your stuff or go down in flames! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING!
Be more specific as
"reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation
and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, lyou actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been
made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many
different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you
really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be
specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy
movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific.
This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should
you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not
avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you
like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I
would go with. Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has
many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired,
these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target,
ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list
(and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something
in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail
is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
Well, you started off well in the first sentence, but then started downhill.
About this "told I`m attractive, witty, intelligent.." stuff. Do you believe it? If so, take ownership of it and write "I am attractive, witty, intelligent.."
If you do not believe it, lose it.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to
express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like.
Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who
you seek. What kind of person. Stay positive!
"First Date"
Well now, this is the second profile within like 3 reviews where I find the "first date" nearly perfect and would suggest changing nothing! Great job! | |
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| flame_tiger86 review
Posted: 5/15/2005 6:25:58 AM | flame_tiger86
Your headline got cut off, "Be yourself; who else is better qualifie"
Come up with something a little better and original anyway.
As for your pictures, I like your 1st and 3 rd pictures best. Why? Because they look like how you would be almost everyday. And a good smile too!
"Dating Interests"
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where
you should really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that
simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as
"reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation
and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been
made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many
different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you
really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be
specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy
movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific.
This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should
you meet someone!
"Dinner". Yeah, there is a real specific interest too. Wanna even start to
imagine how many different types of dinners and foods and scenarios
there are? One would geta headache just trying. Again, specifics!!!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not
avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you
like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I
would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has
many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired,
these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target,
ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list
(and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something
in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail
is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
Now I am confused here. You stated you were looking for guys to "hang out" with, yet in your "about me" section, "I'm just looking for someone that gives me butterflies and makes my heart skip a beat every time I see them"
So ummm, which is it? Friends or more? Maybe start off as friends? Wouldn't hurt to clear this up some.
You give a fairly good account of what you are like and your general attitude, but feel you switch to what you seek too soon and not focus on yourself as much.
"First Date",
This part is subjective I thinks.
But usually, I suggest to 'da ladies that We appreciate you writing in
the "first date" section how most leave it up to us guys or maybe even ut
"whatever" in this section but you know, it really helps us out a lot if you
give us a clue what you might consider. You see, it would be dreadful for
all involved if you were the type who expected a nice dinner and maybe
some dancing, but we took you skydiving instead because all you said was
"whatever he wants". lol
That may make for a bad first date especially for someone who is terrified
of heights. ha ha.
So all I am saying here is help us out just a bit. Give us a direction in which
to go. Clue us in on what you would really like to do on the first date.
We'll take it from there, I think we'll be able to handle things from that
point!
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on,
for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in
an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the
changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it
may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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| sean's turn....
Posted: 5/15/2005 6:35:24 AM | sarcastic spice,
Your turn at the torture rack.... er um I mean the exam table.
Your headline, "Tall, Dark.. and 2 out of 3 isn't bad "
Funny! A definite keeper. Good job there!
So about your pictures.
Lose the second one (too distant and dark)
fourth one (ha ha, WTF, that really you "as is"???)
and the last one (do ya really want that one as a pic to attempt to impress?)
"About me"
Good start thanking those who read.
"bought a house here now so you can't get rid of me either....."
Let's shorten that up some to read "bought a house here now!"
Less weird and oddly.
The next paragraph was boffo, so thats a keeper.
Drop this "i know how shallow some of you are :-) " stuff. Those who are never admit it, those who aren't may feel plenty offish. ha ha
Lose this "and a fondness for alcohol are beginnig their toll just a wee bit..)" Maybe save that for later e-mails. MUCH later!
The rest of this section was great! Good good job!
If I may suggest one more thing. Watch the spelling, specifically "i" should be "I". There is a few mispelled woeds in this section too, but you go back over it and correct them bad boys you should be good to go!
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| ozu2003 review
Posted: 5/16/2005 5:19:29 PM | @ kimber03, You are welcome :o)
@ lonley_guy, "Any better"? Nope, still needs a whole lotta work!
@ Mywaterisnotshallow, better, mucho better amigo!
Ok, so now on to more reviews....
ozu2003, Dude, your headline, "want to learn more"
Are you saying you want to learn more or a question for the fair ladies if they'd like to learn more? Not very good headline, try again.
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
None of this boring stuff ya gots now!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. And remember, Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to go reading further of someones profile.
Being that you're in India and that your culture may be a little different, AND you are only looking for friends, all that I can offer is your "dating Interests" needs to have much more (and more specific) things listed.
Being you only look for friends, delete "first date" as it makes no sense to have it in there. | |
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| me now
Posted: 5/16/2005 5:25:49 PM | | Jack can you help me?Check mine out. | |
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| Basset Hound review
Posted: 5/16/2005 5:27:24 PM | Basset Hound
Your headline, "What's A Guy Gotta Do?".... hmmm, this could be a double meaning. Curious enough, I'd keep it. Good deal!
Your pictures, well I gotta say. Your primary is near perfect. Good smile and great lightning. Leave as is. To be honest, lost the other two pics as I am no fan of anyone showing pics of their kids online. Kinda creepy and weird. Drop 'em! Save them for later e-mails.
Your dating interests. YOU HAVE NONE listed. Does this mean you have nothing that interests you in the entire universe? lol.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you could really show your stuff or you fall flat on your face! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
"Drop "really dislike pessimists". Why go there? Stay away from the negatives like that.
This section overall is ok, but a little brief.
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Don't go referring to the ex & and please do not go on about what you DON'T want or what you are NOT looking for in a person. This is a bigas* turnoff and it can be best left for later, after the first contact e-mail. Negativity, Its a big 'ol waste of time that can be better served talking more of yourself.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
What? No "first date"??
Ya gotta put something. Here's the deal. Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative. And don't write "whatever the lady would like". No no. Oh sure, sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guys, let's have a contingency plan at the vert least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here brothers! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know?
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. From this point on, for those who want reviews, ya better have read this post first. And then in an e-mail to me or post on the thread you've read this and made the changes accordingly before I even start your review. Otherwise, well, it may be a loonnnggg wait in the doctors' waiting room! lol | |
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