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| verypicky review
Posted: 5/19/2005 12:42:07 PM | VP, your turn.
"just lookin around" eh? Lie lie lie! lol
Seriously though, is this the best headline you can come up with? THIS was the best you came up with to catch someones attention?
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention.
None of this boring stuff you got here. Its a snoozer!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to get to reading further of someones profile.
About your pictures. I have one thing to say about it. They suck, with a caveat (an exception). Only because you have a kid in the picture with you. I frown on those who show pics of their kids on the internet. Its creepy somehow. Do you not have any pictures of yourself whatsoever without your bouncing baby boy?
Yeah yeah, he's cute alright. Oh I see. You using him to attract the ladies? ha ha, thats sick man!
So you see, thats two thoughts I came up with regarding your pics. Imagine what others may think. Just sharing a thought. Seriously guy, think about featuring any pic of you with your kid.
Your "Interests"
Hey, you have nothing listed. You have no interests? Gosh, you must be one boring dude! lol, of course you have interests. So list 'em. Need some help? Look at other profiles, see what they put. Perhaps you'll gets ome inspiration.
Here are some thoughts to remember:
What are you interested in?
It's that simple really.
For example, Perhaps you like reading.
DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything so general and broad is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya every time.
Example #2: let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-emn-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you do you enjoy.
Another idea is to be sure to have lots of things listed.
8 or 10 is what I would go with. Why?
Its the shotgun theory. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
Gosh, you took almost as many sides of a coin as Kerry did, and in less time and words too! I am impressed! lol
"About me"
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too. The first sentence is the most important. Start it negative in any way, and it's a turn off for those you seek.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. You did a fair job in your profile.
The Don'ts:
1) Don't go referring to the exes or what they were like or how they treated ya.
2) Don't be tentative. "I think", "Maybe", "Should".
3) Be assertive. "My friends tell me that I am funny." No no, Take control of it. Make it your own. Either believe it and write "I am funny" or leave it out entirely.
4) Avoid listing who you DONT want. "I don't want liars, or those who play games."
Do you rreeaaallllyyy believe those people will not respond to you just because you said so?
5) Dont be negative. "I hate how my hair looks", or "I may not be all that but....."
Always always always makes you look worse.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
Ok, so thats that. | |
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| travelgirl75459 Review
Posted: 5/19/2005 4:01:48 PM | thank you jack ....
I will update my profile severly now....LOL.... I appreciate your honesty
thanks again and 
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| travelgirl75459 Review
Posted: 5/19/2005 4:22:30 PM | | Thanks Jack, I appreciate all your advice and will work at updating my profile. Its cool that you take the time to do this for people!! | |
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| everybody's profile
Posted: 5/19/2005 4:39:42 PM | I just wanted to point out an area where some people might be able to improve their profile.
I concerns message limitations; if you set them too tight somebody that might be perfect for you just out of your specification can't contact you and they'd give up. Say you limit it to 75 miles and they live 100 miles away, or you specify 36 and they are 35. Maybe you specify male and there's a female that just happens to know the perfect guy for you or might just want to talk and become a friend. Are you sure you don’t want any friends of the same sex? Or maybe friends that are older than what you want for a mate?
So think about all those things, because the message limitations are hard and fast rules with no flexibility like all the other stuff that you say you want. These aren't wants, they are absolutes. | |
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| A Review
Posted: 5/19/2005 6:28:17 PM | Jack Mack you can go over my profile if you like. I'm sure you'll find plenty to criticize.
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| A Review
Posted: 5/19/2005 8:11:18 PM | @ninki: Good to see you here  | |
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| everybody's profile
Posted: 5/20/2005 5:31:05 AM | jheldatksuedu
You know, I have taken for granted that folks here have a modecum of senses with regards to those things you pointed out, but to be honest the more profiles I see, the more I have to agree with you that some folks are not aware that these restrictions they themselves place will in turn limit them. Then they wonder what the deal is as to why no one e-mails 'em!
So you are right, and I need to point these things out as well in reviews. Kind of a reminder.
Good call! | |
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Joined: 4/18/2005
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 5/20/2005 11:59:25 AM | @ Phyzzer, This has got to be one of my shortest ever glimpses into a profile. Whether your profile is truthful or just a bunch of hilarious BS, either way, can ya really go wrong? lol
I would suggest however losing the headline. I am POSITIIVE you can do MUCH better than that! But you were holding back, weren't ya? lol
@ Palpatine, ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha, your profile, ha ha ha ha, good, ha ha ha ha ha, funny, ha ha ha ha ha, definitely original, ha ha ha, a keeper, ha ha ha ha ha
:::: Deep breath:::::
Ok ok, on to more serious folk's profiles.
@ smart/sensitive,
Yep, I do all this for free and for the hell of it. Just doing my part to help folks find a fishy here. I caught myself a once in a lifetimer in the last couple of months (yep, ladies, JM is off 'da market..... break out the black ribbons and start with the water works! lol) so why not try to help others do the same. Its a public service. I hope I can get credit on my taxes! ha ha.
Ok, so about your profile.....
Your headline, "Be happy, NOW!"
You askin' or you tellin'?? Whats that about?
YOu can do better, try again. Remember, Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
Your picture, well, it sucks. But only because I am unsure of thats your kid and in mid-hug or ya going the cheap route on lifting weights! lol, well, I am no fan anyway of people featuring pictures on POF with their kids in the pics. Its creepy. You have no other picture whatsoever of you alone?
"Profession I am the rubber man."
ha ha, this has dual connotations! But keep it!!
Your Interests:
"literature martial arts Friends music small shiney objects"
Vague, interesting, boring, zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
Come on guy, get specific and original. "Literature"?? Really now. And what kind type or variety? Ancient 13th Century Persian porn? Or maybe 22 BC Asian writings describing the art of leaf weaving?
Be more specific.
Same goes for music.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you should really show your stuff! What are you interested in? Its that simple really.
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
There are a few ways one can spell out that they are either boring or lack imagination. I think the most common I have seen in profiles at POF is "easy going laid back sort of person..."
Can you possibily try a little harder as to what to start this section with?
If anything, why not "I am smart and funny (I hope) and I am looking to meet someone cool. I LOVE FRIDAY!"
(Lose the "I Hope" stuff... too tentative and unsure of yourself.)
This is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
Ok, "First Date". Just a few tips here.
First, keep it simple.
"a trip to the zoo then the mall for coffee and conversation".
Second, dude, we are the guys and certain expectations are held of us. Here's the deal. Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative. And don't write "whatever the lady would like". No no. Oh sure, sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guys, let's have a contingency plan at the very least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here brothers! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly too, ya know?
Ok, so there ya have it. My points and helpful hints. | |
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| rainy_day1975 review
Posted: 5/20/2005 12:08:48 PM | rainy_day1975
I like your SN, nice.
Ok, about your headline, "Available: one low maintenance geek"
You so crazy! I like it, keep it as is. original enough alright.
Your picture, eh, it's alright really. But do you have one perhaps featuring you with a better smile? And perhaps not work involved?
"Marital StatusSeparated"
Now you are aware that this status may inpact the amount of responses you get, right? It wouldn't hurt to put in your "about me" section somewhere how long you've been separated and when the divorce is expected to be finalized. Might help your case.
"Dating Interests"
well well well well well, somebody has been paying attention in class!!!!!
Great varieties, good originality and definitely you. Keep it exactly as is! Good work!
"About me"
Some of it is a little in the hogher realm of thinking and many guys might not get it. I have a fairly high IQ and I do not get "Embrace the uniqueness that makes you, you and me, me. Sheesh, now I sound like Beaker."
How does one "sound" like a beaker? What is a beaker other than what can be found in a lab?? lol, sometimes ya gotta dumb it down some! ha ha
I liked most of this section, you did a very nice job.
I would however seriously consider holding off with the "I'm also a klutz..." stuff. Maybe best served for a second or third e-mail. Oh sure, I get it that you simply want to convey that you are aware that you are human. But why put this in your profile that is to put forth a certain impression that will inevitably cast a lesser than bright impression.
Overall, I liked this section with the above two exceptions. Good job. So how many guys you got lined up around the corner of your building or clogging up your e-mail? Not too shabby!
"First Date"
Pretty good. You gave some good direction as to where to go and what to do. Us guys need direction from time to time, especially with this. Once you give us a certain direction, thats when we'll really run with it though! ha ha
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| OptimumTaurus review
Posted: 5/20/2005 12:18:03 PM | OptimumTaurus
Now here is an interesting headline, "Valar morghulis"
Who you calling a "Valar" chump? ha ha, kidding!
So whats it mean?
Or is that your attempt at a hook, to get someone to be curious enough to e-mail you? I suspect it doesn't work too well. I'd change it and save this for your first contact. That'll impress the hell out of em then, but not here and now, in your headline.
Your pictures, Actually you already know what I was gonna say. Smile dammit! ha ha.
But of the pics you have, I think you look best in the second picture (red shirt). Consider using this as your primary pic. The one you have now makes you look pissed and ready to throw down on a person! lol
"Dating Interest"
EXCELLENT WORK!
Great variety and originality!
Question, is "blaxploitation" what I think it is? And you really wanna put that in as an INTEREST????
"About me"
Awww man, you started to slip from the get go. Dang it.
LOSE "I'm a kind of laid-back guy with a lot on his mind, but like us all,"
See the previous post I put for the last guy who used this line. It smacks of boring and a totaly snoozers. And to be honest, just based on your interests, I am sure that just ain't you! Dude, lose the sentence!
To be honest I think the rest is ok. You get a good idea of what you're about. You could focus just a bit more on than and less on your tatts. Although I get the importance to you of them and why you felt it necessary to write of them here instead of waiting for the first or second e-mail. 6 of one, half dozen of the other I suppose.
Good job here too.
"First Date":
I think it is best to keep it brief here.
"Club for drinks, dinner for conversation and maybe even catch a movie" | |
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| teddah review
Posted: 5/20/2005 12:29:04 PM | Time for teddah,
Dude, whats the deal with your headline? It sucks (and mispelled). Can't ya come up with something better?
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
Your picture:
You gotta be kidding me here. You have a pic of you actually yawning? lol, WTF were you thinking?
You have a pic of you smiling, so I suppose thats a keeper. You have one with your shirt off. Lose that crap. Come on dude, whats the deal. Ok ok, so you work out.We get it. Next!
Good for you at being honest on the drug question. You are aware that this may impact your overall responses, right? But you are truthful, so that counts!
"Dating Interests"
Sucks. You have very little there.
"Sports working out art maybe some drinkingand other stuff"
Definie exactly "other stuff". If making a profile here at a FREE community at POF is too time consuming, I am sure there are other places you can pay a buttload of money to do the same thing.
But you are here and have approached the good doc for his opinion, and so I shall dispense it.
This section, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you could really show your stuff or just go down in flames!
What are you interested in?
Its that simple really.
Maybe you like sports. DONT PUT "SPORTS"! Be more specific as "sports" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say you actually put in there, "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
You get the idea, right?
All I am saying here is to always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you. Specifics.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
I'd suggest a two paragraph (6-7 sentences per paragraph) minimum.
"First Date"
It's actually fairly good. Walk the dog (thats not a metaphor you are using, is it? lol) catch an art show and get coffee. I'd suggest losing the "walk by a lake". A lot of women shy away from walking by a lake on a first date with a stranger. Ya know?
Ok, so thats it for now. | |
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| rainy_day1975 review
Posted: 5/20/2005 12:37:04 PM | LOL,
"Some of it is a little in the hogher realm of thinking and many guys might not get it. I have a fairly high IQ and I do not get "Embrace the uniqueness that makes you, you and me, me. Sheesh, now I sound like Beaker."
How does one "sound" like a beaker? What is a beaker other than what can be found in a lab?? lol, sometimes ya gotta dumb it down some! ha ha"
Ok, my muppets reference was not clear enough :) Definitely going to make the suggested changes and I'm working on a new picture.
Thanks Jack. I have been somewhat successful with this online thing. The number of guys lined up isn't as important as the fact that there's one (albeit far away) who's really captured my interest. | |
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| selvey_20 review
Posted: 5/20/2005 12:37:32 PM | selvey_20
"SINGLE FEMALE WANTED!"
Nnnoooo, ya don't say? I thought most guys were looking for married guys! ha ha. This headline is uninspiring and blends in with all the other guys who have put the same exact thing in the headline.
Please consider this: Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. And remember, Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to go reading further of someones profile.
Your pics, well I gotta say that you aren't a bad looking kid. The pics, all three of 'em, are pretty good. And behold ladies, a guy who is actually smiling in his pictures! lol, A lot of women at POF complain that us guys never smile in our pics and you have three pics, all smiles! 'Da chicks are gonna dig you!
"Dating Interests"
"going to the movies staying at home and getting out and having fun"
Too vague and general.
This, I think, is the one biggest boo boo most people make. This is where you should really show your stuff or go down in flames, crash and burn!! What are you interested in?
Its that simple really.
Perhaps you like reading. DONT PUT READING! Be more specific as "reading" is too friggin general. Anything general is open to interpretation and more than likely backfires on ya.
For example, let's say (you actually put in there), "Movies".
Another general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally, there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is, be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory, for those who hunt. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive. Focus more on yourself and less of whom you seek.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
"First Date"
"A nice Italian Restuarant for a nice meal and conversation."
Keep it simple.
Thats it. Have fun with it all and best of luck to ya | |
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