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| ruby44 review
Posted: 6/2/2005 7:13:52 PM | | Thanks to the "Mack"...I will take a closer look and see if I can tweak this profile a bit...I know your time is precious...and there are so many requests...I do appreciate that you took the time to offer your suggestions...ciao, Ruby | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 6/5/2005 5:34:39 AM | Alrighty now, time for a game of "catch-up" and review some profiles.
But before I go further, to those who want reviews I offer this first and most important suggestion.
READ previous postings, atleast the last few pages. Ya really should!
Why? Because I hate repeating myself and it seems like thats all I have been doing.
Plus, the review I give ya now will be less wordy and in some cases may not make as much sense if you don't read back a few pages in this thread. This is my fair warning!> Or consider it more of a prescription from Dock Jack! lol
So look at a few past posts and get some ideas there first.
And so, oonnnnnn with the show........
to ~~JT~~
I'll review your profile if/when you wish to be serious. Otherwise, your profile absolutely fails miserably. I will give ya an "A" atleast for originality thats for sure.
to Ruby, you are welcome! | |
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| Tunesman review
Posted: 6/5/2005 5:35:34 AM | tunesman
Your profile is "ok", but some tweaking will be needed.
The headline, "??Something About An Aqua Velva Man??"
Lose all the "?", makes no sense with 'em. Its an alright enough headline, but I would consider something a little more creative. It is DEFINITELY original, dont get me wrong!
Your promary pic is good, whose the lady behind ya?
The second picture makes no sense, get rid of it. The third pic is good too, it's a keeper.
Dating interests are good, I would suggest adding a few more and of those you do have listed, be more specific in some. Like "movies" & "Music"
"About me"
This section is a bit off the beaten path and somewhat confusing.
"If you also know the big hit song the Dramatics had in 1971, you already have a pretty good picture of what I am all about."
Have you taken into account those who haven't a clue as to what you are referring to here? After such a sentence, you should allude to those who don't know as to e-mail you and ask, or maybe just look online to see WTF you are referring to.
"Can we say “died and gone to heaven”, boys and girls?"
Can we say "LOSE IT"?? PLEASE!
You really drone on about driving the countryside. Maybe a little too much. For the profile it's a bit too much, save it for later e-mails.
"I am also quite into computers but not quite so much so that I wear the horn-rimmed glasses, have the Intel pocket protector and merit the name Poindexter. Oops, may have just lost a few prospects. I do have a website, which I have never quite gotten around to reconstructing."
Lose this whole friggin thing. It just doesn't work well here in your profile, a place where you are trying to put forth a good impression as to why someone would want to get to know you.
"You are taking something of a risk;"
Get rid of this. May have undertones to many you may not have anticipated.
Question: Are you waiting for people to e-mail you or have you e-mailed anyone (first contact) yet? Because I am gonna let you in on a secret in a sec.
finally, the "First Date"
Dude, Here's the deal (this is the secret I am letting you in on). Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. None of this "maybe", or "might" stuff, no no. Don't be tentative, we all know that it's a sign of weakness.
And don't write "whatever the lady would like" or something to that effect. No no.
Oh sure, the ladies will think it's a sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guy, let's have a contingency plan at the very least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here friends! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know? lol
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| rocky541 review
Posted: 6/5/2005 5:46:51 AM | Yo Rock!
rocky541 that is.
Dude, your headline, "Lonely guy seeks partner", well.... it reeks of desparation dude. You do not wanna go that route, do ya?
Come up with something more original and creative, maybe even funny!
Your headline is designed to catch peoples attention. To grab them by the scruff of the neck, to capture both their curiosity and imagination.
What is it that catches your of others profiles? Thats a good place to start.
None of this "lonely Loser" stuff like what you have!! Get creative, get crazy! Have fun with it. And remember, Try to think of what would catch YOUR eye, to hold your attention enough for you to go reading further of someones profile.
Your pictures are less than average only because you are not smiling. You must hate to smile and probably beat down those who do, eh? lol, loosen up! Get a pic of three on there where you are alive and know how to laugh!
"Dating Interests"
You have a somewhat good selection, but I would simply advise two things.
Put more interests
Be more specific.
Case in point, "Movies" & "Music".
What about "movies"?.
A general and very broad interest.
Think a moment, will ya? How many movies do you suppose has been made since the turn of the century? Now of all those movies, how many different variations and genre do you think there are?
If you think about it, the different varieties are staggeringly high. Do you really like all of those differences and varieties? I am gonna bet "no". So be specific. You like horror over comedy? Maybe chick flicks versus guy movies of shoot-em-up bang bang movies. Whatever the case, be specific. This is a very important key that may unlock your future happiness should you meet someone!
Generally I have found that there are a few "industry standards" to avoid. Well, maybe not avoid, just be more specific.
TV/Movies
Dinner/cooking
Camping
Music
Reading/books
Computers
Always ask yourself, "what about 'em". Then fill it in some as to what you like about them, or what variety or what have you.
And my other tip is to be sure to have lots of things listed. 8 or 10 is what I would go with.
Why?
Its the shotgun theory. You see, a shotgun shell has many tiny little pellets generally called "buckshot". When the gun is fired, these buckshot spread out as they fly through the air towards the target, ensuring larger coverage and thus, better chance at hitting something.
You are the gun. Your interests are the buckshot. And the more you list (and specify) of interests, the better chance you have of having something in common with someone else that will, thusly, create a hit! Then an e-mail is sent and before long, you are at the beginning of a nice relationship.
"About me"
This section is where you can tie in all in. This is THE place you want to express yourself as to who you are. What your attitude on life is like. Maybe expand some more on your interests too.
Tell about yourself, stay positive.
DO's:
* The first paragraph talk about yourself, what you believe in, your general attitude in life and maybe even expand a little about a few of your interests. Stay away from describing so much of what you seek.
* Explain in this section why you are interesting enough for someone to send you an e-mail or to respond to one you've sent.
Remain focused on yourself and what you want. End this section with who you seek. What kind of person. Again, stay away from the negatives of who you do NOT want and so forth. Stay positive!
finally, the "First Date"
Ladies, turn away for a second, I gotta talk to 'da guys.
Dude, Here's the deal. Whether we like it or hate it, this is where we can either seal the deal or seal our fate.
We HAVE to take charge here, and indicate what we would like to do on the first date. We have to take control, it is expected. Don't be tentative, we all know that it's a sign of weakness.
Don't write "whatever the lady would like" to something to that effect. No no.
Oh sure, the ladies will think it's a sweet thought and nice gesture sure. But guys, let's have a contingency plan at the very least. Because odds are she will be expecting you to take control and will invariably say "I don't know, what would you like to do?"
Save time and save face here friends! Take control, make the call!
Just don't go writing "sex" or some BS like that. First date dude! Let's keep it gentlemanly, ya know?
Lastly, I wanted to warn ya about your "restrictions". Often times this can come back and bite you in the butt.
You have limited any responses to those women 18 to 26. But what if...
What if a lady, who just turned 27, was interested in you? Your criteria cuts her out and she will not be able to e-mail you. She will be blocked via POF, with a return message stating she did not fit your criteria. Now that would be a shame, wouldn't it?
My advice? Set yoru age range from 18 to 30. Unless you think you can handle a lady over 30, in which case hey, go for gold. Set it 18 to 40! lol
ok, so thats all I got for ya here. | |
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| Tunesman review
Posted: 6/5/2005 12:06:06 PM | Can't thank you enough, Jack. You simply rock, dude!!!
You are blessed with a great deal of good old common sense. It is often very hard to be totally objective when dealing with yourself; having an extra set of well-tuned eyeballs certainly helps a great deal. I have implemented many of your suggested changes.
You also invest a great deal of time here. If I can ever return the favour or lighten the load for you, please just ask.
For the benefit of the entire community here, the double sets of question marks that originally appeared before and after my heading were not entered that way. They were intended to be musical notes generated by typing in the appropriate "alt" codes. POF's system does not appear to be geared to recognizing characters generated from "alt" codes, at least in the heading. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 6/5/2005 4:15:03 PM | Howdy Jack Mack;
If you have a minute, could you please have a look at my profile and let me know what you think? I've had some good feedback on it, but I'm not sure if I'm putting too much stuff in there. I've read through the forums on this, but I'm not sure if I've been able to put the info I gained to the best use, lol. Any suggestions you have would be appreciated.
Thanks and all the best;
Dragon | |
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| rocky541 review
Posted: 6/5/2005 4:48:14 PM | wow awesome advice! I made some minor changes already hope to get some bigger ones up later tonight when I get home. Can't thank you enough for your time | |
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| rocky541 review
Posted: 6/6/2005 4:16:04 AM | Hey rocky541, Much better headline and great assortment of interests! Your work so far.... great!
Tunesman, Thanks for the props!! Glad to be of help. But remember. Your profile only gets ya halfway there. Its the first contact e-mail that'll put you over, either the edge of a daunting cliff.... lol, or to another level upward!
Caspar dat ghost.... where'd he go? We went and disappeared on us! Dang, am I THAT far behind in reviews? ha ha. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 6/6/2005 5:50:34 AM | If you don't mind and you have the time, I would greatly appreciate a review. 
Apparently, I need help.
And before you say anything about the pictures, that's all I got for right now. That's something I'm working on...
~C | |
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~~JT~~
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Joined: 11/24/2004
Msg: 690 | |
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| Bianaca Review
Posted: 6/8/2005 10:22:35 AM | Bianaca:
Time for your profile to get a looksie...
Before I start ::::clearing throat:::: be sure to review the last 5 pages of this thread OR check out some of the reviews I have done. I ask that you do this first to get a good idea of what direction you want to go and who knows, you may get a few inspirational details or comments to add to yoru own profile.
Headline "Ugly chic seekin' purty friends" is not a good headline.
Think lowly of yourself?
Or your attempt at humor backfiring?
Either way, it ain't working. Try again.
Your pics
Your primary pic is almost perfect. If only you smiled! tsk tsk tsk
Dating Interests: Needs more, and be more specific. What about music and dancing and such do you like?
"About me"
Too many adjectives for one sentence. Isn't there a law in KY about that? lol
Take two or three, lose the rest. They can be best served later in an e-mail.
Need more about you, less about what you dont want or not what you seek. Remain focused on you, less on everyone or anyone else. | |
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| amberbrechey Review
Posted: 6/8/2005 10:26:42 AM | amberbrechey
Well, your headline will catch attention alright, so I'd leave it as is.
Your pics, personally I like the fourth pic the best. Good lighting, great smile! Your primary well, the light is reflecting off your glasses too much. The 2nd pic is nice and dfinitely a close second fave of mine.
Lose the rest, especially the ones with you and a guy. No matter who that is.... bad form.
"About me"
Revamp it to first lose the explanation about the pics, and to reflect you have a divorce as opposed to divorcing. Your status states "Divorced", your "about me" seems to indicate it ain't official yet. Too confusing, guys may shy away from that.
Put more about you, what you're about and your general attitude (glass is half full or empty) on life and such like that. | |
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| pureblue Review, and it be GOOD!
Posted: 6/8/2005 10:33:14 AM | pureblue
Time for your Jack Attack!
Good headline, it's a keeper!
Your pics, your primary and third are the best.... lose the rest as they seriously suck. They are either bad lighting or look like a mug shot.
"Dating Interests"
GREAT selection and variety!! Good work here. Change nothing.... well except give a little more specifics as far as "music" and "movies".
"About Me"
ha ha, this has got to be one of the more original and creative ones I have seen! Very cool work!
A tweak or two to suggest however....
Lose "Like the headline says, never settle for the placebo." Doesn't really belong or match up with the rest of the profile.
Thats really about all I can suggest to change! Ya done well Maude!! I mean pureblue.
You have a good sense of humor and a good outlook.
And a darn good profile! But now keep in mind, a good profile only gets ya half way. Its the first contact e-mail that'll either seal the deal or break it to pieces!! | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 6/8/2005 10:39:47 AM | Fire-Dragon
Ha ha, great headline! Its a keeper! Change nothing there!! ha ha
Your 2nd and 5th picture is the best, lose the rest. Whats the deal with the two pics of animals?? Did you draw the one with the owl?
Good Dating Interests, but needs a little more specifics with regards to music, literature and maybe drawing and or painting.
In your "About me", not too terribly bad.
Watch for spelling "You tripped ever the cat, you say.."
Isn't that supposed to be "You tripped over the cat, you say.."?
I have to admit it kinda felt you were rambling the first paragraph or so, maybe even stalling before getting into the basics of who you are and generally about you.
Overall it's a bit wordy and too much both sides of the fence. You think of yourself a little bit of country, a little bit of rock n roll will leave folks beliving you can't make up your mind.
Might I suggest being a little more firm in describing yourself? Being tentative will not attract folks your way as much as taking control, make the statements and stick to 'em.
"First Date"
wwaayyy too long. Keep it short, simple and specific. | |
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