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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 8/30/2005 10:06:35 AM | Frank:
First thing the pics need improvement, kissing a beer bottle for an opener just doesn't cut it in my book. And the second one sort of says to me "Do I really have to have my pictures taken? I want to go back to sleep."
I'm sure with your job that you know about spell check and grammar checkers, use them, your profile needs it bad. There's this thing called an apostrophe, used when you contract words like there is at the beginning of this sentence, remember that in school. Remember we are trying to pretend we are intelligent here, everybody wants to find somebody intelligent, right?
It's probably not a good thing to start the profile write up off with a "I do this, but don't judge me by that," That's the whole idea of all this is to prvide stuff for people to judge you, and hopefully they like what they see.
Your headline is good, it gives people a reason to look further, that's what it's all about folks.
Your interests are to broad they need to be more specific and we need a lot more of them if you got them, I'm sure ya do.
Your write up needs a lot more about yourself, things you like, hate, want, need, do, don't do, etc.
Your first date sort of runs on and on and really says nothing, that's all the standard stuff. It sort of reads like, "how to date," get creative and come up with something different, that says you've got a plan for a fun evening.
You've got some work to do before the women beat a path to your profile. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 8/31/2005 7:50:37 AM | Venomous: Sorry, been busy with other things, I got a life too ya know. And for all you out there I'm Jon, Jack put in his time and is sort of on a break for a while so I'm filling in.
First, the three pictures of you, they all have a different expression, but mostly tell the same thing, try a full body shot to convey more information. Of the three you got I like the second best, the "I'm thinking" one, The first one says to me, "I'm busy, go away" and the last says "This computer is just to slow" Pictures should convey a positive image, that's why we want smiles. Get some pictures of you doing things you like to do.
In the interests I would specifiy what kinds of animals you like, there's a big difference between cats, horses, and mountain lions. Each of these would appeal to a different woman, that's the whole idea of a profile to get the information out to the right woman, that you are the man for her, be specific in the profile and your chances of sucess go way up. If you don't inform they will skip you and look to the next profile to find what they are looking for.
Try to add a lot more stuff in the interest area, that's where people will find you.
Your write up is filled with negative, a lot of it needs to be said but the positive has to out weigh the negative. The negative ( bad relationship, turned off, etc) need to be said but try to put in a lot more this is me, I like this, the best things is, I love to... etc. Put that positive stuff up front and have the negative more to the end but finish on a positive.
first date: You can paint a picture and you should, it will change when you meet somebody but show them that you have some good ideas for a first date.
Get rid of the 75 mile thing, that's to restrictive, she might be 76 miles away, I'm sure you would drive that far if she was the right one. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 8/31/2005 12:22:10 PM | yeah well it's a judgemental, condescending I can do without. Just please be positive and creative. For example "golly Molly you look so pretty I would love to see you up close, closer, now just a bit closer (smile big) oh baby that's just perfect. Now honey that shirt is fine but you would look like heaven and oh so fine if you wore one of these shear ones and had your bra off.
so the story goes in my world the end | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 8/31/2005 4:11:10 PM | wandercoast:
First thing I see, your pictures, they are all good but in everyone of them the smile seems a little forced, might try to retake them with a more natural smile. Maybe that's your normal smile but that's how I see it. I call them as I see them.
Laughter and adventure doesn't grab you and make you look for more but it's better than some headlines. Might try to spice it up a little with something that leads you to want to learn more about you. Almost everybody promisses Laughter and adventure on here.
You might explain a little more about the types of music and cooking in your interests. This is where you connect with somebody after they have looked at your picture and read your headline. Also many people find you by doing a search for these items, they might search for Jazz, if that's one of your types of music they wouldn't find you because you didn't list it.
We need a lot more in the write up, one typing mistake word ot should be to. I make those mistakes continually, you can probably find a couple in this review.
Try to work a little more humor into the write up, you probably want to convince them they will get just as much humor back as you want to find. I didn't like it when you asked to find somebody to make you laugh, that just didn't set well with me. It's like it is going to be work for them to do it, might try and rewrite that part. My view in the writeup more is always better, you've probably got one chance to catch them, make the most of it. | |
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Posted: 8/31/2005 5:48:49 PM | Thanks for the advice. I'm always the one with the camera. Its hard to get a really natural picture of myself when I am always explaining how to use the gear!!! I think you are on to something however.
Thanks. | |
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Posted: 9/1/2005 8:10:48 AM | | wandercoast: You might try to tell them a joke right before the snap the picture that should get you both laughing. Might want the camera on a tripod to eliminate the shakes. Often if the joke had been told before, it just brings a good smile the second time. Telling jokes also makes the teller smile too. Laughing is contagious. Learning and telling jokes is the number one thing I've done in my life to make it easy to get to know women, dancing is a real close second. | |
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Posted: 9/1/2005 8:22:15 AM | towertycoon:
The things I'm seeing when I read your writeup is that I'm going to be real hard to get to know you, you need to change that. Get rid of the lonely, everybody is, that's why they are on here, but you don't need to reinforce that idea. I will love if loved back, again they need to do something, it's not good to tell people what they will need to do, much better to say I'm ready, where are you? You also say they will have to keep the conversation going, again they have to do it, actually I bet when you are with people that you are comfortable with you can talk all day. Leave out that stuff.
I would expand the music in the interests, tell us what kinds of music, jazz is a long way from heavy metal. Get backpacking in there too and anything else that you can think of that you like to do. The more stuff you have there the more chance somebody will find you. Also explain what kinds of movies you like.
time for round three.
We'll get there, just keep pluggin away, sort of like climbing a mountian. | |
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 9/1/2005 9:55:16 AM | riverviewflower:
First the headline, "hello", this is the third thing that somebody sees when they look at your profile, the first being the picture, second is your POF name, then in your case, hello, granted it could be much worse, but an effective personals profile needs to have everything working to catch the interst of whomever is looking at you. Every word should say something about you or make them want to learn more about you. Hello at least says you are polite, much better than if you had "What are you doing here"? but even that might arouse curriosity, a good thing in this case. I suggest changing hello to something else, be creative, as creative as your name. That at least says something about you.
Your first picture is great, good smile, the second and third pictures I would change, the fourth doesn't really do anything for me either. I would get a full body shot and have some other of things you like or you doing things you like. Make the pictures work for you, they should tell a story about you.
Interests; is conversation all you are after? I doubt it, even though this is titled dating interest, everybody uses this to list all their interests, tell us everything you like here, be specific. This is where many people can find you, they do a search for things they like and if you have those things here in yourprofile, you profile pops up in front of them. So get lots of stuff here. Find words that hightlight, that tells you a couple things, the most important is that you spelled it correctly. The second is that it's a common thing people search for.
About me, we need a lot more there too. Here you have tell people alot about what you like, and are looking for. Things you have done, things you need, want, don't need, etc. Look at some other profiles, read some of the reviews here, to get some ideas.
I don't like it when people answer questions with, "prefer not to say," It's like you have something to hide. In my oppinion either you have kids are you don't, there is no middle gorund, hiding things is never good in a relationship. You might lose people there. Hope I've helped. | |
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Posted: 9/1/2005 12:18:00 PM | Unearth_86:
There really isn't much to review here, you like music, that's about it. Not R&B. I can't write it for you. Look at some of the other profiles, you need to inform, thats' how you get good responses. No information, no good responses, simple as that. Every area should be looked at and made to inform.
If your going to have three pictures, they each should tell something different about you, yours all tell the same thing. Since you aren't smiling, it's doesn't show you in a favorable light.
You've got lot's of work to do, get to it. | |
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Posted: 9/1/2005 12:24:43 PM | vicmjs3:
Your pictures are good.
Canoeing should be in you interests, as well as anything else that you can think of that you like.
Your write up should be longer, can't see any problem with it but I'm sure you can put a lot more in there about things you like, want, need, hate, etc. People need to learn enough about you that they connect with many things that do, if the stuff isn't there they aren't going to risk spending the effort to contact you. Unfortunately that's a fact of life of internet match finding.
First date stuff is good, check spelling, frist date???? Everbody needs to use spell check. unfortunately they have to learn cut and paste to do it. | |
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