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| Review: Jiggy with iggy
Posted: 4/28/2005 6:27:03 AM | "ignacia"
Your headline, "a shy sweet guy" LOSE IT and do so immediately.
'Splain something to me, would ya?
Your profile states "a shy sweet GUY" yet your gender is "female". Were "we" confused when "we" were putting together this profile? Get it straight dude... or dudette!
Now about your picture, you need one! Find one with good lighting and shows you fairly up close. No photoshop or glamor shot type stuff, people HATE those pics (they look so fake)
Your "Dating Interests"
The three things you put are basically identical to what every other profile says. Get original. And definitely come up with more stuff. Try to list 9 interests.This should help you get 'ta thinking harder.
Your profile smacks of just throwing some sh*t together for the helluvit. Put more thoguht into it, k?
"About me":
You think of yourself as a "fun loving".... "thick"?? Thick? As in intelligence or body style? Lose "Thick"! WTF were you thinking? Too easy for somebody to interpret that too many different ways.
Tell more about yourself. Are you funny, do you think you have a sense of humor? Show more of it!
Get rid of "by the way if you don't like thick girl's do waste you time i want a man who like's me for me not what i look like"
Waste of time and space. The guys who don't like thick girls will not be reading yoru profile. The guys who are will. Why state the obvious? Keep going with things about you, less on the things and people you do not want.
"First date"
Dinner and a stroll? Not very original. Is that what you rrrreeeaaalllyyy wanna do on a first contact date?? Dinner and a stroll? Why not just some nice conversation at a cafe or something. Better yet, put something else you'd like to do. Be original, or as best as you can
Just my opinion | |
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| SummerLove Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 6:43:06 AM | Summerlove..
Your headline, really now. Thats the best you could muster??
Give it some more thought, I am betting you can come up with something more eye catching! I am fairly sure of it.
Ok, so about your pics.
first, second, fifth and seventh KEEP. Lose the rest!
Definitely lose the one where you are in a pic with a guy. Doesn't matter who it is or was, never looks good. The one with two women kissing, one of which you? H-O-T!!
in your "About Me" section, pretty good for the most part.
But PLEASE lose:
"Qualities I dislike: sweet talkers, smokers, drug users, drinkers, men who sit in front of their tube drinking beer all day and eating junk food and wonder why girls don't like nice guys are not what i'm looking for, people who are too forward and pushy...."no means no""
No one cares what you do not want nor will they listen. Focus more of what you want and who you are, not on what you do not want or do not like.
And watch the spelling throughout. Don't worry, everyone has a spelling problem. ha ha
"Dating Interests"
You have a nice selection, some original stuff and some standard stuff. A good mix. Good job!
And excellent "First Date"! | |
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| JBro review
Posted: 4/28/2005 7:11:53 AM | Yo Bro-man
lol
First, about your pics
Great action pic as your primary! Its definitely a keeper.
Lose all the others except the very last one, with your baldheaded self. So you have the action one and then yoru balded one.
Out of curiosity, what was the bet?
In your "Dating Interest"
good selection listed! Good job with the vagueness. ha ha, seriously though, you put "talk/e-mail" for what you are looking for, then in your interests you have "cuddling", "Holding Hands", Kissing", "Hugging" & "Soul Mate". Doesn't sound like much talking there!
Might I suggest losing those things and going more for things you like of a more specific nature, like running, or maybe hitting beach, or something and so forth. ya know?
Another FYI, "Camping Movies and Music" is an industry standard on POF. Try more original and unique things. Flying kites? ha ha, short wave radio? Film making, I dunno. Just something different and uniquely you.
In your "About me" section, I gotta be honest. It reeks. You have a sense of humor? use it and here is the place to do it.
Let loose, go crazy. Remember: Original! Unique. You want to catch peoples attention. Your headline is a little into the shallow end of that, but I am sure you can come up with something better there too.
Please please please never use the line "Good Guy with sense of humor". It is always a deal breaker.
Go with the wild side part you referred to. And also remember, put more about you and what you want, less of what you do not want. Keep it positive.
Your "First Date", you are a bit vague. Try zeroing in on something you really want to do. | |
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| JBro review
Posted: 4/28/2005 9:05:25 AM | | Ok Jack I'm back. Please review my profile again and see if it's improved? You still didn't respond to my comment on your profile. I'll tell everyone your dirty little secret. Purrrrrrrrrrrr. | |
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| JBro review
Posted: 4/28/2005 9:17:15 AM | | Hi Jack..... No pun intended......lol..... ok..took your suggestions, made some changes in my profile, only thing I need to do is address the pics..... working on that..... wanna have a look see again? Mucho Thanx! | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 10:54:20 AM | | hey, jack ASS-ssesment man...i NEVER asked you to assess my profile, but you just couldn't resist now, could you...you know, you shouldn't tell men to LIE about their marital status, as LIES do not promote good starts in dating.....but hey, all your advice isn't totally foolish, so maybe i will take some of it but i would have to think about it first.... | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 12:37:25 PM | Who, or WHERE did I tell anyone to lie about the status as to whether they were married or single??
Are you referring to the difference between divorced versus single? Thats splitting hairs to some.
Do you mean separated? Please be sure to show me where I told someone who was "separated" to list as "single". I am curious. I shall await your reply.
In the meantime, this is a threat to offer an opinion on ones profile. You post here, I am gonna give your profile a looksie. Take from it what you may. | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 12:46:27 PM | Oh I get it now Sus,
Gosh that was from chapter one of these 5 part chapters. And you are right, I did remark that he needed to put either "Divorced" or "Single".
Mi Culpa ya'll!
Thats southern Latin for those unfamiliar. Its foreign talk for "OOps, I mucked up, 'scuse me!"
To the original review I say this:
"A) Why ya bother posting as "separated and have high expectations when people will shy away from people separated. The thinking is no one wants to be a rebound person nor date someone fresh out of a serious relationship where the wounds are fresh. It will guarantee a time of hearing about ones ex and how they did this or that.
And if time has passed, say a few years, and you are still separated, WTF??!!
Basically overall, "Separated" is a kiss of death. Its that simple. People will be very wary to get involved with anyone like that. Just letting ya know my opinion.
Now Sus, you can have made your case a helluva lot easy if you used that noggin of yours instead of insinuating someones a a**. I figured you for some brains with your profile, but damn if you ain't making it hard to prove it. Next time, try spelling it out and showing exactly where someone mucks up!! Just a suggestion. | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 12:51:32 PM | Okay Jack....I keep hearing about all of these women getting HUNDREDS of emails!!!! Even when they DON'T post pics of their breasts?!?!?!?
What am I doing wrong?!?!? Be gentle with me.... Dee | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 1:17:25 PM | I'll take yer critism as well... I could use the advise...
H | |
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| Kitykity review, take 2
Posted: 4/28/2005 3:44:06 PM | Hey Kitykity,
Uumm, what was the question again??
I checked out your profile. You revised it? To what it is NOW? lol | |
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| Kristalina Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 3:48:01 PM | Kristalina,
"Looking for a cuddle buddy" eh? Not bad
About your "Dating Interests", you have only two things listed and they are quite general and vague. Is that truly all you are interested in? I would advise you cruise up and down this thread to get some ideas, then look at a few of 'da ladies profiles throughout POF to get an idea of what to and not to do.
Simply put, list things you like. Be specific if you can. The more listed, the better. And be original and uniquely you!
Same goes in the "About me" section. List more of things about you, less of someone else you seek or those things you do not want. Stay positive! | |
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| Gary review, Par deux
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:01:18 PM | Gary,
About your pics, whats the deal with the guitars?? We get your a musician, must you show off your wares. Hey, that sounds kinda dirty! ha ha ha
Seriously now...
Excellent "dating interests"! Good job!!!
"About me":
Good at using more of your sense of humor, "A" for effort!
Lose " Im pretty much a very sociable guy," & "easy going, great sense of humor" & "who accepts life the way it is and lives life on lifes terms, not mine".
Trade it in for simply " Im sociable, easy going kind of guy who enjoys life and whatever comes my way".
Lose "I enjoy music with a passion, as i have played many instruments since the age of 4" (This is rather obvious, doncha think?)
This is good for a first contact reply e-mail or something.
Change "...and am an avid reader,(Playboy and Penthouse is not on my reading list!) always looking to learn something new through books."
to something along the lines of
"I enjoy reading a wide variety of things, such as (actually list a book or something recently read)"
The next few sentences look fine, then ya seem to go up the bank and scrape the walls with "...Im hoping to find a person to be friends with, and looking to develop a L.T R."
How 'bout using something like "... here at POF to meet new and interesting people who share similar things."
Forget the "LTR", kinda "old". ha ha, I am sorry, but it it true.... in my opinion of course.
Lastly, lose all of these words, "Hopefully", "well", "pretty much", "Hoping" and "more than willing".
Seems too iffy or waffling. Too tentative. We're the guys, we're suppose to sure a little more sureness. Whether we think it's fair or not.
"First date" is nice, a good conveyance in the first sentence in "...would be something she's comfortable with..."
Lose the "as theres a lot of nuts out there." Maybe you can come up with something better or funnier or just leave it off entirely.
Good laugh at the very end too.
Thats my thoughts. | |
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| Dee38 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:15:48 PM | Hey Dee,
First, "I keep hearing about all of these women getting HUNDREDS of emails!!!! "
Please don't believe everything you hear or read, especially from the internet. Unless you see it first hand, believe half of whatever you read online. I believe women may receive more e-mails when they flash a boob or something, but most are probably not the kind of people you would be looking for for a long relationshiop, ya know?
So on with the review.....
Your headline, "good looks are great..."
not too sure about that. Doesn't really catch the 'ol peepers, ya know?! Try again, I am betting you are an imaginative person. Go on, don't hold back. Remember, you're trying to catch some attention.
Your pics, there are three scenic pictures. Lose 'em.
2 reasons why. The first, you do not refer to 'em at all in the profile at any place,
The second, they aren't of you!
The pic of you (I presume it is you) is near perfection!!!
Great smile, and you show a little skin too. Always a-l-w-a-y-s- the way to go! lol
"Dating Interests":
Not too terribly bad there, you have a few more unique things like the theatre (live or are you talking the movies?). More originality is needed though, as "reading, writing and outdoors" are pretty much industry standards. Look at some of the other womens profiles and you'll see. Almost every other one has the identical things listed too.
You are unique, show it here!
Keep "Good conversation", leave off "with intelligent people". Ever have a long meaningful conversation with a stupid, or "unintelligent" person? lol
On with the meat of the profile, "About me":
Share more about yourself, less of what you seek or what you don't want. Stay away from negative, focus more on positive.
Also, list nothing of things you've "been told". It would suggest you do not believe it or don't really believe in yourself too much.
State fact or that which you believe wholeheartedly about yourself. Sense of humor? Crafty? Can you tie a cherry stem with your tongue? ha ha ha just throwing some ideas your way. Focus more on you, forget about everyone else.
"First date",
"Surprise me"?? That leaves the door wwwaaayyy wide open. You might not like some surprises some may have in mind. Care to narrow it down some to something you'd really like to do on a first day, a first meeting.
Just a few ideas for ya. | |
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| Hellion Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:26:37 PM | Ok Hellion,
I applaud your SN, but your headline "Looking for honesty & humor", not an eye catcher. Kinda blends in.
Interesting main pic, lit guitar (or so it seems). Use your fourth pic, the one actually of you and in a good pose with great light. Lose the rest. The lighting in the pics suck, sorry dude.
"Dating Interests"
4 things listed, every one of 'em are standards you will find on every other profile at POF. Come on guy, get creative and original. List about 8 or 9 things that you really enjoy. Try more specifics of what you have, what kind of mucis? Do you write it too?
What about computers?
What kind of sports?
You get the idea
As for "About me"
Watch your spelling.
"Sense" instead of "sence" and so forth.
Fairly good start, "I'm a 37 yr. old father of 2 (19 & 17)". Stop here.
Drop the next 2 sentences about who you seek. And forget totally about putting in about "no head game players". As if they'll really listen. Seriously now.
Second section or paragraph is ok, go a little more in depth about you though. Leave off where people think you look young. It downplays ya.
Again, the next paragraph and one sentence, it just ain't gonna work.
A hint: Write about you, keep positive and forget about putting the negatives and of what you don't want or what you are not looking for.
"First Date"
Good and original (well, 'cept the dinner and drinks part). Comedy club, excellent!
"A movie on a first date just doesn't seem right to me. It's dark and loud. How do you get to know someone in that kind of atmosphere..? "
Eh, I could live without it, but its really yoru call. Your attempt there may getcha a point or two higher. lol
Remember: "FUCO": FUNNY UNIQUE CREATIVE ORIGINAL | |
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| Hellion Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:35:35 PM | Thanks for taking the time, Jack... Great suggestions.... I'll get on it ASAP...
BTW, I was using the pic you mentioned. Changed it last week to see if it would make a difference....
H
If you have time (yeah, right...) take a look again later on tonight... | |
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| This is a great thread
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:39:30 PM | What does Sempre Verite mean? Is it latin for "Good booze"? "Always right"? Just askin
Hey Sempre,
I was just cruising and thought I'd give your profile just a quick look.
"Fortune favors the bold"
I LIKE IT!!
Work on getting them pics up though, gotta have a good one to go with such a headline!
Good variation of interests too. I gotta ask, what the heck is "WECEPPING".
You ummm, you have a lot written, I'll give ya that! And amazingly enough, all but one paragraph is about you. I would personally hold some of what is revealed back for a first contact e-mail, but thats just my taste. Do your thang dude!
In that last paragraph of what you seek, or rather whom, leave off all parts about what you do not want or find unattractive. Keep positive and stick with the wants, not the want nots.
Your "First Date", well, its original. Thats for sure. This should work ok for ya. Best of luck to ya. You have a fairly solid profile. | |
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| Kity has claws
Posted: 4/28/2005 4:41:59 PM | KityKity trying ta get me in trouble ya'll!!
ha ha, not really. Actually, she was so kind enough to remind me that I needed to tend to my profile a li'l as I had let it go for awhile in lieu of doing this here thread. Thanks Kitykity!! | |
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| JBro review
Posted: 4/28/2005 5:30:28 PM | Ok Jack I am Back,Changed My Profile Hopefully looks better
as for your curiosity on the bet,Friends betted me $200 to be bald for one entire year till my next birthday to see if any women would actually date a bald man.~lol~ | |
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| This is a great thread
Posted: 4/28/2005 9:18:01 PM | Hey, just wanted to say thanks for the critique; you're an objective person after my
own heart.
Semper Verite means Always the Truth, or Always Truthful, but I prefer the former.
I've had my fair share of people tell me things other than the truth (not just in
relationships), and its caused nothing but harm for everyone. So now I'm all about
the truth, good or bad.
You're a person who gives your opinion and thoughts for reasons other than your
own self interest and image, and I really respect that. People really appreciate
someone giving them advice without putting them down; keep up the good work,
you're a rare and dying breed.
Anyway, just wanted to say thanks | |
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Joined: 8/18/2004
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| I'll review your profile and give ya some dating advice
Posted: 4/28/2005 11:14:44 PM | @msjanuary: I agree with Jack loose the rest of the pictures.
@jack: doing a great service here, I agree with most of what you have to say, but have to side with the Susan on the separated vs divorced thing. No grey area there. My oppinion.
Have a look, see what you think, your probably not going to like my primary pic, My pictures are doing the 1000 word thing on what I do not what I look like. To me that's more important, that's who I am. This ad was a cut and paste from another site so a few lines don't fit here, like the not a paying member, look up and dot edu, still works but not needed.
I'm also a no nonsense kinda guy, get it all out in the open, make a good decision, yeah or neah, get on with it. | |
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| Susand533 Review
Posted: 4/28/2005 11:23:34 PM | | @susan: I agree with Jack totally on what he said about your profile. | |
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