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Posted: 7/1/2007 7:09:54 AM | pure eyes:
title: good, short, to the point
pics: can hardly see what you look like, need a closer pic of your face and a full body shot, it looks as though you have a nice smile.
narration: very brief and you are repeating what is already given. need more info, such as interests, how will anyone know to contact you if you don't share interests besides faith.
conclusion: more info, better pics
rating: 3 out of 10
good luck and keep fishing
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Posted: 7/1/2007 7:13:28 AM | theeyesforyou:
if you want an expert, you are asking the WRONG person! LOL! it's just one woman's opinion. i will tell you what i think and you can do what you want with it, delete it for all i care! i'm not perfect, my profile is not perfect, my opinion is that of only myself. so if you still want my opinion, i'll give it.  
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Posted: 7/1/2007 8:00:31 AM | hi there,
do you think you can help me with my profile? im getting tonnes of views but no messages and no one is really writing back to mine.
thanks girl.
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Posted: 7/1/2007 9:27:18 AM | theeyesforyou:
title: a dare as a title isn't really a good way to go, that is what i thought when i read it. try to avoid "can" "make", sounds like a dare. how about "love to smile" "waiting to smile" or "want to smile". so i guess that explains your first pic?
pics: B+, need a full body pic, but good quality and lighting are great (with exception to the car one)! good contrast between tshirt and suit. first pic shows off the eyes very well, should have smiled though.
narration: great! just cut out the part after "can't wait to hear from you!" this one is actually better than average. i can get a general picture of your life and your likes. you should put whether you smoke and/or drink. offering more pics is good. you specifically write what you want. first date suggestion is great, shows interest and it's a practical, noncommitting, public venue. good job.
faux pas: poems, song lyrics, generally boring to read
conclusion: profiles seem to be getting better. i would cut out that part i suggested above, change title, add a full body shot.
rating: 7 out of 10
good luck and keep fishing!
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Posted: 7/1/2007 9:50:55 AM | sunbeam25:
title: too long, should be catchy, short, to the point. i know a lot of people don't really think about the title much when filling out the profiles. it is the second thing i look at when i am looking at profiles. picture first, title second, stats third, etc.
pics: great love the pics, but you need to fix the first one. the lighting is bad, it looks like your left eye is missing, makes you look much older??!! the light should be on your face not on your back. fix the glasses so we can see your eyes or don't wear them. GREAT smile!!
narration: too many interests, needs to be narrowed. "out of body travel" huh? kinda weird, would probably scare some guys away. i would never list my email, unless you don't mind spam or viruses. i think listing a few of your favorite movies is a great idea, it lets someone know a bit about you that can't be expressed very well with words. first date sounds good, but a bit much if the first date goes sour. you sound like a really fun person, very active.
faux pas: listing email address, would never do that
conclusion: fix picture, also a better full body pic, maybe in a nice outfit. take out the "out of body travel" (sounds to me like drugs, voodoo, or a crazy person), i would just list sports instead of all of those, and like you did further down explain your favorites.
rating: 7 out of 10
good luck and keep fishing!
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Posted: 7/1/2007 11:22:34 AM | carrie sue:
title: not sure what you are trying to say here. the title usually says one of two things, who you are or what you want. "me, just being me" - means to me that you don't try to be someone you are not, or maybe what you see is what you get? it is very ambiguous. who else would you be??? try something different.
pics: get rid of them all except the first one, unless it is outdated. all of your pics are different which will lead one to believe which one is recent if there is one? pics must be UP TO DATE!! NO PICTURES OF A LAKE, A RIVER, A SKY, A TREE!! i can look out my window and see that.
narrative: too many emoticons makes it appear juvenile. 2 or 3 are okay. it is nice though, you list a few things of interest, you seem sincere and genuinly nice. a bit short though. you already stated that you are looking for friends, this should not be under interests. put things like pool, walks, darts, being around people, dancing, etc. "not one night stands" really shouldn't be there at all. it is negative. unless you are looking for a one night stand, which will be obvious when you look at some profiles, most people are looking for meaningful relationships. you want only a friend, descibe that. for example - i want a friend to do things with me like dancing, playing pool, going for walks. if you want more, if you hope it will turn into a long term relationship, then write that you do.
faux pas: using too many emoticons - appears too cutesy
conclusion: redo pics, first one has good quality but you aren't really smiling and is it recent? get rid of the others. less emoticons, state what you are looking for more precisely, no negativity, redo interests.
rating: 5 out of 10
good luck and keep fishing!
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Posted: 7/1/2007 11:56:06 AM | Okay thanks for the advice. I have revised it a little bit. If you wanted to look at the revision and lemme know if I am on the right track now then that would be great. Prefer not to say is all gone. :P
Thanks for the compliment on the picks. I am in the process of looking for more, maybe a body shot and another better head shot. :)
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Posted: 7/1/2007 5:58:36 PM | cyclern41,,,,,,,,,,,,I'm brave enough, Fire away at mine, just anothere paper on ther reject pile,,,,hehe  | |
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Posted: 7/1/2007 6:00:16 PM | wait,,,,,,,,,,,,the fish is better looking than me huh? I knew better than to put the competition in the pic with me. | |
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Posted: 7/2/2007 3:17:48 AM | Hi
I have been on here a few weeks now and had loads of people check out my profile. But sadly no emails.
Could you please tell me what I am doing wrong? Is it the photos? I don't photograph well!! Or is it the text? Pointers please.
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