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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/23/2007 2:42:08 PM | | Freckles990... young lady if you were talking about my profile,, I thank you,, if I 'm wrong please excuse me,, either way,, good luck to you,, and I am so sorry for you loss,, Norm | |
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/23/2007 3:09:30 PM | Mr. Norm,
Okay for starter, if you want to stand out from the crowd ditch the "knight" thing and come up with something else. Do you want to be one of a bagillion hedge"knights" at some table so long you can't see the woman carrying the favor to be had, or do you want to stand out? The choice is yours, pick up the guantlet of not. One can display ones chivalry without refering directly to Knights. Try typing in the word Knight in a search here and you will see what I am talking about. Secondly, I think you are being a bit hard on yourself in your stats. Everyone is different I suppose, but I would hardly call drinking less than 3 times a week "often". I think there is a choice of occasionally, I would go with that.
This next part you are not gonna like at all I suspect. You have 8 pics, thats marvelous, but you also have 3 with your kids in them. Call me a paranoid old biddy if you want, but I am strongly and vehemently against putting photos of children on adult dating sites. I have very good reason for beleiving as I do, and I have expressed those reasons in other forums. It simply is not smart. I am sure you adore your son, but this is not the time nor the platform for displaying that devotion. That profile should be about you and you alone, short of casual mention of the fact that you have childeren. You can see another review here for my take on that issue. I personally would hide those pictures from the general public and perhaps only share them with somone you feel a real connection too Norm. In case you are wondering the lil bugger in the knee socks in my personal profile is not my son, that is me 40 years ago.
Secondly you have some great shots of your self including an "action shot" and you look well groomed and happy in all of them, but I think a clear and focused head shot would serve best as yoru primary. I would strongly consider the photo presently in position #2 or #8 as your primary.
You have a healthy number of interests listed so I see no issues there, so lets move on to your profile proper:
New Intro. First; if I am old enough to be your father, I'm not the man for you, so please? no more winks or emails.
Amendment: Ok I'm a guy, I'll look, But!! I have to ask! How long do you think you will keep my attention; are you really that shallow,, where you have to push you butt up in the air, almost expose your breasts, lay on a bed as if to say F*** me,, My answer is you can't and "WILL NOT" keep my attention,, so move on,.....
DELETE! DELETE! DELETE! I don't care if the woman in question is young or enough to be your daughter, your age or old enough to be your mother, this is no way to start a profile and any progress you made to this point is likely to take a massive nosedive into the crapper. No matter how you slice this up it still comes up stinking of negativity and despite how you might feel, it has got to go. You are better off ignoring the emails and winks and what have you that offend you then putting vitriol in your profile.
There is something to be said about Fav list. Why am I in yours if we never talked, I'll give it a week, in no contact is made,, I'll delete it. I refused to be vieved as a player,, I am far from shy,, but I do not contact woman as a rule,, I refuse to be inline, waiting in a mail box, thats just not me,, yes I'm stright forward and bold,,
Straightforward and bold perhaps but but your desireability is fading fast. Again ask yourself, how does this garner you good attention? How does saying this help your cause? Yes it may honestly be how you feel, but who besides yourself do you think really gives a crap how you feel about this particular subject? Is this a deal breaker thing? If it isn't is sure as hell isn't worth bringing up is it? If its not part of the solution it is part of the problem, and this isnt solving anything I can lay my fingers on.
Still reading Great!! Then I just might be just the guy for you.
This has the stink of false bravado to it, and can work either for or against you, so keep that in mind. I want to make it clear if you feel you must go for the negative there are ways to add sugar to it so that it is a lot easier to swallow, but it is not an easy thing to do and pull off successfully, so I don't advise risking it.
So who am I, well I'm a single dad with a little boy, now 7, I adopted him at birth. I was married for 15 yrs now widowed over 6yrs. Together my son and I have worked our way through that painful part of our lives, we are both ready and able to move on. There is no baggage; I know who I am and what I need in this life. I also know what I'm able give, its nothing you can buy or sell,, My heart, my love, I await the day I kneel before my lady and freely give both. It has been said, I was a Knight, I humbly accept that, because that is what I strive to be. Let our quest begin, to find each other..
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Who am I looking for, a woman who is comfortable in her own skin, a woman who can dream, but yet lives in the true reality of life, a woman who can speak her own mind, who has a strong opinion and convictions, yet is willing to compromise. A woman I can walk beside and share life,,, together!! Step back so that she can be herself; fulfill her own goals, etc. Take one step forward so that I may protect her, hopefully I'm wise enough to know the difference. If I fail, she will tell me. (Communication a must).. If I forgot her since of humor, I didn't, for I know just to date me you would have to have one. Sorry,, pictures are a must,, if you don?t want to post them on the net, I'll give you my email address,, The rest is up to you I'm only an email away.. Good luck..
This is brilliant and very nicely put, I daresay even maybe endearing. I would caution you to avoid buzz words like "baggage" thoughl, even if there is none. Likewise you need to bear in mind that not all woman are going to buy into the "fairy tale" thing so don't be disappointed should that part not go over very well. You have to understand that a lot of woman feel like they have kissed far to many frogs in a search for a prince so they are contend to find a regular joe than a would be knight.
I had to say this,, those little flirts you send,, My son likes the smilies and hugs,, but this is not about him, I like the kisses so much better,,But I must add, take the time to write as well please say something. I will respond to a them.
This is something I have read many times,, NO CHEATERS or LIERS PLEASE::: Who is going to admit to that one,, if they do,, you know they are not lying,, they just might be a keepers :)
Delete all this. It doesn't serve you at all, it can appear a lil creepy, and the final bit is all negatives. You need to focus on positives, focusing on the negative will only net negative results. It is far more important to stress what you do want, as opposed to what you don't want.
I'm here,hopefully to meet a mature woman. A woman who understands that relationships do not just exist, they need to be nurtured; a bond of friendship must be born. Good strong communication is a must. Respect! That is earned. Loyalty! Must be given. Honesty! Shall be mutual. Complacency, breeds disaster. So their must be a hit of controlled jealousy. Chemistry, that, my take hours,, is it the butterflies one feels? I know it's that and so much more. What do I want, honesty, loyalty, integrity,, that's easy, I want chemistry with communication. Then at the end of any given day, I want to come home to the woman that I fell in love with, close the door and leave the world behind. What happens behind those closed doors will be to our delight. To send flowers to her place of work, just to say, baby I'm thinking of you. How about a nice night out, a few drinks at a pub or piano bar, then a long dinner at a quaint Inn, Lets just talk about anything, how about dancing later, Yes!! I am a guy, my mind does tend to go in the gutter. I really love a good passionate kiss. You know the kind, the one that makes your souls melt and become one. Matter of fact, I enjoy everything I just wrote, the only real thing missing is, us.
There are a lot of both sweet sentiments and negativities jumbled all together here in a wall of text. First thing to do is skim through this and remove every instance of negativity. Then take what is left and find the appropriate paragraph above to put it in. If it doesn't fit into what you alread have and doesn't justify a fresh paragraph of its own, then trash it. The long blank patchs also serve no purpose.
I am not going to bother disecting your "First Date" section because to be honest it looks like an unapproachable wall of text and while you seem like a nice guy and all I simply don't feel you are worth the effort to try and read that (it really hurt my eyes, and coming from someone as long winded as me, that is saying something). You need to find a way to say all that in a fraction of the space. This is a first date remember, give her a hint, give her a notion, not a step by step itinerary to romance. Women like surprises so for god sakes leave something to her imagination or at least for an email. Think 30sec commerical spot, not Mini-series, and you will get the picture.
Norm I won't kid you, your profile has some really bumpy patches that you need to iron out. You look and seem like you might be a good person, but you need to concetrate more on showing that side of you, and speaking to what you want without a lot of the negativity that is present in your profile now. It is my hope you will take this advice in the spirit that it is intended in. My familial roots are in the Rochester/Webster area, so I should hate to see an Upstate NY boy fall flat on his face romantically. Good Luck!
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/23/2007 7:46:26 PM | | Thorn,, thank you,, You had me in stiches,, I knew I was going to a tough read.. I do appreciate you taking the time and for your comments,, so many were are right on,, I will consider changing some,, how I knew the ones you were going to say delete delete delete... I'm still laughing.. thanks again,, play safe,, Norm | |
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| A little help please
Posted: 8/23/2007 8:54:54 PM | Hey Thorn
Could you help me out? I've been on for almost a month with little to no response. Anything is great.
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/24/2007 4:18:53 PM | Ms. Valley*Girl,
Okay starting off, no issues with the chosen Handle or the rather obscure headline, so we are right as rain there. So that leads us to your photos. Well obviously there aren't any, so my first question is why not?
I am sure you have reasons why you don't have a picture in your profile, but I am more than willing to bet you don't have a good one among them. I have heard so many reasons for why people don't have pictures in thier dating profile, and in the 5 years on and off I have been involved in Internet Dating I have yet to hear a good one, or one I can't counter with pure unadulterated logic and common sense. VG, there is a reason every single article you ever read about Internet Dating, and Internet Dating Profiles in particular stresses the importance of posting a photograph. By simply not having one you have eliminated roughly 70% of your potential matches from ever making contact with you, and that seems to run contrary to what the entire purpose of being on an Internet Dating Site is to begin with. Without pics, only 30% of men will bother to even look at what you have written, making it more or less inconsequetial. So you know now what you need to do to make your profile more productive.
Your interests are varied and certainly girlieish as befits a Valley Girl, so no red flags there, lets move on to your profile proper:
Welcome to my mid-life crisis!
I laugh, and to me it really is funny – but at the same time, it isn’t a joke. But don’t run for the hills yet! That doesn’t mean I am a woman with baggage (for those of you that are terrified of luggage!) – In fact as far as baggage goes I am traveling rather light (unless shoes count?!?). I am employed, I own my own home, I just paid off my car, and I am an empty nester – really empty – it’s just me and my dog! But what it does mean is that I have hit that stage in my life where I am seriously looking at where I am, where I’ve been and where I am going from here.
While your sense of humor is not lost one me, try to avoid using buzzwords with negative conotations assoctiated with them, and try not to appear desperate.
I don’t have all the answers yet, but one thing I have figured out is that I need a BIG change in my life – I’ve spent enough years putting everyone else first, and as my own children have told me – it is time for me to stop living my life for them and work on what I want and need for me. And since I am a bit of goal-oriented girl - ever since I got that part figured out I have been working towards a plan to bring about those changes (ask me more if you are interested!). The world is my oyster and I know I am lucky enough to be gifted with intelligence and good health and I have the ability to succeed at anything I want to do.
All epiphanies aside, this section could either hurt or help you. Saying what you have learned about yourself is great and some people dig that kind of new age stuff, but you have to be careful about making yourself come off like some headcase. Remember you are trying to attract men, and even an enlighted "I Ching" reading yoga instructor might find this a bit much at the get go. So when dealing with Men remember at the beginning KISS (Keep It Simple Stupid) is a good policy to abide by.
Yet here I am, single & sitting at home alone in front of my computer I'd really like to know what those couples that have been married for umpteen years have figured out that I haven’t figured out yet! I’ve been single for 9 years – lots of dates and a couple of relationships during that time – but obviously they did not work out or I wouldn’t be here! Am I picky? Probably! And maybe part of the problem is that at times I’ve been a bit too upfront, opinionated, and honest for my own good (like now for example?). But at this point in my life I’ve figured out that I can take care of myself, so I am not going to settle for just anyone or pretend that I am something I’m not, just to avoid being alone.
Are you smelling what I am smelling? Yep, smells like more desperation. You need to figure out how to convey how your feel and word it so it doesn't make you sound like a spinster on the prowl, or ditch it. Remember you are on the market for a boyfriend not a shrink, so leave the psychobabble and insight of this kind for the couch on Wednesday at 4pm. Trust me hon, you are just shooting yourself in the foot here if landing a Guy is the thing you have your sights set on.
But I would like to meet someone special – it would be great to have someone to snuggle with other than my dog and I am enough of a hopeless romantic that I’m still willing to take a risk that there are at least a few guys out there that really are looking for a meaningful relationship. I’m not interested in meeting yet another a “serial dater” – met one of those on this site already and I guess I will have to write it off as a learning experience and join the countless ranks of forum posters who were burned by someone who wasn’t what they portrayed themselves to be. But please do me a favour – if you are not seriously wanting a relationship, do not waste my time! I’m not some chick that wants to meet you at the bar with hopes of knocking boots with you by the end of the night! If it is all about “the chemistry” as some people claim, then sorry but some of you have chemistry with wayyyy too many people!! If that is what you are looking for I hear this site has a great catch and release program – so fly at it & happy fishing! Just please don’t cast in my direction!
Read this again for yourself, then read it 4 more times, and tell me what positive message you are sending out in this paragraph? I mean the only valid useful point that can be derived from the entire paragraph is that you enjoy cudding and are looking for a long term relationship. You could easily say that with one sentence and without all the negativity and desperation the remainder of this paragraph consists of.
What I am seeking is this: someone that will enhance my life, a man who is comfortable enough in his own shoes that he is not worried about what other people think of him, but at the same time he consistently makes choices and has actions that show he has regard and concern for others, someone who is hard-working, trust-worthy & loyal, able to communicate honestly and openly, able to take care of himself and his responsibilities (sorry if this sounds condescending to those boys out there - a playful side is great but I’m finished raising my children), someone who is passionate, affectionate & considerate, flexible, creative & has a positive outlook on life, open-minded and non-judgmental, someone who realizes that life is not black and white but a whole lot of shades of grey, someone who is lots of fun and able to laugh at themselves and me too (just not too loudly if I fall on my face yet again), open to adventure & trying new things, and I truly hope that you are seeking an equal partner and that you are willing (and able) to travel and perhaps also (just dreaming a little dream here) willing to consider relocating and build a new life together in some exotic foreign location (my vote is for Costa Rica!). Don’t let that last one scare ya! I’m willing to hear you out if you have other ideas – just please be open and willing enough to listen to my goals and dreams too!
This part of your profile is as it should be. You just need to take out some of the negativity. There really is no point in going to great lengths to hash out the finer details of what you don't like or want. Profile are supposed to more about what you do want.
AND if you are all that and also can toss in a few practical skills such as plumbing, using power tools, mechanical, or organized with paperwork – well then wow that’d be so sexy!! Just kidding ya – none of that matters – those are just some of the things I’m not very good at and figure it wouldn’t hurt if you were good at them!
I like this part, find a way to incorporate it into the "What I Want" portion of your profile.
Catch ya on the other side,
~Valley*Girl~
PS – I am not one of those people that are hung up on body image – I don’t care what your BMI is or whether you look like Brad Pitt. But that said, I do think it is important that you are healthy enough to be active and able to keep up with me while I'm out enjoying life, and it matters not whether others find you attractive – but whether you are attractive to me (after all beauty is in the eye of the beholder). And YES I have a picture that I am willing to share (there's actually several of them posted on facebook.com ) – I’m just not willing to post it in my profile due to having a public job in small town rumour-ville.
PSS – If you made it all the way through this long drawn out rant, it must mean that you really truly are bored with life or else you like what I’ve had to say – either way what do you have to lose? Don’t be shy – send me a message!!
The PS's are cute touches, but the fact that you yourself admit to the fact that your profile is ranting goes to show where the inherent problems with it lie. More Pictures, Less Ranting, Less Desperation and you might be on to something. Hope that helped, Good Luck!
Have fun ;)!
Editorial Note: I see more of you have requested reviews, and I promise I will in fact get to all of them. I just ask that you please be patient. The weekend is here and living in a Shore town at the end of Summer it gets a bit crazy busy around here on week ends, so it might take some time before I get all caught up again. I would rather take my time and give your profile a thorough going over than just a few quickie comments for the sake of staying punctual. Hope you all understand. On a side note, for those who have emailed me with their review requests, please post them here instead of emailing me requests. Thanks. | |
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/25/2007 10:31:34 AM | Ms. Bolongse,
No idea what your handle is in reference to, had thought it might be Bolognese which is a pasta sauce, but it isn't spelt as you have it. Secondly, your headline as it stands now, "a stranger is just someone u havnt met y" makes you appear uneducated, so find a way to spell what you want to say correctly, or find something else to say.
Your stats (what there are of them) seem honest, but I would caution you that the words "prefer not to say" translate to many as "I've got something to hide," so you would do well to just answer the questions and be done with it.
As to your photographs, you have 5 photos, but only 2 of them are of you. One is a small child, who should either be removed or set to private, and seeing as how under children in your stats you put "prefer not to say" we have no idea who this child is in relation to you. Next you have a picture of a young man, who again we have no idea who he is, or what his relation is to you, so it should be removed or set to private. Lastly you are obviously a "Footballer" fan and as such have a pic of what I am to assume is your favorite club. Bully for you, but ask yourself why a man would need to see a picture of a logo? What impact is that going to have on his decision to contact you? I would bin it.
Next on to your interests, um if all you do is sit in the house listening to mp3's while either reading a book, playing PS2, or watching a Liverpool football match on the telly, then I daresay you need to get out of your flat and look long and hard for some other hobbies, unless you are looking to date a fellow shut-in. I mean not to be cruel Hon, but that is exactly what your interests make you come off as the way the list stands now. I am sure there is more you enjoy doing, so tell us about it.
Now on to your profile proper:
id like to meet friends on this site i have already put a couple of my interests dont want to put many as there be nothing to find out about me.i have two sons
Wait a tick, where's the bloody profile? Was that it? Okay I won't even bother critiquing the grammar, and lack of capitalization (which most find irritating, and makes you look uneducated). This blurb that is supposed to tell us about who you are, what you like to do, and what you are looking for, yet it says less about you than your initial headline, and is equally atrocious. I am sorry hon., but this is simply horrible, and for the most part worthless.
Bolongse, if you hope to have any success on a dating site, you need to find a way to communicate at least the basics, and do so in an intelligent, and articulate manner. By basics I mean the following.
1) Tell Us Who You Are
2) Tell Us what interests you and Why
3) Tell Us what you are looking for in terms of a relationship, what kind of relations hip are you looking for, and what qualifies a person to be successful having a relationship with you.
Be honest, positive, upbeat, and cohesive in your thoughts. I am sorry to say hon., but this profile is probably one of the top 5 worst profiles I have ever seen, and is more than likely doing you far more harm than good. You need to give some serious thought to putting more effort into it, or you shouldn't be surprised if you don't find what you are looking for. Just like with everything else in life, you get out of it what you put into it, and sad to say hon., it doesn't look like you put much into this profile. Good Luck!
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| A little help please
Posted: 8/25/2007 11:10:35 AM | Mr.Jimmiedean,
First off everyone loves Jimmy Dean Sausage, leastwise around here any ways. I have a Jimmy Dean Sausage, Egg, and Cheese on an English muffin for breakfast almost every morning, so your handle is AOK in my book. As for your headline, while it's not horrible or negative, it does come off a wee bit wimpy. Be assertive. You aren't hoping, you are looking for, looking to have, in search of, on the road to...whatever, just be assertive and positive about it. "Hope" while a tender emotion also implies possibility of failure or disappointment, and that is not what you are about right?
Moving onward; your stats seem honest, in fact extremely honest. Care to take a guess what caught my eye right off the bat? "Do you do drugs? Often (>3 times/week)". Now that stuck out like a sore thumb just like it does here and now. So my immediate reaction was to jump down to your profile proper to see if there was any elaboration on this. While I don't wish to get ahead of myself here, the point is there wasn't any elaboration, and that is going to set off a lot of alarm bells and red flags with the women folk, take my word for it. Drinking and Drugs are two things most people will look at (as well as smoking), and drug use is not nearly as acceptable as drinking or smoking. While I appreciate you being honest (and you should), if you are going to be honest about drug use, you need to find a way to elaborate on your usage in the body of your profile in a positive way. Is your drug of choice, cocaine, heroin, pot, shrooms, psychotropic hallucinogens, prescription drugs, frog licking? What is it? You need to address this.
On to your pictures; overall they aren't bad but they are all poorly lit, and that ain’t so great. The one in front of the brick wall looks like a mug shot and I would bin it. I personally would also bin the "holding the camera looking at the mirror" picture as I have always thought those looked retarded, near as retarded as the "This is me taking a pic of myself in the mirror with my cell phone" pictures. Get a friend to take some nice casual pictures of you where you are relaxed and don't look like you are posing for a passport photo. If you can't find someone to take pictures of you, then I daresay you have bigger fish to fry. Nuff said about that.
As to your interests, well here at least we can answer that your drug of choice appears to be marijuana. Not sure how that equates to an interest, but okay not a biggy. Still probably need to address this a bit in your profile proper. Most woman aren't going to be all that interested in a man who's primary interest is being a "stoner" unless they are a "stoner " themselves. Needless to say you are going to curtail your options significantly by being a regular drug users. I am guessing this is no new news to you though. I would have said image what you would think if someone put "drinking" as an interest, but unfortunately that is one of your interests as well.
On to the profile proper:
I am new to the whole online dating scene but I am willing to give it a try. I'm really just looking for some new people to hangout. If anything should transpire, the entire better. I would consider myself just an average guy; work hard, come home to a cold beer and j and just hang out with the boys. On weekends I like to take out my buddies 4x4 and do some damage to his lawn or just spend a day locked in front of the 360 or Wii(I'd like to see anyone beat me @ Tiger Woods '06 for xbox, I'll bet you).
I'd like to meet someone who is smart, funny and fun to get along with, someone who shares the same interests and ideals as myself. Drop me a msg if you are looking for a genuine nice guy to chill with.
Okay this might sting a bit, but you're a man so deal with it. Dude you are fricking 24 years old, college days are long over, so its time to stop spending your weekends drinking brews, tokin on jays, and parked in front of a gaming system with the guys. In short, you need to grow the "f" up. While I have no doubt your description is honest, heartfelt and sincere, what woman your age in her right mind do you think is going to look at the possibility of hanging out in your apartment getting "S-faced" while playing video games with you and your bros and go "Oh yeah where the hell do I sign up for that party?"
While the slacker mentality might have momentarily worked in college when the girls would hang out with you for the chance to maybe score some free weed or a cold beer, and maybe if they got faced enough and nothing better came along possibly snog with you for a bit till they sobered up, those days are done, over, fini, kaput, hasta la vista bye bye bubba, and you need to develop some interests and hobbies that a single woman your age might actually want to do with you. When I say you, I mean sans your buddies and the video games. That is just were its at so you need to figure a way to come to grips with that and do something about it.
As to your first date section, every one says coffee or a movie because that is a set amount of time, and doesn't require you to spend a lot of time, money or effort with someone you are not enjoying spending time with. I likewise promise you this as well, no woman is going to want to hear that you are looking to take her dancing so that you can just sit back and watch her dance. The only kind of woman who would find that appealing is the kind of woman who is only interested in a night out and in bleeding your wallet so she can have a good time in spite of you. So do the math.
In summation Jimmie, I don't think it’s your profile per se that needs help. I am sure what you said in it is very honest and sincere, and while those are great qualities to display, it sounds like you need to make some lifestyle changes if you are hoping to meet someone mature and capable of having a mature relationship. I would likewise avoid dating the teenagers and "college girls" as doing that is not going to help your own personal situation. Like the thread titles suggests; "Not to be a Thorn in your side, but I will tell you what I think." This profile needs some serious Rehab. Good luck!
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Posted: 8/25/2007 9:42:22 PM | | Wow Thorn. You give some great constructive criticism. I'm sure you must be getting tired soon, but if you still have the time and energy I would really appreciate your feedback on my profile. I'm afraid it may be too long. Thanks. | |
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/26/2007 9:59:44 AM | Ms. j-729,
Okay lets start with your blurb; "This world may never be what I expected" sounds a bit hopeful but despondent. " While the World May Never be what I expected, I am going to make the best of it every Day" is a bit more postive, but it's long as hell so maybe come up with something, short sweet, and to the poit? Pray tell what is J-729 is that your model number? Is it stamped on the underside of your foot? Just curious.
Picture and stats check out nicely, although you need to post an "action shot". All profile and no interests makes j-729 seem like a boring woman, so get thee some interests and then get thee to posting them. Think Icebreakers hon, give them something to comment on if you want them writing.
Now for the profiel proper:
9quote] I'm eclectic...complicated I guess...but then most women are. I'm just your average girl...a little shy at first but once I get comfortable I am lots of fun. My sense of humor ranges from the sarcastic to the corny (It's a genetic mutation...I swear! I get it from my father!). I can dress up and clean up rather nicely when necessary but more often then not I'm more casual; jeans and tshirts are definite staples of my wardrobe. I like football and baseball; the Mets are my team. I love music, movies and books. I'm definitely a rock and roll girl but I listen to a little of everything.
Dont be demure, don't guess what you are, say what you are, own it and declare it. Tell us what sets you apart from other women not what causes you to be lost in the crowd. And for the love of God Ladies the notion that you clean up nicely and can go from jeans to little black dress is pretty much a given so stop beating guys over the head with that one. Find something new to say this one is so old its all fuzzy with mold . I really can't stress that enough.
I'm really just looking to meet some new people and see where it goes from there.
This is fine elaborate on this.
One step at a time pretty much. I look at it this way. I want to start at hanging out and work my way forward to dating and something more. I mean that's what tends to really be the norm for the whole online dating scene. I don't consider getting together once dating. Dating consists of multiple dates.
If you're looking for a hook up...please look else where...I'm not that kind of girl. If you're going to message me...make sure there are more then 3 words to it. Engage my mind if you want to stand out.
I like the Engage my mind part, the rest of this is garbage. Remember hon, when you go to pick something for your front door you want to think welcome mat not beware of dog signs, especially if you don't want people to think you have a viscious dog.
Profiles should stress the positive and avoid the negative. I really can't stress that enough. Good luck!
Have fun ;)!
Side note- Bolongse, you are headed in the right direction ,still some picture issues but you are on your way, keep going and keep working on it. | |
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/26/2007 10:08:49 AM | Ms. *Angel*Kissses*,
"Don't Just stare. Say Something!" That is something my grand mom used to tell me all the time, I bet a lot of grandm's and grandpa's told a lot of men that once or twice. You are 21 years old do you want to remind men of thier grandparents?
Pictures, stats and interests all check out good. You have the requisite "action shot' and lots of smiling pics. I personally would select the picture you have in postion #5 as your primary picture if I were you.
Profile proper:
I'm a laid-back girl who just wants to have fun. I like the simple things in life like a beautiful day or just running around with my dog. Comfortably Flexible is the phrase that best describes me because I love getting all swankified to go out and get crazy but I still enjoy staying home in my comfy pants and (gasp) watching the game and cuddling...what can I say men running around in tight pants does something to me ;)
I'm looking for someone who shares my love of of late night conversations, endless cups of coffee, random moonlit road trips, random dance parties in Walmart at midnight,party hopping, couch potato marathons,romantic dates, and last but definitely not least cuddling...Lots of cuddling....So Sound like your kind of fun?
I don't see anything wrong wth your profile that really sticks out. I did take the liberty of editing in some grammatical suggestions though. You essentially covered all the basics 1) Who you are, 2) What You are looking for, and 3) What you like to do. It is brief but to the point. You could elaborate on your interests perhaps, but all in all nothing inherently wrong comes to mind hon. Good luck!
Have fun ;)! | |
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| Not To Be A Thorn In Your Side But I Will Tell You What I Think
Posted: 8/26/2007 8:13:44 PM | Thanks for the feedback Thorn. I appreciate it. The only issue I have is with the action shots you mentioned. I've tried loading some but everytime I do the site cuts it down and instead of getting a full shot I get a portion of what I was trying to post. Don't know what anyone else has this issue or has found a way to circumvent it.
And the J-729...first inital and birthdate...just the first thing I could think of when creating my account. | |
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