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Posted: 11/19/2007 6:57:44 PM | Computer.
You have done well in describing what you are looking for but your not in your profile.
Talk about your interests and what you enjoy doing. Like you would if you were saying them to someone...
eg. " I enjoy going to the movies, i love comedy. I enjoy most sports although Footbal is my fav.. my team is ...." and so on.
Keep what you have written just add about you on top of it.
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Posted: 11/19/2007 8:11:09 PM | throw that story up there about the peanut butter and the shetland pony thing -- KIDDING! it was sad he really eat that whole tub and i know flyin' in the specialists from the ucraine was outragous and who woulda ever though they were terroists! at least you put your best foot forward with that mess. i know, i know, i was the one that found all those free circus animals.
get some funky new pics. i love the one with you on the phone. it's a great shot if you ask me.
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Posted: 11/19/2007 11:43:21 PM | I want someone who has read profiles and knows what is good from something that is less... I was a teacher and have written things before, however trying to get my arms around this stykle of writing has been a struggle. I want any advice you or others may have for me.  | |
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Posted: 11/20/2007 5:39:09 AM | Hi Carly,
Well I added other things as you suggested and, well, I think I may have it. I'm not much of a writer, and have a tough time expressing myself on paper. Most of the writing I do is technical lol. So if I had to describe myself in writing, it would sound more like a manual than a short bio lol.
Anyway, I really appreciate the help, and thanks again.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 2:49:05 PM | Gundy.
Well i cant speak for everyone about whats good or not but i know what i look for in a profile and what i think is a good profile.
You have done very well this your profile. I do however think that you talk about who you are looking for more than you do yourself. Your profile should scream this is me... why haven't you msged yet... yours is just saying that.
Sometimes longer profiles are not read as often as short ones... people are lazy. Just take that into consideration.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 2:58:49 PM | Khris.
You need to talk more on your interests.. Dont just say you have them. Expand on a couple, also what do you enjoy doing? Tell us more about that side of you.
With your pics, yes they are good, show you but they are all the same. how about get a couple that are different mix it up a bit. So you doing something fun. Action shots are great.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 3:05:08 PM | Rapunzal.
I swear I'm not a psycho! Change your headline... keep it postive, i know this is mean to be funny but some wont take it that way.
You put yourself down so many times in your profile. Im sure your not as bad as you have written about yourself. So... Dont put yourself down or they will too. Keep your profile positive. Your profile is your ad. I know its bad but you need to sell your self.
Everyone has bad points and times and everyone knows that, but this profile isn't the time to write about them... dating process is a discovery process. Im not saying lie or hide who you are but keep everything positive or in positive light.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 3:10:04 PM | 50cents.
So... your after a friend who will really know you. thats all i got from your profile (sorry if i sound harsh).
Your profile is to tell people about you. Write who you are, what your interested in and what you enjoy... keep what your looking for too. You need to give some information to get someone to msg. Tease them with info about you and make them want to know more.
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