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Posted: 11/20/2007 3:20:04 PM | Down2.
You need to expand on your interests, just listing them doesn't sound as good as if you talk a little on them.
You also dont really talk about your self.. it is the about you section.. talk about yourself. Let us know a little about you. If you find it hard, write like you would say it to someone it does help and sounds natural and works well.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 3:24:17 PM | Heck.
Your profile is open and honest. i like it. i would suggest that you keep that last paragraph a little more positive.
Also how about writting something about a first date... a great chance to show a romantic side.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 3:27:20 PM | Joe.
Ok, i love the humor that you have in there.. but it is hiding in all those words. Your profile says too much, try and cut it down a bit, you have great content but making it too long some wont read.
Your paragraphs are too long too, making it just as hard to read as if you had none.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 6:49:40 PM | Clo921.
You need to put a little more into your profile. There are four things that i look for in a profile and i find these work.
1. About you. -describe your personality
2. What are your interests.
3. What do you enjoy doing.
4. What are you looking for.
Now these shouldn't just be listed and neither an essay wrote but maybe a parargraph on each or combine interests/enjoy, expand on them a little but dont say too much, tease them with information about you, make them want to know more.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 7:39:24 PM | Love.
Smile and the whole world smiles with you! get some pics with you smilling, look happy!
You should talk a little more about yourself. expand on interests and enjoyments not just list. Sometimes its helps to write like you are talking to someone about you....
What would you say to them?
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Posted: 11/20/2007 10:05:14 PM | Carly,
I've been following this thread and your reviews are terrific. You spend a lot of time on this out of the goodness of your heart; you rock!
I need some help. I'm going to go insane trying to write the freakin thing. I've tried...I've read other reviews...I've tried integrating that advice; but it is so flat. I just don't see me jumping out of there.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 10:58:10 PM | Superman.
You have that dont give a f*** what anyone thinks attitude... not saying its a bad thing, just prob the problem with attracting on here. This site i have found a lot of people to be very superfisial(sp?)...
You need to talk about yourself, using a positive light, not saying lie or not say things just not be so harsh with what you say.
Talk about what you like to do, besides drinking and parting, there must be other things. What are you interested in? What are you looking for on this site?
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Posted: 11/20/2007 11:01:07 PM | Cabernet.
Your profile seems a little flat. Expand a bit on your interests, try and put some of your personalility into it.
Paragraphs and spacing help a profile not to look like an essay, not saying you have a long one, just with it all together some may think its too much effort to read.
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Posted: 11/20/2007 11:31:59 PM | Heynow.
Your profile is well written but very straight, try and lighten it but a bit. A profile should be like and Ad. It should sell a product... that product being you.
You get very serious about what you are looking for on here, that will turn someone off. Why not just have a little general outline? And the first date section is a great time to show an romantic side.
A platypus is not a marsupial True, a Platypus is a monotreme, stil a mammal but lays eggs like the Echidna. From an Aussie to you...
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Posted: 11/20/2007 11:36:17 PM | Fng.
Flattery will get you anywhere.... hehe
Look i like your content of your profile, but it tells me ll that i need to know about you, doesn't make me want to know more or ask a question.
Cut some of the fat, tease women with information about you, im not saying just list but dont tell everything. You have to make them want to get to know you.
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