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Posted: 11/13/2007 9:25:33 PM | hey, you head'n out for coffee at the j&p again tonight. i see you've hit douce tonight -- congrats! i'm checkin' out early. i'll see you over there later. oh, i picked up those jessica simpson skates you've asked for. i don't think jane can fit in 'em any more. i'll bring over and you can try 'em out in the parking lot.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 9:34:01 PM | Fseries.
Your pics show you but you dont smile. I just have a thing with people who smile in their profiles, makes me think they are happy people.
Your profile reads like an ad, i like that. Showing what life would be like if you were with someone. I would exclude this
Alot of the dating games that are played really are getting old for me though , so please if you honestly want to meet a good man here I am , but if you are still married , wanting a sugar daddy , addicted to pills or drugs of any sort pass me on by, I know that these are things that no one wants but on your profile it just doesn't sound right. Too negative when yours is so positive.
Talk more about you, What you enjoy doing and such.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:00:29 PM | Sarge.
Do you have any other pics? Would love to see one of your face and with a big smile.
So how would you describe yourself? who are you? What are you looking for on this site?
With the first date, just say what comes to mind when you want to show a gal a good time.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:07:28 PM | Johnny.
Your main pic and another pic you have are too dark, really useless to look at to see who you are.
You list what you like to do why not expand a little on them. Tell a little more, tease those women out there, make them ask about you. Tease with some info about yourself too. You dont talk much about you. What are you looking for on this site? Sometimes it is worth just metioning a few general outlines of what you are after.
I love your last line...
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:13:25 PM | Maas.
All i will say that with a pic you will get way more views and msgs.
Your profile is to the point, explains you and what your after. The only comment i think i can make is that maybe its not light hearted enough, you say you love cracking jokes... a great time to show your humor on your profile.
You list a heap of interests then dont talk about them. Why not say something about them?
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:24:06 PM | Mcnewman.
Cant get thru your mail filters so has to be in here.
Your main pic should be of just you. Pick one that is clear and shows you happy.. angry faces make angry profiles...lol
Your profile is hard to read, are you able to make it into paragraphs or use spaces like i am here? Would make it easier for gals to read and not as daunting.
I know im not one to say, but spelling is an issue in your profile... spell check it. there are people out there that are really bothered with it.
If you would like to know more and all that please pm or send me a message and ill get back to you in time If a gal likes what you wrote then she will. so not needed in your profile.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:33:59 PM | Redfox.
your pics, cant see you clearly. Do you have any of your face or such?
Talk about yourself first before going on about the gal your after. And when you do make it a seperate paragraph.
You list your interests but dont really go into a little detail about them. Say a little something about one of them.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:40:24 PM | Dreamin.
I dont know what to say really. Your pics are great. You describe you and everything that i suggest and you do it well, maybe the only thing i can say is that its a tad long. But i dont see you have any problems esp. since the amount of ppl who have added you to favs.
All the best
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Posted: 11/13/2007 10:51:26 PM | Mybigtoe.
You talk about interests but then dont say anything about them. What are you interested in? Who are you and what do you enjoy doing?
You seem to be able to talk about such things so i dont see you having any trouble doing a little rewrite.. Not much but a touch up and you will be off and running.
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Posted: 11/13/2007 11:04:19 PM | Famousblue.
Change your main pic to the one thats the close up of your face. Would do much better gaining attention.
Your profile is nice and upbeat untill you get to
don't like liars, arrogants nor bad attitudes No one likes them, and just gives a negative tone to your profile.
You list in your profile a lot, why not talk about things and make it like your talking to someone about yourself. This is your ad. You have to sell yourself.
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Posted: 11/15/2007 1:50:06 PM | NevM.
So what are you looking for on this site? Any positive general outlines? Always helps a gal know that she isn't wasting her time.
You say you graduated and now working? What did you do and what as, you dont have to give any fine detatails but you never know, someone might have done the same or similar and then you have something in common.
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Posted: 11/15/2007 1:55:49 PM | Vaparrothead.
Just a little suggestion about the pics, why not change the main pic to the one with the christmas hat, you look good there and its clear.
What do you do for fun? WHat excites you? Talk about these things too. Also what kind of man are you looking for? You describe yourself quite well and shouldn't need to change it.
Spacing makes the profile easy to read if you are going to add to it. different paragraphs for seach topic work well. The easier it is to read the more it will be read.
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Posted: 11/15/2007 2:02:53 PM | M62.
Wow. I like it. But im sure your not here just to hear that its good.
You say
My pics are current or if not, they fairly represent my appearance You only have to one pic. Which is artistic and a great shot but really doesn't show your appearance. So you may want to change this sentence a little bit. Or get more pics.
Otherwise i think you will do well..
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Posted: 11/15/2007 2:09:42 PM | Btoms.
You main pic should be of just you. Just scanning your pics you dont have one of just you and a few with gals in. Not saying thats a nono but us women tand to automatically think girlfriend or ex and we dont want to see that. So if you have any of just you would be great.
This comment is not needed...
The trend on the site seems to imply that this section is usually a jumble of adjectives to describe ourselves, so i'll do my best to get it right....lol even though I think this is such a limited view of view of me...
Your writing is a bit all over the place. are you able to group the sentences and make paragraphs? Just make it easier to read.
You list a lot of interests and dont talk about them, its not an essay but a little info can go a long way.
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