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Posted: 12/16/2007 2:19:01 PM | STEELERSGIRLTINA: i think what you have is good, but you need more pic's. being too forward at times is just another way of saying you're too honest. you're clear of what you want and what you have to offer, so don't worry about that.
just get more pic's shot and pin 'em up.
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Posted: 12/16/2007 2:24:50 PM | pTCRUISER1:
here and example: i like long walks in the park especially on a brisk day. sweater worn. maybe a cap. hot cup of coffee to sip. however, the
other day i noticed there are more and more squirels
playing cricket. more so than the other years i've
walked through this particular park.
example with tightened sentences:
i like long walks in the park especially on a brisk day. sweater worn. maybe a cap. hot cup of coffee to sip. however, the other day i noticed there are more and more squirels playing cricket. more so than the other years i've walked through this particular park.
see, i deleted some space to tighten up the overall sentence. sometimes when you copy and paste writing this sorta thing happens.
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Posted: 12/16/2007 6:29:08 PM | STEPHEN3838: you gotta scrap this. the pic's are just okay. you can't have all of 'em fishing and a the pool shot looks like it was takin' by a drive-by shooter.
first, you gotta list more interests. take your time and list 'em all.
next, you gotta tell us more about you. get into this. you're 30 not 13 so you've seen life. tell us about it. the fish you're catchin' are huge -- do you contest it or just sport fish -- tell us.
redo this thing and get back to me; you can do it!!
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Posted: 12/16/2007 6:52:51 PM | LOGIKOS: bravo! you're set. you're another one that gotta get into film. so many looks. so many stories with your pic's. ...and the writing. hats off. you've taken the time to put this together.
be patient. you'll be swapping divorce stories with all of us in about 10 years wondering why the hell did i plung into that POF site...
great job!
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Posted: 12/16/2007 8:12:55 PM | BEWILDERED100: another good one! you've put time into this. the pic's tell a thousand stories -- loved 'em.
your first date is risky, but hey, so is this site! you might wanna jot down a serious first date, then go with the funky monkey stuff.
hat off!
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Posted: 12/16/2007 8:16:19 PM | MREPRA: i like the second pic, but it's a close one. break up your writing with some white space.
interests: put more up there. you're a cool kat, so i know you've got 'em.
first date: you gotta jot something down. be original. crafty. stealth...
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Posted: 12/16/2007 8:20:06 PM | ZAPPA1: good job! break up the writing though -- white space. also, more interests. last, give me more pic's of you doing things. tell a story to her via a pic. if you got a kitty laying around, that'll do the trick too. show compassion. love. challenge even.
best of luck with your move -- stay safe.
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Posted: 12/16/2007 8:44:33 PM | | Thanks a bunch. Hopefully, I'll be able to get someone to take some new pics of me at Christmas time!! Kinda hard to have pics of yourself with no one around to take them! LOL!! And I should know better about the white space - I have a degree in communications focusing on newspaper journalism and a minor in English. Damn! I should know better. | |
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