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Posted: 12/17/2007 8:35:05 PM | ERICEIRA: at first sight i was a bit scared, then i read your profile. you're very interesting. awesome first date too! i worked for digital domain in LA once writing a storeline for a game -- *ucker wasn't picked up, but my checks still cleared. you remind me of the awesome friends i use to hang with out there. got to show me how the tech people really live.
i would dump all the pic's except the feet up on the desk one. i think you can do better. throw on a variety of clothing too. mix it up too. you're interesting, so show it.
i bet you'll find her sooner than later. i don't know on here, but you'll reel her in with everything you have to offer.
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Posted: 12/17/2007 9:02:59 PM | MUSTANG64093: ...i didn't skip you. i was saving the best for last. what ever you do, don't try that line on her!! sorry...
profile. more pic's -- action ones. keep the 'stang -- *uckin' awesome wheels. throw on some manly treads: button down leaving the top three open. show some chest. your thin. thin is always *uckin' in -- i hate you! sorry pills just wore off.... and i've gained weight this fall. *uckin' kfc with their *uckin' bowls and carbs!!!!!!
seriously, you've been all over the world, so where's that in here? get it there. your life's been on the line, right? tell her. you're our hero -- her hero, make her crave you with a war story. ...hats off and thank you for protecting our country.... forgot to mention that in the beginning. and, i'll help you 'til we find you someone! soldiers have gotten the shaft too many times in my opinion and i'll help out any of them what ever i can do.
list every interest in that rattled skull of yours. you've got 'em. give 'em to us. you like fast cars, right? music? parts of the world? unique food? wine? exotic beverages ending in digits? sewing...? i don't even wanna know that one -- just givin' you suggestions to work with here.
spend more time on this and give me everything. it's bad enough you're in idaho -- NOT THAT THERE'S ANYTHING WRONG WITH IDAHO FOR ALL THOSE IDAHOIANS OUT THERE -- just i bet that's not your home and bet you'd like to be home at times and this is why you yern to find someone to weave all that lost love into a meanful relationship -- PAY THE *UCK ATTENTION!!! that's a line for your profile. see how crafty i am...
seriously, work on this and get back to me. think about: who you are and what made you the person you are today. and what qualities that lucky lady should have to match all of your desiring qualities. listen, your a simple formula: soldier (meaning steady paycheck). race car. in shape (as close to mentioning "handsome" as i'll ever get for a guy -- sorry). stories or far away lands. etc. = ovary magnet.
i bet your find her soon. ...but NOT UNTIL YOU GET THIS *UCKIN' PROFILE DOWN, CLANCY!!!!!! AND I WON'T CATCH YA WAXIN' THE STANG UNTIL YOU'RE BACK ON THIS TREAD WITH AN EDIT, RIGHT???!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i'll see you back in 48?
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Posted: 12/17/2007 9:13:18 PM | ITSAWONDRFULLIFE: ...my favorite movie this time of year!
profile: love what you've written, but you need more pic's. action. give us a story behind the scene. this is the only time that drama does work to your advanage.
your right, life is a highway -- love it. and on that point: your not a boring stretch of road. you're a scenic blue road, winding it's way through a mountain, lush valley or weavying longside a river. curves girl! curves!! you've you've gottem -- flaught 'em! but classy. not all slutted up like betty just did a page or two back -- kidding.
you're a keeper. just be patient!
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Posted: 12/17/2007 9:42:17 PM | | sowing ROFL dude you have to be Fuc$ing kidding me made me laugh anyway. Thanks for the support bro YEA i dont mean to offend idohoens but ID sucks LOL. I wish i was in sunny flordia or something. But in the mean time, oh well got to make the best of it, im going to edit some of your suggestions there awesome thanks again. | |
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Posted: 12/17/2007 11:01:15 PM | | Alright man i worked on it for a hour put some thought into it did some spell checking and everything and BTW your line for my profile was way too long sorry i liked it though. And no i dint go out at wax my car dude its fuc$in freezing up here BRRRR. | |
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:21:38 AM | MARCH41: my son and i often talk about places we've traveled. the riverfront where you live is by and far our favorite place! i often stop in there while communiting out to LA. sonny (my son) has always loved texas, even before we traveled there. he just musta known where the true soals are. (actually, it's because sandy from that cartoon sponge bob is from there -- she's a kickass squirel that fits that character in your joke perfectly).
profile: love it. at first i wasn't crazy about the pic's, but you've capitured so much with your writing, i think the pic's tell even more about you after i read what you wrote. i would add more interests though. music bands. specific songs even. choices of food. planes? or airshows? humor (you've got a great joke too). many family. pets. things you like.
as i always tell my readers, the more pic's the better.
you're the real deal; you'll find her. just be patient.
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:29:49 AM | MUSTANG64093: nice improvement! now, work on those interests. get 'em up there. music. countries. food. hobbies. anything that you can strike up a conversation with. i get an average of five emails a week with people noting an interest of mine. take a look and snab some ideas from me.
last, work on some more pic's. seriously, shoot one with you dressed up. it'll give her a variety of your different looks.
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:36:03 AM | OTTIMO: like it -- great intro pic! love your writing. now, throw a white space between "armour" and the next sentence. then, throw another white space between the :-) and the next thought. i'm just being picky here, but i *uckin' care, 'kay!??
since you're a photo guy, pin up one more pic of you and several of your work. i bet you've got a fantastic eye! ...so let's see. wow her. awwwwhhh her. then, take her!
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:39:51 AM | WI1D7S: more everything. pic's (make sure the glasses are pushed up) and one body shot. more interests (you've got 'em so let her know) and break up your writing with white space. divide your thoughts into neat wannabe paragraghs.
stop back in when finished.
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:49:50 AM | COUNTRYTAT: first, extra points -- you're from OH!!!! i attended OSU back in the day; even was a frat boy off ol' high street, tke. don't remember much, but i think it was a good school...
loveed the profile. change nothing. just be patient. "do people say anything they mean today..." my shoes really smelled horrible this morning -- they really did! i guess that really wasn't a mud patch i hit last night.
the apple tree. chris' quick solution: chainsaw. cut the sucker down and basket away! kidding. i have scabs on my arm now from climbing a huge banyon down here with my son. still love climbing trees! ...just the fire department is sick of pull my @ss of 'em.
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Posted: 12/18/2007 7:56:22 AM | COUNTRYTAT: hell no! it's the first time i've seen it. cooool. different. erotic... EROTIC!!??? ...oops, time for my 11 o'clock pill.
have a wonderful christmas! i hear the snow really came down the other night. nothing like a white christmas...
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