| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/3/2008 12:45:12 AM | Jackal,
You almost had me *sigh*
I am a little curious though as to why you would be discussing losing me in the arid climate?
. (unless you want to lose your sanity by desert)
I'm thinking you probably meant dessert 
The only other thing that stands out in error is your failure to capiltalise your "I"'s...which is incredibly common around here lately.
Apart from that... feel free to venture to Oz soon.
Happy 
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/3/2008 1:04:00 AM | Steve,
Your pictures don't seem to show you in any natural light, nor do you appear to be enthused in any of them. How are we supposed to be excited about reading your profile if you aren't excited about being there?
but I make time for the important people in my life...will one of those be you? ...you have just strolled into cheesy cliche land. Cheesy cliche land does not get attention, because we have all been there before.
In other words, delete the "will it be you?".
Those are just a few of my favorite things. Seriously?? I thought I had wandered into a Julie Andrews movie part way through 
We don't need you to explain the obvious, if you didn't like those things, I doubt you would mention them on your profile in the first place.
The rest of it reads similar. You are not injecting any personality into it. You also need to run this through spellcheck for the grammatical errors.
Read your profile outloud. If that is honestly how you sound & come across in real life, keep it. If not...try to be more personable.
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/3/2008 1:32:56 AM | Brian,
I have to say, I loved your main picture. It is eye-catching which is always a bonus. Having a picture of you smiling on your profile would be an added bonus though. You are good looking so why not show it off?
Your headline isn't exactly inspired. You need to capture our attention. Whether it be something crazy, a quote, a joke...just something that stands out.
Mentioning that you are a little bored does not exactly send a welcoming message. It comes across as though you just want someone to keep you occupied.
You may want to re-word that or change it altogether.
If you are an open, honest, fun loving, attractive female who loves to laugh and does not play games then please get in touch. Please have a photo of yourself as I will not reply otherwise.
This is all pretty negative. Asking them not to play games doesn't mean it won't happen, that sometimes is just a part of life.
The photo part can be deleted as you can put that in your contact restrictions.
Oh..and just like a previous poster, the word you want is dessert not desert
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/3/2008 1:57:28 AM | Ozzy,
I rarely know what I am talking about. Just ask anyone that knows me
Your headline needs to be scrapped and you need to put that little bit of humour into it that I can see sneaking into your profile.
Your pictures aren't under the greatest lighting, nor the best quality. Love to see you outside with a cheeky grin.
The only other problem is with your age restrictions. You cut off at 27...you may be missing out by not extending it a little more.
Apart from that, great job.
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/4/2008 10:52:39 PM | JJ,
Well of course I am going to be biased about your profile...you mention Oz in the headline, you look as though you have some pics from your trip in there and you are Canadian... you may have just hit the winning formula right there
Now out of sheer curiousity; how does one become a professional Golf Course?
Overall, I did like your profile, though you need to break it into paragraphs, and run it through spell check.
You have mentioned sense of humour twice in a relatively short profile, so maybe you want to look at changing that to someone who enjoys a laugh, at themselves or others.
Happy & don't forget to come back to Oz again
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/4/2008 11:08:18 PM | Tim,
Hmmm...you seem sure I have an improvement? Would love to hear what you thought it would be since I can't think of any
Seriously, one of the best short profiles I have read. You had me at the headline...my sort of humour right there.
Now move to Oz
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/4/2008 11:17:37 PM | Tommy,
You know, there is nothing "wrong" with your profile; it just didn't leap of the page at me and make me think "wow, I need to get to know this guy".
A little negative in some areas, especially the last parts "message me if you are anything like my IDEAL.." & I don't invest too much on something that may not work out"...all valid but not exactly enticing me either.
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/5/2008 2:17:34 PM | Dave,
Ahhh the headline..the folly of most mortals Seriously... inject something into it instead of generic "Do you"?
Your pictures are fantastic...rotate them often to keep us on our toes. Would love to see the picture of you on the boat pop up as your main pic soon.
Again I will say this...cannot stand pictures of kids on profiles. When they are 18 & allow you to post their pics on the internet...fine...'til then, how about "erm NO!"
That's it .. I have nothing left that I didn't like. Your profile made me want to get to know you, learn about your adventures and your life.
That is entirely what it is meant to do....now about your trip to Oz?
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/5/2008 2:45:58 PM | EasyOver,
I just ...ahhhhmm...caugghhhh...pfffft ...really?
Headline ~
Does this look infected!!! ..well it was enough to make me feel ill...that has to count.
Why, why, why would you want to say that? Not only does it have the ability to make one nauseous, it is also grammatically incorrect.
Try funny, try actually anything else.
Pictures ~ Ok so you make reference to the fact you look like a robot or a psycho killer. Wow...that alone has won my heart.
Try smiling, it has the amazing ability of covering up homicidal tendencies. Not glaring could also help you out there.
If you aren't happy about being in your picture...why should we be excited about you?
But seriously, I am looking for someone smart and fun that can engage me on a mental level and complete me as a person. Someone who can carry a conversation and DOES NOT Tivo American Idol (once in a while is forgiveable). I am very stable at times but also impulsive at others. I could be watching Formuia 1 on TV one minute and switch the channel and watch Antiques roadshow .
At the risk of sounding like Dr.Phil; noone can complete you, you have to learn to do that alone. Compliment you, sure.
So we can't Tivo American Idol but you are the wild child of TV watching ...sport or antiques? Wow, slow down buddy, may not keep up here!
Work out what you want, then write just that. Saying you want to carry a conversation...then mention 2 TV shows is not sending me the right message. TV Guide is not a book, no matter what Homer says
Sometime back I was abducted by aliens and my spine was replaced with metallic rod, so.. yeah I cant dance. Why did I know there would be an alien reference?
Not funny, not even in a cute, dorky, geeky way (which happens to be my favourite way).
Not being able to dance is cute...mention crushing toes, the "bus stop etc"...thats a great way to say "I can't dance, but for you I will try".
that is if you get over my Psycho-killer good looks. Nooooooo. No. No. No.
Sit over a cup of coffee (or a glass of merlot) at a non-chain coffee house,talk and try to get over the awkwardness of the whole situation. ...it's only going to be awkward if you make it so. Don't advertise that you expect it to be. Make it a little quirky...and have a list of different topics in case of "those" moments.
Oh...just don't mention robots, aliens or psycho killers unless the date is going terrible...then go for it.
Happy
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/5/2008 11:43:25 PM | | Excellent, thanks, just what I was looking for. I had just changed my headline at a whim. My previous headline read "I'd rather be practicing my swing." As far as the pictures are concerned, sorry, thats just how I look in pictures, I just freeze up! | |
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| The Aussie girls guide for you to make it write (wordplay ppl!)
Posted: 4/6/2008 4:01:00 AM | hey thank you for the tips I'll make the changes.
As far as being a professional Golf Course Im a Superintendent of a golf course so if i put Superintendent they don't know what it means.
I'll be back in Aus. again in Jan for another three months I love it there.
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| I'd appreciate your input
Posted: 4/6/2008 8:51:54 AM | How could I pass up this opportunity?
What do you think, ~Footprints~? Do I make the cut?
Lately I've had Queen's Bicycle Race playing over and over in my head. Is that normal? | |
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