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Posted: 3/30/2008 10:36:12 PM | Can you please give my profile a looksie? I was getting some good responses when I first placed my ad, then I shortened it considerably and got less responses, so I decided to "lay it all on the line" and got some good early responses, but things have died down. I am beginning to think that I must leave this town, (NYC) as it seems that women here are very indifferent. Even after meeting them, there seems to be a certain indifference about them that I haven't encounterd where I used to live, which was Massachusetts. Any advice you can give me will be taken under consideration.
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Posted: 3/31/2008 6:15:54 AM | GoodManGreg,
You sound like such a nice and compassionate man, that gives it his all. I am sorry for the lose of your wonderful wife. Here are my suggestions and impressions of your profile.
First off it is way to long, you dont want to stress out the ladies now. I would take out the first 3 full paragraphs. It is very admirable what you did for you wife out of love, and how much you loved her. She was a great wife and you loved her very much. This is great things to know about you, however when I read it all, I think to myself, "wow those would be big shoes to fill, I wonder if it is possible " "I wonder if he could ever love me as much as he did her ". I would think a lot about contacting you for that reason. I think this information should not be written in your profile. I think once someone meets you and gets to know you and your family they will know this about you. It just seems overwhelming to read it in your profile.
Don't talk about contacting your "feminine side " it makes people wonder. lol..I would start thinking "is he gonna want to wear my undies or what " lol...
I would start your profile with your #4 paragraph. You did a great job telling us who you are and what you like and want in life. I would combine paragraphs 4 thru 6 , they sound great.
Your paragraph #7 is also great how you described who and what you are searching for. I feel that if you narrow your profile down to just using those paragraphs, you would have a very nice profile. You would sound like a man that has it all together and knows who he is and just what he wants. The quotes and favorite songs are ok to leave in.
My last suggestion is to broaden your age email requirements. You are 55 and you requirements are 45 to 55. What if a sexy woman of your dreams that is 56 wants to email you, but she cant because she is 1 year to old. I would suggest 45 to 60. You never know. Age is just a number, and to lose out on someone that is perfect for you that may be a couple years older than you..hummmm lol..
Well I hope that my suggestions help you out. I truly hope you find that special lady to fill the big gap in your life. You do seem like a prince charming, and any lady would be lucky to have you in her life. God Bless and Good Luck !!!!
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Posted: 3/31/2008 6:26:00 AM | | Please help me with my profile. I have a highly unusual job and it would require a special person to understand it. I have been told that it would be hard to find someone who would tolerate my home situation because of my calling in life. I have a lot of varied interests and can offer plenty of alone time but I just have to pencil it in ahead of time. I think there would be someone out there who wants me for me and can over look me working a lot if I just make time for them. Please tell me if my approach on here is ok. | |
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Posted: 3/31/2008 6:28:34 AM | Yes young lady,,would you please take a look at mine,, I'm not sure if I would change anything, my opening is tough,, that might need some work,, However I believe in being real without the fluff at times,,
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Posted: 3/31/2008 6:51:23 AM | Excite666,
Ok lets take a stab at this. First off your profile is WAY to long !! I got stressed just looking at it. It also seems to mostly be all about You !!!! Kind of self indulgent !!
It needs to be seriously shortened. I would remove it all, or cut and paste a lot, and start over. You had some good parts where you described what you like to do for fun and what you are looking for in a relationship. There are so many sentenences going on there. Always remember that Less is best, don't overwhelm the ladies !! lol..
I would put in "1" nice paragraph that describes what you like to do for fun, and what you look for in a relationship. Then put another nice paragraph about what type of lady you are searching for. What interest should she have, and qualities. You have most of that in your many sentences, just pick out the good parts and combine them together in a smaller version. You had some good thing to say in the following sentences" #1 -2-3-7-8 and 9. Take things out of those sentences. !! lol
I love all the pics, but I would change your main pic to your #5 pic. Which is the 4th one from the right !! it is the best pic of you and shows off a great smile and a lot of personality. The one you are using now is not the best one to use.
In you profile name you use the numbers "666". I don't know what your religous beliefs are, but to some those numbers are the mark of the devil. If they do not have any special meaning to you, I would consider removing them from you name. It may scare some ladies away. Just something to think about.
Last, I would put more interest in your interest section. You only have 3 and they are all about fish. !! That doesn't sound very interesting, it sounds kind of boring !! lol pick some more interest to add to your selection. You will look like a more intersting man !!!
Well I hope that my suggestions will help you out. Hopefully you will make some nice changes and they will work for you. Good luck in your search.
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Posted: 3/31/2008 7:26:46 AM | Where have you been,
First off I love your profile name, very cute !! I would change the profile comment "can be sweet", makes me wonder what you are when you are not sweet. The word "can" is the bad one.
I really love all your pics, they are great, clear, and all seem to be recent. My favorite is the pic of you sitting outside on the grass. I would use that one as your main pic. It shows off all of you, and has a lot of sex appeal and personality. !!! It would be a winner.
You also need to put something in your "do you drink section", other than "perfer not to say". That just makes people wonder if you have drinking problem or not. I hesitate to respond to someone that has "prefer not to say".
I felt a little overwhelmed when I read your profile. It all just seemed to be an explination for what you do in life. I admire you for the job you have and I can see that you are wonderful at it. I would take it all out and start all over with it. I would not explain it all in your profile. Save that for a conversation later.
I suggest that you write a nice paragraph about you. What you enjoy for fun and just what makes you tick. What you have to offer a relationship. You can make a small comment as to your work, but do it in a positive manner. hit on all the free time it gives you, not how much time it may take you away. When you meet that special man that falls head over heels in love with you, he will not care about the time your job takes you, he will admire you for it.
Then write a nice paragraph about the man you are searching for. What qualities should he have, and what do you look for in a man. Just keep it positive and simple. Men are much more visual creatures, and will look at your pics more than anything. They don't like a lot of reading to do. Also if you re-do it, dont write "I will try anything once ". I know what you are trying to say but it may scare some NICE guys away. They may think you would try anything with anybody. Bad thing to say !! Use some humor in your profile, it goes a long way.
You are a beautiful lady and should have no problem finding a man to fall in love with you. Just make some of these changes and you should be stormed with emails. I wish you luck in your search. Thank you for the job that you are doing, we need more people like you.!!!!!! God Bless Sweet | |
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Posted: 3/31/2008 8:02:04 AM | Hi rdcnorm,
Yes I will agree that your opening is a little rough to say the least. lol . You are guilty of something that I used to do. Everytime I had a bad date, it would show up in my profile. I would write it all out, and mostly in caps. lol.. Bad idea !!!! I learned from my mistakes. I feel your pain, but you need to learn to just take it for what its worth and ignore it and move on. Don't let all of them stress you out and make you lose out on a sexy lady that may choose to pass you by because of the negativity in your profile. Ok nuff said about that !!! lol.
This is what I suggest you do with your profile. I would put in an age requirement in your email settings. This will stop someone to young or to old from contacting you. Problem solved !!! Now people on here will lie about anything so be prepared, welcome to on line dating !! lol..
Next, I would definately remove your "New intro" and your "Ammended intro". They scare the hell out of me !! lol..I would take your very last paragraph in your profile, and use that as your into of who you are. It is great and sounds very sincere. Then I take the paragraph you have written of who you are looking for, and use that one. It is very iformative and says it all. I would remove ALL other remaining things. They will only hender your search and not be productive for you. !!!!
HINT: A lot of ladies on here feel safe with picking men as favorites, and sending winks and things like that. Look at it as an ice breaker for you to take the next step. Some ladies find it hard to just send an email saying they are interested in you., so they send you little hints and wait and see if you respond. If you are attracted to one of them, go for it !!!! lol...If not delete always works !!!!!
I love all your pics, they show off your personality, and your son that you are so proud of. I'm not sure that I would use the pic you have as your main pic. The reason being is that is it 2 years old. I know that recent pics is a big thing on line, even though you seem to look the same. I would either take the 2006 caption off or put a more recent pic. It is a good pic by the way !!!! lol..You are a cutie...
I hope that my suggestions will help you out. You do seem like a really sweet man and a great catch for some lucky lady. Just chill out a little and let things happen in their time. It will !!!! Have a great day !!!!
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Posted: 3/31/2008 8:22:03 AM | MidWesternDude,
Lets start with your pics. I like your pics, they show off what you love most. I don't like your main pic. I hate a main pic that is not clear or they have sunglasses on !!! You look like a very nice looking man, but that pic does nothing good for you. Get you a nice, clear, recent pic of yourself with that nice smile you have, and use it as your main pic. That will work wonders for you i'm sure !!!
Your profile seems to be kind of self indulgent, its all mostly about you !! You have made some nice points about yourself and your interests. I would take everything off and start over. I would put in a nice paragraph all about you and what make you tick. What do you do for fun, and what you have to offer a relationship. Plain and simple. Don't rant on !! lol...
Then put in a nice paragraph of what you are looking for in a lady and a relationship. You seem to go on a lot about drinking. It kind of makes you sound like maybe you drink a lot. If that is NOT the case, I would be careful of making to many comments about that issue. You don't want to give any ladies the wrong idea about you !!!!
I love what you wrote in your first date section !!! nice and simple and short. Not confusing or overwhelming !! Good Job !!!!
I hope my suggestions will help you out !!! You seem very level headed and a good catch for some nice lady. Good luck in your search and thank you for you compliments, I try my best to help out !! God Bless.
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Posted: 3/31/2008 8:29:04 AM | Thank you very much. It's very sweet of you to take the time to offer your help this way.
I'll go to work on it when I get home this evening and report back to you.
Best Regards
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Posted: 3/31/2008 10:56:38 AM | Jerd2300,
Ok lets take a shot at this !!! First off in your personal info of yourself it says you are UNDER 5' tall !! are you becuase you don't look it in your pics ?? If this is not true then you need to correct that info. This will help you out a lot !!! lol.
Next, I like your pics they show off your personality. You need to get you a better main pic though. None of your pics are great for a main pic. You are a cute guy but none of your pics show this off for you. Maybe a nice dress up pic would be good, show that other side of you !!!! I would also remove the pic of you laying down. It's kind of a weird pic and almost looks like you are getting ready to be sick or something !! lol sorry but it does !!! lol..
I really like what you have written in your profile about yourself. I would not remove or change any of it. Now you need to write a nice little paragraph about the girl you are searching for. What type of girl are you looking for, what kind of qualities should she have ? What kind of activities should she enjoy ? The ladies need to know what you are really looking for. !!!
You need to put something in the "profession" info also, don't leave it blank and make ladies wonder if you even have a job or not !!!
In your first date section, I would take out most of what you wrote. I would not tell everyone that you have never really had a real date yet !!! I would just simply write what your last line there says. "Whatever we both decide" Best answer possible since the lady usually likes to make that decision anyway !!!!
You don't have much to do, just a few tweaks and you ready for the emails !!! I wish you luck in your search, and hope my suggestions help you!!
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Posted: 3/31/2008 12:13:04 PM | Hi artzyfartzy,
I actually like your profile. It is very imformative. You put it right out there who you are and what you are looking for. Also what you want in a man and a relationship. Bravooooo for you !!!!! I only have one thing to correct. lol.. in your first paragraph , the last line, second word should be "at" not "a". lol....sorry lol
The only question I have is why hide your pic ? If you have a pic why hide it ? You are a nice looking lady so don't hide your pic ! Put it right out there. I suggest that you get a few more pics. It is always a good idea to put at least 1 full body pic. You need some pics to show off your personality and your artistic creativity. Let's see more of you in your pics !!! That would benefit you !!!!
I am also a very artzy person. I did the art and craft show for 16 years and loved it !!! I love creative people. I think they are special people that God created to be here to show off his wonders !!!!!. Hope I have helped you out ,what little help you needed !!! lol. Good luck in your search.
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Posted: 3/31/2008 2:27:35 PM | Dear Sweet
Thank you so much for that lovely profile advise. I made some changes and will tweek it more when it becomes clear to me what to say. You are way to cool! | |
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Posted: 3/31/2008 3:03:27 PM | Where Have you been,
Girl I love the changes you have made to your profile. It is so different and soooo positive. You threw in a lot of cute witty humor and I just love it !!! Bravoooo to you. But I am still waiting for the sexy yard pic to show up as your main pic lol...Also I love the new heading MVP...how creative and witty..Good Job...
You are so welcome for my suggestions. It warms my heart to be of help to anyone !!! I am thankful for the ones that helped me out in the beginning !!! My only suggestion is to seperate what you have written into 2 paragraphs. One about you and one about the one you are searching for. The one big paragraph looks a little overwhelming. But I love what you have written !!!! You go girl !!! knock em off their feet !!!!!!
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Posted: 3/31/2008 4:24:05 PM | Hi SWEET - N - SASSY GIRL 4U ,
Great Advice. I am made a copy of my profile and a copy of your above comments to take to dinner with me to "digest". I am meeting a very good female friend of mine for dinner. I am going to ask her to critique it as well.
I think you are right about it being to long. I had shortened it...then tried "laying it all on the line" . So you are right. I will take in to consideration your good advice and make some needed changes. I will shorten it again and stress my good qualities and try not to bring up my late wife.
What I was trying to point out is that I am the same loving man that I was when I cared for my wife. There are NO BIG Shoes to fill. My late wife should pose no threat to anyone. She even told me before she died not to be alone..and to find love again. What else would a woman need to know? All I am looking for is a kind and decent woman. I am capable of giving all the love I have to that new person..
Thanks again and I will be in touch.
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Posted: 3/31/2008 4:34:10 PM | Hi Greg,
You are most definatley a very nice man, no doubt about that !!! It is always hard to start up a relationship with someone that has lost a true love of their life. I have been there and done that !!! I think all A lady needs to know right now is all the wonderful things about you and what you have to offer her in a relationship !!! It is hard sometimes trying to give someone that you don't know at all, suggestions to make their profile better. I am glad that you are having a close friend review it. Maybe she can give you some other good insight that will make your profile a winner. Thank you for giving me the oportunity to try to help you. Good luck and God Bless. Please stay in touch.
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