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Posted: 7/1/2008 8:47:02 AM | I am looking for a thorough profile review, and can take any and all comments or criticisms.
To be clear, I would like every aspect of my profile reviewed - though I already plan on replacing all the pictures......
Also, I have a thick skin, and the goal here is a great profile – so flame away!
Thanks!
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Posted: 7/1/2008 10:47:50 AM | FIREMACHINE69,
Ok, "IF" you are ging to change your selection to at least "dating", then you need some changes. First off you need much better pics. Ones that are taken at a normal level, not lower. You need a nice, close up , clear, smiley pic for your main pic. The a few more having fun and showing off your personality. Then at least 1 full ody shot. Have a friend take these pics of you, not tkaken my your self or a webcam.
You need to put a lot more work into your "about me section. You need at least 1 nice paragraph, (single spaced), all about you and then 1 nice paragraph about the ladie you want to date. You have some good stuff already, but also some stuff that is kind of a turn off. I have copied and pasted your profile and made some changes. Now you just need to add more to your section and then write a nice section about the lady you would like to get to know.
OInce you have made the suggested changes, then you will have a nicer profile. Make sure what you write is "positive", nothing negative. Only say what you do want, not what you dont want. Sell yourself to the ladies. Don't do all the double spacing, it just looks unprofessional and makes it harder to read, Single spacing only !! You need more info about you, like your hobbies, what you do for fun, your goals and more about your personality. So far you mostly have talked about your job !!! See the changes I made to your profile below. Hope this helps you out and good luck in your search and with your profile.
sweet :)
I work fairly often, seeing as how I'm a professional motor coach operator (PMCO - a.k.a. an over-glorified 'bus driver'). I'm the only twenty'ish guy in town with a four-door Toyota Yaris, silver. I'm a strong-minded individual, yet super-sweet. I am a selfless friend, and I intend to keep that honor. I travel as a job. I have some pretty crazy stories already, maybe you have some funny travel stories yourself? I like talking, hope you do too!
So folks, if you jump on the bus to Toronto (among other places) and recognize me, don't be shy to say hi, I promise not to be weirded out. We'll keep each other company the entire trip! | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 10:57:30 AM | frenchgal87,
I like your pics, they are nice. You are a very pretty girl.
Your about me section is ok, but could be better. You need to tell more baout yourself, you goals, what you do for fun, your hobbies and interests. It also has some negative sounding stuff in it like the following statement:
((I'm not looking for anything serious. I'm just going to take it as it comes. I am definitely not interested in random hook ups, either. ))
You need to have at least 1 nice paragraph all about you, including more of the above mentioned stuff I told you about. Then you need a nice POSITIVE paragraph about the men you are hoping to date. The above comment is very negative, and will scare most guys away. This is a "dating site", and most men on here are looking for serious dating and long term. You need to be more positive about the dating, and not just focus on "friendship". Tell the guys what you DO want, not what you don't want. Be positive, and talk more about hoping to find the special one to have a long term relationship with ! That will get you more interests !!! and replies..
Hope this helps you out and good luck in your search !!
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Posted: 7/1/2008 11:22:32 AM | MitakuyeOyasin,
Ok let me just say this. First off, I was overwhelmed when I saw all there was to read. Way to long. Your nic name, and your headline, will probably confuse a lot of guys, it may be to much for them.
I read all through your profile and there was some good stuff, but also some negative stuff. Some of it came off kind of demanding and some very judgemental sounding to me. I believe that this profile, nic name, and headline, will limit your responces.
It is just a little over the top !!! Also most of your "Interests" will confuse most guys and they will click right off your profile. I think most men on here will not fit your criteria !!! Your profile should be all positive, not negative. All you are looking for not what your Not looking for. Your has both !!!
I see that you also review profiles and usually just suggesto to go to the profile writing review tips. I would suggest you to also do that. Below is my opinion of certain sectins of your profile
Sweet :)
I've decided to give this a try, but since I'm basically a social hermit I wonder if it'll do me much good. (NEGATIVE)
I don't fall for the New Age and its political correctness (feminism, ageism, sexism, racism, globalism, 'diversity', etc), and neither does the man I seek. (He knows who is behind the 'New Age.') I also believe that the overwhelming majority of what we see and read today is puerile garbage: the saturation levels of violence, the sordidness and filth, the heavily sanitised and controlled media, the bird-brained shouting and screaming 'game' shows on TV, for example - all designed to keep us unaware. (THIS SOUNDS KIND OF NEGATIVE, JUDGEMENTAL, ANGRY, AND SHOULD NOT BE ON YOUR PROFILE)
I do online auctions on commision. I write the ads and manage the autions for my clients. It's a feast or famine proposition, but it keeps the lights turned on!
The thing I like about my occupation is that it travels well. I'm not chained to a daily grind, and when I work it's at my own pace until I get the bills paid. I only make enough to get by comfortably, and don't need trinkets, or the latest fad gadgets in order to amuse myself. Yes, I smoke occassionaly, but only outdoors, and never would I do that in my own home. (THIS PART IS PRETTY GOOD)
Since my only child is fully grown, and doing well on his own I'm also free to go and explore the world around me. Perhaps a trip to New Zealand or South America would do me good. (GOOD)
Really looking for my "other me". Male version. Then I'll be complete.
Put it this way. I never really expected to find a man like that here in this incredibly superficial venue, where the guys my age seem to be chasing after their lost youth by chasing after the twenty year olds. (VERY NEGATIVE)
I want to date a man that has his own thing going on, and maybe even lives in another town. It wouldn't bother me at all because I like my alone time as well. He's independent in thought and action, and like me has not one shred of insecurity, neediness, or possessiveness. (KIND OF MAKES IT SOUND LIKE YOU WANT YOUR CAKE AND EAT IT TO--DONT REALLY WANT A MAN IN YOUR LIFE)
I want to be in love with a man that loves me back and he understands I don't need him 24/7. He would need his alone time as much as I need mine, but when we *are* together it's magical and fun for both of us. Does that even make any sense? I hope it does! (GOOD)
I'm a homebody at heart, but with the right guy I could actually adore the idea of exploring new places, and taking to the roads yet uncharted.
All these things are so much better with a man at my side to enjoy them with.(GOOD)
He lacks cunning, deceit, sarcasm, cynicism, guile high drama. He operates from the cooperative mind, not the competitive mind, and has deprogrammed himself from consensus reality. He is wide awake and knows what is happening in our delusional society. He is not into the giving or receiving of 'points' or attached to labels, like 'success'/'failure' or 'secure'/'insecure' or 'good'/'bad'. He does not identify the "I" with his job or how many dollars register in his bank account this week. (KIND OF DEMANDING AND NEGATIVE SOUNDING JUST THE WAY IT IS WRITTEN)
I'm not impressed with today's society: the road rage; school massacres; millions of children in the West without fathers at home (the fatherless generation); skyrocketing levels of abortion; the rise of the feminine man and the muscular, tattooed woman. I don't care what 'news' Paris or Britney makes or which 'idol' is cool or who won Survivor or which wife was 'swapped' or how many corpses lie in the mortuaries of the myriad crime shows keeping us all quiet and sedated.(KIND OF HARD SOUNDING AND SHOULD NOT BE IN A PROFILE)
"Cellular phones are the most radiative appliance we have invented apart from the microwave oven, and people are actually putting them alongside their heads, arguably the most sensitive part of the body." - Roger Coghill (Bioelectromagnetics scientist
(NOT NECESSARY FOR A PROFILE)
Ascendant:Cancer - Sun:Cancer - Moon:Sagittarius- Mercury:Cancer- Venus:Leo
Mars:Sagittarius - Jupiter:Cancer - Saturn:Scorpio - Neptune:Libra
Uranus:Cancer - Pluto:Leo | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 11:33:36 AM | OLDFASHNDMTNMAN,
Ok I'm a little confused. First off it must be the reviewers day to come to my thread and get reivews !! LOL. 4 in 1 day !! Hummmmmmm, but its ok LOL..
Again, I am confused. You have selected as your maritial status as "not single/not looking", but the you selected "dating" as your choice ?????????
What gives with that ??? That is nuts !!! Are you for real ?? or is your profile just a joke !!
Anyway, I will indulge. I liked your profile, it was fun and entertaining. A little long but it keeps your interest. You could add a little more to the ladies part, you know the lady you are not looking for !! LOL..
Also like you said in your profile, a main pic without a hat on ! Be brave !! Maybe a few more pics showing off your personality. Other than that you are doing fine. But I hope you do decide what you are really looking for and correct it on the profile !! LOL.
Have a nice evening !!
Sweet :) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 11:55:10 AM | music-maker,
Ok lets start with your pics. They are ok, but you need a nice, close up, clear, smiley pic for your main pic. Then maybe a few more closer up pics, having fun and showing off your personality. Big smiles are a plus !! Our pics are what we mostly have on here, so they must be the best we can get.
In your "interests" section, you need to fix them up a little. Go back on the edit page and place a comma in between each interest. That will make them turn blue, and make them searchable. It also look better. Maybe add a few more, ones that the ladies may be interested in !!
I would delete what you have in your "first date" section. Don't sound like you cannot make a decision. Write something else in, that at least give the ladies an idea of you would feel comfortable with. Be positive, not negative.
I have copied and pasted your profile and made some changes. Your profile should be at least 2 nice paragraphs. ! 1 That is all about you, your interests, what you do for fun, your hobbies, goals and what you can offer a relationship. Then a nice paragraph about the lady you are searching for. I have split up what you have written into 2 sections. Now you would just need to add alittle more to the ladies section. Also I am not a fan of all the little jumpy visitors to a profile, a little distracting !! The changes I have made below would make you a more desirable profile. I hope this helps you out and good luck in your search.
Sweet :)
Hi firstly thank you for looking. I'm honest, understanding, and caring. I'm also a good listerner. I take life as it comes, good or bad (been on both sides of the coin). I love playing my guitar, and writing songs,. I also enjoy drawing and painting with water colors. I enjoy reading a good book. I enjoy doing a bit of fishing. Also now and then, enjoy the pub\casino but not a big drinker. I've traveled Europe quite a bit, and have some hair rasing stories. I used to be in a rock band A few years back. would be just as happy at home cuddling on settee , in the cupboard, on the stairs, in the garden or anywhere as long as its with my soul mate. I have two lovely grandaughters one whos 2, and one whos 6 months. I really enjoy being a pappy. Oh and I enjoy cooking. I am not against beginning an email conversation with you, and some nice chat prior to us meeting, so feel free to drop me a line !!
I would love to meet a loving caring loyal honest woman. Nice looking, casual dress, with a happy bubbly personality. Someone who likes to laugh a lot.
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PUT THIS ON YOUR PROFILE TO SHOW YOU CARE!! | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 1:57:44 PM | Thank you sweet, I just changed to single not looking a few days ago, and neglected to change it from dating to friends. Good catch!
Thank you for your time!
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Posted: 7/1/2008 2:29:21 PM | driven4agoodlife,
I really love your profile. You have done a really great job on it. I have read some of your reviews and you also do a great job on that. You should start your own review thread, i'm sure you would be busy. We need a good Male reviewer. Anyway, Great job. Good luck with your search !! Have a wonderful evening.
Sweet :) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 3:26:29 PM | Sweet and Sassy, Wow! Thank you! I had no idea I had so much negativity there!
As a reviewer myself, I am somewhat better at helping others than myself, and that's
what makes your advice so valuable!
When you have a chance would you please take a second look at the changes I made? | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 4:47:05 PM | caleta26,
Well for someone that is only looking for friends, your profile is ok. But your main pic is terrible. I don't know what you did to the eyes, but get rid of that pic. I would also suggest to add more interests to that section. Let the people know what you enjoy doing for fun, and your hobbies. Lets them see if you would be good to hang out with. Also add some info in the "about me" section. Let them know a little about you, don't make them beg for info.
If you decide that you are looking for more than friends, then you would need a lot more work on your profile.
Good Luck Sweet :) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 4:54:48 PM | SingleInLagrange,
Ok lets start with your pics. You definately need some more pics. For your main pic, you need a nice, close up, clear, smiley pic. then maybe a few more having fun and showing off your persoanlity.
Your "about me" section needs some work. You should have at least 1 nice paragraph all about you. Your personality, what you do for fun, hobbies, and what you can offer a relationship. What you have now is ok, but all of it is not necssary for a profile. tell the ladies more interesting things about you. Make sure it is all positive things, nothing negative.
Then you need a nice paragraph all about the lady you are searching for. Let them know the type of lady you are attracted to, her personality, goals, what she does for fun, and what she can offer you in a relationship. You have to let the ladies know things about you, otherwise they dont know, and make a decision if they want to contact you, by what little you have written.
I feel that once you get some better pics, and make your about me section more interesting and appealing, then you will have a more desireable profile. Hope this helps you out and good luck in your search.
Sweet :) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 4:58:44 PM | R to the H,
Well for someone that is only looking for Chat/Email, your profile is fine. You will probably not get a lot of replies, because most ladies on here are looking for "dating" and "long term". Most ladies will even have a block on their email if you are only looking for chat, so you can't even email them. If you decide that you are looking for more than chat, then you will need some work on your profile, like better pics and more in your about me section.
Good Luck Sweet :) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 5:04:44 PM | Winsomewahine,
I really like your profile. It is very informative and entertaining. You did a real good job on it. Bravo to you !!!
The only suggestion I can give you is maybe get rid of a couple of the group pics, and add a few of just you. You are very pretty and you need a couple more closer up pics of you to show that off. That is my only suggestion. Hope this helps you out and good luck in your search.
Sweet :) | |
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