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Posted: 5/24/2008 12:21:12 PM | Hey, thx for viewing.
I've written and rewritten my profile probably a few dozen times. Nothing I write seems to yield the quantity of responses I'm hoping for. I get alot of "read" or "read deleted" messages.
Please let me know what you think of this round...
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Posted: 5/24/2008 12:32:13 PM | Username = Pompous God-Complex
REMOVE THIS:
I can't reply to every email I get, sorry.
REWORD THIS:
I will find you attractive, both physically and mentally. When it comes to what kind of woman I want to spend time with, that's about as far as my tiny male brain has evolved to, lol.
TAKE THIS OUT:
If I'VE messaged you first, then that means I think you're cute, so you should message back. If you're about to message ME first, then you'll have to finish reading this line before you send me a message.
Dancing Banana= Immature and distracting. | |
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Posted: 5/24/2008 12:43:19 PM | Let me see if I have this right: You want a QUANTITY of messages, who cares about quality. You can't reply to every message you get, yet still expect women to message you in the hopes that you'll get back to them? And to top it all off, you are having phenomenal success on this site, which tells women that there really isn't any point in messaging you, you've got all you can handle seeing as you can't even return your emails. Not to mention you think that the dancing banana will sell the whole thing for you. The fact that you think so highly of such a phallic symbol, and of yourself (from how you've portrayed yourself in the profile) tells me what I need to know, and I am reaching for the back button instead of the contact button.
You need to rethink your profile. But then again, since you are having such great success here, what the heck do you need a review for? | |
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Posted: 5/24/2008 7:14:17 PM | ok, thx for the input...obviously i failed miserably on that one, lol.
like i said, i've tried sooo many different types of profiles, i just don't know what to put anymore.
have you run into any profiles that you really liked, so i can see what a good one looks like? | |
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Posted: 5/24/2008 7:36:01 PM | Mr. IAmPresence... where did you come up with that? Anyway...
I think you should use the last photo you have as your main, maybe cropped a bit. I don't usually suggest wearing a hat in that spot, but I think it will work well for you.
Fill in the profession field, we don't like blanks.
The interest section is good.
LOL And this is where you lose everybody; the about me section. Okay this is where you describe yourself to us. First paragraph; define who you are, what are your character and personality traits? Are you compassionate, patient, humorous or self~centered? This is one of those *sharing* things ; ) Second paragraph; what do you enjoy spending your time doing? Third paragraph; what type of woman are you looking for? What qualities and attributes are you attracted to? Easy as making a mud pie ; )
The first date section should be a well thought out, creative idea that will snag a woman's attention. Make her feel like she wants to go on that date with you. The surprise you had, no, scrap that.
Good luck... I'll be back ; ) | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 3:09:17 AM | I guess your about me section is a joke, you could add a paragraph at the end saying something like, ' I am a normal guy really, i prefer to tell people about myself in an email, don't wanna give everything away.' (This is just an example by the way, it isn't perfect)
and when you message girls make sure they are good messages that make you stand out in the crowd etc etc
GL either or | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 6:57:17 AM | | I've never answered a review request before, and I know my own needs some work, but from my point of view your third picture is much cuter than the one you have as your main pic at the moment. | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 7:07:02 AM | | Hey OP...I looked at your changes, and they no longer scream pompous jerk. I don't think you have a balloon for a head, and an ego to match, so good job on that one. You still kept your brand of humor, which is good. There are some reviewers profiles that you could check out. Most are quite good. Ursula's comes to mind as being in line with your brand of humor (hers is funnier, but that's for another time). You could check out some more conventional ones just for ideas, though. Nice headline, by the way. | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 7:24:48 AM | I think that the tongue-in-cheek tone of the profile is best served by the pic of you in the leather jacket. Put those two together, and you'll be giving the impression of someone who appreciates some well-crafted humour. I like all the improvements, BTW.
- T
PS;
Bodhisattva? | |
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| Having trouble getting it just right.
Posted: 5/25/2008 7:50:38 AM | Hi...I'm a 4 foot guy that weight 450 pounds. I have no hair and I live with my mom. I make awesome pancakes though.
If someone was searching, that is all that'd be in the description box about you + the weird first pic. Most girls will scream "NEXT!"
It looks like a forums-only profile. That ain't a good thing IMO unless you plan on sending out more messages than you get. With one of your better pics as the main it could work very well (or bomb horribly, but you might as well have some fun with this place) | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 10:48:37 AM | ...Thx for the input guys...
I've changed my pic to the leather jacket one...I'm keeping the crazy one just cuz it shows that I can have a good time and just amplifies the humour in my profile.
I added more in the First Date section, let me know if you think it's dumb.
Oh, and I gave a warning, of sorts, in the opening line of the About Me. | |
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Posted: 5/25/2008 12:33:56 PM | Bodi30 wrote;
subsonic,
thx.
and yes, bodhisattva You're very welcome!
Bodhisattva is one of my favorite songs to play. Every time I mention it to the bandmates, they give me the "fisheye". I think it's because the bass and vocals are easy enough for me, but it requires some pretty serious guitar skills. Since I made my previous post I've been listening to the Fagan and Becker catalog on my iTunes. I'll take my band by the hand one day.
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Posted: 5/25/2008 1:46:22 PM | Dude,
Your profile lacks creativity and insight. Instead of doing what ever yother person does, do something that reflects who you are instead coming out and saying it and what you're looking for. Look at my profile to see how I convey my humor, creativity, etc. Everything in it is pure fabrication but it is unique, creative, funny and women love it. I get about 80% responses and I even have some testamonials. You should open your profile to allow men to communicate because then they can write you testamonials. People read them and the hidden message is, huh, people like this guy and they are willing to go out on a limb to say good things about him.
Good luck and happy fishin'
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| Having trouble getting it just right.
Posted: 5/25/2008 5:29:51 PM | | If you are going to open your profile up for criticism and make claims about it make sure to be able to back those claims up. And for the record, most testimonials are written by friends, not lovers or past relationship... biased opinions in my eyes. | |
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