| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 1:36:06 PM | Hi there. Guys, please review my profile.
I will be putting up a pic. soon.
My picture was taken at a local club over Memorial Day Week-End so I plan to put that picture on my profile when it comes out. I would appreciate any feedback or suggestions, critizisims, advice.
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 1:50:53 PM | Generally, both men and women reviewers know what works for either gender. So, please don't disregard it if a woman posts her opinion - she likely knows the profile issues just as well.
Anyway... "Looking" is a bad word to use in headline. Make something catchy and about you, instead of vaguely needy and hinting at past issues.
You have private pics, why do you not share them? Or are they not really good and you'd rather wait for better ones?
Your profession is "yes"? Put that in - that tells something about you. And, also, you are missing interests. Have at least dozen, some general, some more specific; and make sure they highlight so they are searchable.
You cover a lot of your interests in text. And your personality comes through in some ways. But, you might want to describe it directly, not just as something one has to read between the lines to find out. And, you need to give guys some ideas what you are looking for in them. You have very little on what your match should be like.
Lose musician list. It doesn't do you any good. At most, list 5-6 favorites. Also lose second half of "first date". Putting it that way and in all caps is screaming "I had issues before, and I have not worked through them".
Edit: Holy cheeseburger! I finally beat Deuce to one of the reviews. Go me! | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 2:00:16 PM | Thanks for your suggesstions. The "first date" section is left over from when I signed up for POF. I saw that in others profiles and it took me a few days to find the "preferences" button. So that's why I typed it in all caps cause I saw that in other profiles. I'll fix that part...
I've tried to describe what I want in a man but for some reason whatever I put in there like "honest, caring, loving, looking for soul-mate" that sort of thing seems to attract all the guys that are just looking for booty calls or the ones that like to play head games. So if you can give me a better or someone else can give me a better suggesstion on what to put in there to attract the type that is looking for the "love of their life" and not just a "love for the nite" lol. I'd like to hear those suggestions.
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 2:12:14 PM | Hi Preppy
I think you did a good job on telling us about you. I think that I get alot about people when I read what they have in there profile an who they really are. The picture will be nice when you are ready to post them but we can see who you are about in what you write to us.
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 2:44:31 PM | | I think you did a pretty good job, aside from the obvious paradox that exists between punk-preppy. on the other hand, thats just my personal belief haha. I would cut down on the band list, or format it so it wont take up as much space. In terms of deterring guys who are looking for sex/head games (and your 100% right, they all go for honesty girls) id post something about wanting to take it slow with relationships in general. No excuse needed (ie bad break up) just a statement. Take care and the best of luck to you. | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 4:43:59 PM | Thank Hollywood. I will put that in about wanting to take it slow. I had no idea players/head-trippers go for "honesty" girls. I wonder why that is. Its like the opposite of what you want. Oh well. But thanks a lot. Yeah, your the second person to say shorten the band list. Its just I like so many different kinds of music. Ok, thanks. Best of luck to you to.  | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/29/2008 7:15:27 PM | Hi preppy punk, here are my thoughts on your profile. It is rather long, and IMO does not read easily, needs some serious "sorting/condensing".
<div class="quote">THE TRICK IN LIFE ISN'T GETTING WHAT YOU WANT. THE GETTING IS THE EASY PART.
ITS WANTING IT AFTER YOU GET IT!
This would work better at the end, also, no need to shout.
<div class="quote">I'm well read. Been reading since I was about five. I enjoy long conversations. I can converse intellegently on many subjects. I also like the outdoors. I like to get out in the fresh air. I enjoy opera, rock concerts, shopping, dining, long romantic walks in the moonlight, holding hands, long kisses, dogs, cats, almost any kind of animal. I like long hair. Guys with masculine voices. I like men to be men. To be manly but at the same time, not afraid to show me the little boy on the inside.
This paragraph jumps ALL AROUND you, him, you, him, you, him, seperate who you are and what you like to do, from what you are looking for.
<div class="quote">I like holding hands, romance, laughter, sillyness, a little sarcasim. Getting caught in the rain. Driving with my convertible top down on the freeway. lying on the grass looking up at the clouds and guessing their shapes. Going to the Dallas Museum of ARt. Van Gogh, Jackson Pollock, Monet are some of my favorites. My musical tastes run all over the place. I like classical, jazz, rock, 80's, punk, post punk/new wave, country, R&B, soul, you name it. I like poetry and a guy who can either write me poems, sing or play a musical instrument. I used to play clarinet and sing. Still sing. Had to hock the clarinet in college. One of my biggest regrets...
We are back to music again, does not "flow well" at all.
<div class="quote">Like cuddling, photography, in and outside of the darkroom. art, painting, writing. I'm trying to write a book currently. Its just finding the time. It's all in my head, just a matter of finding the time to get down on paper.
Add photography, art or painting, and writing/ author, to your interests. DELETE the rest.
<div class="quote">Architecture. I studied a year and designed my own house even building a model. Birds, though I dont' have any I feed the wild birds outside my home. Water, oceans. Like swimming and jet-skiing. Moonlight, sunshiney days, thunderstorms, but not driving in them. Like geckos. Nature, trees, gardening, getting my hands dirty in the good earth. I like the smell of earth when gardening. Like rolly-pollies. Used to play with them as a kid. lolol
The interests that you consider most important, add to interests, DELETE the rest.
<div class="quote">Like affection, kissing, hugging, cuddling. Honesty and forgiveness are the keys to long-lasting relationships along with a deep abiding love. The cosmos, flying. If I could be any animal it would be an albatross because they live near the sea and can circumnavigate the globe. They can glide for hundreds of miles.
Save this for first conversation. DELETE
<div class="quote">Like to travel the world and see new places and people.
Either find a "home" for it or DELETE
<div class="quote">Curious and in awe of men. Want to know how they think and feel. What makes them tick is a never ending quest of mine. Admire them. Fascinated by men. I don't think men and women are really all that different. I think we all want to be loved and accepted for who we are.
You may keep the thought, but condense it to no more than two sentences.
I have very little if ANY idea WHO you are, OR if YOU might like ME. You need to think of at least two UNIQUE personality traits that describe YOU, then do the same for HIM.
Interests, hmmmmmmmmm, apparently you do not have any? You cover somewhere in the neighborhood of a hundred of them in your profile, rather than where they SHOULD be. Choose one or two, possibly up to three, no more, of your favorites to talk about in your profile. The rest should be filed under interests. These help the men find you because they are "searchable, but only when they turn blue.
First date: This is your last chance to make that man think, wow, she sounds like fun! Walks on the beach, etc. have been DEAD for years. Can you say cliche? Use your imagination, it's your last chance to HOOK him.
Best wishes
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/30/2008 10:13:38 AM | Oldfashcouboy,
Thank you for your review.
[/THE TRICK IN LIFE ISN'T GETTING WHAT YOU WANT. THE GETTING IS THE EASY PART.
ITS WANTING IT AFTER YOU GET IT! ] I did not mean to yell here. I was using this as a "header".
[/ have very little if ANY idea WHO you are, OR if YOU might like ME. You need to think of at least two UNIQUE personality traits that describe YOU, then do the same for HIM.]
I thought I was describing who I was in my profile. I thought I did put down my interests. Guess I'm clueless on how to do this. Please explain/expound on what I'm needing to do here.
As far as what kinda guy I'm looking for, I have no idea on how to word it.
Let me explain, I'm trustworthy, hardworking, financially responsible, loyal, devoted, loving, supportive, witty, sexy, educated, have a career, passionate about life.
I always end up with the game players, liars, head-trippers, lazy, users, guys say one thing but have alterior motives, drama-makers,etc. So I don't know what I'm doing to attract this sort. I've been successful in all other areas of my life except my love life. So obviously I have'nt a clue. And I don't know how to "hook" a good man or I would'nt be here. I think I know less about men than I did 20 yrs. ago. Either that or its just all the bad ones that are left at my age. Seems like I was always in the wrong line when they passed out all the good ones cause I end up with the above plus the emotional cripples, insecure, insencere, control-freaks.
Maybe I'll just go to the local no-kill shelter, pack it in and adopt a couple of cats and become the proverbial "old cat lady next door". My building does'nt have one, so how about me?
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/30/2008 10:16:47 AM | I found you described yourself pretty well, if one can read between the lines of what you chose to include. HOWEVER, I am not a man and I don't know if that's something they're inclined to do. One thing I would change is the word "naughty" in your headline. It's best to avoid sexually-charged words or phases, such as "naughty," "spank," "dirty," "sensuous," "open-minded" and "battery acid."
I was holding back on your review until you had posted at least one picture. Having pics up increases your potential viewing and response rates by 1 kajillion percent, according to recent studies.
Edit: Oh, crap, you said you wanted "MEN" to review your profile. Well, hell. My bad. | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/30/2008 10:29:37 AM |
I thought I was describing who I was in my profile. I thought I did put down my interests. Guess I'm clueless on how to do this. Please explain/expound on what I'm needing to do here.
Your interests are not you. I'll give you a direct example. Imagine three people who all have a shared interest of photography.
- Person A is artistic, energetic, spontaneous.
- Person B is meticulous, detailed, patient.
- Person C is sociable, passionate, flirtatious.
They all love photography, but they are three very different people. Do you see that now?
By the way, your 'interests' section is completely blank. This is not good. It doesn't matter if they're in you're About Me, that's not where they belong. | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/30/2008 11:10:50 AM | Some of us do actually work a job that brings the bacon you know! And contrary to popular belief that “job” I speak of DOES require me to work a few hours at least once a week. This morning was the scheduled slot, so I apologize for any inconveniences my absence may have caused. But it appears the place didn’t completely fall apart without me.
After seeing Yev extend himself like that unlike any other review out of him I think I’ll pass on this one. Okay, maybe I’ll make a few suggestions or comments of concern but if he’s put that much fingerwork into this then I say it’s done. Follow that with the heavy-hitters who came after him and you’re well set. What can I add really?!
The term naughty in your headline with attract skeeves and pervs alike. If you aren’t looking to get cornholed on a nightly basis or fend of the emails of those looking to do just that then I suggest using a surrogate such as adventurous or mischievous or audacious. Naughty says do me. On that note, because you have no pictures I, as well as most, will pass; we’re visual creatures we men.
I’ll just say it again to ring the redundancy bell in here… get some pictures posted! LOL And you need at least a shot from the waist up but preferably a full-body shot as you’ve listed a few extra. We want to know if that’s 20 or 120 extra. People have different opinions of what constitutes a few extra, so that’s why we ask to see the goods.
You’ve got a sh1theap of fluff here. I personally choke on all the I Likes in a person’s profile. You can say the same thing without saying the same thing, capiche? Instead of I like use “such and such is fascinating and I’m interesting in learning about that”. Do you see what I did there? You also use a LOT of abbreviated sentences, which is both bad form, hard to read, and annoying. By that I mean “Architecture. Like affection. Curious and in awe of men. It’s just finding the time”. This tactic doesn’t excuse you from using an I like either, as in most places it seems you just dropped the I like! LOL
You’ve told us a laundry list of what it is you like but you have said nothing about your personality or your personal convictions. You’ve also said nothing about the man you are seeking, aside from you liking manly men. But they should also be boys inside. I’m confused. It’s like saying you want a bad boy for all the badazz stuff he says and does but he should be a softy inside, so in other words a poser, which is the opposite of a bad boy. Do you understand where my mind is wandering here? I don’t half the time but I’m certainly glad most of you do!
The laundry list of filters will do you much harm. Relax on them and filter manually for the most part.
Yev, did you get hungry and steal her interests? You need a set of interests honey. 12-18 is sufficient but no less than the former. And it’s bad form to ask for contact; your profile should do that all on it’s own.
Just a nugget here… at 40 you are undecided about children. Have you considered father time yet and that you need to really get to making a decision soon?
Hope this helps. I guess in a roundabout way I did provide a review in the end. Damn it, that brings me back to step three in the program: maintaining resolve in your decisions. Back on the wagon I go.
P.S. You are overweight, possibly obese, and smoke. Strikes one and two against you, both socially and health-wise, but I don't think it's the first time that thoughts entered your mind. Good luck to you OP! Now let's see those choppers! | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/31/2008 10:21:31 AM | Bookrat,
Ok, where is the "interests" section. All that comes up on my edit page is
"about me" and "first date".. Is there another screen I'm missing? Thanks for imput. | |
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| Men - Review my profile please
Posted: 5/31/2008 10:51:31 AM | Thanks to all for imput however, I've decided to just use POF for creative outlet for my alter-ego instead of dating. Think its better to meet someone in person anyway. LOL
Thanks to all and good luck to you in your hunt.  | |
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