If you've worked on it already...don't stop. I've got my axe out, let's begin. Here's what you have:
While I know that no-one is perfect. I know that I have alot to offer and am looking for the same!
What have you got to offer, so 'she' will know if she's the same? Explain or axe.
I am a single young professional guy.
We already know this, except you forgot to say what your profession is, even though Shadow Outline reminded you. It's important. Just say what you do for a living. And axe this.
I am looking for someone who wants to genuinely get to know me.
Unless your profile says "intimate encounter," this is a given. Axe this.
Prefer to do anything outdoors to anything indoors.. Read that how you want.. lol.
I don't find this "lol"-worthy. Axe the "lol" and the attempt at suggestiveness.
I would like to find someone open, honest and funny.
You and eight million other people. Axe. Be more specific. Describe, don't simply list adjectives.
I would like to meet someone with their head screwed on.
I hate people with floppy unattached heads, too.
I know where i want to go in life and I would like to meet someone with similar aspriations.
Again, say where are you GOING in life, so 'she' will know if she's got similar aspirations (note spelling)!
If you would like to know more about me or swap some pics, drop me a line. I do want children in the future.. just not at the present time!
Why? Why would she want to know more about you? We haven't learned anything about you yet. Children? Axe it. Tell her personally. You're young, it's not so odd.
My advice? Post some pics. Go on, bite the bullet. While you're at it, try to reveal more about yourself so someone might be inclined to see if you fit her expectations, as well.
Check out the Profile Writing Tips. When you make some changes, post here for another go-round of reviews.
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