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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 4:18:53 PM | I think my profile is OK...BUT I think something is missing, I included most of the essential info that I can think of, I know I should try to be more detailed but I cant seem to think of must more. I dont seem to be getting any biters on this one, any hints or suggesting as to what I may be missing? anyone?
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 4:54:55 PM | Patience. It's only been a week. I know the internet makes things SEEM like they will happen faster, but the truth it it still takes time to make contact, establish a connection, and decide to go out in person.
1) Pictures. When you take all your own pics at arm's length, you can't really control how they come out. As such, your three pics taken that way all feature the same squinting, unsmiling expression. I suggest having a friend or trusted family member take the camera and snap some shots. Smile.
2) Headline. "Outdoorsy girl," um. Well, "looking for" headlines aren't all that interesting to begin with, but "outdoorsy" isn't really working for me. Try something else, maybe something that describes you.
3) Like a lot of people, you've listed things that you LIKE, but virtually nothing about WHO YOU ARE. Interests and hobbies are nice, but they are not what's really important. And avoid simply listing adjectives like "down to earth," "nice" or "honest."
Check out this very helpful thread for more good ideas:
http://forums.plentyoffish.com/datingPosts1262627.aspx | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 5:49:17 PM | This profile is awesome dude. You have just managed to display exactly how to copy your interest section into your About Me section, add a list of required equipment for a girl and never hit the enter key. All in one nice neat little paragraph.
Now, how about if you go back and delete all lists from the About Me and First Date Section. This will leave you with the following:
Hi... James...
Next, remove your name. Then you will have left:
Hi.
Go ahead and remove that also.
Then head over to the profile writing tips posted at the top of Profile Review thread, invest in a set of hooked on phonics to improve your grammar skills, or write it in MS Word with spell/grammar check first and then repost a new profile. This time, make sure it has your personality in it. I'm pretty sure you don't do everything in a list, so why write a list for a profile. | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 6:03:12 PM | | I agree that you need at least a couple of photos with a smile, and maybe a full length body photo too. Your written part would be easier to read with better punctuation, etc. And the first thing that I saw when I looked at your profile was the interest "dinning out", which is either something that I've never heard of or spelled incorrectly! Talk a little bit more about what makes you unique and interesting as a person. Give things a bit more time, and you might try adding some interesting young women to your favorites list -- and if they don't email you after a few days, then try emailing them. Good luck. | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 6:06:45 PM | Contrary to previous poster I think your title is very good. You are looking for an outdoorsy girl so why not put that out there straight from the get-go? I think this is specially important since it's clear from your interest list that the outdoors is close to your heart.
I do agree that your photos could be better. The one's you have now are simply variations of each other. A smile is never wrong and a full body shot is in order.
Many people look at how you express yourself and part of that is spelling and grammar. I suggest you run anything you post on your profile through a spell check and take care to use apostrophes. Im is not equvalent to I'm for example.
I see that a lot of reviewers say that you should add something about who you are. Myself I'm not sure exactly what they mean by that and it would be nice if they could narrow it down with an example. Personally I think your list of interest and the way you describe yourself shows who you are. However, break it up into paragrahps for easier reading. Other than that I think you are presenting yourself well.
When designing a profile one has to take into account that it should be made to spark interest. Too long and the person gets tired of trying to find the good stuff. Too short and there might be no interest whatsoever.
One has to find what's important to oneself and highlight that. I think you have and it's a question of formatting at this point.
First date? I would say not to set it in stone and I don't think it's really that important but that's me. I think it all depends on the person you are about to meet. You connect, you talk, you find out a few things about each other and you as the male (yes I do think the male should make the move) should take the information and try to figure out what a good first date would be and make a suggestion to her.
Grouse Mountain is definately a nice place to take someone and the right girl will find it as enchanting as you and I do.
Regards, Nordic | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 6:13:08 PM |
I see that a lot of reviewers say that you should add something about who you are. Myself I'm not sure exactly what they mean by that and it would be nice if they could narrow it down with an example
Ms Nordic, this means personality. What is it about you that determines your character? What makes you stand out, makes you unique? What qualities do you have that could give someone a summary of your outlook on life, on how you live, how you interact with others. That type of stuff. | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 6:32:14 PM |
First date? I would say not to set it in stone and I don't think it's really that important but that's me. I think it all depends on the person you are about to meet.
Yes, obviously an actual first date would take into consideration what each person likes. However, the "first date IDEA" section is a place to give readers an idea of what going out with you *might* be like. It's a final opportunity to make a good impression, if some thought and attention are put into the hypothetical date, and a great way to leave the reader with something memorable about you that differentiates you from the masses, who all say, "something fun," "depends on the person," or "meet for coffee and talk." | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 10:14:28 PM | | Well James, I think once you decipher the code in Scorcher's review, be it (in bold flashing letters sent subliminally) GO TO THE TIPS AND REWRITE THIS SCHTICK, you'll have something that is reviewable. Better yet, take some time to go through a bunch of review threads and check out profiles of both reviewers as well as that of people who'd posted for reviews and made changes as they've said in their thread. This'll give you an idea of what you should be doing with the text. What you've got is not going to be just an introductory blues session. It's going to be everlasting at this rate my chill-e-whack pal. Post back here when you've adjusted your profile and added/removed information based upon the basics listed in that thread. Class is out... now race home and get that homework done, chum. | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 10:24:02 PM | | Overall, I thought it was pretty good. Good job! I think you may want to go into a little bit in your about me that makes you unique. The pics are nice quality, I would just post a few more of you doing different things, cause they all seem to be kind of the same thing. That'll show anyone looking at your profile what a multi-faceted person you can be! | |
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| New to here, I think my profile is good but somethings missing
Posted: 6/27/2008 10:49:27 PM | | interests are for things you like, that you think females would like. I dont think 4x4ing or your job fits in here. If you click thru your interests and get hardly any results back, like with xbox 360 you should remove them. | |
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