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Posted: 7/1/2008 4:41:53 AM | | OP I don't really say anything obviously wrong with your profile, but I don't really see anything obviously right with it either. The first thing I'd probably change is the main pic because I personally think it makes you look a bit arrogant (although that's just my opinion, some might like it), and not putting your profession down always looks like a cop-out, or like you're an untrusting-therefore untrustworthy sort of person. The kind of profiles people go for are the ones that are up front, not the ones who say they are honest and upfront, but then won't say anything about themselves (it's a slight contradiction and it makes you sound a bit shifty). Apart from that you could maybe do with writing a bit more about your passions i.e. painting, and what kind of woman you are hoping to attract. The paintings are great by the way, you obviously have great talent but you're not selling it properly. JMO, hope it helps. | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 5:11:13 AM | Hi Pamperpooch000
Thankyou for the quick reply. I do see what you mean about the main picture. I find it hard to write about myself without sounding arrogant or boring. I am quite shy to start with, even though ive been on stage playing guitar in front of a few hundred people.
I will go away and take time to write another review, as i never really put much thought into the present one.
Again many many thanks for your advice and honesty.
M.
ps What does JMO mean? | |
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Posted: 7/1/2008 7:58:44 AM | Here's my personal reaction: The emoticons are distracting and detract rather than enhance. The spelling and punctuation needs to be cleaned up; ask for help from someone who is good at it. Poor spelling and grammar are kind of the written version of slovenly dress in person. Also, remarks that are somewhat self-deprecating, like the comment in the first date section about "in case you want to make a quick getaway" put negative images in my head.
Personally, I'm more drawn to more solid statements about things like what a first date might be like. Rather than saying "whatever you want" or some vague, common thing like "probably meet for coffee," I like it when a guy creates a positive image that I can see in my mind. Even if it's just meeting for coffee, rather than saying "probably meet for coffee," something along the lines of, "I know this wonderful, intimate little cafe with a view of the lake and I'd love to meet you there." You know what I mean? Create an image that's a little more solid, a little more inviting, and less tentative, which makes you come across as unsure of yourself and not as interesting.
Drop the phrases like, "I don't like writing about myself" or "I don't know what to say." All of that detracts.
Try these things and see if you don't start getting some responses. Good luck. | |
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Posted: 7/3/2008 5:01:44 PM | Hi Music,
I read your profile and though I agree somewhat with the last post I also disagree too.
I do think you should change your main picture. It doesn't let anyone really see you. Maybe a picture of you painting or with your grandkids would work better.
As someone who is looking for "the one " I like your sense of humor. I love a man that can make me laugh.
Maybe you should add a little more about you. About your likes and dislikes. What you're truly looking for.
Too bad your not in Georgia : ) Good luck with your search. You'll find what you're looking for. Be a little patient !! | |
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