| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 5:13:37 PM | | In other words, I'd appreciate a critique of my profile. I've had several negative opinions expressed recently, but I've also received several positive emails. Conversations die quickly, though. *shrugs* Any input would be appreciated. Thanks! | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 5:22:56 PM | Just saying...not the best intro to ask for advice.
But since you did...this is only about your profile. From your headline, there are many of the common not mistakes, but things that tend to put the ladies off.
Rather than dissect it, my best is read the tips thread.
You can look at it two ways, I freely admit the tips thread is written for the "general" audience. Granted, given...everyone IS unique, but not everyone can convey their own uniqueness in a profile. The tips thread wasn't written for that, as noone can tell you how we can only say what.
The application is yours, if it doesn't work for you, then there's really not much any reviewer and offer.
There is some good stuff in the thread, take it, apply it use what you think will work.
When you do an edit/rewrite, post back to this thread.
Since the edit button is still there...maybe back off a little from the "in your face." No extra charge. | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 6:37:35 PM | | well your profile is ok but not sure how much of it would appeal to your target . the set up of it is good but some of the content maybe not as much . like i read the about me and a few parts really seemed odd or didn't really add appeal . like the part about clicking on the back button for other guys . | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 6:52:17 PM |
Honestly, I knew if you commented that it would be unhelpful, but I took my chances anyway.
Honestly, I have no idea what you're saying. Or if you understand what you asked for, but you got it. Unhelpful...read the posting rules, in red and bolded. | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 7:51:15 PM | i think your profile is well-written, and i get a very clear sense of who you are. on the one hand, you can't be faulted for your honesty, and those who view your profile negatively probably wouldn't mix well with your expressed personality type. so, it's effectively weeding out the unsuitables.
if you're having problems communicating with those who tolerated your profile and mailed back and forth, well, i'd say the common denominator is you. i suspect your mails are as abrasive as your profile.
i'm all for people being themselves. i appreciate their honesty. but, if you are finding that being yourself isn't working for you, i'd suggest working on your overall outlook and means of expressing yourself. try and find that happy medium. you can still be yourself and value the things you find worthwhile, but, perhaps, be a little less "in your face" about it. take it as "golden" from one who has moderated their own communication style - - a softer approach often gets you further, and you still don't need to give up on who you are. just a thought... | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/1/2008 8:10:26 PM | Excuse me, Mr. Aurora?
Rude comments are not tolerated on these forums.
I wanted to share that I thought your username was beautiful, it reminds me of Princess Aurora from Sleeping Beauty.
I share that impression with you to give you an understanding of what others might see.
I hope it helps. | |
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| The target is on my back. Your job: bullseye.
Posted: 7/2/2008 2:21:46 AM | Hey I like that intro.it's different. You'll have to see how well it works. It'll appear in search results. if no ones looking at your profile, you have to assume it didnt go down as well as intended.
unfortunately after that your unique style got somewhat lost.
"I could dazzle you with my writing abilities, by why give away everything so soon? Heh."
you started off with dazzle and then where did it go? You can't just take it away. Potentially people might see the dazzle, come to see your profile and then be disappointed there isnt more dazzle.
"I'm also a straight shooter. If we don't click, I'll just tell you straight out, so that you can find the right guy for you."
This bits ok but you need to frame it a "i believe" way other wise you could just be saying it and who know how true it really is.
" I will add you as a favorite if I am interested in you or if we are friends. If the conversation dies, I'll be fair and remove you as a favorite and remove myself from your list as well. If I've added you, but not talked to you, it's because I'm fixing to, but I just haven't yet.
I think you could easily not say this and it'd be perfectly fine without. I dont see it adds anything particularly useful.
like how you wrote first date. | |
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