| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/1/2008 8:44:06 PM | Could someone please review my profile? Not that I expect anyone to kick my door down, but I literally have received only a couple of messages (without my writing them first) from women after being on this site for >6 months.
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/1/2008 9:46:18 PM | Unlike OFMM, I will add a little advice.
First, your profile is quite generic. Nothing shows any attribute that puts you outside the crowd. Be more open. start with commentary on the photos (you may know the when, where and what, but nobody else does). Then go deeper into things like what you do, who you are, etc.
Next, (unlike what OFMM told me -- which was mostly useful in a Simon Cowells kinda way) add one picture of an animal. Pets are girl magnets.
Your profile reads like an essay, not a sales pitch. Why would a woman want to go out with you -- not much motivation with what you provided.
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/1/2008 10:11:37 PM | It's hard to write a profile about yourself for sure.
And, it should read exactly who you are and what your seeking.
Firstly i noted that your photos look different, the main one looks as if you are carrying a little weight and looks good. The other's look good too but you look thinner, therefore, i would be questioning whom i was meeting...
You also ticked "hang out" but your asking how to get to meet more women and haven't had much success for the past 6 months. Do you want to date? Long Term? What is it you REALLY WANT...
Now lastly, lol, "BATCHELOR" is what i am reading.
All of your likes, and she has to have her "own life", "friends", and you'll ride your bikes, and go racing, whilst she is having her "own life".
Not much there at all about what you miss where having a woman around is concerned or what you would love to do together as partners, as aposed to just what you like personally for you. | |
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/2/2008 2:33:41 AM | "Guy who is open & communicative, is considerate and empathetic, and willing to share himself with an attractive, mature woman"
here you're writing in the 3rd person, or maybe about someone else. Generally speaking you can't just say personality characteristics. as who knows how true they may be. you might be deluding yourself for all we know. It appears better if you elaborate for instance you believe in being open and communicative because {insert reason}
the same goes with "I like women who are honest and able to communicate with a man"
there's a "because" just waiting to be said. even "because in my experience" {insert reason why} do you see what I'm getting at? | |
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/2/2008 2:52:05 AM | Since you put the emphasis on wanting a "Mature Woman" to *Hang Out* with
maybe you could give your readers an idea of what "Mature" means to you.
Put your age requirements for starters, so they will know if they are "Mature"
enough to message you. I'm not sure how many "Mature" women are looking to
*Hang Out* and wanting to race cars and such, but if you do a search by interest
you might find a few. I must say for a 43 yr. old, you don't look a day over 29.
Must be good genes? | |
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/2/2008 8:17:49 PM | Thanks for the advice everyone, and all points well taken.
MitakuyeOyasin, Speaking of good genes....Anyway, the car racing thing is not negotiable, because its part of my career and its a life-long passion. Same thing as getting involved with someone with kids-its a package deal.
I may need some suggestions to substitute "Hang Out" because I literally mean I don't want to get involved with someone who has a biological clock that is ticking to its end. I have enough experience to know that can be an overwhelming motivator for some women and it causes them to withold critical details on their end plus ignore things on my end that they may not be as on board with as I am (i.e.-racing-related career).
Anyway, I'll make adjustments & let's see where that takes me.
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| Can You Please Review My Profile?
Posted: 7/2/2008 8:24:06 PM |
I may need some suggestions to substitute "Hang Out" because I literally mean I don't want to get involved with someone who has a biological clock that is ticking to its end.
Then you mean "Dating". Just put something other than Hang Out and elaborate in your profile. And put SOMETHING for your profession. Again, you can elaborate in your profile. | |
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