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Posted: 7/3/2008 9:24:58 PM | | Please review my profile and let me know what you think. I'm a big boy and can handle it. I have been getting some interest, although when i email said persons, usually i don not get a response. Is it me or the way i am wording things. I have not been in the dating scene for quite some time. Thanks George | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/3/2008 9:32:44 PM | | I feel your pain my friend. I have asked the same question, if I get any good tips I will be sure to pass them on. Good luck! | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/3/2008 9:55:36 PM | First of all; take time to make sure your grammar and sentence structure is okay.
For example:
Fun loving hard working normal kind of guy You lack "I am". And then you should separate with commas: fun loving, hard working...." and so on.
Verbs in english do not stand on their own so start each sentence with "I am" and not the verb. But, try to create sentences that don't only start with "I am".
Try to do a narrative and not just list your interests.
You look a little smug in your photo so maybe get a few more where you smile a little?
And why are you looking for women that could almost be your daughters? Yes, 14 year old can have kiddos. What is wrong with a woman your own age? I am not surprised you don't get many responses if you limit yourself to that. there might be ladies 45 year old who are dying to meet you but they are not good enough for you? No offence but why would a 27 year old pick you? I'm curious as to why you are looking for women so much younger.
Most importantly, write in paraghraphs, and outline who you are and then what you are looking for. Give the reader a whiff of you. | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/3/2008 10:02:28 PM | | As i said i can handle it. Nothing ventured nothing gained. Thanks for the input. I will try changing things a little. | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/5/2008 3:58:39 PM | Why did you remove that close up? Keep it in addition to what you have. It was when it was the only photo that it was no good. It's nice to see a few more photos but you need more close ups.
There are still a few spelling and grammar error but in whole it's a lot better. Some think it's extremely important not to have one single spelling error but personally I wouldn't let that stand in the way if I wanted to meet a guy. It's when it's ridden with errors that it gets irritating but mostly because it's hard to read.
I'm not sure what you mean that you would like to find a woman who enjoy big trucks. How do you enjoy big trucks? You also mention nascar so add that to your interest list. There are many women who likes nascar so make sure you come up in a search for that interest.
I also think you should remove the no talk/e-mail filter. You might miss out on women who has their own reasons for posting that but in reality is looking for more. Besides, if I wanted to suggest an improvement in private, I couldn't e-mail you since I have that in my profile. | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/5/2008 6:29:05 PM | | Ok i changed the big truck for more description, and added pics again. I want to thank you for taking time out and going over this with me. George. | |
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| ok i think my profile needs work
Posted: 7/5/2008 7:52:28 PM | I think it's good you put that photo back and as the main photo. Now all you have to do is get one where you smile a little and add it.
Enjoy big trucks make much more sense now when you elaborated.
One thing I forgot to mention though is the roomate comment? Do you have a roommate? Or what do you mean by saying so. I think you can skip that sentence. It doesn't add any value to the profile.
Also, take out "whatever" in this sentence "If were on a trip or whatever". It just rubs me wrong to say something indecisive. And don't forget to shape up your interest list so you'll get roped in during searches.
Check back here now and then. There will always be someone else who chims in if you feel the need to spruce it up again.
I'm also glad you took off that age filter. I noticed you have a 10 on your image rating and it's from a woman 41 or older........
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