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| Hey all, any constructive criticism/opinions would be appreciated
Posted: 7/4/2008 12:30:00 PM | I'm not getting the kind of responses to my profile that I would like... I'm tempted to blame it on Long Island women's tastes and me not being the typical LI guy (in a good way I think)... but I realize there are probably things I could be doing to present myself in a better light. One thing I need to do is get better, updated pics to reflect the weight I've lost... I def look better and healthier now. Alright, well fire away! haha.. please don't hold back... say whatever you think... I can take it... and thank you very much for your help.
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| Hey all, any constructive criticism/opinions would be appreciated
Posted: 7/9/2008 5:16:38 PM | The main picture should be of just you; not a family portrait. I read your OP and yes, the pictures should be as current as possible to reflect any weight change; it is to your advantage so get on that ASAP. You can have up to 8 so have fun with taking some new ones. And the last one is taken with a female so add a caption informing us of who she is or lose it.
You have 50 more interests than you need; dump them.
Profession: Ask Me? Fill that out; women don't like blanks on dating profiles.
Take the about me section completely out of there; stick it in word or someplace. You really should have 3 standard paragraphs here; not all of this filler and fluff. While looking for possible matches women really aren't overly impressed with wading through a bunch of self~promotional stuff from a man that wouldn't even list his occupation. Lose that wall of text.
This is all you need here:
1) Describe who you are; your strengths, personality and character traits.
2) Tell us what you enjoy doing; activites/travel/goals/aspirations... etc.
3) Describe the type of woman you're searching for; what qualities and attributes are you attracted to, what personality will work well with yours.
You bailed on the first date... go back in and think of at least one creative date scenario that will generate enough interest from the woman reading it that she will want to go on that date with you.
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| Hey all, any constructive criticism/opinions would be appreciated
Posted: 7/9/2008 6:20:49 PM | I'm not a women, so don't have to listen to me, but I think that basically your profile looked a bit cluttered. Lots of ... between everything as well, maybe some more white space and new lines?
As for not getting the kind of responses you would like, don't worry I don't think you are alone. I don't think I've actually been contacted by a women without first contacting them, and to be honest they rarely bother to respond to emails or IM requests for a chat. This could be down to the profile, but it could also just be that women want to get got more than go get. The prettiest ones get so many emails they can't even be bothered to read them half of the time.
Its not very fare but I think in general the ladies have a nice time getting contacted a lot and the men have a bad time getting ignored a lot. Anyway, such is life, good luck! | |
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| Hey all, any constructive criticism/opinions would be appreciated
Posted: 7/9/2008 9:01:18 PM | 1. How did you get that profile picture approved? It needs to be a headshot, with JUST YOU!
2. Ditch the pic with the babe.
3. The caption for the hardhat pic needs to be in your profile. It's too hard to read where it is. Tighten that caption to one sentence.
4. You go a bit overboard on the interests. Narrow it down a bit. For example, you can clearly take out "playing sports" and "watching sports" since you list a plethora of sports. Ditto "athletic activities". You say "outdoors" and "outdoor activities". Do you also edit the Journal of Pluralistic Redundancy Journal?
5. Don't give us a disclaimer about your pictures. Post some new ones.
6. Paragraphs should be about 3 sentences each to break up into readable blocks.
7. Your profile is full of things that don't need to be said. ("some attributes my friends might mention in describing me: good heart, honest, trustworthy, caring, considerate, thoughtful, respectful, easy-going, laid back, down-to-earth and open-minded with a fun personality and sense of humor" -- Might as well say "My friends like me" and state the obvious in four words instead of 29.
8. You might be a writer but you're in need of an editor. You tend to ramble. Trim it down and say each thing only once. Don't say you're athletic then describe how. Just describe how you're athletic. | |
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