| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/29/2008 7:51:29 PM | | Ok help me out and be honest, yes I know I am fat and no losing weight in the next week won't change my profile so lets skip the weightloss part for now. Not like I didn't notice I was fat! Ok lets see what we can do with my profile. I would prefer some advice from women as to why they would not respond. If its due to my size and the profile reads ok let me know. If you think I am ok and the profile needs fixed shoot me an idea. Thanks! | |
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| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/29/2008 9:09:37 PM | Pictures:
There's one with your eyes closed. It needs to go! Otherwise I think your pictures are really nice. You have a great smile. A close up of your face would be really helpful.
Profile:
TOO WORDY. Pare it down. You have a few repetitions, particularly regarding your size. Lots of women like teddy bears, so don't apologize for your fatness!
Also, and this could just be me, when I see the word "naked" in a profile I generally disregard whatever came before. It's probably best to leave out the allusions to sex or nakedness until you've snared a few fish that you're interested in and who are interested in you. | |
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| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/29/2008 9:42:07 PM | Teddy, I've just spent 15 minutes reading your interesting forum posts, and the threads therein (and now I know waayyy too much about you!).
Can you find your old Panama hat and shoot a 2008 version of that pic? It's definitely your best. (If a photo needs a disclaimer, it should be replaced with a better one.) The other three all have you in the same shirt. I can't tell what that red sign board thing is at all.
Your text seems to focus on two things: your size, and sex. Yup, you are making jokes, but all the noise about strip poker and the "gas tank for a sex machine" and and naked mud wrestling, closely followed by your posts in the "Sex and Sexualty" (sic) forum give a certain impression. Gals seeking "long term," like you, tend to click BACK at the first mention of naked mud wrestling.
Your first big long paragraph is hard to read; throw in some paragraph breaks to help that. You might mention the extent of your disability (no! not that!!!) and you could add some more interests (you have six, try for 20). That will help round out your description beyond what you are focusing on; you are more than your size.
Do read the profile writing tips thread, stickied at the top of this forum. And be sure to post in this thread when you're ready for another peek.
HTH | |
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| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/29/2008 9:59:05 PM | I'm agreeing with the girls. Whenever I see so many references to naked or sex I find it hard to think "here's a great guy looking a long term relationship". Break up the first paragraph and don't put yourself down.
Getting a clear face shot is great advice too. You've got a good face - use it! | |
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| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/30/2008 12:44:41 PM | Definitely better. Now drop “Who is not afraid to laugh at myself!” and “(OK the light bulb seems to be getting dimmer with age)”. Remember, although truth in advertising is good you are still trying to sell yourself. You know know the product is worthy so don’t put it down.
Next, move ” I enjoy playing poker, working on stuff, repairing computers and movies at home with the big screen! I am not a big sports fan (gasp!) but do like to get to a couple games with the local teams with good seats! I enjoy many other events also.” to the second paragraph.
If you really feel the need to mention that you prefer a local girl, put this at the bottom. Also, you might want to loose the MSN quote. We’ve all been duped by old pictures and the people that tend to use them aren’t going to be discouraged. | |
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| Lets do a fat guy profile makeover...lol
Posted: 7/31/2008 4:59:04 PM | Well I kind of think that both those statements show a bit of humility. While I know I will never get everyone to agree on what should be said. I am pretty happy with it now. Think I will let it go for a bit and see what happens.
The MSN quote can be taken either way....as in I post current info and pics, or you should also. It's more food for thought than anything.
Ahh, who knows... C'est la vie | |
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